9A U5 Task 課件

1、 九上 Unit5 Task (2) The art form I like best 揚州教育學(xué)院附屬中學(xué) 常萬里 Learning AimsBy the end of the class, we students are expected to1. find out highlights and problems in our own writing as well as our peers while fulfilling some tasks.2. focus on writing problems of contents and languages, such as the lack

2、 of details about ideas, poor word choices and boring sentences, etc. 3. improve our oral and written ability in evaluating and improving both our pieces and others, especially editing our own first drafts. What problems of writing will be mainly solved? Both my teachers and classmates think I am ab

3、le to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, little star when I was six years old. At that time, I found that singing was such an interesting thing. Up to now, I have learnt over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others.

4、 Everyone is happy to be my listener because of my passion and confidence. Even though I can not be a professional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colourful. 一查：作品完成度Lets check if the writer finishes the writing task. Does the writer manage to

5、tell readers: what art form he likes best? whether he is good at this art form? when he became interested in this art form? whether he has any stories about this art form? how important this art from is to him? Adapted from the questionnaire in the text book Characteristics of good writing good Fine

6、 Good Enoughwritingorganizationlanguagecontent Both my teachers and classmates think I am able to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, little star when I was six years old. At that time, I found that singing was such an interesting thing. Up t

7、o now, I have learnt over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others. Everyone is happy to be my listener because of my passion and confidence. Even though I can not be a professional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colou

8、rful. 二評：作品成熟度 Lets review if the piece is finished well enough. 結(jié)構(gòu)： 1. 文章段落是否清晰易讀？ 2 分 2. 文章開頭是否吸引讀者？ 1 分 3. 文章結(jié)尾是否有所感悟？ 1 分 - 內(nèi)容： 1. 文章是否在講述故事而非告訴事情？ 3 分 2. 文章是否有生動的情節(jié)和細(xì)節(jié)描寫？ 3 分 3. 文章全部內(nèi)容是否與主題密切相關(guān)？ 2 分 - 語言： 1. 文章是否有令人眼前一亮的用詞？ 3 分 2. 文章是否有句子嘗試創(chuàng)造畫面感？ 3 分 3. 文章是否借鑒了教材中好的語言？ 2 分The art form I like be

9、st Calligraphy is a kind of beautiful handwriting I like best. However, I couldnt enjoy its charm years ago. “Just so so.” I thought to myself. On a hot, noisy summer afternoon, my father showed me lots of calligraphy works he wrote when he was young. “For what?” I asked. “Teach you to learn the art

10、 of calligraphy.” he looked at me, smiling. “Ha-ha! Is it of any value to a busy student like a bee? ”I could not help laughing. My father didnt say a word. He just put a piece of rice paper on the desk and picked up a Chinese writing brush. He was so serious that I even felt everything got quieter

11、at that moment. Also, I realized something surprising was happening around us. Shortly after, a special smell of ink filled the room and took me to another fantastic world I had never been to I was completely attracted by its magic. So AMAZING! It was from that afternoon that I started to learn call

12、igraphy from my father and gradually lost myself in the art form, which taught me to keep peace and simple in the heart no matter what was happening outside. （By 張 瓏） 1. Does the writer use any details to make the story more interesting or easier to understand? 2. Does the writer use any specific, e

13、ffective or memorable words in telling the story? 3. Do any sentences help to create pictures in your mind when you are reading the story? 4. 三賞：同伴好作品Lets appreciate and learn from our peer s piece. 1. Show enough details instead of telling a fact 2. Use good words or sentences to create pictures 3.

14、 In this way, you can make the piece more intersting to read or much easier to understand. Do remember when you are writing never forget your readers. Both my teachers and classmates think I am able to sing well because I have a gift for singing. I began to learn my first song Twinkle, twinkle, litt

15、le star when I was six years old. At that time, I found that singing was such an interesting thing. Up to now, I have learnt over two hundred songs. In my spare time, I often sing songs to others. Everyone is happy to be my listener because of my passion and confidence. Even though I can not be a pr

16、ofessional singer, I still get a lot of fun from singing. Because of singing, my life becomes more colourful. 四助：組員齊獻(xiàn)策 Lets help to improve the above paragraph in groups.五練：修改、展示與評價 Lets edit the first draft on our own and then show. The biggest problem in my first draft is I try to add / cut off /

17、change / because I hope my readers can know / understand / realizebetter. I make such a change in my piece because I want to express / show / find a way to . The best words / sentences / most interesting details in my piece areI wrote them because I am satisfied with this change most because Compared with my first draft, the new version 3. What do you think of my new piece? Can you give me some advice f