2022新托福TOEFL-iBT獨立寫作指導(dǎo)(二)1

2022新托福TOEFL-iBT獨立寫作指導(dǎo)(二)1

DISHONESTYKILLSRELIABILITY

Therearecertainconsiderationsorfactorsthateveryonetakesintoaccountinarelationship.Peoplemaylookforhonesty,altruism,understanding,loyalty,beingthoughtfuletc!Everyonewouldmoreorlesswishthatthepersonsheisdealingwith，hassomeofthesevirtuesabove.Puttingtheminanorderaccordingtotheirimportance,however,canbeverysubjectiveandrelative.

Whensomeoneaskshim/herselfthequestion“WhatdoIconsidertobethemostimportantthinginmyrelationship?”theanswerdependsonalotoffactorssuchashowhis/herearlierrelationshipswere.

Afterstatingthateveryone”sopinioncanbedifferentaboutthis,formehonesty,inotherwords,alwaystellingthetruthisthemostimportantconsiderationinarelationship.Oppositeofthisisinarguablylyingandifsomeoneneedstolie,eithers/heishidingsomethingorisafraidoftellingmesomething.

Inanyrelationshipofmine,Iwouldwishthatfirstofall,thepersonI”mdealingwithishonest.Eventhoughs/hethinksthats/hedidsomethingwrongthatIwouldn”tlike,s/he”dbettertellmethetruthandnotlieaboutit.LateronifIfindoutaboutalieorhearthetruthfromsomeoneelse,that”dbemuchmoreunpleasant.InthatcasehowcanIeverbelieveortrustthatpersonagain?HowcanIeverbelievethatthispersonhasenoughconfidenceinmetoforgivehim/herandcarryonwiththerelationshipfromthere.SoifIcannottrustapersonanymore,ifthepersondoesn”tthinkIcanhandlethetruth,there”snopointtocontinuingthatrelationship.

AlthoughIwouldliketoseealtruistic,understanding,thoughtfulandloyalbehaviorfrompeople,aninstanceoftheoppositeofthesebehaviorswouldnotupsetmeasmuchasdishonestywould.Amongallthepossiblebehaviors,dishonestyistheonlyoneformethatterminateshowIfeelaboutaperson”sreliability.Thereforehonestywouldbemyfirstconcernandthemostimportantconsiderationinarelationship.

Rater”sComments

Inthisresponsethewriterfirstapproachesthetopicbyunderscoringthatanumberofcharactertraitsareimportanttoarelationship.Thewritertheneffectivelydevelopsanargumentthatunlikeothernegativebehaviors,dishonestyorunwillingnesstofullydisclosesomebadactioncannotbeforgivenandcanbethemostimportantfactorindestroyingarelationship.Thewriter”slanguageisfluent,accurate,andvariedenoughtoeffectivelysupporttheprogressionandconnectionofideas.Thereisavarietyofsentencestructures,includingrhetoricalquestions.Theessayisnotmechanicallyperfect,butaslongassucherrorsareoccasional,minor,anddonotinterferewiththereader”sunderstanding,anessaylikethisonecanstillearnatopscore.

Score4Essay

Alwaystellingthetruthinanyrelationshipisreallythemostimportantconsiderationformanyreasons.Icouldsaythatwhenyoulietosomeone,thispersonwillnottrustyouanymoreandwhatisarelationshipbasedon?Trust,confidence,sothesenseofrelationshipisbeinglost.Anotherpointisthatifthetrueisomittedonce,itwillsurelyappearsometime,somewhereandprobablyinthemostunexpectedway,causinglotsofproblemsfortheonesinvolved.So,thetruthisthebasisforeverything.

First,confidenceisthemostimportantaspectofafriendshiporamarriage,oranythinglikethat,so,onceitislost,thewholethinggoesdowninawaythatnoonecanbearit.Toavoidlosingconfidence,thereisonlyoneway,tellingthetruth,lyingwilljusthelpthrowingitaway.Forexample,acoupledecidedtogooutontheweekend,butthemanhasapartytogowithhisfriendstowherehecannottakehisgirlfriendandthenheliestohersayingthatheissickandcannotgotothedate.Sheunderstandshimandtheydonotseeeachotherinthatweekend,buthegoestothepartyandhasmuchfun.SupposeonMonday,thegirltalkstoafriendthatsawhimatthepartyandaskedwhydidnotshegowithhim.Shefoundoutthetrueandallconfidencewaslost,thebasisfortheirrelationisnowgoneandwhathappensnextisthattheybreakuporiftheydonot.hewillpersistonlyesandsomedayitwillend.

Whathappenedtothiscoupleisverycommonaroundhereandmanyrelationships,evenfriendsandmarriagesendbecauseofsomethinglikethat.Somemayarguethatlyingonceoranotherwillnotinterfereanythinganditispartofarelation,butIstronglydisagree,themostimportantthingisthetrue,evenifitistodeterminetheendofarelation,itmustbetold.Therearemorechancestoendsomethinglyingthansayingwhatreallyhappened.

Rater”sComments

Thisessayearnedascoreof4.itclearlydevelopsreasonswhylyingisabadthing,withafirstparagraphthatintroducesthewriter”sposition(“truthisthebasisforeverything”),ahypotheticalstoryinparagraph2,andafinalparagraphthatentertainsandquicklydismissesapossiblecounterargument.Allthisamountstosoliddevelopmentoftheidea.Theresponsedisplaysfacilityinlanguageusethroughavarietyofsentencestructuresandtheuseofcleartransitionsbetweensentences.However,sometimesthewriter”ssentencesincludenoticeableerrorsinwordform(“ifthetrueisomitted”“l(fā)yingwilljusthelpthrowingitaway;”“l(fā)yingonceoranother”“persistonlies”),andinsomeplacesthewriterextends,or“runson”asentencetoincludemanystepsintheargumentwhenusingtwoormoresentenceswouldmaketherelationshipsbetweenideasclearer.“Somemayarguethatlyingonceoranotherwillnotinterfereanythinganditispartofarelation,butIstronglydisagree,themostimportantthingisthetrue,evenifitistodeterminetheendofarelation,itmustbetold.”

Score3Essay

Somepeoplebelievethatitisoneofthemostimportantvalueinmanyrelationshipstotellthetruthallthetime.However,itcannotbealwaysthebestchoicetotellthetruthinmanysituations.Sometimeswhiteliesareindispensibletokeeprelationshipsmorelivelyanddilightly.Therearesomeexamplestosupportthisidea.

Firstly,intherelationshipsbetweenlovers,itisoftenessentialtocomplimenttheirloversontheirappearanceandtheirbehavior.Eventhoughtheydonotthinkthattheirboyfriendorgirlfriendlooksgoodontheirnewshoesandnewclothes,itwillprobablydissthembytellingthetruth.Ontheotherhand,littlecomplimentswillmakethemconfidentandhappymakingtheirrelationshipmoretight.

Secondly,parentsneedtoencouragetheirchildrenbytellinglies.Eveniftheyaredoingbadworkonstudyingorexercising,tellingthetruthwillhurttheirhearts.Whattheyneedisalittleencouragingwordsinsteadoftruthfulwords.

Thirdly,forsomepatientstellingthemtheircurrentstateoftheirdeseasewillprobablydesperatethem.Itisacceptedpublicallynottoletthepatientsknowthetruth.Theymaybeabletohavehopetoovercometheirdeseasewithoutknowingthetruth.

Inconclusion,itisnotalwaysbettertotellthetruththanlies.Someliesareacceptableintermsofmakingpeople”slifemoreprofusely.Note