【課件】2022屆新高考 讀后續(xù)寫范例 語料積累與續(xù)寫結(jié)構(gòu)課件

段落結(jié)構(gòu)語料積累(情節(jié)+情感)讀后續(xù)寫·挑戰(zhàn)1.交白卷2.結(jié)構(gòu)混亂3.對話來湊4.不知所云......

讀后續(xù)寫·想法NarrativeArc

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是什么用處教學(xué)實例NarrativeArc?情節(jié)OrientationComplicationActionActionResultNarrativeArcEvaluationRedlivesinavillageneartheforestandwillbevisitinghergrandmother.However,shedawdlesonthewayandtalkstoastranger---thewolf.Thewolftakesashortcut,swallowsthegrandmotherandawaitsRed.Reddiscoversthewolfandcallsoutforhelpfromthewoodsman.Intheend,thewolfisdefeated.Redrealizeswhatshedidwaswrongandhaslearnedherlesson.LittleRedRidingHoodRedlivesinavillageneartheforestandgoestovisithergrandmother.However,shedawdlesonthewayandtalkstoastranger---thewolf.Hetakesashortcut,swallowsthegrandmotherandawaitsRed.Reddiscoversthewolfandcallsoutforhelpfromthewoodsman.Intheend,thewolfisdefeated.Redrealizeswhatshedidwaswrongandhaslearnedherlesson.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationLittleRedRidingHoodNarrativeArc

用處FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.Buthedidn'tstop.Thereisnobodyintheroad.Itissoquietaroundhim.Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.Althoughhewasafraid,gettingcompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedid'ntcarryonwalking.Hesatdownontheroad.FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.

①Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.②Buthedidn'tstop.③Thereisnobodyintheroad.④Itissoquietaroundhim.⑤Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.⑥Althoughhewasafraid,gettingcompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.⑦Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedidn'tcarryonwalking.⑧Hesatdownontheroad.FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.

③Thereisnobodyintheroad.④Itissoquietaroundhim.②Buthedidn'tstop.⑥Althoughhewasafraid,gettingtocompanywasmoreimportantthanthat.⑤Hecarriedonwalkingalongwiththeroad.⑦Aftertwohours,hewasverytiredsothathedidn'tcarryonwalking.⑧Hesatdownontheroad.①Tiredfilledwithhisbody,andhefelthungry.NarrativeArc

教學(xué)OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

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was

daybreak

when

Jane

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Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationWithnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.

Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationJaneroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluation

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.

Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationBut

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

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It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

____________________________________________________________________orientationorientation解讀續(xù)寫段落首句Interpretationofthefirstsentence

首句解讀1.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

2.It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

根據(jù)推測，必須描寫Jane獨(dú)自在森林里呆了一晚的情形！orientationresultPara.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Whateslecanyouaddtotheenvironment?orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluation①HowdidJanefeelatthebeginning?②Whathappened?③

WhatdidJanedoandhowdidshedo?④WasJanepreparedforthenight?⑤HowdidJanefinallyfallasleep?⑥HowdidJanefeelinherdream?scaredregretfulcalmbrave謀篇布局

續(xù)寫第一段以情感線的角度：恐懼→后悔→逐漸鎮(zhèn)定/勇敢→思念①HowdidJanefeelatthebeginning?②WhathappenedtoJane?③

WhatdidJanedoandhowdidshedo?④WasJanepreparedforthenight?⑤HowdidJanefeel?⑥HowdidJanefinallyfallasleep?首句解讀：Para.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationPara.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.5senses:temperature/light/soundorientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationConflicts:difficulties/dangers/injuries/troubles/changesActions:brave/determine/fightback/dealwithGoals/Aims:shelter/fire/warmth/food/water/sleepFeelings:mentally/physically,bodyandsoul情感線：失落→恐懼→后悔→逐漸鎮(zhèn)定/勇敢→思念Para.1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Asthelightdimmed,thewarmthofthedaywasebbingintoafaintchill.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationDarknesssoonfellupontheforest,whilethesoundsofnightstartedtogrowandeyesfromamongtreesbegantoglow.Frightenedbutdetermined,Janetookadeepbreathandquickenedherpace,hopingtofindanopenareasoon.(stagger,stumble,fumble…)Andafterwalkingalongdistance,tohergreatjoy,sheeventuallyreachedanopenarea.Exhaustedinsideout,Janesatontheground,builtafireandslowlyfellasleep.(Though…,managedtobuild…before…dropped…andfell…)Filledwithregretsandmissingherhusband,shecried(sobbed)inherdreams.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Thesunshonelightly,bringingwarmthandhopetotheworld.Janestayedattheopenareapatientlytowaitforothers’help.Twohourslater,

thehelicopter

whichshehadseenyesterdaycaughthereyes.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse

toflagit

andyelledouttomakethehelicopternoticeher.Fortunately,thehelicopternoticedherandcamecloser,finallylandingattheopenarea.

Herhusband,Tom

,gotoutofthehelicopter.Surprisedandoverjoyed,Janeheldhimtightlyandtoldhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Atthemoment,themountainwasfilledwithlove.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationhopeful---excited---happy---loveNarrativeArc

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FinallyJohnstartedhislongwalk.Walkingalongthequietstreetandholdingthebattightly,hecouldhearnothingbuthisownbreath,heartbeatsandthesoundofwind.

Suddenly,whenhewasgoingtopassacrossing,agroupofhomelessdogsrushedoutfromtheroadsidebush,barkingloudlyathim.Johnwassofrightenedthatbothofhishandsandlegsweretrembling.Heholdthebatandknifetightlyandsteppedback.

Soonthedogshadhimcornered.

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Atthattime,acarwasdrawingcloser.Meanwhile,theenormousbearwasdrawingclosertoo.Johnwantedtoaskforhelpbuthewassotiredthathislipspartedinasoundlessscream.Hewaved...

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Atthattime,acarwasdrawingcloser.Hegothishopesupagainandwavedwithallthestrengthleftinhimatthecar.

Thecarstoppedinfrontofhimandthewindowwasrolleddown.Johnwassurprisedtofindthatthedriverwasawomanandalittlegirlwassittinginthebackseat.

Afterknowingthesituation,thewomanopenedthedoorandgavehimalift.Johnwasdeeplymovedbythekindnessofthewomananddecidednottogooutatmidnightagain.orientationcomplicationactionresultevaluationNarrativeArc語料的積累適應(yīng)性考試學(xué)生仿寫Student’s

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WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.

Iwasabouttosayyesbutmystomachgaveoutasignalbeforemymouthopened.

Thegirlreceivedthesignalandsmiled.Isawherwalkedtothetruckandtoldsomethingtoherparents.Thenshetookapaperbagandbroughtittome.Shesaidtheytooksomefeaturefoodoftheirhometownandwantedtoshareitwithme.AfterIthankedher,Iwatchedthemleftattheendoftheroad.

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