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3、3349 h 91. 范文 1題目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage student to learn? Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea.開頭段： (1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in education around the globe, we may marvel at the large variety of examinations stude

4、nts must take each semester. (2)Apparently, giving grades is considered the most common method to evaluate the performance of a student. （3）The entire teaching system cannot do without it. (4) In a sense, pursuing high grades is indeed an essential stimulus for students to concentrate on their textb

5、ooks. (5) It is admitted that marks really encourage the students to learn, but their importance should not be exaggerated.(1)(2)(3) 背景描述（4）（5）自己觀點(diǎn)主體段一：（1）Evidently, the grading system urges students to study hard for the “top one”, a sacred position in their eyes. （2）No one wishes to fall behind. （

6、3）Thus, once a competition is started among the classmates, learning efficiency might be enhanced. （4）Those who win will make greater efforts to safeguard their superior results, whereas those who lose in the competition will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better out

7、come next time.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to learn. （6）Researchers at China Academy of social science conducted a survey in 10 key high schools in Shanghai. （7）They drafted a list of questions centering on motives to study hard at school and asked the stud

8、ents to fill out the questionnaire. （8）Among the 2,000 students who wrote out their answers, over half of them mentioned the desire to gain high grades in the National College Entrance Examination. （1）主題句（2）（3）（4）（5）解釋中的因果論證（6）（7）（8） 舉例主體段二：（1）Grades also help reveal a students shortcoming in studie

9、s. （2）Whenever a new round of assessment in done and the final grades are announced, students will have the opportunity to discover their weak points on some subjects. （3）They may go all out to find the reasons for the loss of marks. （4）After a brief review, it is natural for them to finally notice

10、what has been neglected previously and obtain an objective attitude toward their school performance. （5）From then on, their attention might be focused on those drawbacks indicated in the test. （6）As a common notion suggests, learning from past mistakes helps avoid future ones. If such a function wor

11、ks, progress can be made.（1）主題句（2）（3）（4）（5）（6）解釋中的因果論證主體段三：（1）Nevertheless, “high grade, low ability” has become an undesirable feature in some students. (2)Meanwhile, lower grades might also lead to the complete loss of confidence in studies. (3)As a result, schools ought to avoid such two extremes

12、. (4)The learning process is a comprehensive one that involves more than obtaining grades and passing examinations. (5)For instance, starting a large variety of programs aimed at broadening the mind and cultivating interests, offering students to take part-time jobs increase experience, organizing c

13、olorful activities, all these enjoyable opportunities to learn may encourage better academic performance and prepare them for future challenges upon entry into the work force. （1）主題句（2）（3）（4）因果論證 (5）舉例結(jié)尾：(1) Consequently, as long as the grading system in managed appropriately at schools, students wi

14、ll always cherish the dream of gaining high marks and thus have the impetus to fight for it. (2)Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that grades contribute much to stimulating a students passion for learning. （1）提出建議 （2）總結(jié)觀點(diǎn)2. 段落結(jié)構(gòu) & 寫作思路：開頭段（背景描述+作者觀點(diǎn)）背景描述（1-3

15、句）教育現(xiàn)狀+重要性+作用作者觀點(diǎn)（4-5句）技巧：重述題目論題主體段（主題句+解釋+舉例）主體段一 主題句（第1句）分?jǐn)?shù)是學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)的動(dòng)力 解釋（2-5句）素材：競(jìng)爭(zhēng)使人進(jìn)步 舉例（6-8句）主體段二 主題句（第1句）分?jǐn)?shù)可以檢驗(yàn)學(xué)習(xí)效果 解釋（2-6句）素材:彌補(bǔ)不足之處主體段三(讓步段) 主題句（第1句）過度關(guān)注分?jǐn)?shù)的不良后果 解釋（2-4句）素材：培養(yǎng)興趣愛好，鍛煉能力 舉例（第5句） 結(jié)尾段（總結(jié)觀點(diǎn)+提出建議）總結(jié)觀點(diǎn)（第2句） 技巧：重述題目論題提出建議（可省略）3. 素材應(yīng)用：3.1 開頭段思維方向，素材應(yīng)用：描述教育現(xiàn)狀，其他領(lǐng)域現(xiàn)狀；某事物的重要性和作用如何應(yīng)用在其他題目的背

16、景描述中：示例1. 學(xué)生有沒有必要每天做家庭作業(yè) （教育類話題）(1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in education in China, we may notice that students have to do a lot of homework everyday. (2)Apparently, giving grades is considered one of the most important methods to review what they have learnt during the class. （3）The

17、 entire teaching system cannot do without it.示例2. 電腦使人們的生活越來越簡(jiǎn)單，還是越來越復(fù)雜？（科技類的話題） (1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in technological development around the globe, we may marvel at the fact that the computer is so widely used in many aspects of our life. (2)Apparently, the computer is consi

18、dered one of the most important inventions in modern times. （3）Nowadays society cannot do without it.示例3. 什么能夠幫助你走向成功？（成功類 人際關(guān)系）(1)Having a glimpse of the current situation in society, we may notice that there are a lot of opportunities for a person to become successful. (2)Apparently, interpersonal

19、 relationship is considered one of the most important factors for a person to succeed. （3）It seems that achieving ones goal cannot do without it.It is admitted thatbut句型：用法示例1：學(xué)生有沒有必要每天做家庭作業(yè)？It is admitted that homework is of great importance for students, but its amount should not be excessive. 示例2

20、. 學(xué)生應(yīng)不應(yīng)該兼職It is admitted that part-time jobs can help students to adjust to the society as soon as possible, but they should balance the time spent on their studies and jobs. 相似句型：There is no denying thatbutAdmittedly.howeverIt is true thatnonethelessUndoubtedly.but 3.2主體段素材應(yīng)用主體段素材的應(yīng)用段落 主體段一（競(jìng)爭(zhēng)與進(jìn)步）主

21、體段二（彌補(bǔ)不足之處/從過去的經(jīng)驗(yàn)教訓(xùn)中學(xué)習(xí)）主體段三（培養(yǎng)興趣、 鍛煉能力）題目學(xué)生受到老師的影響比受到同學(xué)的影響更多嗎？學(xué)生有必要每天做家庭作業(yè)嗎？人們?yōu)槭裁瓷洗髮W(xué)？對(duì)學(xué)生來說最重要的教育是教室里的，而不是教室外的什么能助你走向成功？ （經(jīng)驗(yàn)）通過學(xué)習(xí)知識(shí)比創(chuàng)新能力更重要什么能幫助你走向成功（學(xué)會(huì)競(jìng)爭(zhēng)）在團(tuán)隊(duì)寫作中，如果一個(gè)人無法接受批評(píng)，就不可能成功？學(xué)生來到新的學(xué)校，會(huì)遇到困難，學(xué)校怎么幫助學(xué)生克服這些困難體育運(yùn)動(dòng)教給人們?nèi)松览韱?？（在?jìng)爭(zhēng)中學(xué)會(huì)不氣餒）應(yīng)該要求所有專業(yè)的學(xué)生都選修歷史課嗎不是所有的知識(shí)都可以從課本中學(xué)來，比較課本知識(shí)和經(jīng)驗(yàn)知識(shí)，那個(gè)更重要。對(duì)體育活動(dòng)和圖書館建設(shè)，大

22、學(xué)是否應(yīng)在資金投入上一視同仁生活中一度痛苦的經(jīng)歷終將成為將來的財(cái)富教會(huì)學(xué)生何謂責(zé)任最好的方法團(tuán)隊(duì)工作能力和獨(dú)立工作能力哪個(gè)更重要生活中的知識(shí)來自于別人的教導(dǎo)還是自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)十幾歲的小孩做兼職可取嗎喜歡獨(dú)立學(xué)習(xí)還是小組學(xué)習(xí)示例1. 學(xué)生受到老師的影響比受到同學(xué)的影響更多嗎？跟同學(xué)在一起，能夠參與到競(jìng)爭(zhēng)中，正是競(jìng)爭(zhēng)是我們有了自主學(xué)習(xí)的動(dòng)力使得我們不斷進(jìn)步。（2）No one wishes to fall behind. （3）Thus, once a competition is started among the classmates, learning efficiency might be e

23、nhanced. （4）The students will make greater efforts to safeguard their superior results, whereas they will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better outcome next time if they lose in the competition.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to

24、 learn and keep making progress. 示例2. 體育運(yùn)動(dòng)教給人們什么人生道理（在競(jìng)爭(zhēng)中積極樂觀，永不放棄）競(jìng)技體育使我們參與到競(jìng)爭(zhēng)中去，競(jìng)爭(zhēng)讓我學(xué)會(huì)正確對(duì)待成功和失敗以及永不放棄。（2）No one wishes to fall behind. （3）Thus, once a competition is started among the people, they will be spurred on to strive hard to be the winners.（4）People will make greater efforts to safeguard

25、their superior status, whereas they will work harder to erase past mistakes and continue the fight for a better outcome next time if they lose in the competition.（5） It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to keep making progress and improving themselves. 3.3 結(jié)尾段素材應(yīng)用（用在總結(jié)觀

26、點(diǎn)中）Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that示例1. 學(xué)生應(yīng)不應(yīng)該做家庭作業(yè)？Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that homework is a tradition that should be carried out, but it is not supposed to be a heavy daily burden on the students.

27、示例2. 就職于到公司還是小公司？Concerning all the details mentioned above, there is very reason to believe that working for a large company is a better choice to improve a persons working efficiency and ability. 4. 句型分析開頭段:現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語Having a glimpse of the current situation in education around the globe, we may ma

28、rvel at the large variety of examinations students must take each semester.動(dòng)名詞做主語Apparently, giving grades is considered the most common method to evaluate the performance of a student.In a sense, pursuing high grades is indeed an essential stimulus for students to concentrate on their textbooks.讓步式

29、的句型It is admitted that marks really encourage the students to learn, but their importance should not be exaggerated.主體段：現(xiàn)在分詞做后置定語They drafted a list of questions centering on motives to study hard at school and asked the students to fill out the questionnaire強(qiáng)調(diào)句型It is due to such a mental state that students gain the initiative to learn.動(dòng)名詞做主語，現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語For instance, starting