【課件】高中英語讀后續(xù)寫講評課件

1、 讀后續(xù)寫 第一次月考作文講評閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 About a mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond in a stand of oak trees. In summer, it would be covered by a green and bubbly scum（浮渣）（浮渣）with an unpleasant smell. We stayed away. When winter came, the pond w

2、as once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.” The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesitated. “Youre lighter than I am.” Harry urged. “If the ice holds, we can slide carefully on it. Itll be fun.” I wanted to please him, and

3、I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond. However, In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack! The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black

4、 and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures. I tried to climb out, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like glass. Again and again, I tried. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. As my coat became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the

5、 struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice. I looked at Harry on shore, who seemed rooted to the spot. “I cant get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath. Seeing him turned and ran from the pond, despair and scare beat me out of breath. After what seemed to be centuries of fruitl

6、ess waiting, I was on the verge of breaking down.Step 1: Read for the general idea，and underline some key informationhelp you understandcan be used later閱讀下面材料閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 About a mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond in a stand of oak tree

7、s. In summer, it would be covered by a green and bubbly scum（浮渣）（浮渣）with an unpleasant smell. We stayed away. When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.” The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesi

8、tated. “Youre lighter than I am.” Harry urged. “If the ice holds, we can slide carefully on it. Itll be fun.” I wanted to please him, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond. However, In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack! Th

9、e next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures. I tried to climb out, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like glass. Again and again, I tr

10、ied. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. As my coat became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice. I looked at Harry on shore, who seemed rooted to the spot. “I cant get out!” I screamed when I caught

11、some breath. Seeing him turned and ran from the pond, despair and scare beat me out of breath. After what seemed to be centuries of fruitless waiting, I was on the verge of breaking down.Step 1: Read for the general idea，and underline some key informationhelp you understandcan be used laterStep 2: A

12、nalyze the plot/ detailed informationwhowhenwherepondwhatThe pond in winter was so inviting in winter I decided to slide across it at the instigation （鼓動）of HarryWith the ice cracking, I fell into a hole in the ice.I strive to climb out of the icy water by myself, but in vainHarry ran away from the

13、pond, I was despair and scare, on the verge of breaking downfriends/ brothersNarrative beginning development climax endingstep 3: Infer the development from the given sentences Paragraph1:Just at that moment, here dashed Harry with a large V-shaped oak branch. Paragraph2: The moment I crashed throug

14、h the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Tip：Find key words in the given sencetences, especially some new informaiton Harry saved me with the V-shaped oak branch, finally, I came homethe tough process of the rescue ( 語言，動作，心理）；I was finally rescued（心理，外貌）; what did we do next (harry？）mum reacti

15、on: astonished/ surprised, ask what happened; deal with my wet clothes and make me warmer; comfort me ;Harry apology, my lesson drawn from it I told mum the accident and draw lesson from it. From the window opened next to the awning they were able to reach out their hands and carefully pull the cryi

16、ng girl inside. Getting on all fours, they crawled through Bastards Crawl. Over the next 90 minutes, they made their way toward the entrance inch by inch. Supported by his wife, Clay got shakily on his feet. With all his remaining strength, he held on to the rope tight and struggled to climb up inch

17、 by inch. After what seemed like hours, they finally made it to the top. Holding him up firmly from behind, Acaimie climbed up together with his husband._(趴著趴著), Harry cautiously _ towards me. He _ his hand and tried to _(夠夠) me with the end of the branch. The moment the branch was within reach, I _

18、 it immediately with all my strength._(慢慢地慢慢地/一點一點地一點一點地), I was _ the icy water by Harry._(扶) by Harry, I _(顫抖著站起來顫抖著站起來). Getting on all fours/lying on his stomachcrawledstretched outreachgrabbed / seized / grasped / gripped / held on toInch by inchpulled / dragged out ofSupportedgot shakily on my

19、 feetActions:How to describe feelings of cold: 12 hours was almost as much as they could bear _（在徹骨的（在徹骨的寒冷中）寒冷中）. In the _(無法忍受的) cold, Jason couldnt help missing his cozy home. He was so cold that _ (牙齒咯咯作響牙齒咯咯作響). The icy water _ (刺入)my skin with needle-like chill as I was _ (濕透濕透) to the skin an

20、d _(顫抖顫抖). In my soaked clothes, I felt bitterly cold when _(一股強風(fēng)一股強風(fēng)) passed by. soaked trembling/shiveringin this bone-numbing cold pierced/stabbed unbearablehis teeth chattered a blast of windHow to keep warm: Jane sat beside a tree and held her shoulders in her arms tightly to make herself warme

21、r. It occurred to her that she had a box of matches with her. She was wild with joy and struck the match to burn some branches so that she could keep warm. Without delay, he wrapped his friend up in the blanket, fired up the Jetboil and warmed him by pouring him hot water to drink. actionsurge me to

22、_ wrap me up in _ pour me _ _take a hot showera blanketa cup of hot milkhug me tightly / comfortJust at that moment, here dashed Harry with a large V-shaped oak branch. Flopping to his stomach(撲倒在地), he pushed the branch before him and wriggled(蠕動) toward me. The moment a slim top branch was within

23、reach, I grabbed it immediately. “Keep flat on your stomach(展平趴好)!” He shouted and I did as told. Inch by inch, I was dragged out of the icy water by Harry. What a narrow escape! The next 20 minutes witnessed us stumbling( 跌 跌 撞 撞 ) our way home, with my clothes dripping (滴著水) and my shoes squishing

24、(發(fā)出吧唧聲) . The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Having unbuttoned(解 開紐扣) my coat, she gave me a quick bath and then wrapped a thick blanket over me to stop my teeth-chattering chill(牙齒打顫的冷); meanwhile I was served a cup of hot chocolate to warm up. I tearfully(淚眼婆娑地) complained about what had happened, and Harry was scolded for getting his younger brother into such danger. His head drooping(低垂著), Harry murmured(嘟囔著) an apology to me. When winter came the next year, the pond looked all inviting again, but we learned our l