和爸爸騎馬遇野兔讀后續(xù)寫講評課課件高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

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VacationLikeNeverBefore

Itwassummer,andmy

dad

wantedtotreatustoavacationlikeneverbefore.Hedecidedtotakemeona

triptotheWildWest.

WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.

UnclePaul,

mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveustohisfarminPecos.

HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouse

listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

rivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTina

feed

thechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethe

sheep

outtograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.一.輸入標(biāo)題story頁碼1

Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountain.“Don’tbe

late

forsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!”“OK!”Mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmwereoutof

sight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,

andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.trackn.pathorroughroad,esponemadebyvehicles,peopleoranimals路,小徑（尤指車輛﹑人或動物造成的一.輸入標(biāo)題story頁碼2故事情節(jié)頁碼3一.輸入標(biāo)題概要頁碼4MydadtreatedmetoaspecialsummervacationinUnclePaul’sfarmintheWildWest,whereIexperiencedmyfirsthorse-ridingwithmyfather’scompany.一.輸入標(biāo)題續(xù)寫頁碼6

Paragaph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark._____________Thecontent(內(nèi)容)ofparagraph1:Howdidwegetlost?Thecontentofparagraph2:Howdidwefindourwayback?路上遇到一只兔子我們迷路了**續(xù)寫思路——第一段關(guān)注第一段的首句+第二段的首句（第二段的首句通常是第一段故事的結(jié)果）第一段首句：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.第二段首句：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.因果關(guān)系:思路:——因?yàn)橥米拥耐蝗怀霈F(xiàn)，我們迷路了。——兔子的出現(xiàn)導(dǎo)致了什么結(jié)果？**情節(jié)總結(jié)已知情節(jié)我和爸爸到西部荒野，體驗(yàn)農(nóng)村生活，我看到騎馬覺得很酷，感到好奇，并最終獲準(zhǔn)和爸爸一起騎馬去山里。本課內(nèi)容單擊此處輸入你的正文，文字是您思想的提煉，為了最終演示發(fā)布的良好效果，請盡量言簡意賅的闡述觀點(diǎn)；根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者可以準(zhǔn)確理解您所傳達(dá)的信息。單擊此處輸入你的正文，文字是您思想的提煉，為了最終演示發(fā)布的良好效果，請盡量言簡意賅的闡述觀點(diǎn)；根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者可以準(zhǔn)確理解您所傳達(dá)的信息。

未知情節(jié)兔子突然出現(xiàn)后發(fā)生了什么？如何找到回到農(nóng)場的路？最終回到保羅叔叔家了嗎？**分析故事情節(jié)、線索課程導(dǎo)入IntroductionRisingactionClimaxResolutionFallingactionDadandIwenttothewestandexperiencedalifeonthefarm(excited)IwentonahorseridewithDad(overjoyed)Arabbitjumpedout(nervous?\excited?)Wegotlost

(worried)Wefoundourwayhomeornot(thrilled?\frustrated?)Wereachedthefarmornot(relieved?\frightened?)首句精研：研讀兩段給出句，想想它們給我們提供了哪些續(xù)寫線索？Para.1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitraninfrontofmyhorse..Para.2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.1.Howdidtheygetlost?2.Wheredidthehorsescarrythem?3.Howdidtheyfeelaboutanddealwiththesituation?1.Didtheyeventuallymakeitbacktothefarmhouse?2.Howdidtheygetback?3.Howdidtheyfeel?提問**分析文章細(xì)節(jié)MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!"Therewasarivernearby.(Para4)So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.Thewriterandhisfatherwereondifferenthorses.**Arabbitjumpedout.Ichasedtherabbit.因果關(guān)系:——因?yàn)橥米拥耐蝗怀霈F(xiàn)，我們迷路了。思路:——兔子的出現(xiàn)導(dǎo)致了什么結(jié)果？Myhorsepanickedandranaway.Wegotlost.Wegotlost.Wefoundourwayhomebyfollowingtheriver.UnclePaulcametotakeushome.Wereturnedtothefarm.一.輸入標(biāo)題Logic頁碼71.Howdidtheygetlost?2.Wheredidthehorsescarrythem?3.Howdidtheyfeelaboutanddealwiththesituation?1.Didtheyeventuallymakeitbacktothefarmhouse?2.Howdidtheygetback?3.Howdidtheyfeel?*首句呼應(yīng)上文中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)尾句銜接過渡首句呼應(yīng)上文中間刻畫細(xì)節(jié)尾句萃章顯志向Thehorsegotscaredor...XXXThethingsIandmyfatherdidXXX/feltWegotlost.Ifeelfearwhengotlostsay\do\feelfinallygothome，unforgettableexperience

Para1Para2Para1Para21.時間表達(dá)2.情感表達(dá)3.心理活動；4.動作描寫；5.事件及經(jīng)過；6.感悟；7.可套用的句式。Justthen,…=Justatthatmoment

正在那時擴(kuò)寫句子1.我追著兔子跑2.馬跑的很快3.我不想摔下馬4.爸爸讓我平靜下來5.我不想馬傷到兔子

6.爸爸想到方法7.看燈光，我們感到激動。8.我感到特別害怕.9.我希望我們不會看到餓狼。翻譯1.我追著兔子跑我毫不猶豫地追著兔子跑從來沒有見過這么可愛的動物以至于我毫不猶豫地追著她。IhadneverinlifeseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation.NeverbeforeinmylifehadIseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation/thinkingtwice.so...that...如此...以至于...never倒裝句

翻譯2.馬跑的很快馬被嚇?biāo)耘艿暮芸煳业鸟R嚇得跑得比我想象的還快。MyhorsewassostartledthatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.SostartledwasmyhorsethatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.so...that...倒裝句翻譯3.我不想摔下馬我努力保持平衡不讓自己掉下馬盡管我很害怕，我努力保持平衡不讓自己掉下馬。ThoughIwasfrightened,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.sparednoeffortstokeepmybalance,preventingmefromfallingoff.4.爸爸讓我平靜下來爸爸盡力讓我平靜下來爸爸感覺到了我的恐懼和擔(dān)憂，盡力讓我平靜下來。Myfathersensedmyfearandconcerns,andhetriedtocalmmedown.Sensingmyfearandconcerns,mydadtriedtocalmmedown.非謂語動詞：v-ing作狀語佳句翻譯5.我大聲喊著，猛地一拉韁繩，防止馬兒傷到這個小東西。（yellout,pullbackthereins,v-ing）6.我?guī)缀跻紳⒘?，突然爸爸想到了一個好辦法。7.一看到遠(yuǎn)處的微弱燈光，我們感到一陣激動。8.想到我們被困森林，沒法找到回去的路，我感到特別害怕.9.帶著懷疑的念頭，我希望我們不會看到餓狼。5.我大聲喊著，猛地一拉韁繩，防止馬兒傷到這個小東西。（yellout,pullbackthereins,非謂語v-ing）Iyelledoutloudly,pullingbackthereinsinordertostopthehorsefromhurtingthelittlecreature.6.我?guī)缀跻紳⒘?，突然爸爸想到了一個好辦法。（beontheedgeof...when...）Iwasalmostonthevergeof

breakingdownwhenagoodideahitmyfather.7.一看到遠(yuǎn)處的微弱燈光，我們感到一陣激動。（themoment/minute;arushof...）Themomentwesawthefaintlightinthedistance,wefeltarushofexcitement.8.想到我們被困森林，沒法找到回去的路，我感到特別害怕.Atthethought

thatwewerestuckinthedarkforestunabletofindthewayout,Iwasseizedwithastrongsenseofhorror.9.帶著懷疑的念頭，我希望我們不會看到餓狼。Withdoubtfulthoughtsgoingthroughmyhead,Ihopedthatwewouldn’tseehungrywolves.1.(狀語從句+賓語從句)但是在我們跳下馬之前，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)我們已經(jīng)偏離了常規(guī)（beofthebeatentrack)，迷路了。2.(名詞性從句)又累又餓，我在想我們能不能找到回去的路。3.（非謂語動詞作狀語）我一直叫喊著求助，希望我的叫喊能被聽到，但是沒有回應(yīng)。Butbeforewejumpedoffthehorses,wefoundthatwehadbeenoffthebeatentrackandgotlost.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.Ikeptshoutingforhelp,hopingmyshoutscouldbeheardbysomeone,buttherewasnoreply.

1.（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)做原因狀語）這一切即將到來，毫無預(yù)兆，我感到恐懼。Ending:

Afterwhatseemedlikeages,thefarmhousefinallycameinsight.Finally,wearrivedatthefarmhouse,safeandsound.Whatanight!Finally,wearrivedhomesafelyjustintimeforsupper.Whatathrillingbutmemorablevacationitwas.Itturnsoutthereisalwaysawayoutofanyplight(困境)aslongaswestaycalm.

Reflectingonthismemory,Iregardedthisexperienceasmyspecialadventurewithmydad.Para.2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.自然式結(jié)尾留白式結(jié)尾呼應(yīng)原文式結(jié)尾點(diǎn)題式結(jié)尾反思哲理式結(jié)尾feelingdialogue（內(nèi)心獨(dú)白）actionsurroundingsExample

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thecoldwindwasblowinghard

andthedarknessmademescared.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”“Allisgoingwell!”

Dadans