安徽省A10聯(lián)盟高二下學(xué)期6月學(xué)情調(diào)研讀后續(xù)寫-養(yǎng)雞治愈家庭講義

讀后續(xù)寫原文中文BacklastOctober,Iwasworkingatmydeskwhenthephonerang.“Yourorderarrived.Andtheboxismakingalotofnoise"hesaid.去年十月，我正在辦公桌前工作，電話響了?！澳挠唵蔚搅?。盒子里發(fā)出很大的噪音?！彼f。Ieagerlyopenedupthemailbox,andapileofbabychicks----justafewdaysold----rolledontothefloor.Theyweresocute!我急切地打開了郵箱，一堆剛出生幾天的小雞翻滾到地板上。它們太可愛了！“Well,"Isaidtomyhusband“we’renowchickenpeople.”“好吧，”我對(duì)丈夫說，“我們現(xiàn)在是養(yǎng)雞人了。”That’sright.Iordered15chicksinthemail.Ididn’tdoitjustfortheeggs.

Instead,Ithoughttheymighthelpwithourmentalhealth.沒錯(cuò)。我郵購(gòu)了15只小雞。我并不是只為了雞蛋。相反，我覺得它們可能有助于我們的心理健康。Theygiveus

areasontogooutside

everymorningandevening,often

aroundsunriseandsunset(好愛日出日落這個(gè)情節(jié))

tofeedthemgivethemwaterandmakesurethey’re

safe

inthehen-houseforthenight.它們讓我們每天早晚有理由出門，通常在日出和日落左右喂它們、給它們喝水，并確保它們晚上在雞舍里安全。They’vealsohelpedmyfamilylearnhowto

transform

negativeemotions

suchasanger,

forpositiveemotions,

suchas

wonder

and

awe(如何在續(xù)寫中體現(xiàn)wonder&awe呢？).它們還幫助我家人學(xué)會(huì)如何將消極情緒如憤怒轉(zhuǎn)化為積極情緒如驚奇和敬畏。Andthat’sexactlywhathashappenedwithmyfamilyand

the11beautifulhens

wenowhaveinourbackyard(unfortunately,

notall15

chickssurvived).這正是我家和我們后院現(xiàn)有的11只美麗母雞（不幸的是，并非所有15只小雞都存活下來）發(fā)生的事情。Everydaythehensdo

mysterious

and

amazingthings.

“Liketaking

dirtbaths”saysmy7-year-olddaughter,Rosy.“Basicallytheydigaholeinthegroundandrubtheirbodiesinthedirt.”每天母雞都會(huì)做神秘而令人驚訝的事情。“比如洗泥浴，”我7歲的女兒Rosy說?！盎旧纤鼈儠?huì)在地上挖個(gè)洞，然后在泥里擦身子。”O(jiān)neafternoon,wefoundoneofthehens----wenamedherCarmel----onourroof.“Howdidshegetupthere?Do

chickensfly?”Myhusbandasked.一天下午，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)一只母雞——我們叫她Carmel——在我們的屋頂上?！八窃趺瓷先サ?？雞會(huì)飛嗎？”我丈夫問。Ihadnogoodanswerforhimbutinsteadjustenjoyed

thewonder

atit.ThenthenextnightwhileweweremakingdinneranotherhennamedMarshmallowcametothekitchenwindowandjuststaredatus.我沒有好的答案，但卻沉浸在這種奇妙之中。然后第二天晚上，在我們做晚飯時(shí)，另一只叫Marshmallow的母雞來到廚房窗前，就這么盯著我們。Forme,themost

impressive

thingaboutchickensistheir

strangeandmysterioussounds.對(duì)我來說，雞最讓人印象深刻的是它們奇特而神秘的聲音。Whenthechickensturned5monthsold,theystartedtomakeasoundlike:

buh,buh,buy,bah-gawk,withastrongemphasisonthegawk.Thepatternrepeatsoverandoverforafewminutesstraight.當(dāng)雞們五個(gè)月大時(shí)，它們開始發(fā)出這樣的聲音：布，布，買，巴-咕，重音在咕上。這個(gè)模式一直重復(fù)幾分鐘。WhenIheardthissound,Iimmediatelystopped

whatIwasdoingandthought,“Whatoneartharetheytryingtotellme?”(很小很小的時(shí)候家里養(yǎng)過幾只小雞，沒有太大印象了，不過看《向往的生活》里，記憶中似乎是有這么一個(gè)情節(jié)，何老師他們聽到雞叫，出門發(fā)現(xiàn)是小雞下蛋了，當(dāng)時(shí)他們還說，：“嘿，這是在告訴我們，下蛋了，快來收集一下”)當(dāng)我聽到這個(gè)聲音時(shí)，我立刻停下手頭的事情，想：“它們到底想告訴我什么？”續(xù)寫第一段：Thenoneday,whenIheardthisspecialsound,Iranoutsidetothehen-houseandlookedinside.(所以我會(huì)覺得這里應(yīng)該是下蛋了，之前上文出現(xiàn)了雞飛到屋頂?shù)葁onder，這里應(yīng)該是下蛋，體現(xiàn)對(duì)生命的awe敬畏驚奇)有一天，當(dāng)我聽到這個(gè)特殊的聲音時(shí)，我跑到雞舍外面去看。續(xù)寫第二段：ThechicksImail-orderedlastOctoberendedupchangingourlife.去年十月郵購(gòu)的小雞最終改變了我們的生活。文本分析文章大意：我在網(wǎng)上郵購(gòu)的小雞到了。小雞們很可愛，我們成了養(yǎng)雞人。不僅如此，這些小雞讓我們身心更加的健康。有時(shí)他們會(huì)泥水洗浴，有時(shí)會(huì)發(fā)出咕咕噠的聲音，有時(shí)會(huì)飛上屋頂，有時(shí)會(huì)跳到窗臺(tái)上盯著我們看，非常的有趣。總之，他們徹底的改變了我們的生活。五要素分析:Who--I,myhusband,11beatifulhensWhen--onedayWhere--myfamilyWhat--Iranoutsidetothehen-houseandlookedinside.Why--IheardthisspecialsoundHow--thesoundarousedmycuriosity主旨：通過養(yǎng)雞這件小事，懂得感恩大自然，和家人更加緊密聯(lián)系在一起。續(xù)寫情節(jié)走向：Para1:驚訝的是我發(fā)現(xiàn)了一枚新鮮的蛋---母雞們開始陸續(xù)下單---它們的聲音仿佛是宣示它們的成就---每次聽到這種聲音，我都知道會(huì)有新鮮的雞蛋產(chǎn)下Para2:她們不僅產(chǎn)蛋還帶來了更多的快樂---它們教會(huì)我們傾聽，懂得他們的獨(dú)特語言，感恩生活中的小事，珍惜大自然的饋贈(zèng)---我們?cè)絹碓蕉嗟睾图胰藗冊(cè)谝黄?，分享生活中地美?--主旨升華試水作文Thenoneday,whenIheardthisspecialsound,Iranoutsidetothehen-houseandlookedinside.

Tomyamazement,Ifoundafreshlylaidegg!

Itwaswarmandsmooth,andIcouldn'thelp

butfeelasenseofprideandaccomplishment.

Ourchickenshadfinallystartedlayingeggs,

and

Irealizedthenthatthesesoundswerenotjustrandomnoises.Itseemedthat

their

uniquesounds

weretheirwayof

announcingtheirachievement.

Fromthatdayon,everytimeweheardthedistinctive"buh,buh,buy,bah-gawk,"weknewthatwewouldfindaneweggwaitingforusinthehen-house.ThechicksImail-orderedlastOctoberendedupchangingourlife.

Notonlydidtheyprovideuswithfresheggs,buttheyalsobroughtsomuchjoy,wonder,andexcitementtoourdailylives.Theytaughtustolistenandunderstandtheiruniquelanguage,toappreciate

thesimplejoysoflife,andtovalue

thenaturalworldaround

us.

Welearnedtocareforthem,toprotectthem,andtocelebratetheirachievements.

Wefoundourselvesspendingmoretimetogetherasafamily,andweeveninvitedfriendsandneighborstocomeandseeourlittleflock,sharingournewpassionforthesefascinatingcreatureswithothers.

Throughthesimpleactofraisingchickens,wediscoveredanewfoundappreciationforthenaturalworldandastrongersenseofconnectionwithoneanother.

附：官答參考范文Thenoneday,whenIheardthisspecialsound,Iranoutsidetothehen-houseandlookedinsideItwas

amazing.Insidethehen-house,twohens,whichwenamedChocolateandMilkweresittingdown,layingeggs.A

thirdhennamedCaramelwasoutsidethedoorofthecoop,broadcastingthespecialsound.Irealizedatthat

momentThisstrangenoiseisthewaychickenssignalthatamemberoftheflockislayinganegg!It’sthe

egg-layingsignal.Whywouldchickenswanttosignalsuchaspecialandimportanttime?Ihavenoclue.Ithink

onlythechickensknow.ThechicksImail-orderedlastOctoberendedupchangingourlife.NowwhenIfeelangerrisinginmybody

ormydaughterfeelsfrustrated,Isome