讀后續(xù)寫：magic Marty 講義-高三英語寫作專項

原文材料Martywasnewatschool.Usuallywhenyou'rethenewkid,youlaylow,butnotMartyOnhisfirstday,hemadeatoothpickdisappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick.andthenextseconditwasgone!Everyonewasaskinghimhowhedidit.“It'smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty."Martysaidproudly.“Isheserious?"IwhisperedtomyfriendBrian.“Idon'tknow,butthatwasprettycool,"Briansaid,stillwatchingMarty.IknewMarty'smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn'tproveit.Anothertime,Martypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Applausefilledthehallway.Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,"Sorry,butthat'sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverrevealshissecrets."Well,hewon'thaveto,Ithoughttomyself.I'llrevealhissecretsforhim.Thatnight,athome,Isatatthekitchentableforalmostanhour,fryingtofigureoutthetrick"Atitagain,honey?”Mymomwatchedmewiggle(撰動)yfingershopelesslyoveracupofwater."He'strickingpeople!"Icried."Soundsasifhe'stryingtomakefriends."Mymompattedmyarm.MagicMartyhadmestumped(把...難住),butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.Atlunch.Martywasgoingonabouthowhecouldmakethingsfloat.Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.That'swhenIsawit:athinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty'sshirt!Sureenough,hemadethering"float”byslidingitovertheencilandhangingitfromtheline.Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.However,Iwasn't.Paragraph1:ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshowParagraph2:“ait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.讀懂原文2020年12月Z20的讀后續(xù)寫文章為Anhonestmistake,也是發(fā)生在校園的故事，主題跟品質(zhì)honesty有關(guān)。本次高三第三次聯(lián)考（三模）原文故事也是發(fā)生在校園，講述了Marty轉(zhuǎn)校到一個新的學校，憑借自己可以變魔術(shù)而受到學生歡迎。但是“我”對Marty有偏見，覺得他是在弄虛作假，一心想要拆穿他的把戲。功夫不負有心人，在學校食堂，“我”親眼所見Marty如何“騙人”的把戲。所以本文主題可以是跟“嫉妒”這個話題掛鉤。再看到提示句的第一句ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.顯然，主人公“我”是想要揭穿Marty,對于人物的心理，情感描寫要把握住。但是聯(lián)系我們續(xù)寫主題“積極向上，正能量”的宗旨，能不能讓“我”放棄揭穿真相呢？提示句第二句:“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.這句話是Marty的語言和動作描寫，是他叫住了主人公“我”，如果第一段“我”沒有揭露真相，那兩個人的關(guān)系是不是會發(fā)現(xiàn)變化，Marty叫住“我”是為了干什么呢？總體而言，本文的故事情節(jié)還是比較多樣的，作為考場作文，有一定的難度，但是萬變不離其宗：出現(xiàn)問題—解決問題，續(xù)寫情節(jié)結(jié)合人物的動作，情感變化，語言在結(jié)尾點題。連句成篇ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.1.

AtthethoughtthatIcould

reveal

his

trick,Ijustcouldn’tconcealmyexcitement.2.

IdirectlyapproachedMartywithanexpressionofenormoussmugness,

“Itwas

finishingline

!”3.

Obviously,dumbfoundedbymywords,Martysimplystaredatmewitheyeswideopen.4.

Allofasudden,Icouldseetearstwirlinginhiseyes,andhisheadloweringdownasifhehadmadehugemistake.5.

ItwasattheverymomentthatIstartedtohesitatewhetherIshouldrevealhissecret.6.

“Don’tworry,I’llkeepthesecretforyouafterallyouarejusteagertomakenew

friends

inthenew

school

!”Iturnedtowalkawayafterwards.

“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.1.

“Thankyou!Canwebefriends?”heoutstretchedhisarms,waitingmyresponseineagerness.

2.

Ithrewmyselfintohisarmsoutofinstinct,immersingourselvesinthethunderousclapping.

3.

“Let’smakemagictogether!”IjoinedMarty,andwitnessedhowhepleasedeveryonebymagic.

4.

ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatImadeanabsolutelyrightdecisioninthatMartywasarealloverofmagic.5.

Sincethen,wehadbecomeclosefriendsandwetogetherputonmagicshowstocheerourclassmatesup.

6.It

proves

thatMartyisarealfriendsratherthana

fake

magician.

成品賞析ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.

AtthethoughtthatIcouldreveal

histrick,Ijustcouldn’tconcealmyexcitement.

IdirectlyapproachedMartywithanexpressionofenormoussmugness,“Itwasfinishingline

!”

Obviously,dumbfoundedbymywords,Martysimplystaredatmewitheyeswideopen.

Allofasudden,Icouldseetearstwirlinginhiseyes,andhisheadloweringdownasifhehadmadehugemistake.

ItwasattheverymomentthatIstartedtohesitatewhetherIshouldrevealhissecret.

“Don’tworry,I’llkeepthesecretforyouafterallyouarejusteagertomakenewfriendsinthenewschool

!”Iturnedtowalkawayafterwards.“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.

“Thankyou!Canwebefriends?”heoutstretchedhisarms,waitingmyresponseineagerness.

Ithrewmyselfintohisarmsoutofinstinct,immersingourselvesinthethunderousclapping.

“Let’smakemagictogether!”IjoinedMarty,andwitnessedhowhepleasedeveryonebymagic.

ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatI