【讀后續(xù)寫】高三診斷性練習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫命題意圖和寫作評析

高三診斷性練習(xí)命題意圖解析

和寫作建議第二節(jié)

（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Whenmydaughtersreachedthethirdandfourthgrades,Ioccasionallyallowedthemtowalktoandfromschoolaloneiftheweatherpermitted.Onewarmspringday,alittledogfollowedthemhomeafterschool.Ithadshortlegsandlonglovelyears,withafawn-coloredcoat.ItwasthecutestdogIhadeverseenandthegirlsbeggedmetokeepit.Thedogwasbarelytwelveweeksold.Ithadnocollaroridentifyingmarksofanysort.Ididn’tknowwhattodo.Ithoughtaboutrunninganadvertisementinthelost-and-foundbutIreallydidn’twantto.Itwouldbreakthekids’heartsifsomeoneshouldshowup.Besides,itsownersshouldhavewatcheditmoreclosely.Bytheendoftheweekthedogwaspartofourfamily.Itwasveryintelligentandgoodwiththegirls.Thefollowingweeksomethingtoldmetocheckthelost-and-foundsectioninthelocalpaper.OneparticularadvertisementjumpedoutatmeandmyheartpoundedwithfearatwhatIread.Someonewasbeggingforthereturnofalostdogintheneighborhoodofourgradeschool.Theysoundeddesperate.Myhandshook.Icouldn’tbringmyselftopickupthephone.

Instead,IpretendedIhadn’tseentheadvertisement.Iquicklyputpaperawayinthedrawerandcontinuedwithmydusting.Ineversaidawordaboutittothekidsormyhusband.

Bynowwehadnamedthedog.ItlookedlikeaMolly,sothatwaswhatwecalledit.Itfollowedthegirlseverywheretheywent.Whentheywentoutside,itwasonestepbehindthem.Whentheydidhousework,itwastheretolendahand.

Therewasonlyoneproblemwiththisotherwiseperfectpicture:myconscience（良心）wasbotheringme.IknewinmyheartIhadtocallthatnumberandseeifourMollywasthedogtheyweredesperatelyseeking.ItwasthemostdifficultthingI’veeverdone.(348words)注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.原文

Whenmydaughtersreachedthethirdandfourthgrades,Ioccasionallyallowedthemtowalktoandfromschoolaloneiftheweatherpermitted.Itwasashortdistance,soIknewtheyweresafeandnotroublewouldbefallthem.

Onewarmspringday,asmallfriendfollowedthemhomeafterschool.Thisfriendwasdifferentfromanyotherfriendtheyhadbroughthome.Shehadshortstumpylegsandlongfloppyears,withafawn-coloredcoatandtinyfrecklessprinkledacrosshermuzzle.ShewasthecutestdogIhadeverseen.

Whenmyhusbandgothomethatevening,herecognizedthebreed-abeagledog,notmorethantwelveweeksold,heguessed.ShetooktohimrightawayandafterdinnerclimbedintohislaptowatchTV.Bynowthegirlswerebothbeggingmetokeepher.Shehadnocollaroridentifyingmarksofanysort.Ididn’tknowwhattodo.Ithoughtaboutrunninganadinthelost-and-foundbutIreallydidn’twantto.Itwouldbreakthekids’heartsifsomeoneshouldshowup.Besides,herownersshouldhavewatchedhermoreclosely,Irationale.

Bytheendoftheweekshewaspartofourfamily.Shewasveryintelligentandgoodwiththegirls.Thiswasagoodidea,Ithought.Itwastimethegirlstookresponsibilityforanotherlifesotheywouldlearnthenurturingsillsthey’dneediftheydecidedtobecomemummieswhentheygrewup.

Thefollowingweeksomethingtoldmetocheckthelost-andfoundsectioninthelocalpaper,oneparticularadjumpedoutatmeandheartpoundedwithfearatwhatIread.

Someonewaspleadingforthereturnofalostbeagledoginthevicinityofourgradeschool.Theysoundeddesperate.Myhandshook.Icouldn’tbringmyselftopickupthephone.

Instead,IpretendedIhadn’tseenthead.Iquicklytuckedthepaperawayintheclosetandcontinuedwithmydusting.Ineversaidawordaboutittothekidsormyhusband.

Bynowwehadnamedthedog.ShelookedlikeaMolly,sothatwaswhatwecalledher.Shefollowedthegirlseverywheretheywent.Whentheywentoutside,shewasonestepbehindthem.Whentheydidchores,shewastheretolendahand(orshouldIsay,paw).

Homeworkprovedachallengewithheraround.Morethanoncetheteacherwasgivenahomeworkpagethatthedoghadchewedon.Eachteacherwasunderstandingandthegirlswereallowedtomakeitup.LifewasdefinitelythesameattheCampbellhousehold.

Therewasonlyoneproblemwiththisotherwiseperfectpicture:myconsciencewasbotheringme.IknewinmyheartIhadtocallthatnumberandseeifourMollywasthedogtheyweredesperatelyseeking.itwasthemostdifficultthingI’veeverdone.Finally,withsweatypalms,Iliftedthereceiveranddialed.SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Thevoiceontheotherendwasthatofayoungwoman.Afterdescribingthedogtoherindetail,shewantedtocomerightover.Withinminutesshewasatmydoor.Ihadbeensittingatthekitchentable.,headcradledinmyhands,askingforGodforamiracle.Mollysatatmyfeetthewholetime,lookingupatmewiththosebigdog-dogeyeseyesthecolorofmilkchocolate.Sheseemedtosensesomethingwaswrong.

Athousandthoughtcrossedmymindbeforethewomanrangthebell.IcouldpretendIwasn’tathomeortellher,“I’msorry,youhavethewrongaddress”.Butitwastoolate,thebellrangandMollyawbarking.Iopenedthedoor,forcingmyselftofacemyfear.

OnelookatMollyandthewoman’sfacelituplikeaChristmastree.“Here,Lucy,”shecalled,“CometoMamma,girl.”Molly(Lucy)instantlyobeyed,wagginghertailindelightatthesoundofthewoman’svoice.Obviouslyshebelongedtothewoman.

Tearsstungatthebackofmyeyelidsandthreatenedtospilloveratanymoment.Iffeltlikemyheartwasbeingrippedfrommychest.IwantedtograbMollyandrun.InsteadIsmiledfaintlyandaskedhertopleasecomein.

ThewomanhadalreadybentoverandscoopedMollyupintoherarms.Sheawkwardlyopenedherpurseandstretchedoutatwenty-dollarbilltowardme.“Foryoutrouble,”sheoffered.

“Oh,Icouldn’t.”Ishookmyheadinprotest.“She’sbeensuchajoytohavearound.Ishouldbepayingyou.”WiththatshelaughedandhuggedMollytightertoherbosomasifshewerealostchildandnotadog.

Mollylickedherfaceandsquirmedwithdelight.Iknewitwastimeforthemtogohome.Openingthedoortoletthemout,Inoticedalittlegirlsittinginthefrontseatofthevan.Whenthechildsawthedog,asmileasbrightasafirecrackerontheFourthofJulyexplodedacrossherface.

Myglanceturnedtoasmallwheelchairstrappedtothebackofthevan.Thewomansawmelookatthechairandofferedanexplanationwithoutanyask.Molly(Lucy)wasgiventothechildtopromoteemotionalhealingafteracaraccidenthadlefthercrippledforlife.Whenthedogdisappearedfromtheyard,thelittlegirlhadgoneintoadeepdepression.RefusingtocomeoutoftheshellshewasinMolly(Lucy)wastheironlyhopetheirdaughterwouldrecoveremotionallyandmentally.

“SheformedaspecialbondwiththedogandLucygaveherareasontolive,”hermotherexplained.

SuddenlyIfeltveryguiltyandselfish.Godhasblessedmewithsomuch,Ithought.Myheartwentouttothisfamilythathadbeenthroughsuchaterribletime.Astheypulledoutofthedrive,thesmileonmyfacewasgenuine.IknewIhaddonetherightthing—thatdogwasexactlywereshebelonged.1082words主題語境：人與社會(huì)——作者一家撿到一只狗及還狗的故事語篇類型：記敘文第二節(jié)

（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Whenmydaughtersreachedthethirdandfourthgrades,Ioccasionallyallowedthemtowalktoandfromschoolaloneiftheweatherpermitted.Onewarmspringday,

alittledogfollowedthemhomeafterschool.Ithadshortlegsandlonglovelyears,withafawn-coloredcoat.ItwasthecutestdogIhadeverseenandthegirlsbeggedmetokeepit.Thedogwasbarelytwelveweeksold.Ithadnocollaroridentifyingmarksofanysort.Ididn’tknowwhattodo.Ithoughtaboutrunninganadvertisementinthelost-and-foundbutIreallydidn’twantto.Itwouldbreakthekids’heartsifsomeoneshouldshowup.Besides,itsownersshouldhavewatcheditmoreclosely.Bytheendoftheweekthedogwaspartofourfamily.Itwasveryintelligentandgoodwiththegirls.Thefollowingweeksomethingtoldmetocheckthelost-and-foundsectioninthelocalpaper.OneparticularadvertisementjumpedoutatmeandmyheartpoundedwithfearatwhatIread.Someonewasbeggingforthereturnofalostdogintheneighborhoodofourgradeschool.Theysoundeddesperate.Myhandshook.Icouldn’tbringmyselftopickupthephone.

Instead,IpretendedIhadn’tseentheadvertisement.Iquicklyputpaperawayinthedrawerandcontinuedwithmydusting.Ineversaidawordaboutittothekidsormyhusband.

Bynowwehadnamedthedog.ItlookedlikeaMolly,sothatwaswhatwecalledit.Itfollowedthegirlseverywheretheywent.Whentheywentoutside,itwasonestepbehindthem.Whentheydidhousework,itwastheretolendahand.

Therewasonlyoneproblemwiththisotherwiseperfectpicture:myconscience（良心）wasbotheringme.IknewinmyheartIhadtocallthatnumberandseeifourMollywasthedogtheyweredesperatelyseeking.ItwasthemostdifficultthingI’veeverdone.

(348words)注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.Whenmydaughtersreachedthethirdandfourthgrades,Ioccasionallyallowedthemtowalktoandfromschoolaloneiftheweatherpermitted.Onewarmspringday,alittledogfollowedthemhomeafterschool.Ithadshortlegsandlonglovelyears,withafawn-coloredcoat.ItwasthecutestdogIhadeverseenandthegirlsbeggedmetokeepit.

試題第一段與原文前三段角色對比試題角色mydaughters(them,girls)I(me)alittledog(it，)

Whenmydaughtersreachedthethirdandfourthgrades,Ioccasionallyallowedthemtowalktoandfromschoolaloneiftheweatherpermitted.Itwasashortdistance,soIknewtheyweresafeandnotroublewouldbefallthem.Onewarmspringday,asmallfriendfollowedthemhomeafterschool.Thisfriendwasdifferentfromanyotherfriendtheyhadbroughthome.Shehadshortstumpylegsandlongfloppyears,withafawn-coloredcoatandtinyfrecklessprinkledacrosshermuzzle.ShewasthecutestdogIhadeverseen.Whenmyhusbandgothomethatevening,herecognizedthebreed-abeagledog,notmorethantwelveweeksold,heguessed.ShetooktohimrightawayandafterdinnerclimbedintohislaptowatchTV.Bynowthegirlswerebothbeggingmetokeepher.原文角色mydaughters(them,girls)I(me)alittledog(it,asmallfriend,she,her)myhusband(him)意圖：刪減角色，梳理主語，

減少干擾，降低難度。

評卷：抓大放小，適度容忍。

Therewasonlyoneproblemwiththisotherwiseperfectpicture:myconsciencewasbotheringme.IknewinmyheartIhadtocallthatnumberandseeifourMollywasthedogtheyweredesperatelyseeking.itwasthemostdifficultthingI’veeverdone.Finally,withsweatypalms,Iliftedthereceiveranddialed.SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Thevoiceontheotherendwasthatofayoungwoman.Afterdescribingthedogtoherindetail,shewantedtocomerightover.Withinminutesshewasatmydoor.Ihadbeensittingatthekitchentable,headcradledinmyhands,askingforGodforamiracle.Mollysatatmyfeetthewholetime,lookingupatmewiththosebigdog-dogeyeseyesthecolorofmilkchocolate.Sheseemedtosensesomethingwaswrong.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.mixedfeeling,finally：下文可對復(fù)雜情感展開描述。pickedupthephone:“電話”，必須涉及。

段首句提取思想斗爭：是否還狗？小孩喜歡，且與狗已建立感情。

Tearsstungatthebackofmyeyelidsandthreatenedtospilloveratanymoment.Iffeltlikemyheartwasbeingrippedfrommychest.IwantedtograbMollyandrun.InsteadIsmiledfaintlyandaskedhertopleasecomein.ThewomanhadalreadybentoverandscoopedMollyupintoherarms.Sheawkwardlyopenedherpurseandstretchedoutatwenty-dollarbilltowardme.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.thewoman：第1段務(wù)必交代那個(gè)婦女。quicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly:那位婦女激動(dòng)萬分的情感……感謝……道別……主題升華……

段首句提取忍痛割愛，還狗過程。

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Ayoungwoman’svoicecame.Afterdescribingthedogindetail,shewantedtocomeimmediately.Athousandthoughtcrossedmymind.IcouldpretendIwasoutortellher,“I’msorry,youhavethewrongaddress”.Butitwastoolate,thebellrangandMollywasbarking.OnelookedatMollyandthewoman’sfacelitup.Obviouslyshebelongedtothewoman.（86words）

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.

Mollylickedherfacewithdelight.Thewomansaid,“Topromoteemotionalhealing,thedogwasgiventomydaughter,whosufferedgreatlyinaterriblecaraccident.Whenthedogdisappeared,shehadgoneintoadeepdepression.”SuddenlyIfeltveryguiltyandselfish.IwasgladthatIdidpickupthephone.IknewIhaddonetherightthing.Thewomanthankedmeathousandtimes.Astheypulledoutofthedrive,thesmileonmyfacewasgenuine.（87words）PossibleVersion1

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Ayoungwoman’svoicecame.Afterdescribingthedogindetail,shewantedtocomeimmediately.Athousandthoughtcrossedmymind.IcouldpretendIwasoutortellher,“I’msorry,youhavethewrongaddress”.Butitwastoolate,thebellrangandMollywasbarking.OnelookedatMollyandthewoman’sfacelitup.Obviouslyshebelongedtothewoman.（86words）

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.

Mollylickedherfacewithdelight.Thewomansaid,“Topromoteemotionalhealing,thedogwasgiventomydaughter,whosufferedgreatlyinaterriblecaraccident.Whenthedogdisappeared,shehadgoneintoadeepdepression.”SuddenlyIfeltveryguiltyandselfish.IwasgladthatIdidpickupthephone.IknewIhaddonetherightthing.Thewomanthankedmeathousandtimes.Astheypulledoutofthedrive,thesmileonmyfacewasgenuine.（87words）PossibleVersion1引出第2段的thewoman。對作者復(fù)雜情感展開描述。pickedupthephone:可描寫電話對話。

那位婦女激動(dòng)萬分的情感……狗的重要性……作者的負(fù)罪感（反襯）……主題升華（自然）……

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Ayoungwoman’svoicecame.Afterdescribingthedogindetail,shewantedtocomeimmediately.Athousandthoughtcrossedmymind.IcouldpretendIwasoutortellher,“I’msorry,youhavethewrongaddress”.Butitwastoolate,thebellrangandMollywasbarking.OnelookedatMollyandthewoman’sfacelitup.Obviouslyshebelongedtothewoman.（86words）

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.

Thensheawkwardlyopenedherpurseandstretchedoutatwenty-dollarbilltowardme.“Foryourtrouble,”sheoffered.“Oh,Icouldn’t.”Ishookmyhead.“She’sbeensuchajoytohavearound.Ishouldbepayingyou.”WiththatshelaughedandhuggedMollytighterasifshewerealostchildandnotadog.Astheypulledoutofthedrive,thesmileonmyfacewasgenuine.（82words）PossibleVersion2atwenty-dollarbill，八省聯(lián)考的描述：Itriedtoputa$20billintheman’shand,buthewouldn’ttakeit.

Withmixedfeelings,Ifinallypickedupthephone.

SecretlyIwasprayingnoonewouldanswer,butsomeonedid.Ayoungwoman’svoicecame.Afterdescribingthedogindetail,shewantedtocomeimmediately.Athousandthoughtcrossedmymind.IcouldpretendIwasoutortellher,“I’msorry,youhavethewrongaddress”.Butitwastoolate,thebellrangandMollywasbarking.OnelookedatMollyandthewoman’sfacelitup.Obviouslyshebelongedtothewoman.

IaskedthewomantocomeinandshequicklybentoverandhuggedMollytightly.

Thensheawkwardlyopenedherpurseandstretchedoutatwenty-dollarbilltowardme.“Foryourtrouble,”sheoffered.“Oh,Icouldn’t.”Ishookmyhead.“She’sbeensuchajoytohavearound.Ishouldbepayingyou.”WiththatshelaughedandhuggedMollytighterasifshewerealostchildandnotadog.Astheypulledoutofthedrive,thesmileonmyfacewasgenuine.那位婦女激動(dòng)萬分的情感……感謝……道別……主題升華（自然）……

引出第2段的thewoman。對作者復(fù)雜情感展開描述。pickedupthephone:可描寫電話對話。

一、評分原則1.本題總分為25分，按五個(gè)檔次進(jìn)行評分。2.評分時(shí)，主要從內(nèi)容、語言表達(dá)和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個(gè)方面考查，具體為：(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。(2)所使用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。3.評分時(shí)，應(yīng)先根據(jù)作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來綜合衡量，

確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。4.評分時(shí)還應(yīng)注意：(1)詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分。(2)單詞拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是寫作規(guī)范的重要方面，評分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮，英美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。(3)書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分。參照八省聯(lián)考內(nèi)容為王詞數(shù)：少，難保證內(nèi)容完整、飽滿。

多，不扣分。二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求第五檔—?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融合度高?！褂昧硕鄻忧仪‘?dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)，但完全不影響理解?！行У厥褂昧苏Z句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，意義連貫。（21~25分）第四檔—?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融合度比較高。—使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)，但完全不影響理解。—比較有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，意義連貫。（16~20分）第三檔—?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)?！褂昧撕唵蔚脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有一些錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，但基本不影響理解。—基本有效地使用了語句間的銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。（11~15分）二、各檔次的給分范圍和要求第二檔—未能創(chuàng)造合理的內(nèi)容，全文邏輯性較差，續(xù)寫不完整，與原文情境相關(guān)度不高。—使用了較少詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有較多錯(cuò)誤，影響理解。

—很少使用語句間的銜接手段，結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義不夠連貫。（6~10分）第一檔—未能創(chuàng)造合理的內(nèi)容，全文邏輯性差，續(xù)寫不完整，與原文情境相關(guān)度差?！茨苁褂煤线m的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有很多錯(cuò)誤，影響理解。

—未能使用語句間的銜接手段，結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰，意義不連貫。（1~5分）0分—未能傳達(dá)給讀者任何信息：內(nèi)容太少，無法評判；寫的內(nèi)容均與所要求內(nèi)容無關(guān)或所寫內(nèi)容無法看清。有血：內(nèi)容質(zhì)量有肉：表達(dá)豐富有骨：銜接連貫有氣：主題升華書面表達(dá)閱卷首先，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)定檔次其次，語言表達(dá)分高低再則，句群連貫作微調(diào)個(gè)人建議評卷應(yīng)注意評分員可以非常敏銳地抓住語言錯(cuò)誤，尤其是顯性的時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致、標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫等問題來迅速判斷續(xù)寫的檔次；尤其對于高檔作文，評分員在決策時(shí)對語言的地道性和表現(xiàn)力都提出了較高要求。此刻，要求評卷員要“抓大放小，適度容忍”。故事結(jié)局是相對開放的，只要符合邏輯，只要考生能自圓其說即可。評卷教師不應(yīng)受限于參考范文。這些單詞，你認(rèn)得嗎？5)lament6)mewl7)snivel1)squall2)wail3)yowl4)blubber1.stroll2.mince

5.shuffle

7.stride

8.strut9.stalk

11.sidle15.trudge

16.plod

17.wade19.saunter20.meander21.swagger

某讀后續(xù)寫專題練習(xí)5)lament慟哭哀悼；6)mewl低聲啜泣；7)snivel哭訴、抽鼻子哭；1)squall嚎啕大哭；2)wail哀嚎、慟哭流涕；3)yowl大哭大叫；4)blubber放聲大哭、又哭又鬧1.stroll閑逛2.mince碎步走

5.shuffle拖著腳走

7.stride大步走

8.strut趾高氣揚(yáng)地走9.stalk昂首闊步

11.sidle側(cè)身走

15.trudge吃力地走

16.plod沉重緩慢地走

17.wade涉水19.saunter閑逛20.meander漫步;閑蕩;信步21.swagger

昂首闊步;神氣十足啟示：盡可能用課標(biāo)詞匯，基于“協(xié)同性”，可以合理地“高級”，但不盲目使用生僻詞匯，適得其反！Afterweembraced,walkedbacktomycarandwordsonthecardcrowdedintomymindagain.啟示：練習(xí)題目精選，文本、尤其句首不要有超課標(biāo)或生僻詞匯！注意不分段：1）緊跟著首句寫，不能另起一行；2）段內(nèi)不再分段。盡可能多寫，但不要超行。1、2段視覺上盡量平衡。（不少考生第2段明顯偏短）合理使用直接引語，但不宜過多。（每段不超兩句）左右兩邊相對表齊。注意主謂完整。注意常用標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號：省略號；連字符；破折號。合理的涂畫修正。第一節(jié)

（滿分15分）

假定你是李華，上周日參加了學(xué)校組織的農(nóng)場勞動(dòng)，請用英語寫一封信，向你的新西蘭筆友David介紹活動(dòng)的情況，內(nèi)容包括：1．時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)；2．活動(dòng)內(nèi)容；3．收獲。注意：

1．寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！暗轮求w美勞”應(yīng)用文寫作應(yīng)用文寫作命題意圖本篇書面表達(dá)要求學(xué)生根據(jù)文字提示進(jìn)行有效的語言輸出。體裁：書信格式，具有開放性。該題目給出了文字提示，考生有話可說，也留給學(xué)生自由發(fā)揮空間，可以拓展具體的寫作內(nèi)容和細(xì)節(jié)。這有利于學(xué)生發(fā)揮創(chuàng)造思維，有利于培養(yǎng)學(xué)生創(chuàng)造能力和運(yùn)用英語解決實(shí)際問題的能力?！暗轮求w美勞”DearDavid,

Iamwritingtosharewithyoumyexperienceonthefarmlastweek.At8:00a.m.lastSunday,myclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgateandcycledtoafarm.Onourarrival,thefarmworkersgaveusawarmwelcome,andwestartedtoplantcropsandvegetablesundertheirguidance.Thenwejoinedtheminpreparinglunch.Afterlunch,theheadofthefarmgaveusatalkaboutfantasticchangesinthecountryside.Tiredaswewere,wedidhaveagreatdayandlearnedalot.Bestwishes.

Yours,

LiHua注意：應(yīng)用文寫作所用詞句不應(yīng)像參考范文那么簡單，但絕不能“假高級”或“文縐縐”。應(yīng)用文的本質(zhì)就是“書面表達(dá)”，就是交際用語。答題應(yīng)注意:1、這是一封普通的英文信件，要符合信的格式，語言得體，體現(xiàn)交際功能。2、要注意動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)的變化，一般過去時(shí)。3、要確定寫作形式，理清寫作思路，開門見山，直奔主題。4、注意語氣：筆友，朋友間的語氣。介紹事實(shí)。5、合理運(yùn)用高級詞匯、短語和復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，簡單句和復(fù)合句交替運(yùn)用，合理運(yùn)用非謂語動(dòng)詞、感嘆句、倒裝句等提高句中的表達(dá)力，提升作文的檔次，贏得高分。6、整潔的卷面。題目要求按照內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)順序，不要“倒敘”、“插敘”DearDavid,

Iamwritingtosharewithyoumyexperienceonthefarmlastweek.At8:00a.m.lastSunday,myclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgateandcycledtoafarm.Onourarrival,thefarmworkersgaveusawarmwelcome,andwestartedtoplantcropsandvegetablesundertheirguidance.Thenwejoinedtheminpreparinglunch.Afterlunch,theheadofthefarmgaveusatalkaboutfantasticchangesinthecountryside.Tiredaswewere,wedidhaveagreatdayandlearnedalot.Bestwishes.

Yours,

LiHua時(shí)間+地點(diǎn)+適當(dāng)拓展合理拓展，1+1合理拓展，1+1收獲

在最后沖刺階段，應(yīng)用文寫作的有效復(fù)習(xí)將取到立竿見影的效果。尤其面對新高考，考生要應(yīng)對兩篇作文，考前要針對性地記憶句型、詞塊，但也應(yīng)合理合理！

首先，應(yīng)用文，其目的是交際，因此，所寫的表述、句式應(yīng)具有交際功能。要求語言得體，但又不能太過于簡單；要求表達(dá)“高級”，有深度，有內(nèi)容，但又不能“文縐縐”、“假高深”，故弄玄虛，更不能用一些連評卷老師都看不懂的表述，會(huì)適得其反。

何為高級？其實(shí)也沒那么難，就是合理增加細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，能夠使表達(dá)流暢、豐滿。也就是表達(dá)的“1+1”原則，篇幅許可的話還可以是“1+1+1”。

例如，當(dāng)要表達(dá)：我想與你分享春節(jié)的一些傳統(tǒng)風(fēng)俗習(xí)慣。可以是I’dliketosharewithyousometraditionalcustomsoftheSpringFestival.當(dāng)然，稍加一點(diǎn)，便可使表達(dá)更豐滿。I’dliketosharewithyousometraditionalcustomsoftheSpringFestival，themostimportantfestivalinChina.如何復(fù)習(xí)背真題范文，積累不能死背范文，活用背句型，套用背詞塊，豐富用英語將中國故事，介紹傳統(tǒng)文化

雙“順”寫作雙“順”心順眼順英語思維要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容連貫表達(dá)布局書寫寫作規(guī)范書寫注意事項(xiàng)要規(guī)范，不連筆，字跡粗（大寫）不頂天，（小寫）要立地同寬，同斜；橫豎直，轉(zhuǎn)角圓，背挺直空句首，理間距，緊標(biāo)點(diǎn)“眼”順

表達(dá)不錯(cuò)！筆順更均勻會(huì)更好，少點(diǎn)不規(guī)范的連筆！右傾？字間距？要規(guī)范，不連筆，字跡粗（大寫）不頂天，（小寫）要立地同寬，同斜；橫豎直，轉(zhuǎn)角圓，背挺直空句首，理間距，緊標(biāo)點(diǎn)

綜合考查學(xué)生的語用能力，要求學(xué)生在語篇中填寫出恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯及形式。本篇屬于人與社會(huì)這一主題，題材為說明文，考查學(xué)生對文本語篇的完全理解。語法填空命題意圖

本文介紹了寧夏回族自治區(qū)利用數(shù)字技術(shù)保護(hù)及復(fù)制古代雕塑和壁畫的報(bào)道。對于古壁畫和雕塑的保護(hù)是世界性難題，迄今為止還沒有行之有效的辦法預(yù)防這些古代文化的消亡，應(yīng)引起人們的關(guān)注。

本篇短文總詞數(shù)為182詞（含漢語注釋），符合《考試大綱》對語法填空的詞數(shù)要求。文本主題語境與主題內(nèi)容：人與社會(huì)；保護(hù)文化遺產(chǎn)體裁：記敘說明價(jià)值取向：保護(hù)中國傳統(tǒng)文化詞數(shù)：182題號56575859606162636465考點(diǎn)動(dòng)詞不定式代詞動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)關(guān)系代詞名詞復(fù)數(shù)介詞副詞(詞性轉(zhuǎn)換)非謂語（過去分詞）形容詞(詞性轉(zhuǎn)換)代詞不固化：6：4；58.beNorthwestChina’sNingxiaHuiAutonomousRegionhasadopteddigitaltechnology56(preserve)ancientcliff（懸崖）carvingsandpaintingsbeforetheirdisappearance.Workershavecopiedmorethan2,000immovablerockcarvingsandpaintingsatHelanMountaintodigitalizetheoverallviewsaswellas57(they)accuratelocations.Thedigitalinformationwill58sortedandworkerswillconductadiseaseanalysis.Rockcarvingshadappearedbeforewritingsystemswereinvented.Now,morethan20,000cliffpaintingsandcarvings59werecreatedbytheancestorshavebeendiscoveredatHelanMountain.Theworksrecordthelivesofthepeoplewholived3,000to10,000yearsago.Ingeneral,60(image)ofanimalsdominate,followed61humans,vehicles,plants,planets,fingerprintsandabstractsigns.Thesurfaceswere62(main)carvedwithstoneormetalintheopenair,63(expose)toweatherbeaten.Theprotectionofrockpaintingsandcarvingsisaworldwideissue.Atpresent,thereisno64(effect),naturallyscientificandtechnologicalmeanstopreventtheirdisappearance.Someexpertshavepredictedthatbytheendofthiscentury,65quarteroftheworld’srockpaintingswilldisappearcompletely.NorthwestChina’sNingxiaHuiAutonomousRegionhasadopteddigitaltechnology56(preserve)ancientcliff（懸崖）carvingsandpaintingsbeforetheirdisappearance.Workershavecopiedmorethan2,000immovablerockcarvingsandpaintingsatHelanMountaintodigitalizetheoverallviewsaswellas57(they)accuratelocations.Thedigitalinformationwill