讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)寫(xiě)作素材積累之外貌描寫(xiě)講義-高三英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作專(zhuān)項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)寫(xiě)作素材積累：外貌描寫(xiě)1Shewas

fair-skinned,had

reddishhair

and

longfingers.外表描寫(xiě)Niloufar’smother：抓住主要特征，巧用形容詞描寫(xiě)人物的主要特征：fair-skinned,

reddishhair

，

longfingers。2Inthemorning,Mariamwasgivena

long-sleeved,darkgreendress

towearover

whitecottontrousers.具有特點(diǎn)的服裝描寫(xiě)：

a

long-sleeved,darkgreendress長(zhǎng)袖暗綠的裙子

towearover

whitecottontrousers白色棉褲。3Hewas

wearingalightbrownsuit

and

aredtie.

Hishairwaswashed.

外表描寫(xiě)：整體alightbrownsuit

；局部aredtie.

Hishairwaswashed.穿著淺棕色衣服，帶著紅色領(lǐng)帶。頭發(fā)也洗過(guò)了。有畫(huà)面感。4Mariam

smelled

himbeforeshesawhim.

Cigarettesmokeandthick,sweetcologne,notfaintlikeJalil’s.ThescentofitfloodedMariam’snostrils.Throughtheveil,fromthecornerofhereye,Mariamsaw

atallman,thick-belliedandbroad-shouldered,stooping

inthedoorway.Thesizeofhimalmostmadehergasp,andshehadtodrophergaze,

herhearthammeringaway.She

sensed

himlingeringinthedoorway.Then

hisslow,heavy-footedmovement

acrosstheroom.Thecandybowlonthetableclinkedintunewithhissteps.Withathickgrunt,he

droppedon

achairbesideher.He

breathednoisily.描述Mariam對(duì)未婚夫的第一感覺(jué)與第一印象：

先是她聞到的氣味：

Cigarettesmokeandthick,sweetcologne煙味與濃濃的香水（嗅覺(jué)）個(gè)子：

atallman,thick-belliedandbroad-shouldered（視覺(jué)）腳步聲：slow,heavy-footed（聽(tīng)覺(jué)）呼吸聲：movement；breathednoisily。（聽(tīng)覺(jué)）記得有位作家說(shuō)過(guò)：在我寫(xiě)小說(shuō)的時(shí)候，我總是記得要用看、聽(tīng)、感、嘗、嗅。每當(dāng)我寫(xiě)作的時(shí)候，我會(huì)有意識(shí)地寫(xiě)些帶有氣味的東西。實(shí)際上，一些令人作嘔的東西在創(chuàng)造真實(shí)感的時(shí)候，反而有奇跡般的效果。通過(guò)觀察、思考，才能準(zhǔn)確地描繪出一幅幅場(chǎng)景，使人物具有可信性。他們以固有的視覺(jué)、聽(tīng)覺(jué)、嗅覺(jué)、觸覺(jué)和味覺(jué)進(jìn)行著他們的日常工作。這這個(gè)句子中，作者運(yùn)用了三種感覺(jué)來(lái)描述瑪麗亞姆丈夫的外貌特點(diǎn)。這個(gè)人物就像走進(jìn)了書(shū)頁(yè)中，很具體、因此真實(shí)可信。我們?cè)谶M(jìn)行人物的外表描寫(xiě)時(shí)，不妨試試這個(gè)方法哦。5His

harsh,raspyvoice

remindedMariamof

thesoundofdryautumnleavescrushedunderfoot.描述Mariam對(duì)他聲音的感覺(jué)：harsh,raspyvoice讓她想起thesoundofdryautumnleavescrushedunderfoot。這是一種比喻手法。（利用聽(tīng)覺(jué)）6Shethought

herbrowtoowide,thechintoonarrow,thelipstoothin.Mariam對(duì)自己外貌的評(píng)價(jià)：（從上往下寫(xiě)）herbrow：toowide,

thechin：toonarrow,

thelips：toothin作者用了三個(gè)too,too后又是三個(gè)形容詞，結(jié)構(gòu)工整，語(yǔ)言淺顯易懂，將瑪麗亞姆對(duì)于自己的外貌的不自信表達(dá)出來(lái)了。而我們也在頭腦中勾勒出她的面貌特點(diǎn)。7Inthemirror,MariamhadherfirstglimpseofRasheed:thebig,square,ruddy

face;thehooked

nose;theflushed

cheeks

thatgavetheimpressionofslycheerfulness;thewatery,bloodshot

eyes;thecrowded

teeth,thefronttwopushedtogether

likeagabledroof;theimpossiblylow

hairline,barelytwofingerwidthsabovethebushy

eyebrows;thewallofthick,coarse,salt-and-pepper

hair.Mariam在鏡子里看到的丈夫的長(zhǎng)相：（描寫(xiě)順序：從上往下，又從下往上）face：big,square,ruddynose：

hookedcheeks：

flushed發(fā)紅的eyes：

watery,bloodshotteeth：

crowded；thefronttwopushedtogetherlikeagabledroof

hairline：

theimpossiblylow；barelytwofingerwidths

abovethebushyeyebrowshair：

thick,coarse,salt-and-pepper濃密粗糙的花白頭發(fā)本段作者抓住“五官”特點(diǎn)，寫(xiě)出人物面部特征。從這些細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)中，我們可以分析出人物性格特征，所謂相由心生。比如瑪麗亞姆初見(jiàn)丈夫，他的粗俗讓她一見(jiàn)面就不喜歡。其中在描寫(xiě)他前排擁擠的牙齒的時(shí)候，用了比喻的手法：

thefronttwopushedtogetherlikeagabledroof。在人物外貌描寫(xiě)的時(shí)候，還可以用夸張，聯(lián)想等修辭手法。

8Their

nails

werelong,polishedpinkororange,their

lips

redastulips.They

walkedinhighheels,andquickly,asifonperpetuallyurgentbusiness.They

woredarksunglasses,and,whentheybreezedby,Mariamcaughtawhiffoftheirperfume.

對(duì)喀布爾婦女外表的描述：視覺(jué)、聽(tīng)覺(jué)、嗅覺(jué)結(jié)合起來(lái)寫(xiě)nails，lips，highheels，darksunglasses，perfume。9Hewasagaunt枯瘦的,stooping彎曲的

oldmanwithatoothlesssmile

andawhitebeardthatdroppedtohisnavel肚臍.描寫(xiě)瑪麗亞姆老師的外貌：整體到局部的順序?qū)憘€(gè)子：agaunt枯瘦的,stooping彎曲的

oldman微笑：atoothlesssmile

胡子：awhitebeardthatdroppedtohisnavel肚臍.抓住幾個(gè)重點(diǎn)寫(xiě)，不必蜻蜓點(diǎn)水，面面俱到。但要真實(shí)。真實(shí)的東西最有感染力。10Hewastalland

square-shouldered,with

sleepy-lookingeyes

and

acalmface.簡(jiǎn)潔的外表描寫(xiě):整體到局部的順序，抓住主要特點(diǎn)

square-shouldered;

sleepy-lookingeyes

;acalmface。11AsNanatoldthestory,Mariamsatonherlapand

pictured

hermotherbeingfittedforaweddingdress.She

imagined

heronhorseback,

smilingshyly

behind

aveiledgreengown,

herpalms

paintedredwithhenna,

herhair

partedwithsilverdust(銀粉),

thebraids(辮子)

heldtogetherbytreesap(汁液).Shesawmusiciansblowingtheshahnai

fluteandbangingondohol

drums,streetchildrenhooting(叫喊)

andgivingchase.

首句之后的支撐句描述了M