市公開課提高句子的檔次

1、如何提高書面表達句子的檔次如何提高書面表達句子的檔次 浦江中學浦江中學 洪英洪英Welcome to our school Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party. They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short messages too and

2、 it is becoming very popular. But I think that its better to help other people. We know that its important to learn to help other people. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happy學生作品（學生作品（1 1） 學生作品（學生作品（2 2） 學生作品（學生作品（2 2）1. 1. 要

3、點齊全要點齊全2. 2. 較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和高級高級詞匯詞匯 3. 3. 全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊 There was an accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. (典型病句）典型病句）There was an accident that happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. (定語從句）定語從句）An accident occurred to two students in our school y

4、esterday afternoon.（高級詞匯）（高級詞匯）An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home after school. They were talking and laughing loudly. (陳蟬陳蟬)Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home aft

5、er school, talking and laughing loudly. （用分詞合并）（用分詞合并）The traffic lights turned red. They found it was too late to stop the bikes.The lights turned red, but they found it was toolate to stop their bikes. (黃穎黃穎) ) （用連接詞連接）（用連接詞連接）Seeing the red traffic lights, they tried to stop but it was too late.

6、（用分詞合并）（用分詞合并） Ones left arm was hurt and the others leg was hurt too. (戴靚戴靚) ) Ones left arm was broken while the others leg got hurt. (邊昶邊昶) (避免用相同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯）（高級連詞）避免用相同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯）（高級連詞）One had his left arm broken while the other gothis leg hurt. /the other was badly hurt in the leg.)( (高級結(jié)構(gòu)）高級結(jié)構(gòu)）They were

7、knocked off their bikes, one with theleft arm broken, and the other with one leg hurt.( (高級介詞短語高級介詞短語/獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)） ( (昭昭昭昭) )5. If we dont obey traffic rules, we might die.a. If we go against traffic rules, we might lose our lives.b. If we go against traffic rules, we might end up in hospital.c. G

8、oing against traffic rules might cost us our lives.d. Dont risk our lives going against traffic rules. (多種表達）多種表達）6. He got up at 7 oclock.（ ）It was not until 7 oclock that he got up.Not until 7 oclock did he get up.(強調(diào)句）強調(diào)句）（倒裝句）（倒裝句）He didnt get up until 7 oclock.1. I had a good idea.a. A good ide

9、a occurred to me.b. I came up with a good idea.2. Dont worry . Well try to help you.make every effort to, make great efforts tospare no efforts to, try every means todo all we can to, do what we can to多種表達多種表達&高級詞匯高級詞匯Practice: 1. There are 80% of the population live on farming. 2. At 8 this mor

10、ning, there were about 50 American students came to visit our school.80% of the population live on farming.At 8 this morning, about 50 American students came to visit our school.Practice: （用分詞合并）（用分詞合并）He had finished his homework. He went out to play football.1. I was moved by his words. I decided

11、to lend him a hand.Moved by his words, I decided to lend him a hand.Having finished his homework, he went out to play football. Practice: （用連接詞連接）（用連接詞連接）The police searched everywhere. The missing boy could not be found.The police searched everywhere, but the missing boy could not be found. Though

12、the police searched everywhere, the missing boy could not be found.Practice: (避免用相同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯）避免用相同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯）1. I like sports. I like music, too.I like sports and music as well.I like sports as well as music.My favorite subject is English while my sisters favorite subject is history.My favorite subject is En

13、glish while my sisters is history.b. My favorite subject is English while my sister likes history best.My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa. He had a book on his knees.Practice: （用介詞短語）（用介詞短語）My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa with a book on his knees.提高句子檔次的小結(jié)：提高句子檔次的小結(jié)： 1. 1. 用分詞短語合并

14、句子用分詞短語合并句子 用介詞短語合并句子用介詞短語合并句子 用獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)合并句子用獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)合并句子 用連接詞連接句子用連接詞連接句子2. 2. 用高級結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯用高級結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯3. 3. 用定語從句、主語從句、強調(diào)句、倒裝句用定語從句、主語從句、強調(diào)句、倒裝句4. 4. 用不同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯用不同結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯 An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike

15、. They were talking and laughing happily. When they saw a car which was passing by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red. The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell

16、off the bikes. Tianli broke his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg. (學生作文）學生作文）An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike. They were talking and laughing happily. When they saw a bus which was passing

17、by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red. The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell off the bikes. Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg. An accide

18、nt happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. School was over. Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike. They were talking and laughing happily. An accident occurred to two students in our schoolyesterday afternoon.After school was over, Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1

19、were on their way home by bike, talking and laughinghappily. When they see a bus which was passing by, they started to run after it. They thought it was very interesting. The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red. Seeing a passing car, they started to chase it, thinking it great fun.Unfortun

20、ately, the bus stopped the moment the traffic light turned red. The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time. They fell off the bikes. Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg. The two students were so close to the bus that theywere not able to

21、stop their bikes in time. As a result, they were knocked off the bikes, one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt. An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon. After school was over, Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were heading home by bike, talking and l

22、aughing happily. Seeing a passing bus, they started to chase it, thinking it was great fun. Unfortunately, the bus stopped the moment the traffic light turned red. The two students were so close to the bus that they were not able to stop their bikes in time. As a result, they were knocked off the bi

23、kes, one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt. (95 words) Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party. They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes. Sometimes, people send short

24、messages too and it is becoming very popular. But I think that its better to help other people. We know that its important to learn to help other people. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happyImprove this composition, try!Impro

25、ve this composition, try! ( 1) Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways. (2) Usually, a party is held. Best friends and relatives will come to the party.（用（用where定語從句）定語從句）(3) They usually buy a gift. They show their best wishes.（和并句子）（和并句子）(4) Sometimes, people send short messag

26、es too and it is becoming very popular （用（用which定語從句）定語從句）. (5) But (替換）替換） I think （替換）（替換） that its better to help other people.(6) We know that its important to learn to help others. Helping other people can do us a lot of good. (7) People will help you in return and youll be happy （用（用For one th

27、ing, For another 替換）替換）.Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways.Usually, a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun.They usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wishes.Sometimes, people send short messages too, which is becoming very popular .However, as far as Im concerned, its better to do something for others.As is known to all, i