【讀后續(xù)寫】2021年5月杭州二中仿真考讀后續(xù)寫解析 名師課件-許麗君

杭州二中高三仿真考讀后續(xù)寫解析2021年5月讀后續(xù)寫杭州二中

許麗君HowtoreadEnglishnovels?ReadthestoryGetthegistListtheplotsTracethecluesExplorethethemeAnalyzethecharacterPredicttheendingDeepenthethemeWeavethestoryAppreciatethelanguage續(xù)寫步驟一.尋記敘文要素(searchfortheelements)二.探故事線索

(tracetheclues)三.找中心矛盾(searchforthecentralconflicts)四.研文章主題(explorethetheme)析人物性格(analyzethecharacter)

估故事結(jié)尾

(predictingtheending)讀后續(xù)寫情節(jié)的構(gòu)思如何構(gòu)思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容

Step5

weavethestory

Step1Readthestory,getthegist

Step2

Listtheplots,tracetheclues

Step3Explorethetheme,analyzethecharacter

Step4

Predicttheending,deepenthetheme

Step6

Appreciatethelanguage續(xù)寫體裁：記敘文記敘文怎么讀一.讀記敘文要素5W和1H“who,what,where,when,why,how”Whoisthestoryabout?Whathappened?Wheredidithappen?Whendidithappen?Whydidithappen?Howdidithappen?Readthestory,getthegistStep1續(xù)寫體裁：記敘文二.讀情節(jié)BeginningClimaxClosingDevelopingDeveloping:Incitingincident：引發(fā)故事矛盾或沖突(conflict)的事件;Risingaction：圍繞沖突故事主人公采取一系列行動(dòng);Fallingaction：沖突向得以解決的方向發(fā)展;Resolution：沖突得到解決;Readthestory,getthegistStep1unicycle;ride;weak;practice;charity;nervous;performance;hulahoop;stage;confidence情緒nervous;事物unicycle；charity;performance;hulahoop;stage動(dòng)作ride；practice；特性weak;Dividetheunderlinedwordsinto4groups:Step2ListtheplotsTrace

thecluesHowdidIpracticeridingaunicycle?WhendidItrytorideaunicycle?WhatdidIdotorideaunicycleonstage?WhatdidIdotoputonperformance?WhydidIliketorideaunicycle?Step2ListtheplotsTrace

thecluesListtheplotsTrace

thecluesBeginning/introduction(characterandsetting)

Process/development(up-down-up)Climax(themainproblemorconflict)Ending(solution/howthingsendup)?

StoryMountainStep2ListtheplotsTrace

theclues

Beginning(Introduction)

Process(Developing)

Climax(conflict)

Ending

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3?1.MysisterJanedidrideandpracticedbutstopped..2.Imadegreateffortstopracticeridingaunicycleandfinallymadeit.3.Iwouldputonmyperformancebydoingahulahoopandridingaunicycleonstage.4.?Step2ListtheplotsTrace

theclues讀后續(xù)寫情節(jié)分析Para.4:ImadeeffortstorideaunicycleContinuationpara.1:myperformanceonstageresolutionContinuationpara.2:mysenseaftercheckingmobilephonefallingactionrisingactioncuriousPara.3:HowImadeit

fundiscouragedmadeitinspiredconfidentStep2:Readforplotdevelopmentclues(Plot&Feelings)backgroundclimaxPara.1Janedidridebutstopped.Para.2:howIpracticedridingaunicyclenervous杭州二中高三仿真考讀后續(xù)寫解析whowherewhenHowwhywhatendingbeginning解讀故事文本分析故事要素Step3:ExplorethethemeWho(character)Where

(place)When(time)What(event)Why(reason)How(solution)I;sisterJane;ourteacherMaria;myfriends;theheadmasterOuroldhouse,onstageOnemorning,onthenightoftheshowPutonperformancebydoingahulahoopandridingaunicycleonstage.Teachingmyselftogoforward,backwardsandtoturn.Itriedridingaunicycleanddoingahulahoopoutofcuriosity.Mainidea:Ilearnedhowtorideaunicycleandputonmyperformancesuccessfullybydoingahulahoopwhileridingaunicycle.Q1:Whydid“I”liketorideaunicycle?Iusedlowbeamsinthediningroomtopracticeriding.IpracticedeverysparemomentIhad.Itaughtmyselftogoforwards,backwardsandtoturn.Irodeaunicycleoutofcuriosity.Ithoughtitwasreallyfun.Diligent/confident

active/curious

Step4:AnalyzethecharacterQ2:HowdidIpracticeridingunicycle?Tip:thinkoutsidethebox“I”wouldeventuallymakeit.“I”wouldridemyunicycleforwardsandbackwardsonstageandputonperformancessuccessfully.“I”woulddothehulahoopwhileridingtheunicycleperfectly.Trends/endinginthestory’sdevelopmentStep5：PredictingtheendingDeepenthetheme意圖tolearnhowtodoahulahoopandrideaunicycletoputonperformance.點(diǎn)10個(gè)下劃線詞+2個(gè)續(xù)寫段首句劃線詞EmotionSettingActioncharacteristicnervousunicycle;charity;performance;hulahoop;stageride;practiceweak用原文的已知信息預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾Makepredictionswiththehelpofgivendetailedinformation點(diǎn)Step5Predictingtheending三條線時(shí)空線（明線）Time&Place(setting)情節(jié)線(Plot明線)情感線(Mood暗線)

(I-theauthor)Onemorning;OnthenightoftheshowOpening(起）incitingincident(引發(fā)事件）curious/funOuroldhouse;OnstageForeshadowing(伏筆）discouragedUnicycle,charity,performance,hulahoop,stageDeveloping(承）Up1Developing(承）Up2nervousMadeit/overcamemyfearChanging（轉(zhuǎn)）inspiredConcluding（合）confident用原文的已知信息預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾Makepredictionswiththehelpofgivendetailedinformation線Step5:Predictingtheending意圖tolearnhowtodoahulahoopandrideaunicycletoputonperformance.段首句Paragraph1:Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.

Paragraph2:WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Q1:WhatdidIdotoputonperformance?Q2:WhatdidtheaudiencereactwhenIputonperformanceonstage?Q1:WhatwouldIfeelafterIcheckmymobilephone?Q2:HowwouldIreactafterseeingthemessage?Makepredictionswiththehelpofgivendetailedinformation用原文的已知信息預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾面Step5：PredictingtheendingHowdoestheauthorfeel?(Mood暗線)fundiscouragedMadeitnervousStep5:PredictingtheendingDeepenthethemeOvercamemyfearinspiredconfidentCuriousPredicttheplot-1Paragraph1:

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.

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WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Myreflection:MyfriendsencouragedmeAudiencereflectionCheeredmeupproblemfurtherproblemTracethehiddencluesinthegivensentencesinspiredappreciativePredicttheplot-2Paragraph2:

WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Myparentsandfriendsadmiredmyperformanceandwerepleasedbeyondwords.Ireceivedlotsofmessages.Myperformancegainedgreatpopularity.Resolutionresult?Ilearnedhowtorideaunicycleanddoahulahoop,andputonperformancessuccessfully.TracethehiddencluesinthegivensentencesStep6:weavethestory–Possibleversion1Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.NervousasIwas,Istillmadeupmymindtogatherupmycouragetoputonmyperformance.Accompaniedbythefamiliarmelody.Ifinisheddoingahulahoopandridingaunicycleonstageperfectly.Wavesofaudiences’cheersechoedaroundtheauditorium,withmyfriendsfilmingmyshow.Whenitcametoanend,myheartleapedwithgaietyasifIdidanincrediblemiracle.

Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion1Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.

ItwasonlywhenIsurfedtheInternetthatIrealizedhowpopularthisvideobecame.Tomyastonishment,thevideodrewmuchattentionfrompeopleonline,receivinghundredsofthousandsoflikes.Instantly,myweaknessmeltedandmyconfidencewelledupinsidemyheart.Itsuddenlyoccurredtomethat“Practicemakesperfect.”Downdeepinmyheart,thispreciousmemorywouldbecherishedbymyselfforever.Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion2Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.SooverwhelmedwasIthatIalmostwantedtodashoutofthestage.Atthistime,athoughtpoppedintomymind-itwasthehightimethatIexaminedtheeffectsofmypractice.Ihadtoinhalesharplytocalmmyselfdown,thenIbentdowntowardsthecrowdandstartedmyperformance.IcouldhardlyrememberwhatIdidthattime,butthethunderousapplauseandscreamssurgedthroughme.Youdidit,aninnervoicetoldme.Finally,myteachertoldmethatIcouldseetheresultonmyphonewhenIwentbackhome.

Step6:weavethestory-Possibleversion2Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Asenseofanxietycreptuponme,myfingerswerenearlyfrozen.ThenIsawmyname,decoratedwithgiant,goldenwords-champion.NotonlydidIusemyunicycleandhulahoopperformancetowinthefirstprizebutalsoIhadprovedittoothersthatevenaweakgirllikemecouldwin,justthroughmypractice!Isighedwithrelief,andInoticedthatmymomandsisterweresheddingtearsofjoybehindthedoor.Igrinneddazzingly,racedtothemandembracedthemtightly.Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion3Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.Frozenwithfear,Iwastoonervoustomoveaninch.Myheartstartedtobeatandmymouthwasdry.Aflushofpanicfloodedoverme.Finally,Ipluckedenoughconfidenceandcouragetogoonthestage.Istartedmyperformance,thehulaloopwasperfectlyperformed.ThenIbegantoride

unicycle.Ifinisheditsuccessfully.Ibowedtoaudiencesandbreathedasighofrelief.Afterthat,Iwentbackhome.

Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion3Paragraph2：

WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.There

werehundredsofmessagesfrommyclassmates,evenfrommyheadmaster.“It’shardforaweakgirltorideunicycle.Howdidyoumakeit？”heasked.Tobehonest,Idon’tknow,Ijustpracticedoverandoveragain.Asanoldsayinggoes,“Practicemakesperfect.”Ibelievethat’swhyIsucceeded.Step6:weavethestory-possible4Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.An

innervoicetoldmethatIcan’tbenervousanymore.Itookadeepbreathforthesakeofdecreasingtheheavyburdenofperformance.Iwalkedtowardsthestagewitheveryconfidence.Thankstomypracticebefore,it’srelaxingformetodoahulahoop.withthemildmusic,Iwastoridemyunicycleforwardsandbackwardssteadily.”Howcouldshemakeit?”We’veneverseenaweakgirlgivesuchamarvelousperformance.”Whisperswentaroundtheauditorium.Eventheheadmasterwasimmersedinfilmingthevisualfeast.Afterthetalentshow,Iwasthrilledtohearthatvideowaspostedandmanagedtodrawattentionfrompeopleonline,raisingamountofmoneyforcharity.

Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion4Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Seeingvideoreceivedhundredsofthousandsoflikesandraisedmuchmoneyforthecharity,smileonmyfaceshonelikeadiamond.ItwaswhensomereportersandTVstationscalledforinterviewthatItrulyrealizedhowhotandpopularthisvideobecame.Inconsequence,IwassatisfiedwiththehappinessandfunthatIbroughttoothers.Balmybreezewipingmyface,asuddenwarmthhauntedme.Step6:weavethestory-Possibleversion5Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.I’msonervousthatmythroatwasdryandmyfacewasburning.Inordertocalmdown,Itookadeepbreathandmadeabigsmiletomyself.Asscheduled,IputthehulahooponmyneckwithmytremblinghandsandshookmyneckasIpracticed.Myfeardecreasedasthehulahoopwentdowntomyknees.Later,whenridingtheunicycleandplayingwiththehulahooponthestage,Icaughtaglimpseofaudiencesfilmingtheperformance.Ididit.Meanwhile,afloodofexcitementflashedovermyheartandaudiencesclappedwarmly.

Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion5Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.Suddenly,lotsofmessagesappearedonmyphone.OneofthemwasavideoinwhichIperformed.“Aweakgirllikemehassuchalargepower!”Tomyastonishment,therewereaboveonemillionlikes.Suddenly,myconfidencewasbuiltupbymanykindstrangers.WhatawonderfulexperienceIhad!Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion6Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.Havingtakenadeepbreath,Iclearedmythroat,andmyperformancebegan.Withhundredsofeyesstaringatme,Icontrolledthehulahoopcarefully.Withthetimegoingby,practicingmemoriesaidedmemasterthetrickofshowingroutine,whichdrovemynervousnessandfear.SoaddictedwasItomyshowthatanynoisefailedtobotherme.ItwaslikeonlyIwasintheauditorium.Atlast,myperformancewasover.Therewasapplauseagainandtheheadmastergavemeathumb-upsign.Step6:weavethestory-Possibleversion6Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.

Theamountofmessageswasincreasingwithasteadyspeech.Lookingthroughthosewordsfullofcareandwarmth,awidesmilespreadovermyface,tearsblurredmyvision.Onlyatthismoment,canIfeelhowpoormywordswere.Itwassohardformetoexpressmygratitude.Lookingbacktheusualnight,ashyandweakgirlhasbuiltupherconfidenceeventually.Andtheshiningmemorywillremindmeoverandoveragain.IwillrememberthebraveryIhadwasfromanordinaryunicycle.Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion7Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.WhenIsawthisenthusiasticscene,myfaceturnedpaleandIstoodtheretongue-tied.Itookadeepbreath,thenmademywaytowardthestage.Myroutinewasdoingahulahoopanddoingsomedifficultwaves.Owingtomyhelpfulpractice,Iachievedmygoals.Allofpeoplegavemeathumb-upsignandthestagewasoverwhelmedwithwarmclap.Stunned,Ibuiltupmyconfidence,myperformancebecamemoreelegantandamazing.

Paragraph2：

WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.

Myfriends,classmatesandparentswereallpleasedbeyonddescription.Theglintofexcitementroseinmyeyes.Iofferedmyheartfeltgratitudewithabrightecstatic（狂喜的）smile,likeadeerjumpingwithjoy.Whatameaningfulexperience,ittaughtmeabouthoweverdifficultthethingis.Makeyourefforts,youwillseeitwillshinelikeadiamond.Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion7Step6:weavethestory-possibleversion8Paragraph1：

Therewastremendousapplausewhenthecurtainrose.

Iwasbothnervousandexcitedwhenitwasmyturn.Takingadeepbreath,Islowlyrodemyunicycletowardsthestageandputthehulahooparoundmyneckwhenthemusicwason.Theaudienceapplaudedformewhenthehulahoopwasabouttomyknees.Everythingseemedgooduntilanunluckythinghappened—Ididn'tridebackwardsfirmlysoItumbled!Itwassoembarrassingbutafteraveryshortrest,Istruggledtomyfeet.Itriedagainandfinally,Imadeit.Seeingthis,alltheaudiencecheeredandapplaudedhappily.

Paragraph2：WhenIgothome,Icouldn’twaittocheckmymobilephoneleftathome.MydeskmateMarysentthe