2022全國(guó)新高考讀后續(xù)寫真題分析講義- 高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

2022全國(guó)新高考I&II卷讀后續(xù)寫真題分析一、真題再現(xiàn)Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecrosscountryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.二、真題解析1.情節(jié)梳理故事背景：在小鎮(zhèn)及周邊七所小學(xué)參與的大型越野跑比賽日這天，學(xué)生們都在熱身并熟悉路線。“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)大衛(wèi)獨(dú)自站在柵欄邊，且臉上沒了往日的笑容，還表示不想?yún)⒓颖荣惲恕Ｃ軟_突：原來是教練擔(dān)心其他學(xué)校的孩子會(huì)嘲笑大衛(wèi)，所以讓他自己選擇是否參賽。大衛(wèi)本身患有腦部疾病，行動(dòng)不像其他孩子那樣自如，但他在學(xué)校一直盡力參與各項(xiàng)活動(dòng)，從不缺席訓(xùn)練，每次也都能堅(jiān)持跑完，同學(xué)們也把他當(dāng)作普通一員?？蛇@次，他卻因外界因素面臨是否參賽的糾結(jié)。續(xù)寫提示點(diǎn)：故事在此處留下懸念，需要續(xù)寫“我”與大衛(wèi)進(jìn)一步的交流互動(dòng)以及大衛(wèi)最終走向起跑線后的情況，展現(xiàn)大衛(wèi)的心理變化、比賽過程中的表現(xiàn)等，通過續(xù)寫完成整個(gè)故事，凸顯出大衛(wèi)的精神品質(zhì)以及這次經(jīng)歷帶來的影響和感悟。2.續(xù)寫思路針對(duì)第一段開頭“Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.”：要續(xù)寫“我”與大衛(wèi)坐下后嘗試開導(dǎo)他的具體內(nèi)容，比如“我”會(huì)如何鼓勵(lì)他、跟他說些什么來打消他的顧慮，大衛(wèi)對(duì)此的反應(yīng)如何，著重體現(xiàn)出“我”對(duì)大衛(wèi)內(nèi)心的關(guān)懷以及努力幫他克服心理障礙的過程，推動(dòng)情節(jié)向大衛(wèi)重新鼓起勇氣參賽的方向發(fā)展。針對(duì)第二段開頭“IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.”：則需續(xù)寫大衛(wèi)站在起跑線上以及比賽過程中的場(chǎng)景，像他的神態(tài)、其他選手和觀眾的反應(yīng)，更重要的是要突出大衛(wèi)在比賽中展現(xiàn)出的堅(jiān)持和努力，最后可以適當(dāng)描述“我”看到這一幕后的感受，以此來升華主題，彰顯大衛(wèi)的堅(jiān)強(qiáng)意志以及這次經(jīng)歷所傳遞出的積極意義。三、滿分范文Paragraph1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Igentlyputmyhandonhisshoulderandsaid,"David,you'veneverbeenafraidofchallengesbefore.Everyonehererespectsyouforwhoyouareandhowhardyoutry.Don'tletthefearofothers'laughterstopyou.You'reastrongrunnerinyourownway."Slowly,heliftedhiseyestomeetmine,andIsawaglimmerofdeterminationreturninginthem.Paragraph2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Hestoodthere,hislittlebodystraight,lookingaheadwithafocusedexpression.Astheracebegan,hestartedoffslowlybutsteadily.Theotherkidssoonpulledahead,yetDaviddidn'tgiveup.Hekeptmovingforward,onestepatatime.Watchinghim,Ifeltalumpinmythroatandprideswellinginmyheartforthisbraveboy.四、范文表達(dá)及特定語(yǔ)境下的仿寫1.“Igentlyputmyhandonhisshoulderandsaid,"David,you'veneverbeenafraidofchallengesbefore.Everyonehererespectsyouforwhoyouareandhowhardyoutry.Don'tletthefearofothers'laughterstopyou.You'reastrongrunnerinyourownway."分析：通過對(duì)“我”的動(dòng)作描寫“gentlyputmyhandonhisshoulder”，營(yíng)造出親切、安慰的氛圍，接著用鼓勵(lì)的話語(yǔ)，先是回顧大衛(wèi)以往不懼挑戰(zhàn)的表現(xiàn)，強(qiáng)調(diào)大家對(duì)他的尊重，然后點(diǎn)明不要因他人嘲笑的擔(dān)憂而放棄，最后肯定他自身的強(qiáng)大，從多個(gè)角度來增強(qiáng)大衛(wèi)的信心，體現(xiàn)出“我”開導(dǎo)的用心和話語(yǔ)的感染力，推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展，促使大衛(wèi)重燃斗志。仿寫語(yǔ)境：假設(shè)你的朋友準(zhǔn)備參加學(xué)校的演講比賽，但因害怕忘詞被人笑話而想放棄，你對(duì)他進(jìn)行鼓勵(lì)時(shí)的話語(yǔ)。仿寫句子：Isoftlyheldhishandsandsaid,"Friend,you'vealwaysbeenbraveenoughtotakeonchallengesbefore.Everyoneadmiresyouforyourcourageandtheeffortyouputintopreparing.Don'tletthefearofmakingmistakesstopyou.You'reagreatspeakerinyourownstyle."2.“Slowly,heliftedhiseyestomeetmine,andIsawaglimmerofdeterminationreturninginthem.”分析：細(xì)致地刻畫了大衛(wèi)的動(dòng)作和神態(tài)變化，“slowly”體現(xiàn)出他內(nèi)心經(jīng)過掙扎后逐漸有了回應(yīng)，“aglimmerofdeterminationreturning”則將他內(nèi)心重新燃起的決心形象地展現(xiàn)出來，讓讀者能真切感受到大衛(wèi)在“我”的鼓勵(lì)下心理狀態(tài)的轉(zhuǎn)變，使故事發(fā)展更加自然且充滿希望。仿寫語(yǔ)境：你鼓勵(lì)妹妹去參加繪畫比賽，她一開始很猶豫，在你說完鼓勵(lì)的話后她的反應(yīng)。仿寫句子：Gradually,sheraisedherheadtolookatme,andInoticedasparkofconfidencereappearinginhereyes.3.“Hestoodthere,hislittlebodystraight,lookingaheadwithafocusedexpression.Astheracebegan,hestartedoffslowlybutsteadily.Theotherkidssoonpulledahead,yetDaviddidn'tgiveup.Hekeptmovingforward,onestepatatime.”分析：這段對(duì)大衛(wèi)在起跑線上以及比賽開始后的表現(xiàn)進(jìn)行了詳細(xì)描寫，從身體姿態(tài)、表情到起跑的狀態(tài)以及面對(duì)其他選手領(lǐng)先時(shí)的堅(jiān)持，全方位地展現(xiàn)出大衛(wèi)的認(rèn)真、堅(jiān)定和不放棄的精神，畫面感十足，讓讀者仿佛置身比賽現(xiàn)場(chǎng)，為大衛(wèi)的表現(xiàn)所打動(dòng)，很好地突出了人物的精神品質(zhì)，升華了故事主題。仿寫語(yǔ)境：班級(jí)組織接力比賽，有位身體不太好的同學(xué)堅(jiān)持參賽，描述他在比賽中的表現(xiàn)。仿寫句子：Hestoodatthestartingpoint,hisfrailbodyupright,staringatthetr