【讀后續(xù)寫】2021年11月高三9加1聯(lián)盟期中讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)：Egg Drop Soup 名師課件-宋浩穎、李曉燕

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語(yǔ)篇解讀Textanalysis原題呈現(xiàn)“OK,everybody.It’sthattimeofyear,”saidmyscienceteacher,Mr.Beal.“ThisFridaywe’llhavetheannualEggDropChallenge.Bringyourbestcontainerstoclass.Youcanworkaloneorworktogether.”Mr.Beal’sfifth-gradeEggDropChallengewasaninstitutionatmyschool.ThegoaloftheChallengewassimple—youhadtobuildaprotectivecontainertokeepaneggfrombreakingwhendroppedoverthestadiumwall.Mybestfriend,Cassie,andIgrinnedateachother.Wealwaysworkedonprojectstogether.She’sbrainy;I’mcreative.We’retheperfectcombination,likepeanutbutterandmarshmallowcream(棉花糖霜),whichhappenstobemyfavoritekindofsandwich.ImademyfavoritesandwichthatafternoonwhilewaitingforCassietocomeoverandworkonthecontainer.Spreadingthefluffymarshmallowcreamgavemeanidea.“Ihaveabrilliantdesignforoureggcontainer!”IsaidwhenCassiearrived.Shelookedatmeeagerly.“Wecancushionitwithsomemarshmallowcream.Youknow,toabsorbtheshockoftheimpact,”Iexplained.“You’vegottobekidding,Laura.”Cassieexclaimed.“Youhaveabetteridea?”Cassiepointedtoasketch(草圖)inhernotebook.“Actually,Ido.Weputtheegginabasketwithparachute(降落傘)attached.Itwillsimplyfloattosafety.”“It'stooeasyforsomethingtogowrong.Itwillneverwork!”Isaid.Cassierolledhereyes,“Theparachuteisbetterthanthatstupididea.”Icouldn'tbelieveit.Ofcoursewe’dhadourlittlefightsinthepast,butthiswasdifferent.She’dnevercalledanyofmyideas“stupid”before.“ThenI'llbuildmineandyoubuildyours,andwe’lljustseewhoseisbetter.”“Fine!”Cassiethrewhernotebookintoherbackpackandstormedout.Andjustlikethat,ourfriendshipwasbroken.Likeaneggdroppedfromthetopofastadiumwithoutmarshmallowcreamtoprotectit.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenFridayfinallycame,IhadtoadmitthatCassie’sEggForceOnelookedprettygood.Paragraph2:Bythefourthround,onlyCassieandIwereleft.ReadforplotWho:I(Laura),Cassie,Mr.BealWhen:theannualEggDropChallengeWhere:schoolstadiumWhat:CassieandI,aused-to-beperfectpair,quarrelledoverdifferentideasforeggcontainersintheannualEggDropChallenge,andthattriggeredafriendshipcrisis.beginningDevelopingclimaxEndingReadforplotBeginning:theannualEggDropChallengingwastobeheld.Developing:CassieandIquarrelledoverdifferentideaforeggcontainers.Climax:CassieandIweretocompeteintheannualgameEnding:Cassiewon/Iwon/bothwon/bothlost…ReadforplotI(Laura)&CassiebothinfifthgradecharacteranalysiscreativebrainyBothcameupwithideasforeggcontainerssoonafterMr.BealannouncedthegamebluntstubbornI:“itwillneverwork”Cassie:“You’vegottobekidding.”;“stupididea”Cassierolledhereyes.Cassiethrewhernotebookintoherbackpackandstormed

out.Didn’tbuyeachother’sideasReadforplotHowdidCassie&Ifeelindifferentstages?FEELINGSbeginningexcitedconfidentquarrelmadhurtthegamenervousexcited(ifwon)sad(iflost)theendJoyfulReadforlanguageHowtodescribeafifth-gradekid:verbsmakeitmorepowerful“mybestfriend,Cassie,andIgrinnedateachother.”“Cassieexclaimed.”“Cassierolledhereyes.”“Cassiethrewhernotebookintoherbackpackandstormedout.”Figuresofspeech:similemakesadescriptionmorevivid“we’retheperfectcombination,likepeanutbutterandmarshmallowcream”Andjustlikethat,ourfriendshipwasbroken.“l(fā)ikeaneggdroppedfromthetopofastadiumwithoutmarshmallowcreamtoprotectit,”LanguageappreciationReadforthemeWe’retheperfectcombination.Ourfriendshipwasbroken.Likeaneggdroppedfromthetopofastadiumwithoutmarshmallowcreamtoprotectit.foreshadowingFriendshipislikeanegg.Itcanbebrokenifnoeffortsaremadetoprotectit.THEMECategorizethekeywordsReadthegivensentencesAskquestions情節(jié)預(yù)測(cè)ReadforCluesCATEGORIES:dividethekeywordsintodifferentgroupsCharacters:Mr.Beal,CassieVerbs:drop,protectSettings:EggDropChallenge,egg,container,basket,parachuteTheme:friendshipkeywordsMr.Beal,EggDropChallenge,container,egg,dropped,Cassie,basket,parachute,friendship,protectReadforCluesWhenFridayfinallycame,Ihadtoadmitthat

Cassie’sEggForceOnelookedprettygood.Bythefourthround,onlyCassieandIwereleft.beginningsentencesHowdidIfeelwhenIsawCassie’s“prettygood”eggcontainer?WhatdidwedointheEggDropChallenge?(describethegame)WhathappenedtoCassie’seggandmyegginthefirstround?HowdidCassiereact?HowdidIreact?howdidotherstudentsreact?Whathappenedtooureggs?Whowonthegame?HowdidCassieandItaketheresult?Didtheyfixtheirfriendship?How?WhatlessondidIlearnfromthisexperience?howtodescribeagamehowtodescribenervousness話題語(yǔ)言howtodescribe

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Myheartbegantothumpwithexcitement.MygazeshiftedtoCassie,whowasinfitsofgiggleswithothers.Icaughtatraceofuneaseonherface.Icouldfeelthatalltheeyeswerefixedonusandtheatmospherewasmorethansuffocating.Astrongsenseofnervousnesssurgedthroughme.Heartpoundingandpalmssweating,Iputtheeggcautiouslyintothebasket.Noeggseversurvivedsuchaheightandmyhandsweredrenchedinsweat.LANGUAGEHowtodescribe

agameTheaudienceletoutthunderingcheers,someevenwhistlingwildly.Withatriumphantair,Cassiereceivedmyriadsofthumbs-upandcastmeaproudlook.AsMr.Bealblewthewhistle,theexcitingEggDropChallengebegan,withawaveofthunderstormapplauseandyellsexplodingfromtheaudience.Suddenly,ahushsettledoverthestairs;everyonewasawaitingourperformance.Anairoftenseandexcitementsettleoverthecrowd.HardlyhadMr.Bealannouncedthegamebeganthanweloosenedholdofthecontainersandlettheeggsgo.LANGUAGE范文及高分作文WhenFridayfinallyrolledaround,IhadtoadmitthatCassie’sEggForceOnelookedprettygood.Shehadusedahandkerchieftocreateasmallparachute.Itwastiedtoabasketthatheldsoftpackingpeanutsand,inthecenterofitall,heregg.Cassiecastaqueerlookatmeasiftodeclarewar.Thecompetitionwason.Myclassmatescarriedtheireggcontainersupthreestadiumstepsanddroppedthemoverthesidewall.Onebyone.Theeggbroke,theownerout.Sighsandyellsechoed.Soonthesidewalkwasalreadydottedwitheggshellsfromfaileddrops.范文Bythefourthlaunch,onlyCassieandIwereleft.Takingadeepbreath,Iletgoofmybox.ThenIraceddownandgottothebottombeforeCassiedid.WhenIsawyolkandeggwhiteseepingfromthecontainer,myheartsank.ThenIsawCassie’sbasketlyingbesidemine,empty.“Myeggbouncedout,”sheexplained,pointingtoabrokenshellinthegrass.“Iguessthepilothadanegg-jectorseat,”Ioffered.Cassielookedatme,andherglaresoftened.Igrinned.Shegiggled.“Atie,”Mr.Bealannounced.Butweknewwe'dwonsomethingmoreimportantthantheEggDropChallenge.范文WhenFridayfinallyrolledaround,IhadtoadmitthatCassie’sEggForceOnelookedprettygood.

Herplasticbasketwithparachutewaselaboratelydesigned.Whenthrownintotheair,itopeneditsparachute,whirledaroundlikeabutterflyandthenlandedonthegroundslowlyandquietly,demonstratingthattherewasn’tanycrackontheegg.Theaudienceletoutthunderingcheers,someevenwhistlingwildly.Withatriumphantair,Cassiereceivedmyriadsofthumbs-upandcastmeaproudlook.TheminuteIletgoofmyegg,Istumbleddownstairsinahurry,inadesperateattempttocheckit.MyheartbeatwildlyasIfoundtheeggsafeandsound.Thenthenextfewminuteswitnessedfiercecompetitionbetweenothergroups.高分作文1Bythefourthlaunch,onlyCassieandIwereleft.

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holdinghercontainertightly,nolongerlookingthatconfident.SodidI.“Drop!”Handstrembling,Iletgoofthecontainer,stretchingouttokeeptheminsight,andrusheddowntocheck.However,underthelidwasaneggthatwasbadlycracked!Istoodstill.IheardCassiesobbing.Shemusthavefailedtoo.Yet,herfailuredidn’tcomfortme.Instead,itleftmeinthought.Mymarshmallowcreamleakedjustnow,whileherparachutedidn’tfunctionduetothesuddenwind.Whatifwecombinedourideas?Ifonlywehadn’tbrokenup!IlookedtowardsCassieandoureyesmet.Wegiggled.Iknewourfriendshipwasback.高分作文1WhenFridayfinallyrolledaround,IhadtoadmitthatCassie’sEggForceOnelookedprettygood.Equippedwithasmallparachute,itstoodoutfromvariousprotectivecontainers.TherewasobviousconfidencewrittenonCassie’sface.Soon,theEggDropChallengebegan.CassieletgoofherEggForceOneanditlandedperfectly.Whenitcame