2021屆 高中英語 老人與海the old man and the sea讀后續(xù)寫

TheoldmanandtheseaErnestHemingway

——ContinuationWritingReadforwritingmaterials—細讀原文，探尋寫作素材VSStoryWhenWhereWhoWhatAtsea（intheGulfofMexico)TheoldfishmannamedSantiagoandahugefishReadforwritingmaterials—細讀原文，探尋寫作素材WritingmaterialsTheoldmanis__________withthefishbattlingAftercominginempty-handedforeight-fourdays;

At85thdayTheoldmanis________withthefishTheoldmanThefishround1(回合）round2round3Theoldmanpulledonhimallthathecouldtobringhimcloser.Thenhestraightenedhimselfandbegananothercircle.Heheldonthegreatfishallthestrainthathecould....putallofhisefforton......pullingwithallhisstrengthThefish...rightedhimselfandswamaway...Thefishrightedhimselfandswamslowlyaway.Yesyouare,hetoldhimself.You'regoodforever.battling

CharactersofthemainfiguresTheOldmanSantiagotough(堅韌的）determinedconfidentstrong-willed（意志堅強的）positiveambitious(雄心勃勃的）CharactersofthemainfiguresUsefulexpressions:

beautifullooking看起來美麗的straighten挺直，使變直/weave迂回進行，穿行Vividdescription:

holdon抓緊/pullon用盡全力拉…turnalittleonhisside稍微側身putallofhisefforton盡全力righthimself擺正自己的身子feelhimselfgoing覺得自己快不行了…

WritingMaterials——原文中的寫作素材

Pull,hands.Holdup,legs.Lastforme,head.Lastforme.Yesyouare.You'regoodforever.Doyouhavetokillme?Youarekillingme.Comeonandkillme.Idonotcarewhokillswho.Clearup,head!Clearup.I'lltryitagain.I'lltryitonceagain.uniquewritingstyle:short,simple,repeated

WritingMaterials——原文中的寫作素材

新高考模式下的續(xù)寫要求：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；Para1:Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.____________________Para2:Apackofsharksfollowedafterthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark._____________________ContinuationWriting

Focusontwogivensentences

Para.1Afterthestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.

Para.2ApackofsharksfollowedthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainstthesharkWhy?Hesucceededincatchingthehugefish.Howdothemanfeel?Didhesucceedagain?Howdidhedealwiththem?Para.1Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.

Writeandpolishpara1

?The

old

man'sreaction??Whatdidtheoldmandonext?

?Theappearancedescriptionofthehugefish

Tip1：Adddetaileddescription?Howdidtheoldfeel?

Usedetaileddescription&advancedsentencesExcitement1.Hisfacelitupwithexcitement.2.Unabletocontainhisexcitement,hejumpedwithjoy.3.Whenhesawthefish,hisheartpoundedwithexcitement.4.Lookingatthebeautifulhugefish,hecouldhardlyconcealhisexcitement.Happiness1.Relieffilledhisheart,withabrightsmilespreadingacrosshisface.2.Theoldmanwassohappythathealmostjumpedupandtearsfilledhiseyes.Onepossibleversion:

Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.____________________Para.2Apackofsharksfollowedafterthehugefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark.銜接首句事件Practicemakesperfect?Whydidothersharksfollow??Didtheywanttosavethefish??Howdidtheoldmanfightagainstthesharks?Tip2:UseadvancedsentencepatternsUsedetaileddescription&advancedsentences1.pointto指著……2.reachintosb'spocket把手伸進口袋3.liftthelid打開蓋子4.gathersbintoarms把……抱在懷里

5.smashone'sfistdownonthedesk把拳頭砸在桌子上6.rubone'shandstogetherafewtimes搓了幾下手7.makeone'shandballintofist攥起拳頭8.hideone'sfaceinone'shands用手捂住臉Usedetaileddescription&advancedsentences1.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hefeltsoscaredthathisthroattightenedandhiskneesfeltweak.(嗓子發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟)2.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hefrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.(嚇呆了，不敢動彈)3.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hewasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorrorandhispalmsweresweating.(被深深地恐懼感所控制，手心出汗)4.Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.(他因恐懼而呆住，站在那兒一動不動)Onepossibleversion:Apackofsharksfollowedafterthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark._____________________SummaryTip1細讀原文，探尋線索（5W1H）Tip2充分利用段首句Tip3

提升句型Tip4

細節(jié)描寫①巧用原文，構造情節(jié)②銜接首句