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讀后續(xù)寫ContinuationWriting經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學(xué)家：情節(jié)發(fā)展是否和原八十回一致語言學(xué)家：用詞用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度獲取信息分析信息合理推斷寫作范文檢查核實故事線索人物性格場景特點寫作目的語篇結(jié)構(gòu)語言風(fēng)格主題語境故事要素主旨大意續(xù)寫情節(jié)：邏輯合理思想、語言符合前文開頭銜接合理內(nèi)容完整語言表達(dá)（使用關(guān)鍵詞、詞匯、語法準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性、連接詞的使用）內(nèi)容豐富，與原文的融洽度，詞數(shù)、關(guān)鍵詞、語法、拼寫等有效使用連接成分讀后續(xù)寫解題步驟以2016年10月新高考首考試題為例閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.讀寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。評分參考：閱卷時主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：1.與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；2.內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況；3.應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；4.上下文的連貫性。1.What'sthestyleofthepassage?A.Narration(記敘文)B.Exposition(說明文)C.Argumentation(議論文)whowhenwherewhathowwhy2.Person(人稱):Firstperson?Secondperson?Thirdperson?

3.Tense(時態(tài)):Pasttense?Thesimplepresenttense?ReadfortheclueofthestoryInterpretationoftheText文本解讀AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatPara(

)Para()Para()Day2Day1Day31,2,3,45,6,78who

whenwherewhathow

ReadforComprehensionJane&Tom(acouple)OneweekendinJulyInaforestquarrelledwalkedawaygotlostheardahelicoptertakeoffyellowblouseInvain...?angry,scaredexcited,helpless…?DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)Mythemeforthestory:

Nomatterhowdifficultitwas,theirlovewouldleadthewayforthem.

PredicttheDevelopmentPara.7Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.Para.8It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

Time:thenightbeforesleptFeeling:disappointedFindaplacetosleeptrytogetoutseparatePara7:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para8:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…whowhenwherewhat/howJanenightintheforesthowJanefeltwhatJanediddarkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat/howJaneTomdayintheforestorotherplaceshowJanesurvivedhowtheyfeltreuniteddisappointedtiredwalk,find,climb,stop,sleepTom,helicopter,find,tell,love,hug…h(huán)appy

DrawaMind-MapPlots:logicalmeaningfulpositive

ClassifythetenwordsintosixgroupsJane,Tom,lake,walked,climbed,atadistance,stream,

Tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouseChooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionslake,stream,helicopter,yellowblouseJane,Tom

walked,climbedtimelapse（時間推進(jìn)）atadistanceTohergreatjoyanobject（物線）acharacter（人線）anevent（事線）spatialalternation（空間變換）author'sthoughts&emotions（作者的思想感情）SomestepstoanalyzebeforeContinuation:Findthestyle、person、tense、themeofthepassage

2.ReadforComprehension3.PredicttheDevelopment4.DrawaMind-Mapforthefollowingtwoparagraphs5.Chooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionsanobject、acharacter、anevent、timelapse、spatialalternation、author'sthoughts&emotions

GuidanceBewellconnectedtothegivenpassageandthebeginningsofthetwoparagraphs.Bewellorganizedwithatleast5ofthe10givenunderlinedwords.Makesurethestorydevelopslogicallyandreasonably.Neverignorethebasic

toneofthearticle.Writethecontinuation閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________EvaluationSummary

HowtocompleteanarrativearticleStepone:thoroughreading(who;when;where;what;why;how)Steptwo:logicalplotting(theplot,theunderlinedwords,thegiventwosentences,reasonableending)Stepthree:vividwriting(linkingwords,details,sente