如何潤色英語作文

作文的核心任務：在15秒內(nèi)取悅閱卷老師優(yōu)秀作文應具備的六個基本特征：1、層次不亂2、句式多變3、亮點若干4、巧妙串聯(lián)5、蠢錯不犯6、整潔卷面作文上光第一招：肅清愚蠢語言錯誤13種常見的語言錯誤（1）主謂不一致

FatherandIamgoingtovisither.Myuncleoftengotothecinemahimself.(2)時態(tài)、語態(tài)混用

Themovieissogoodthatweallenjoyeditverymuch.Theoldmanknockeddownbythecarandinjuredbadly.

(3)句子成分殘缺

Butthecarwhichpaintedreddidn’tstop.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreetfast.

(4)習慣搭配亂用

IverylikethenovelThenwesetoffdigging,plantingandwatering.

(5)漢式英語

Thecarisyellowcolor.Nextmonthhaveasportsmeeting.

(6)名詞單、復數(shù)不分

HewillgiveusatalkonAmericanfilm.Heisoneofthebestplayerinourschool.

(7)贅詞現(xiàn)象嚴重

Atlast,thelostboyreturnedback.Ononeday,hewenttothecinema.

(8)用詞不當

Hedoesn’twanttosaysomethingaboutthismatter.Ihopeyoutohelpthegirlwithherhomework.

(9)拼寫和詞形變化錯誤

Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.Onhiswaytoschool,hesewalittlegirl.

(10)前后人稱不一致

Swimmingandfootballarehisfavoritesports,andhelikesitallhislife.Thelittlegirlusuallygoestoschoolat7inthemorning,buttodayhewaslateforschool.(11)分詞作狀語、邏輯主語不一致Havingheardthenews,herheartbeatfasterandfaster.Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.(12)動詞原形作主語Walkisgoodforyouhealth.Drinkwinesisharmful.(13)一個簡單句出現(xiàn)兩個謂語Therewasnobus,wehadtowalkhome.Therearealotofstudentslikethismovie.LastsummerIgotoAmericaandstudiedatalanguageschool.Ihadmanywonderfulexperience,butIalsohadasadone.Oneday,theschoolheldparty,whereIinvitedtotalkaboutTianjin.AfterthattheyaskedmealotofthingsaboutChina.ButIcouldn’texplainthemwithEnglishclearly.Ifeltsadly.Ilearntalessonfromthisexperience.IhavealreadystudiedEnglishforeightyears,Ican’tuseitverygood.ImustworkhardtoimprovemyspokenEnglishsothatIwillnotbeabletocommunicatefreelywithforeigners.IhopeIcanbeabridgebetweenChinaandotherscountriesinthefuture.∧∧∧TheStoryaboutGrowthismyfavoriteAmericanTVplaybecauseitisveryinterested.Theplay76.

tellshumorousstoriesthathappenintheGreen’s77.

family.Withsuchstoriesitmakepeoplethink78.

aboutlife,butthereforeattractstheaudience.Itis79.

alsoawindowwhichwecanlearnaboutAmerican80.

society.Andthereweremanymeaningfulthingsthat81.

areworththinkof,suchastherelationshipbetween82.

parentsandchildreninalotofAmericanfamily.It83.

isquitedifferentfromthoseinChina.Theplayis84.

verypopular.We’dbetternottomissthechance85.

toenjoyit.s∧作文上光第二招：讓句式多變起來1.長短句的變化Ifyouworkhard,you’llmakegreatprogress.Workhardandyou’llmakegreatprogress.Thathehadwonthegamedelightedhisparents.Hiswinningthegamedelightedhisparents.Afterhehaddonehishomework,hebegantoplaycomputergames.Havingdonehishomework,hebegantoplay…BecauseIdidn’tknowwhattodonext,Iwanttoaskyouforadvice.Notknowingwhattodonext,…ThoughhehaslivedinCanadaforthreeyears,hestillcannotspeakEnglishwell.HavinglivedinCanadaforthreeyears,he…2.主動式被動式的交替使用Peoplebelievethatitwillbepossibleformantoliveonanotherplanetinthefuture.Itisbelievedthatitwon’tbeimpossibleformanto…3.肯定式與否定式的交替使用Ishallgothereifitdoesn’train.Ishallgothereunlessitrains.Iwilltrymybestnottoletthemdown.Iwilltrymybesttoliveuptotheirexpectations.Hedidn’tpasstheexam.Hefailedtheexam.4.插入行成分的靈活位置利用However,theyrefusedit.Theyrefusedit,though.They,however,didn’tacceptit.5.正常語序與倒裝語序的交替使用Wecanachieveourgoalinthisway.Onlyinthiswaycanweachieveourgoal.

Ididn’trealizethefactuntilIgotback.NotuntilIgotbackdidIrealizethefact.

作文上光第三招：適當使用復雜句主從復合句虛擬語氣倒裝句強調句非謂語動詞結構并列句作文上光第四招：巧妙使用連接成分1.表示時間順序的：

atthesametime,afterward,allofasudden,atlast,finallythen.2.表示空間順序的：

above,around,beyond,ontheleft,oppositeto,inthedistance,nextto3.表示分析：

asaresult,atlast,finally,furthermore,therefore,moreover,forinstance,Onthecontrary,inaddition,insummary,inanutshell,ontheotherhand,inthiscase.4.表示比較的：

Besides,inthesameway,infactequally,similarly,inadditionto5.表示對比的：

Differentfrom,onthecontrary,inspiteof,some…others,nevertheless.Notonly…butalso,theformer….thelatter,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand.6.表示選擇的：

either…or,neither…nor,ratherthan,insteadof,not…but.7.表示因果的：

therefore,asaresultof,nowthat,aslongas,since,sothat,dueto/owingto,thanksto,onaccountof.8.表示總結的：

tosumup,onthewhole,inall,briefly,inconclusion,insummary,inshort/brief,inaword,toconclude.---聽說你中彩票了。---恰恰相反，我被罰了。幸虧你的及時幫助，我才順利地通過了駕駛考試。一方面，我們需要工業(yè)，而另一方面，我又痛恨它帶來的污染?？偠灾覀兊膰疫€不富裕。這件衣服樣子太老了，另外，顏色也不適合我。作文上光第五招：有選擇地背誦經(jīng)典句型一、開頭句型Asfaras…isconcerned,Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…Itcanbesaidwithcertaintythat…Astheproverbgoes….It’slikelythat….I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IhatetosayitthatIcan’tmakeitto….Whataninspiringpictureitis!二、銜接句型Asisoftenthecase,…Buttheproblemisnotsosimple.…Butitisapitythat….Inspiteofthefactthat….,they….However,….Inaddition,….Similarly,….Ashasbeenmentionedabove,…Onthecontrary,….Ontheotherhand,….三、舉例句型：Let’stake…asanexample.Hereisonemoreexample.Thisoffersatypicalexampleof….Justthinkof….四、結尾句型Iwillconcludebysaying…Therefore,webelievethat…Witheverythingtakenintoconsideration,weItmaybesafelysaidthat….Inshort,….Tosumup,…Inmyopinion,….Allinall,….Briefly,….五、常用諺語：Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.六：as句型Asisknowntoall,….Sheissuchafoolastobelievewhathesaid.

Asitwasgettinglate,wehadtoquit.Youngashewas,hemadegreatcontributionstohismotherland.七、seem句型Itseemsthateveryonewassatisfied.

Itseemstomethatsheisright.

Thereseemstobeaheavyrain.

Itseemsasifnothinghadhappenedtohim.八、wouldrather句型Shewouldratherdiethanbemarriedtothatoldman.2.Iwouldratherhavetakenhisadvice.3.IwouldratherIhadworkedharder.4.Iwouldratheryoudidityourself.九、before句型TheboyhadrunoutbeforeIcouldstophim.Itwillbetenyearsbeforeeverythingreturnstonormal.3.Itwasn’ttwoyearsbeforeheleftthecountry.4.LetmetellyoutherulesbeforeIforget.5.IwouldshootmyselfbeforeIapologizetohim.十、強調句型ItwashowIsaiditthatmadehimangry.WasithowIsaiditthatmadehimangry?Whatwasitthatmadehimangry?Canyoutellmewhatitwasthatmadehimangry?十一、感嘆句型Whatatiringday!Howtiringaday!HowIwanttoseeyouinNewYork!十二、Not…until句型Hedidn’trealizethetruthuntilhecameback.Notuntilhecamebackdidherealizethetruth.Itwasnotuntilhecamebackthatherealizedthetruth.十三、since句型Hehaslivedheresincehisfathermovedhere.Hemovedherein1988andhaslivedhereeversince.3.ItistenyearssinceIgotmarried.4.ItistenyearssinceIwasmarried.十四、ifonly句型IfonlyMr.Johnsonwerehere!IfonlyIhadtakendownhisaddress!IfonlyIcouldbe18again.十五、Therebe句型Thereisnodoubtthat….Thereisnopointdoing….ThereisamancalledJerrywaitingforyou.Thereisnowaythatonecouldsucceedwithouthardwork.5.Thereisnoneedtobeworriedabouthim.6.Thereisnohurryinreturningthebook.十六、倒裝句型Onlythroughhardworkcanyouexpecttoachieveyourgoals.2.Socuriousarethestudentsaboutwildlivesthattheycan’twaittogointotheforest.3.Nevershouldwelie.4.Herecomesthebus.5.Infrontofthehousesatanoldlady.6.Onlyinthiswaycanyouachieveyourgoal.十七、with復合結構Hestaredattheshowwithhismouthopen.Theboystoodthere,withhisheaddown.Hestoodwithhishandsinhispockets.Withnothingtodo,hewentbackhome.Withthenoisegoingon,hecouldn’tconcentrateonhiswork.6.Helayontheground,withhiseyesfixedontheceiling.作文上光第六招：盡量使用高中詞匯

about---approximatelycareful---cautiousso---thereforehappily---enthusiasticallyclearly---apparentlythrowaway---abandonlotsof---abundant/adequateMoreandmorepeople–anincreasingnumberof…attractive–appealing/inviting/fascinatingmoreimportant–increasinglysignificantwanttodo–intendtodo/desireto/beeager/lookforwardto../becrazyaboutdoing..cause–resultin/leadto/bringaboutyou’dbetter–Youmayjustaswellunderstand–figureoutbegintorealize–cometobeawareof…refusetolisten–turnadeafearto…

SuddenlyIhadagoodidea.SuddenlyIcameupwithagoodidea.Agoodideacameuponme.Allofasudden,agoodideaoccurtome.作文上光第七招：要害部位使用名言、諺語Speechissilver,silenceisgold.Easiersaidthandone.Everymanhashisweakside.Honestyisthebestpolicy.Everycoinhastwosides.Oneman’smeatisanotherman’spoison.Loveme,lovemydog.Seeingisbelieving.Wellbeganishalfdone.WheninRome,doasRomansdo.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.Nopains,nogains.Strikewhiletheironishot.Thereisnosmokewithoutfire.It’snevertoolatetomend.Knowledgeispower.Practicemakesperfect.AllroadsleadtoRome.Manyhandsmakelightwork.Morehaste,lessspeed.Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.Nothingisimpossibleforawillingheart.Romewasnotbuiltinaday.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.Lookbeforeyouleap.Itishardtopleaseall.Asthetree,sothefruit.作文上光第八招：無招勝有招20%40%80%60%小學初中高中下圖是對某地學生近視率的調查表山東卷高考英語寫作的三個特征：1.創(chuàng)設使用英語寫作的需要；2.話題與學生認知水平相符；3.有一定的開放性。假設你是新華中學的學生李華，你和在上海上學的英國朋友Tom約好下