【課件】記敘文的讀后續(xù)寫

ContinuationWritingofNarration記敘文的讀后續(xù)寫

讀后續(xù)寫的要求讀后續(xù)寫任務(wù)要求考生在一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料基礎(chǔ)上，根據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段。原文給出10處左右的標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，所續(xù)寫短文應(yīng)使用5個以上。第五檔（21-25分）1.與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的段落開頭語銜接合理。2.內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語。3.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確。4.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。閱卷時考慮以下幾個方面：1.

原文與后續(xù)的融洽度；2.

后續(xù)兩段間的融洽度；3.

邏輯權(quán)重高于內(nèi)容、語言和情感；4.多種可能性，擇其優(yōu)而續(xù)寫5.所續(xù)部分：高立意、正能量、傳遞積極的情感態(tài)度standardsofgrading

Theparentswiththeirthree-year-oldsonwenttoseeafilm.Whentheywalkedintothecinema,theattendantsaidtothem:“You'llhavetogooutifyoursoncries.Butwe'llrefund(退款)youthetickets.”

Abouthalfanhourlater,thehusbandaskedhiswife,“Whatdoyouthinkofthefilm?”

“I'veneverseensuchaboringfilm.”Hiswifeanswered,“It'snotworthseeing.”

“Idon'tthinkmuchofit,either.”Thehusbandsaid,“Wakethechildupand_________________.”enjoycontinuationwritinglethimcry01原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫,語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。02正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚(yáng)社會主義核心價值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法，等等。03曲折性原則凡是故事都應(yīng)有跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。寫作指導(dǎo)三大原則寫作指導(dǎo)四個步驟3.增加細(xì)節(jié)，開始寫作根據(jù)“所見/遇所想，所為所感”等構(gòu)思具體細(xì)節(jié)。2.細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架仔細(xì)閱讀所給兩段的首句，結(jié)合正能量結(jié)尾，思考大致框架。1.讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)讀所給的不完整故事，弄清大意和主題，理清故事的主要人物和事件。4.修改潤色，整潔謄寫思考再三，把修正潤色后的續(xù)寫整潔地寫入答卷。讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehoursto

campovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasant

subjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,Jane

wassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenly

realizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Jane

keptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakein

thedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtohold

himandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinher

lifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthe

streamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellow

blouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycameback

again.(334words)Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.________________Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.__________________________Part01讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物，時態(tài)(通常是一般過去時)，事件(故事的起因和經(jīng)過)，語言特色(以便在續(xù)寫時語言特色前后一致，保持不變)，等等。

人物時態(tài)和事件語言特色不要變1.Characters2.Tense3.eventsJane,TomsimplepasttenseJanequarreledwithTomandwalkedaway.BeginningClimaxEndingrisingactionfallingactionJanegotlostintheforestandspentanightintheforest.Twohelicopterscameandwent.??語言特色1.Withnopathtofollow…2.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.3.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforest4.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.5.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotired…語言特色6.Lyingawakeinthedark,Janewanted…7.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.8.Neverinherlifehadshetasted…9.Feelingstrongernow,Janebeganto…Part02由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。兩段首句定一框第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來確定。二框二首正能量細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架Paragrah1Whowasthereinthesecondnight?WhatdidJanedowhenthenightfell?Howdidshefeelinthenight?Whatshouldbethelastsentenceabout?Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.（天又黑了）Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了）兩段首句定一框

即由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。由第一段首句可知，沒有直升機(jī)再來了，天又黑了。而從第二句首句天亮了，Jane醒了來推測，Jane在第一段中應(yīng)該是在森林又度過了一個晚上。本段還可添加合理的細(xì)節(jié)來豐富內(nèi)容，如Jane在黑暗中又走了一段路，最終體力不支找了一個地方睡著了，注意結(jié)尾要與下段語義銜接。Paragrah2WhatdidJanedoafterwakingup?Whatdidshedonext?Wassherescuedfinally?Ifyes,didsherescuedherselforwassherescuedbysomeoneelse?Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakandJanewokeup.（天亮了，Jane醒過來了）二框二首正能量

第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來確定。由第一段框架+第二段首句可知，這一定是一個正能量的結(jié)尾?？稍谑拙浜竺鑼慗ane獲救之前所做的事情。還可以結(jié)合前面正文的內(nèi)容來寫，如找到一個開闊的地方，揮動黃襯衣。Part03增加細(xì)節(jié)，開始寫作

在已定框架范圍內(nèi)，依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識，推斷故事中人物所見、所聞、所思、所說、所做等給每段增加5至8個具體細(xì)節(jié)。Mindmap2023/2/2JaneTomlakewalkedclimbedatadistancestreamtohergreatjoyhelicopteryellowblouselake,streamJane,Tomwalked,climbedhelicopter,yellowblouseatadistance,tohergreatjoytoolsactionslocationscharactersclues劃線關(guān)鍵詞Writing

Janepossiblefeelingspossibleactions

注意：寫作時注意細(xì)節(jié)描寫，如描述人物的動作、神態(tài)和心情。貫徹一致性原則。除內(nèi)容上要語義銜接，上下連貫外，語言風(fēng)格也要一致，如使用分詞短語和從句。注意使用關(guān)聯(lián)詞語。CommentonWritingPresentationoftheWritingswalkedalongthestreamclimbedtoahigherplaceforthenightheardanimalsata

distancemadeafiremissedTomtiredParagraph1Janescaredlonelyfellasleepwoke

uphungryandtiredwalked

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ahuge

flat

rockthe

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appearedagainclimbedontoit

andwaitedParagraph2Janeflaggedtheyellowblouse

the

helicopterlandedmeetTom

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joyhopeful

HowtocompleteanarrativearticleStepone:Analysethegivenpassage.(who;when;where;what;why;how)Steptwo:

logicalplotting(theplot,thegiventwosentences,reasonableending)Stepthree:vividwriting

(linkingwords,details,sentencestructures)SummaryPart04修改潤色，整潔謄寫要點(diǎn)有無遺漏，時態(tài)是否一致，主謂是否一致，文理是否連貫，句型有無變化，詞數(shù)是否符合要求，（少于130扣2分）

拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是否有誤等。要敢于創(chuàng)新，用更精彩的詞、句替換平淡的詞、句，特別注意開頭、結(jié)尾的精彩度，創(chuàng)造亮點(diǎn)。續(xù)寫中的常用語法項(xiàng)目：1.非謂語動詞，尤其是現(xiàn)在分詞短語；2.介詞短語，尤其是with短語；3.狀語從句，尤其是時間狀語從句；4.賓語從句；5.形容詞修飾名詞；6.副詞修飾動詞。語法應(yīng)用原則：內(nèi)容、詞匯和形式三者的統(tǒng)一增加內(nèi)容運(yùn)用詞匯豐富形式Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Thetemperaturegotloweratnightthaninthedaytime.Janeputonheryellowblouse.Atthatmoment,tirednesssurroundedher.Shefeltexhaustedbothphysicallyandemotionally.Butshe

continuedwalkingforwardbecauseshereallywantedtomeetTomassoonas

possible.Shewalkedslowlyandcarefullyindarkness.Followingthestreamforabouttwohours,Janecouldn’tsupportherphysicalstrength,soshefoundafla