高一英語作文復(fù)習(xí)和講評(píng)課件講義

1、評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及分析（一）評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)分析英語作文高分的“”: 1.內(nèi)容: 要點(diǎn)完整，觀點(diǎn)闡述清晰，思想積極向上。2.結(jié)構(gòu): 段落層次分明緊湊，邏輯清晰，銜接自然連貫。3.遣詞造句: 詞匯豐富（避免一詞多用），語法結(jié)構(gòu)多樣（如：定于從句、狀語從句、名詞性從句，并列句和非謂語等），銜接過渡詞的恰當(dāng)有效運(yùn)用。4. 卷面：美觀性（卷面書寫規(guī)范，清楚，干凈、整潔）但 “先無錯(cuò)，再精彩”！盡量高級(jí)詞句，書寫訓(xùn)練：（1）重要性： A. 優(yōu)秀作文，書寫在先。沒有良好的書寫，文章再好，也難以博得閱卷老師 的青睞，尤其是網(wǎng)上閱卷，電腦屏幕容易使人產(chǎn)生疲倦；此外老師也無法做一定勾畫。那么，字跡清秀整齊漂亮的文章肯定會(huì)使閱卷

2、老師在緊張的閱卷中產(chǎn)生一種愉悅；相反，難以辨認(rèn)的字跡和混亂的卷面，會(huì)令閱卷者心煩氣躁，即使你作文表達(dá)的較好，也會(huì)因?yàn)闀鴮懚俚梅只虻玫头帧?B.英語教學(xué)大綱對(duì)書寫也提出具體要求： 能用書寫體熟練，清楚地書寫大小寫，詞句，標(biāo)點(diǎn)等運(yùn)用正確、規(guī)范。 C.英語作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：如果書寫書面較差，將作文降一個(gè)檔次。（2）書寫較差的學(xué)生，從大小寫字母開始練習(xí)，然后抄寫詞、句、段和篇章，最后自由書寫。 寫作流程指導(dǎo)（四步法）審題：成文：草稿：檢查：作文題目要求是什么？是否要寫標(biāo)題？是什么體裁？有哪些要點(diǎn)？應(yīng)分幾段來寫？用什么人稱和時(shí)態(tài)？有無特殊要求？（重要信息，最好用鉛筆勾下來，以免出錯(cuò)） 2.結(jié)構(gòu)（寫幾段，每

3、段寫什么，哪段轉(zhuǎn)哪段承哪段） 關(guān)鍵詞（關(guān)鍵單詞和短語） 句式 （高級(jí)句式）1.注意語言的自然流暢，清楚正確地表達(dá)。2.注意書寫和卷面的美觀性（規(guī)范，清楚，干凈、整潔） 檢查是否有單詞拼寫，大小寫，標(biāo)點(diǎn)等錯(cuò)誤。（消除過失錯(cuò)誤，避免自殺行為）1.不建議：全草稿和不打草稿。遣詞造句審題：現(xiàn)象解釋型議論文，可以不寫標(biāo)題，三段式作文（列的三個(gè)要點(diǎn)），特別要求 120詞左右。草稿：(1)結(jié)構(gòu):（Para1: 結(jié)合題干，開門見山指出“越來越多的中學(xué)開設(shè)”， Para2：結(jié)合自己，具體分析選修課受到歡迎的原因， Para3: 談?wù)勛约簩?duì)選修課的看法。） ( 2) 關(guān)鍵詞：a wide range of sel

4、ective courses, choose from ,be popular with, enjoy a colorful and meaningful life, to acquire more knowledge，get fully developed, enrich school life, get well-prepared for the job hunting, develop/extend interests, make up for, be beneficial to, limited, in order to, future career, broaden our hori

5、zons, find a satisfactory job. (3)句式：There exists, The reasons accounting for. are listed as follows. The reason why.is that., There is no doubt that., As far as Im concerned, which 非限定從.，成文：Firstly,. Besides, Moreover, If so, Thus,., 檢查： .寫作流程實(shí)例分析：eg. 為了更好滿足學(xué)生需求，豐富學(xué)生的校園生活，現(xiàn)在很多中學(xué)都開設(shè)了課外選修課，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，寫

6、一篇120詞左右的英語短文。1. 越來越多的中學(xué)開設(shè)了課外選修課；2.分析選修課受到歡迎的原因；3. 以你自己為例談?wù)勛约旱目捶?；使用正確簡單句表達(dá)內(nèi)容（先無錯(cuò)）:五大基本句型：1）主語+ 不及物動(dòng)詞 （S+Vi.）2）主語+及物動(dòng)詞+賓語 （S+Vt.+O）3）主語+及物動(dòng)詞+間賓+直賓（S+Vt.+O+O）4）主語+系動(dòng)詞+表語（S+Link-V+P）5）主語+及物動(dòng)詞+賓語+賓補(bǔ)（S+Vt.+O+C）強(qiáng)調(diào)： 一個(gè)句子至少要有“主語+謂語” （除特殊句式外，如祈使句，省略句等）eg. There have some students scribble and litter here and

7、 there. ( ) We should against food waste. ( )問題:時(shí)態(tài)語態(tài)問題 Beijing will host the 29th Olympic Games. Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games. The dream has been come true. The dream has come true. We have realized our dream.2. 主謂一致問題 Everyone were exciting. Everyone was excited.3. 逐字翻譯問題 The athletes trie

8、d their best encouraged us.The athletes tried their best, which encouraged us.問題:4. 詞性混淆問題The Olympics were hosted successful.The Olympics were successfully hosted.5. 介詞短語的運(yùn)用問題 Im proud of China is strong. Im proud that China is strong. We have looked forward to host the Olympics.We have looked forw

9、ard to hosting the Olympics.(1). 非謂語在寫作中的運(yùn)用to do (作目的狀語，作后定表動(dòng)作未發(fā)生) doing （表伴隨，原因和結(jié)果，方式狀語，作后定表動(dòng)作正在 進(jìn)行） 主動(dòng)關(guān)系done （ 表原因和方式狀語， 作后定表示被動(dòng)或完成） 被動(dòng)關(guān)系 eg. With a lot of work to do, he worked from morning to night. Faced with so much school work, we have to stay up late. When meeting problems, we can turn to te

10、achers for help. 簡單句到高級(jí)亮點(diǎn)句的蛻變（再精彩）(2). 并列句在寫作中的運(yùn)用 兩個(gè)或兩個(gè)以上的簡單句用“連詞”連在一起構(gòu)成的句子，叫做并列句，各個(gè)并列句中的各簡單句意義同等重要，相互之間沒有從屬關(guān)系，它們之間用連詞連接。常用連接詞如下： （1） and/or/or else/but/so /for/ as well as/ both.and/ not.but. not only.but (also), neither.nor , either.or., （2）however/therefore/otherwise/ while/ still/yet等連用。 eg. He

11、is our teacher. He is also our friend. He is not only our teacher but also (he is) our friend. Not only is he our friend, but also (he is) our friend. eg. Our teachers shouldnt be too kind or strict . Our teachers should be neither too kind nor (they are) too strict . Neither should our teachers be

12、too kind t nor (they are) too strict. (3).復(fù)合句在作文中的運(yùn)用 復(fù)合句由就是主句或幾個(gè)從句，由關(guān)聯(lián)詞相連接，如定于從句,狀語從句或名詞性從句。復(fù)合句的使用不僅能使句子結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，上下文更加流暢，同時(shí)也能充分展示作者運(yùn)用較復(fù)雜語法結(jié)構(gòu)的能力。如： 1) Water is important because man cant live without it. Water, without which man cant live , is of great importance. (定從) 2) Protecting our environment

13、is very important. Im firmly convinced that protecting our environment is very important.（賓從） There is no doubt that protecting our environment is very important. （同從） Its important that protecting our environment is very important. (主從)3) The life of Senior 3 is busy and hard .We should persist in

14、studying hard. Even though the life of Senior 3 is busy and hard ,we should persist in studying hard. （讓步狀從）4) You study hard and you can succeed . You efforts can pay off on condition that you persist in studying hard. ( 條件狀從)(4).其它固定句式（強(qiáng)調(diào)，倒裝，感嘆，祈使句，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)）固定句式可以使文章的語言充滿層次感，從而較好地反映考生的語言運(yùn)用能力。如：1) We c

15、an only lead a happy life when everyone takes care of the environment. Only when everyone takes care of the environment can we only lead a happy life. (倒裝句)2) Im lucky to be his student. How lucky Im to be his student. (感嘆句) 3)We make great progress with Mr Wangs help and encouragement. Its with Mr

16、Wangs help and encouragement that we make great progress . (強(qiáng)調(diào)句）4) We should turn off the light when we leave the classroom.Make sure to form the habit of turning off whenever we leave the classroom. (祈使句)5) There is too much homework to do, so we stay up late at night. With too much work to do, we

17、stay up late at night. (with 的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))6) When some people are taking a shower, they make water run all the time. Some people are taking a shower, with water running all the time. (with 的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu))(5). 高級(jí)、亮點(diǎn)詞匯的運(yùn)用在作文寫作中，除多用復(fù)雜句式外，多運(yùn)用高級(jí)、亮點(diǎn)詞匯同樣能讓你文章出彩和與眾不同，給閱卷老師留下深刻印象。如：1. A good relationship between teachers an

18、d students is good for our study.2. Its very important to protect our environment.3. I think only in this way can we get on well with our teachers. 4. I think we will realize our dream if we study hard. From my point of view, our dream will be realized through our diligence and persistence.is benefi

19、cial to/bebefits of great significance/importance Im firmly convinced that.be on good terms with(5).儲(chǔ)備一些固定句型結(jié)構(gòu)如何多樣化表達(dá)不同看法 1）People _doing voluntary work 2）People _ doing voluntary work 3）People _doing voluntary work 4）_ doing voluntary work is worthwhile_ doing voluntary work is a waste of time . _

20、doing voluntary work. Every coin has two sides.have（take，adopt，assume ) different attitudes towardshave different opinions ontake different views ofSome people believe thatOthers argue thatOpinions are divided on 如何表示贊成?70% of the students approve of doing voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing

21、voluntary work.70% of the students _ doing voluntary work.70% of the students _voluntary work_.70% of the students _doing voluntary work. are in favor of are forthink ofpositively support如何表示反對(duì)25% of the students disapprove of doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of th

22、e students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work.25% of the students _ doing voluntary work _. are againstobject toopposethink of negativelyare opposed to 在寫作中除了使用以上談到的重點(diǎn)句型外，還應(yīng)該注意文章的邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)和五種過渡詞的使用。例如： 1.表示舉例時(shí)使用： for exle, such as,

23、 take .for exle, another exle of, here are a few exles, namely等。 2.表示列舉時(shí)使用： firstly, secondly, thirdly.finally; to begin with, for one thing, for another等。 如何表達(dá)個(gè)人看法I think each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._, each of us should make a

24、 contribution to society._, each of us should make a contribution to society._each of us should make a contribution to society.In my opinionAs far as I am concerned PersonallyI hold the view that 3.表示歸納總結(jié)時(shí)使用： in a word, in conclusion, to sum up, in brief, in short等。 4.要加強(qiáng)句與句之間的連貫時(shí)使用： in addition ,wh

25、ats more ,furthermore, on top of that, besides, moreover等。 5.表示轉(zhuǎn)折時(shí)使用： however,while,on the contrary,nevertheless等。6. 表原因： because of、thanks to、due to、 owing to，as a result of ,etc 7. 表結(jié)果： therefore、thus、as a result、so，etc 開頭方法一：名人名言經(jīng)典句型：A proverb says, “ You are only young once.” （適用于已記住的名言）It goes

26、without saying that we cannot be young forever. （適用于自編名言） 更多經(jīng)典句型： As everyone knows, No one can deny that開頭方法二：數(shù)字統(tǒng)計(jì) 要想更有說服力，就應(yīng)該用實(shí)際的數(shù)字來說明。所以不妨試用下面的句型：According to a recent survey, about 70 of the college students wanted to further their study after their graduation. A recent statistics shows that 作文題

27、：Honesty根據(jù)最近的一項(xiàng)統(tǒng)計(jì)調(diào)查顯示，大學(xué)生向老師請(qǐng)假的理由當(dāng)中50都是假的。 作文題： Youth根據(jù)最近的一項(xiàng)統(tǒng)計(jì)調(diào)查顯示，在某個(gè)大學(xué)，學(xué)生的課余時(shí)間的70都是在休閑娛樂。結(jié)尾方法一：結(jié)論說完了，畢竟要?dú)w納一番，開頭很好，也必然要有一個(gè)精彩的結(jié)尾，讓讀者眼前一亮，這樣，你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：Obviously（此為過渡短語）, we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.更多過渡短語：in conclusion, in brief, th

28、us， it can be concluded that, Therefore, we can find that ，to sum up, 結(jié)尾方法二：建議Obviously, it is high time that we took some measures to solve the problem.經(jīng)典的虛擬語氣的句型！ 更多句型：Accordingly（因此）, I recommend that some measures be taken. Consequently （因此）, to solve the problem, some measures should be taken.范

29、文1（關(guān)于主題句）Report on the Survey about our School Uniform Recently I did a survey about our school uniform. I interviewed groups of students what they thought about our school uniform. The result is as following. 60% of the students interviewed expressed their satisfaction with it. Wearing the fashiona

30、ble uniform of a good colour, they can prove themselves students and feel very tidy. The uniform also shows they are equal and there is no need for themselves to follow the fashion. Most of them considered it to be a symbol for students. On the contrary, about 30% of the students held different opin

31、ions. They thought it had an ugly colour and wore uncomfortably. Besides, they thought it unfashionable and had a dull style. 10% had no idea about it. In general, our school uniform is popular with most of the students, but it still needs some improvement.Report on the survey about our school unifo

32、rm Recently, a student made a survey about our school uniform. 60% of them students like the school uniform. They though the school uniforms whose color is good made them look tidy and handsome, and it also tells others that they were students. Besides, wearing it means not following fashion, becaus

33、e everyone is equal. However, 30% of the students are the other way around. In their opinion, it is uncomfortable. What they dont like is that they old-style and the unpleasant color. 10% of the students have no idea about it. All above is about the survey. Everyone has different idea. It is hard to

34、 say who is right.關(guān)于失學(xué)（表原因） Now more and more children in the countryside are out of school. One of the reasons is that their parents havent much money to afford their school. They have to stay at home to earn money to support their families. What a pity! And another reason is that many parents thin

35、k it is useless for girls to study and they would not like them to go to school. On the other hand, some children are not interested in their lessons and would not like to go to school. I think all the children, including girls, should have the right to receive education. We have the duty to lend th

36、em a hand when they are in trouble. All the people should pay attention to the education of children who will play a very important part in the future of our country.網(wǎng)吧 With the development of the Intenet（with結(jié)構(gòu)）, the net bar plays an important role in peoples life. More and more people, especially students, like to go to net bars. They are absorbed in playing video games, making bad friends and having a chat with “Meimei” on the net in the bar. Some students often go on playing late into the night in the net bar （舉例）. As a re