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2、ildren prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 托?？偡种底魑?范文賞析： Before a teenager becomes a young adult and earns their own living, his or her parents must help them to prepare for future life so that they can become totally independent. There must be many ways to help thes

3、e ambitious young people, but in my point of view, part-time jobs should be the most appropriate way to help them. By taking part-time jobs at a young age, the young generation can be incorporated into the society without suffering. 內容 細致條目 段落 此段結構 首段，首句寫了背景，即在年輕人獨立之前，父母務必 幫助他們?yōu)槲磥碜鰷蕚?。之后提出了自己的觀點，認為 6

4、a54fe9c856a561252d36fed By taking part-time jobs, teenagers can appreciate hard working and cherish the money they have made. Therefore, in the future, they are more likely to become hard-working adults and know how to do finance management. Take myself as an example. I used to be very lazy and usua

5、lly wasted my pocket money on useless things. But one summer vacation, I took a part-time job as a tutor. It was not an easy job because the kid I taught was really naughty and the weather was really hot, but finally I got good pay. After that, I did not waste any money, and I knew the value of hard

6、-working. Additionally, by taking some part-time jobs, teenagers will learn some useful 做兼職工作是最適合的一種方式。結果進行解釋，由于年輕人可以不受痛楚進入社會。 此段功能 文章首段給出了背景信息，提出了自己的觀點，即做兼職工作是最適合的一種方式。 內容 細致條目 段落 此段結構 本段承接上文，提出做兼職工作可以幫助年輕人珍惜工作和金錢，因此今后會更加努力工作，懂得管理錢財。然后舉了自己的例子，由于交期的兼職工作，從以前的懶惰、亂花錢變得不亂花錢了，證明白自己的觀點。 此段功能 本段提出第一條分論點，即兼

7、職工作幫助年輕人珍惜工作和金錢，證明白總論點。并用自己的實例證明。 6a54fe9c856a561252d36fed communicating techniques. This is very essential since we all live in a society and we have to communicate with different kinds of people almost every day. One of my friends took a part-time job as a waiter. He had to deal with a lot of diff

8、erent situations and had to cater for different customers. Time passed, he became very good at communicating with different people, but in the past he was really shy and unwilling to speak to strange people! The part-time job helped to lift him to a new height. Moreover, since teenagers accumulate u

9、seful experiences from part-time jobs, they are more likely to gain success in their future career. In addition, sometimes taking part-time jobs may offer teenagers good opportunities. My sister, when she was a junior, took a part-time job in a big company. During that time, her hard work and intell

10、igence impressed her boss. Then her boss gave her an offer and after her graduation, she became one of the employees of the big company. Now she makes a very good living and works happily in this company. Chances are invaluable and we need to find ways to get the chances. 內容 細致條目 段落 此段結構 本段并列上一段，首句提

11、出兼職工作幫助年輕人學習更多的溝通技巧。并舉了自己朋友的做服務員并提高溝通能力的例子，并進行解釋。 此段功能 本段提出了其次條分論點，即兼職工作幫助年輕人學習更多的溝通技巧，并用事例進行證明。 6a54fe9c856a561252d36fed So, to conclude, though there may be other ways, I believe that taking part-time jobs will be the best way to prepare a teenager to be an ambitious adult. Parents who plan to hel

12、p their teenagers prepare for future life can take part-time jobs into consideration. 托福作文總分值要素剖析: 一、 語言表達 本文長短句結合，錯落有致，流暢自然。亮點在于對每個具體事例的分析。使用了多種手法進行分析，例如假設推理、因果推理等等，對事例分析的十分到位。而的 內容 細致條目 段落 此段結構 本段并列前兩段，首先提出了兼職工作的好處，即能夠積累閱歷，獲得成功。然后繼續(xù)寫了另一條好處，即為年輕人提出了更好的機遇。然后舉了自己妹妹在公司工作的例子，并進行解釋。 此段功能 本段并列前兩段，繼續(xù)提出做兼職

13、工作的好處，并用事例進行證明。 內容 細致條目 段落 此段結構 本段是文章的總結段。首先總結觀點，做兼職工作是幫 助年輕人的最好的方式。然后提出提議，家長應當幫助 孩子找兼職工作。 此段功能 總結重申了文章的觀點，并提出提議。 6a54fe9c856a561252d36fed 用詞較為普通，確切合理即可。 1. Moreover, since teenagers accumulate useful experiences from part-time jobs, they are more likely to gain success in their future career. Accumulate 和Gain 兩個動詞用的十分精彩。確切的動賓搭配一定會是托福考試中的加分要素之一。 2. The part-time job helped to lift him to a new height. Lift sb to a new light 把 誰帶到了新的高度。是值得借鑒的短語。 二、 規(guī)律結構 本段采用了總分總的