【公開課課件】高中英語讀后續(xù)寫（整合）

1、讀后續(xù)寫一、考綱摘錄一、考綱摘錄 第二節(jié)：滿分第二節(jié)：滿分25分。分。 提供一段提供一段350詞左右的語言材料，詞左右的語言材料，要求考生要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給、所給段段落開頭語落開頭語和和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵詞所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵詞進行續(xù)寫進行續(xù)寫(150詞左右詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文整的短文。閱卷時將主要考慮以下。閱卷時將主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：內(nèi)容： (1)與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接銜接程度程度; (2)內(nèi)容內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所給關(guān)鍵詞語所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況； (3)應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的

2、豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性; (4)上下文的連貫性連貫性。 二、浙江近年考情表解二、浙江近年考情表解 三、命題揭秘三、命題揭秘 要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基礎(chǔ)上，充分調(diào)動想象創(chuàng)新思維，大膽預(yù)測文章缺失部分的內(nèi)容走勢，進行充滿個性色彩的設(shè)計，并用英語進行續(xù)寫表達。所提供短文詞數(shù)在350左右，劃線詞語涉及到名詞(詞組)、動詞(詞組)、介詞(詞組)和形容詞等，其中，以名詞名詞(詞組詞組)為主，在續(xù)寫中至少要使用5個關(guān)鍵詞語， 需要注意：在使用關(guān)鍵詞語時根據(jù)時態(tài)和語態(tài)的需要，可以改變動詞可以改變動詞的形式的形式，可以改變名詞的單復(fù)數(shù)可以改變名詞的單復(fù)數(shù)，但不要改變關(guān)鍵詞語在原文中的含但不要改變關(guān)鍵詞語在原文中

3、的含義和詞性義和詞性；多以記敘文故事類文章記敘文故事類文章或者夾敘夾議類文章夾敘夾議類文章為主，故事情節(jié)有曲折、有起伏，但故事線索的邏輯性比較強。 1.創(chuàng)造性：創(chuàng)造性：即發(fā)揮想象力，該題型具有一定的開放性，考生需用自己的語言對故事情節(jié)進行內(nèi)容創(chuàng)造； 2.邏輯性：邏輯性：即根據(jù)已提供的關(guān)鍵信息，按照可能的合理的方向續(xù)寫，使文章邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)完整； 3.豐富性：豐富性：即語言能力的充分體現(xiàn)，詞匯句法的準(zhǔn)確與復(fù)雜程度，細節(jié)描寫的生動性等都將讓故事更加立體飽滿。 四、評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)四、評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn) A. 評分原則評分原則 1. 本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。 2. 評分時，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所

4、屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。 3. 詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分。 4. 評分時，應(yīng)主要從以下四個方面考慮： (1) 與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度； (2) 內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞語的應(yīng)用情況； (3) 應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性； (4) 上下文的連貫性。 5. 拼寫與標(biāo)點符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。 6. 如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個檔次。 B. 各各檔次的給分范圍和檔次的給分范圍和要求要求 五、注意事項五、注意事項 讀后續(xù)寫題與其他寫作題的最大讀后續(xù)寫題與其他寫作題的最大不同之

5、處在于，其答題形式是不同之處在于，其答題形式是根據(jù)根據(jù)所給閱讀材料和兩個段落首句（也所給閱讀材料和兩個段落首句（也即主題句）進行續(xù)寫即主題句）進行續(xù)寫。因此，續(xù)寫。因此，續(xù)寫部分必須與閱讀部分保持高度的部分必須與閱讀部分保持高度的“協(xié)同性協(xié)同性”。 協(xié)同性：續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容要與閱讀短協(xié)同性：續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容要與閱讀短文及所給段落首句高度銜接，續(xù)寫文及所給段落首句高度銜接，續(xù)寫內(nèi)容想象豐富，在語言表達上恰當(dāng)，內(nèi)容想象豐富，在語言表達上恰當(dāng)，應(yīng)用較多（應(yīng)用較多（5個以上）短文中標(biāo)有個以上）短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，模仿使用閱讀下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，模仿使用閱讀材料中的詞語和句型較多且使用得材料中的詞語和句型較多

6、且使用得當(dāng)，語言表達準(zhǔn)確流暢，上下文思當(dāng)，語言表達準(zhǔn)確流暢，上下文思路連貫。路連貫。六、課堂訓(xùn)練六、課堂訓(xùn)練 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up（被提及；（被提及；被討論）被討論） and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the

7、 lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but for

8、est and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. Help! No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane

9、was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day （破曉；（破曉；黎明）黎明）, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落）滴落） somewher

10、e at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she p

11、icked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and fla

12、g them if they came back again. 1. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 續(xù)寫步驟： 第一步：審題 1.1.把握內(nèi)容要點把握內(nèi)容要點 劃線詞語：Jane, Tom, lake, walked, climbed, at a distance, stream, to her great joy, helicopter, yellow blouse（摘抄在草稿紙上） 所給首尾句： 1. But no more

13、helicopters came and it was getting dark again. （又一個夜晚） 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. （昨晚得睡著） 2.2.理清寫作思路理清寫作思路 吵架吵架出走出走迷路迷路失聯(lián)失聯(lián)自救自救思念思念尋路尋路直升機直升機獲救獲救/ /？ 段1首句dark again：Jane又得在荒野度過黑夜?？煽紤]描寫環(huán)境及Jane的心理活動，如后悔？想念？期待？堅持？夜里會不會遇到野獸？這一夜又是怎么度過的？ 段2首句woke up：上段應(yīng)有Jane入睡的情節(jié)。醒來后發(fā)生什么？自救成功還是被人所救？抑或遇難？直升機有無再

14、回來并發(fā)現(xiàn)她？3.3.根據(jù)要點回想備用詞匯：根據(jù)要點回想備用詞匯：環(huán)境：環(huán)境：forest, rock, valley, cave, waterfall 困難：困難：hungry, thirsty, injure, broken, blood, panic, suffer, cold活動：活動：fall, crawl（爬行，緩慢行（爬行，緩慢行進）進）, taste, attempt, make ones way to, pick up情緒：情緒：break down（情不自禁地（情不自禁地哭起來，被搞垮；垮掉）哭起來，被搞垮；垮掉）, depress救援：救援：rescue team, do

15、ctor, search for, spot 品質(zhì)：品質(zhì)：calm, courage, will評價：評價：amazing, make it（幸免于（幸免于難；渡過難關(guān)）難；渡過難關(guān)） 第二步：起草第二步：起草（寫（寫） 列出每段要續(xù)寫的要點（可先寫出一些關(guān)鍵詞，盡量包括閱讀短文中劃線的詞語），然后拓展拓展成幾個支撐句。 擬寫時，注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性，語言的豐富性，并通過正確使用句與句之間過渡詞語使文句連貫。（鼓勵使用短文中句式） 第三步：起草第三步：起草/ /段落寫作段落寫作 一個完整的段落通常由三部分組成：主題句、拓展句拓展句和總結(jié)句。 每個段落的這三部分內(nèi)容只為同一個主題服務(wù)，不同的主題

16、應(yīng)放在不同的段落中表達。tip:把10個劃線詞語抄錄在草稿旁邊段落的拓展： （1 1）舉例舉例/ /列舉法列舉法 （2 2）時空順序法時空順序法 （3 3）因果分析法因果分析法 （4 4）比較對照法比較對照法 （5 5）分類陳述法分類陳述法 確保語言連貫流暢的手段：啟啟用于引出主題句或擴展句用于引出主題句或擴展句 表表“首先首先”：first，at first，first of all，firstly，in the first place，in the beginning，to begin with，to start with 表表“最近、現(xiàn)在最近、現(xiàn)在”：at present，current

17、ly，lately，recently，presently 表表“總說總說”：generally，generally speaking 其他：其他： it is clear that ， it is self-evident（顯而易見的；不（顯而易見的；不言而喻的；明擺著的）言而喻的；明擺著的）that，there is no doubt that ， there is some evidence that 確保語言連貫流暢的手段：承承用于承接主題句或擴展句用于承接主題句或擴展句 表表“遞進遞進”：also，besides，furthermore，in addition，in addition

18、to，moreover，the most important，whats more 表表“事實、無疑、肯定事實、無疑、肯定”：as a matter of fact，in effect，in fact，indeed，no doubt，certainly，truly 表表“舉例舉例”：for example，for instance，such as，takefor example，especially，in particular “同義復(fù)述同義復(fù)述”：or，namely，in other words，that is to say, ，likewise（同樣地；類似地），（同樣地；類似地），in

19、the same way，similarly 其他：其他：at the same time，consequently，from now on，so，soon，second/ secondly，there are many reasons why確保語言連貫流暢的手段：轉(zhuǎn)轉(zhuǎn)用于表達語氣的轉(zhuǎn)折用于表達語氣的轉(zhuǎn)折 表表“讓步讓步”：although，despite，in spite of，nevertheless，regardless of 表表“轉(zhuǎn)折轉(zhuǎn)折”：but，however，yet，whereas （用以比較或?qū)Ρ葍蓚€事（用以比較或?qū)Ρ葍蓚€事實）然而，但是，盡管實）然而，但是，盡管，whil

20、e 表表“相反、相對相反、相對”：as opposed to，conversely (knv:sli相反地；反過相反地；反過來來)，in opposition to，instead of，on the contrary，on the other hand 表表“不同、區(qū)別不同、區(qū)別”：otherwise，unlike，the differences are as follows 其他：其他：luckily，fortunately，unfortunately確保語言連貫流暢的手段：合合用于總結(jié)、歸納，表示段落的結(jié)束用于總結(jié)、歸納，表示段落的結(jié)束 表表“總括總括”：in all，in conclu

21、sion，in sum，in summary，to sum up，to summarize 表表“簡而言之簡而言之”：in brief，briefly，in a word，in short， 表表“結(jié)果結(jié)果”：as a result，as a consequence，in consequence，consequently，so，hence，therefore，thus，accordingly 表表“最后陳詞最后陳詞”：at last，at length，finally，last，lastly，in the last place第四步：修改（寫） A CHECKLIST:要點有無遺漏，要點有無遺

22、漏，時態(tài)是否一致，時態(tài)是否一致，主謂是否一致，主謂是否一致，文理是否連貫文理是否連貫，句型有無變化，句型有無變化，詞數(shù)是否符合要求詞數(shù)是否符合要求，） 拼寫、標(biāo)點符號是否有誤等。拼寫、標(biāo)點符號是否有誤等。要敢于創(chuàng)新，用更精彩的詞、要敢于創(chuàng)新，用更精彩的詞、句替換平淡的詞、句，特別注句替換平淡的詞、句，特別注意開頭、結(jié)尾的精彩度，創(chuàng)造意開頭、結(jié)尾的精彩度，創(chuàng)造亮點。亮點。第五步：謄抄務(wù)必做到書寫規(guī)范，保持卷面整潔。務(wù)必做到書寫規(guī)范，保持卷面整潔。用用下劃線標(biāo)出所用短文中標(biāo)下劃線下劃線標(biāo)出所用短文中標(biāo)下劃線的詞語。的詞語。Paragraph 1: But no more helicopters c

23、ame and it was getting dark again. Jane had to stay alone in the forest for another cold night. Although she felt a little sad, she didnt get fearful. She thought about Tom. “He must have called for those helicopters. Maybe he was in one of them and will come back again! I have to guide him tomorrow

24、.” She fell asleep and dreamed of seeing Tom. Paragraph 2: It was day break when Jane woke up. She ate some berries and then walked along the stream, hoping to find a suitable place to guide the helicopter. Fortunately, she saw a huge flat rock in an open area at a distance. She rushed to the rock,

25、climbed onto it and waited. To her great joy, the helicopter appeared again. The nearer it got, the more she flagged the yellow blouse. Luckily, the helicopter didnt miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rock slowly. Tom jumped off the helicopter and ran towards Jane. She broke down（情不自禁地哭起

26、來）（情不自禁地哭起來）and burst into tears.閱讀部分：續(xù)寫部分：introductionplot 1paragraph 1: plot n+1paragraph 2: plot n+2 + conclusionplot nplot 讀后續(xù)寫路線圖：1It had been a year since Susan, thirty-four, became blind. As the result of a medical accident she was sightless, suddenly thrown into a world of darkness, anger, f

27、rustration and self-pity. Once an independent woman, Susan now became a powerless（無能為力的）（無能為力的）, helpless（無自理能力的；不能自立的；無助的）（無自理能力的；不能自立的；無助的）burden on everyone around her. No matter how much she cried or prayed, she knew the painful truth that her sight was never going to return. All she had to clin

28、g to (尤指情感上尤指情感上)依戀，依戀，依附依附 was her husband Mark. Mark was an Air Force officer and he loved Susan with all his heart. When she first lost her sight, he watched her sink into despair dspe(r) and he became determined to use every means possible to help his wife. Finally, Susan felt ready to return to

29、 her job, but how would she get there? She used to take the bus, but she was now too frightened to get around the city by herself. Mark volunteered to ride the bus with Susan each morning and evening until she got the hang of (掌握掌握的要的要領(lǐng)；了解領(lǐng)；了解的用法；找到了訣竅的用法；找到了訣竅) it. And that is exactly what happened

30、.For two weeks, Mark, military uniform and all (一身戎裝一身戎裝), accompanied Susan to and from work each day. He taught her how to rely on her other senses, specifically her hearing, to determine where she was and how to adapt to her new environment. He helped her befriend 做（尤指需要幫助者）的朋友；友善對做（尤指需要幫助者）的朋友；友

31、善對待待 the bus drivers who could watch out for (密切注意；留意密切注意；留意) her, and save her a seat.Each morning they made the journey together, and Mark would take a taxi back to his office. Although that meant he had to travel through the city and the routine was costly and exhausting gz:st , Mark knew it was

32、only a matter of time before Susan would be able to ride the bus on her own. He believed in her.Finally, Susan decided that she was ready to try the trip on her own. Monday morning arrived. Before she left, she embracedimbreist her husband tightly, her eyes filled with tears of gratitude for his loy

33、alty, his patience, and his love. She felt she was so lucky for he had given her a gift more powerful than sight.1. She said goodbye and, for the first time, they went their separate ways. 2. On Friday morning, as Susan was stepping onto the bus as usual, the driver said, “Miss, I sure envy you.” Cu

34、rious, Susan asked the driver why. Paragraph 1:She said goodbye and, for the first time, they went their separate ways. She made her way carefully up the steps with the white cane(手杖手杖). She paid the driver and then, using her hands to feel the location of the seats, settled into安頓下來；習(xí)慣于（新安頓下來；習(xí)慣于（新

35、居）；適應(yīng)（新工作）居）；適應(yīng)（新工作） one. She placed her briefcase on her lap and rested her cane against her leg. Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday ., each day everything on her own went perfectly. She was doing it!Paragraph 2: On Friday morning, as Susan was stepping onto the bus as usual, the driver said, “Mi

36、ss, I sure envy you.” Curious, Susan asked the driver why.“You know, every morning for the past week, a fine looking gentleman in a military uniform has been standing across the corner watching you when you get off the bus. He makes sure you cross the street safely and he watches you until you enter

37、 your office building. You are one lucky lady,” the bus driver said. When she knew the fact, tears poured down Susans cheeks, tears full of gratitude and happiness as well. Susan knew that she wouldnt have made such great progress without Marks help. Its Marks love that brought light into darkness.2

38、 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young

39、man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur said. “Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you

40、re sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”“No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.” The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the fir

41、st suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (搶劫搶劫)! Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to