讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)-發(fā)型藏+“魔力”開(kāi)啟美麗蛻變+講義 高一上學(xué)期期末英語(yǔ)試題

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。OldJimwaswithoutdoubtthebesthairstylistI’deverknown.Hedesignedeveryhaircutsoartisticallythatitwouldbeanunderstatementtosaythemagicscreatedbyhimwere“beautiful”.Buttherewasonestrangethingabouthisshop:therewasnomirrorinit,socustomerswerekeptinsuspenseuntiltheyreachedhome.IenteredOldJim’shairdresser’s,sadanddisappointed,havingjustbeenrejectedaroleintheschoolplay.Iwasordinary-lookingandboring,andthat’swhytheydidn’twantme—Iwasconvinced.“Iwanttobebeautiful,”IsaidtoOldJim,tearsalmostdropping.Afterhavingahaircut,Ithankedhimagainandwalkedoutthroughthedoor,hiswordsremaininginmyhead:“There’smagicinyournewhair.Nowstartyourjourneytobeauty.”SunlightdroppeddownthroughtheoverlappingleavesabovemyheadasIwalkedonthestreet.Ishookmyheadbutdidn’tfeeladifference.Icouldonlyslightlyfeelthatsomethingwasdifferent,likealittlevoicethathadlongbeensuppressedthatdesiredtobeheard.Suddenly,Iheardsomeonecallingouttome.“Susan!Susan”Iturnedaround.ItwasJennifer,themostpopulargirlinthewholeschool.“Itreallyisyou,Susan.Youlookgreattoday!”‘Thanks.”JenniferwaseverythingIwantedtobe.Whatasweetvictorytogetsuchadmirationfromagirllikeher!Wehadaconversationonschoolandpartedatacrossing,wheresheturnedleftandIright.AsIwalked,Icouldseeaboywalkingtowardme.Wewenttothesameschoolbuthadn'ttalkedtoeachothermuch.Ifitweren'tforthenewhair,Iwouldhavelookeddownandpretendednottoseehim.Ihadalwaysbeenshy.Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意本文講述了“我”因長(zhǎng)相普通且無(wú)聊被學(xué)校戲劇拒演后，傷心地去OldJim的理發(fā)店理發(fā)。OldJim的理發(fā)店沒(méi)有鏡子，他告訴“我”新發(fā)型有魔力，能開(kāi)啟“我”的美麗之旅?！拔摇弊咴诮稚?，雖未明顯感覺(jué)到不同，但聽(tīng)到受歡迎的女孩Jennifer夸贊自己，還與平時(shí)沒(méi)怎么交流過(guò)的同校男孩進(jìn)行了交談。故事山分析開(kāi)端：“我”因長(zhǎng)相被學(xué)校戲劇拒演，心情低落，來(lái)到OldJim的理發(fā)店，希望變得美麗。發(fā)展：OldJim給“我”剪發(fā)，說(shuō)新發(fā)型有魔力，“我”走在街上，先后得到Jennifer的夸贊和與同校男孩交談的機(jī)會(huì)。高潮：續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段中，“我”打算驗(yàn)證OldJim所說(shuō)的魔力，與男孩交流。結(jié)局：續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段中，“我”急切回家照鏡子，看到新發(fā)型后的反應(yīng)以及對(duì)整個(gè)事件的感悟。伏筆以及在續(xù)寫(xiě)中的回應(yīng)伏筆：OldJim說(shuō)新發(fā)型有魔力，開(kāi)啟美麗之旅。回應(yīng)：在續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段中，“我”打算驗(yàn)證這個(gè)魔力，主動(dòng)與男孩交流；第二段中，“我”急切回家看發(fā)型，期待看到美麗的自己。伏筆：理發(fā)店沒(méi)有鏡子，顧客回家才知道發(fā)型樣子?；貞?yīng)：在第二段中，“我”迫切回家，就是為了通過(guò)鏡子看到自己的新發(fā)型。伏筆：“我”因長(zhǎng)相普通被拒演，渴望變美?；貞?yīng)：在第一段中，“我”主動(dòng)交流，希望新發(fā)型帶來(lái)改變，變得更有魅力；第二段中，看到鏡子里的自己，思考美與自信的關(guān)系。伏筆：“我”很害羞，平時(shí)不怎么和男孩交流?；貞?yīng)：第一段中，“我”決定改變，主動(dòng)和男孩打招呼，開(kāi)啟對(duì)話(huà)，體現(xiàn)新發(fā)型帶來(lái)的勇氣。伏筆：“我”走在街上，感覺(jué)有變化，像被壓抑的聲音想被聽(tīng)到?；貞?yīng)：第一段中，“我”主動(dòng)交流，讓內(nèi)心渴望改變的聲音得以釋放；第二段中，通過(guò)鏡子看到自己，意識(shí)到內(nèi)心改變才是真正的美。續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)第一段：“我”打算驗(yàn)證OldJim所說(shuō)的魔力，于是鼓起勇氣，微笑著主動(dòng)向男孩打招呼，與他自然地展開(kāi)對(duì)話(huà)。在交流中，男孩對(duì)“我”的新發(fā)型和狀態(tài)表示夸贊，這讓“我”更加自信，深刻感受到新發(fā)型似乎真的帶來(lái)了神奇的變化。第二段：看到家后，“我”急切地沖回家，迅速跑到房間照鏡子。然而，鏡子里的自己似乎沒(méi)有太大變化，但回想起一路上他人的夸贊和自己的自信表現(xiàn)，“我”意識(shí)到真正的美源于內(nèi)心的自信，而不是外在的發(fā)型，從而獲得了成長(zhǎng)和感悟。情感線(xiàn)起初，“我”因被拒演而傷心失望，極度渴望變美。在OldJim的鼓勵(lì)下，“我”帶著期待走在街上。得到Jennifer的夸贊后，“我”有了一絲喜悅和自信。決定驗(yàn)證魔力與男孩交流時(shí)，緊張又期待。男孩的夸贊讓“我”更加自信。急切回家照鏡子時(shí)，從期待到有些許失落，最后通過(guò)反思獲得成長(zhǎng)，明白自信才是美的關(guān)鍵，情緒從低谷逐漸走向積極。故事線(xiàn)“我”因長(zhǎng)相被學(xué)校戲劇拒演，心情低落?！拔摇钡絆ldJim的理發(fā)店剪發(fā)，他說(shuō)新發(fā)型有魔力?！拔摇弊咴诮稚?，得到Jennifer的夸贊?！拔摇贝蛩泸?yàn)證魔力，主動(dòng)與男孩交流?！拔摇奔鼻谢丶艺甄R子?！拔摇蓖ㄟ^(guò)反思明白美與自信的關(guān)系。主旨升華句Truebeautydoesn'tlieinaperfectappearancebutintheconfidencethatradiatesfromwithin.AsIlookedinthemirror,Irealizedthatitwasn'tthehaircutthatmademebeautiful,butthenew-foundcourageandself-belief.Thisexperiencetaughtmethatbeautyisnotjustskin-deep;it'stheresultofembracingoneselfandshowingkindnessandconfidencetotheworld.Themagicofthehaircutwasn'tinitsphysicalappearance,butinthewayitempoweredmetobreakfreefrommyshynessanddiscovermytrueself.Itwasajourneyofself-discoverythatmademeunderstandthatrealbeautycomesfromapositiveattitudeandthecouragetobewhoweare.寫(xiě)作示范一Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Summoningupallmycourage,Iputonabigsmileandsaidhellototheboy.Helookedabitsurprisedatfirst,butthenreturnedmygreetingwarmly.Westartedchattingaboutourclassesandtheupcomingschoolevents.Tomydelight,hepraisedmynewlook,sayingthatIseemedmoreenergeticandcharming.Hiswordsmademyheartflutterwithexcitement.Ifoundmyselftalkingmorefreelythaneverbefore,andtheshynessthatusuallyheldmebackseemedtohavevanishedcompletely.Thissimpleconversationmademefeellikeawholenewperson,andIbegantobelievethattherereallywassomemagicinmynewhair.Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.AssoonasIrushedthroughthedoor,Idashedstraighttomyroomandstoodinfrontofthemirror.Tomysurprise,Ididn'tseeacompletelytransformedface.Myfeatureswerestillthesame,buttherewassomethingdifferent.IrecalledthekindwordsfromJenniferandtheboy,andrealizedthattherealmagicwasn'tinthehaircutitself,butintheconfidenceithadgivenme.Truebeauty,Iunderstood,camefromwithin.ItwasthecouragetobemyselfandthebeliefthatIwasworthy,andthatwasthemostpreciousmagicofall.寫(xiě)作示范二Paragraph1:Butatthatpoint,IintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Takingadeepbreath,Iwalkeduptotheboyandsaid,“Hi,it'saniceday,isn'tit?”Helookedup,asmilespreadingacrosshisface,andreplied,“Yes,itis.Yournewhairstylesuitsyouverywell.Youlookreallygreattoday.”Hiscomplimentmademeblushwithpleasure.Wetalkedaboutourhobbiesandsharedsomefunnystories.Iwasamazedathoweasilythewordsflowedfrommymouth.Ihadalwaysbeensoshyaroundboys,butnow,withthisnew-foundconfidence,Iwasabletohaveawonderfulconversation.ItseemedthatOldJim'smagicwasindeedworking.Paragraph2:Atthesightofhome,Istartedtogofaster,desperatetoseemynewhairinthemirrorinmyroom.Finally,Istoodinfrontofthemirror,myheartpoundingwithanticipation.Istaredatmyreflection,searchingforthemagicthathadmadesuchadifferenceinmyday.Atfirstglance,Ididn'tnoticeanydramaticchange.ButasIthoughtbackontheday,onthefriendlyinteractionsandthenew-foundcourage,Irealizedthattherealtransformationwasinsideme.Thehaircutwasjustacatalyst.Itwasmynew-foundconfidencethathadmademebeautiful,andIknewthatthisnewmewouldshinebrightly,nomatterwhat.【答案】Paragraph1:ButatthatpointIintendedtotestoutOldJim’smagic.Iwavedattheboywithbutterfliesinmystomach.Hearingmygreeting,hewavedback,aslightlysurprisedsmilecrossinghislips.Wecontinuedourconversationonourseparateways.Itallhappenedsonaturally,withoutanyoftheawkwardnessthatusuallyaccompani