讀后續(xù)寫-玫瑰綻放的母愛與覺醒+講義-2024屆河南省三門峽市高三上學期第一次大練習英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tomwasworkinginabigcompany.Hehadbeenontheroadvisitingpeopleformorethanamonthwithoutgoinghome.Hecouldn’twaittogetbacktoseehiswifeandchildren.ItwascominguponMother’sDay,andheusuallytriedtomakeit“backhome”,butthisyearhewasjusttoobusyandtootired.Thedaywhenhewasdrivinginasmalltown,hesawaflowershop.Hesaidtohimself,“IknowwhatIwilldo.I’llsendmymothersomeroses.”Hestoppedandwentintotheflowershopandsawayoungboytalkingtothegirlinit.“HowmanyrosescanIgetforfivedollars,Ms.?”theboyasked.Thegirlwastryingtoexplainthatroseswereexpensive.Maybetheyoungboywouldbehappywithsomethingelse.“No,Ihavetohaveroses,”hesaid,“Mymumwasbadlysicklastyearandthereisn’tmuchtimeleftforher.Iwanttogetsomethingspecial.Ithastoberedroses,becausethatisherfavorite.”Hewasstubborn.ThegirlintheshoplookedupatTomandwasjustshakingherhead.SomethinginsideofTomwastouchedbytheboy’svoice.Hewantedtogetthoserosessobadly.Tomhadbeenblessedinhisbusiness,andhelookedatthegirlandsilentlysaidthathewouldpayfortheboy’sroses.Thegirllookedattheyoungmanandsaid,“OK,Iwillgiveyouadozenredrosesforyourdollars.”Theyoungboyalmostjumpedintotheair.Hetooktheflowersandrandownthestore.Itwasworthmorethanfiftydollarsjusttoseethatkindofexcitement.Tomorderedhisownflowersandaskedthegirltohaveitdeliveredtohismother.Afterthat,withareliefhedrovedowntheroad.Notlongafterhisdriving,hesawtheboywalkingtoahospitalnearby.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Tomstoppedhiscarandfollowedtheyoungboy.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Tomwentintothecarwithadeepsenseofshame._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、文章大意Tom是一位忙碌的公司職員，在外奔波一個多月未歸家，臨近母親節(jié)，雖疲憊不堪但仍想給母親送花表心意。在花店，他遇到執(zhí)著要買紅玫瑰送瀕危母親的小男孩，男孩的赤誠觸動了Tom，他暗中為男孩付了款。之后Tom繼續(xù)行程，途中見男孩走向醫(yī)院，故事在此轉(zhuǎn)折，引發(fā)讀者好奇后續(xù)發(fā)展，展現(xiàn)出親情在不同人身上的呈現(xiàn)以及對Tom的觸動，突出忙碌生活與珍視親情間的矛盾與抉擇。二、伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)伏筆：Tom忙碌一個多月未回家，暗示他對家人陪伴的缺失，可能影響親情維系?；貞?yīng)：看到男孩為母親全力付出后，Tom深感羞愧，反思自己并立即給母親打電話，意識到家庭至上，彌補之前疏忽。伏筆：小男孩執(zhí)著強調(diào)必須買紅玫瑰，因這是母親最愛，鋪墊母親在他心中無可替代地位?；貞?yīng)：男孩進醫(yī)院后輕柔將花放母親床邊、深情低語祝福，印證他對母親深沉眷戀，與前文執(zhí)著呼應(yīng)。伏筆：Tom事業(yè)順遂，經(jīng)濟寬裕，從他愿為男孩付高價玫瑰款可看出，為后文他對物質(zhì)與親情思考做準備?；貞?yīng)：目睹男孩用微薄金錢表達厚重親情，Tom內(nèi)心震動，領(lǐng)悟親情不能用金錢衡量，珍視家人陪伴。伏筆：臨近母親節(jié)，Tom本想回家卻因忙碌疲憊放棄，突顯他在工作與親情間兩難。回應(yīng)：受男孩觸動，他雖未即刻回家，但電話中真摯致歉、承諾看望，重新平衡二者關(guān)系，偏向親情。伏筆：女孩告知男孩玫瑰昂貴，試圖勸換其他花，側(cè)面烘托男孩決心，也為Tom介入鋪墊?；貞?yīng)：Tom因男孩決心被打動，助其達成心愿，后續(xù)跟進見證男孩心意傳遞，完成情感觸動鏈條。三、續(xù)寫要點（一）第一段續(xù)寫情感線：從好奇跟蹤的疑惑，到目睹男孩獻花時的感動，內(nèi)心被男孩純粹的愛深深觸動。故事線：Tom停車跟蹤男孩至醫(yī)院，悄悄觀察男孩走進病房，輕柔擺放玫瑰、呢喃祝福，Tom眼眶濕潤，為男孩的深情動容。（二）第二段續(xù)寫情感線：從深深的羞愧，到反思后的懊悔，最終堅定決心珍視親情，完成情感升華。故事線：Tom滿懷羞愧回車，回想男孩舉動反思自身，拿起手機撥通母親電話，誠摯致歉、承諾陪伴，完成心態(tài)轉(zhuǎn)變。四、主旨升華句Inthehustleandbustleoflife,it’sthesimpleactsoflovethattrulymatter,notthesizeofourwallets.（在忙碌的生活中，真正重要的是那些簡單的愛的舉動，而不是錢包的厚度。）Familyisthecompassthatguidesusthroughlife’smaze,andweshouldneverloseourway.（家庭是指引我們穿越生活迷宮的指南針，我們永遠不應(yīng)迷失方向。）Truewealthliesnotinmaterialpossessions,butinthedepthofourconnectionswithlovedones.（真正的財富不在于物質(zhì)財富，而在于我們與所愛之人聯(lián)系的深度。）Nomatterhowbusyweare,amomentofloveandcareforourfamilycanlightupthedarkestdays.（無論我們有多忙，對家人的一刻關(guān)愛都能照亮最黑暗的日子。）Themostpreciousgiftsarenotboughtwithmoney,butgivenfromtheheart,likeachild’sloveforhismother.（最珍貴的禮物不是用金錢買來的，而是發(fā)自內(nèi)心給予的，就像孩子對母親的愛。）寫作示范1

Tomstoppedhiscarandfollowedtheyoungboy.Hisstepswereslowandcautious,asiftreadingonthedelicatestrandsofthemoment.Asheenteredthehospital,thesterilesmellhithim,buthisfocusremainedontheboy.Hewatched,heartpounding,astheboyenteredadimlylitroom.There,besideapaleandwitheredwoman,theboycarefullyplacedtheroses,hissmallhandstremblingslightly.“HappyMother’sDay,Mum,”hewhispered,voicechokedwithemotion.Tom’seyesmistedover,seeingsuchrawandpurelove.Inthatmoment,hefeltapangofsomethinghehadn’tfeltinalongtime–aprofoundconnectiontotheessenceoffamily.

Tomwentintothecarwithadeepsenseofshame.Theenginehummedquietly,buthismindwasastormofself-reproach.Hethoughtofallthemisseddinners,theunreturnedcalls,andtheemptypromises.Ashegrippedthesteeringwheel,hisknucklesturnedwhite.Then,withashakyhand,hepickeduphisphoneanddialedhismother’snumber.Whensheanswered,hecouldbarelyholdbackthetears.“Mom,Iloveyou.I’msorryImightnotmakeithomethisMother’sDay,butI’vesentyousomeflowers.Ipromisetoseeyousoon.”Hisvoicecrackedwithemotion.Fromthatdayon,hevowednevertoletworkdulltheshineofhisfamily’sloveagain.寫作示范2Tomstoppedhiscarandfollowedtheyoungboy.Curiosityandastrangesenseofconnectiondrovehim.Hewatchedastheboyenteredthehospitalandmadehiswaytoaroomonthesecondfloor.Peekingthroughthedoor,Tomsawtheboygentlyplacetherosesbesideafrail,sleepingwoman.Tearswelledupinhiseyesashewhispered,“HappyMother’sDay,Mum.”Tom’sheartclenched.Herehewas,agrownmanwho’dalmostmissedMother’sDayduetowork,whilethisyoungboy,withsolittle,wasgivinghisall.Tomwentintothecarwithadeepsenseofshame.Hethoughtabouthisownmother,whomustbewaitingeagerlyforhiscallorvisit.Theimageoftheboy’sdevotionkeptreplayinginhismind.Herealizedthatnomatterhowbusyhewas,familyshouldalwayscomefirst.Tompickeduphisphoneanddialedhismother’snumber.Whensheanswered,hesaid,“Mom,Iloveyou.I’msorryImightnotmakeithomethisMother’sDay,butI’vesentyousomeflowers.Ipromisetoseeyousoon.”Hisvoicechokedwithemotion.Fromthatdayon,hevowednevertoletworkovershadowhisfamilyagain.【答案】Onepossibleversion:Tomstoppedhiscarandfollowedtheyoungboy.ThemomentTomwentintothehospitalroom,hesawawomanlyingonthebedunconscious.Theboyheldtheflowerstightlyandsobbed,“Dearmum,Iloveyou.Ibringyourfavoriteroses.ButnowhowIregretIdidn’ttellyouIloveyousomuch.”Tomcameupand