高考英語讀后續(xù)寫專題之個人成長類滑冰場上的挫折：夢想與失敗交織的時刻講義

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Thatday,Iwasgoingtoskateacleanfreestyleprogramforthefirsttimeinayear.Ideterminedtolandtheaxel(前外一周半跳)incompetition.“Icanmakeit!”IthoughtasIskatedtothecenterice.Whenmymusicsounded,Istartedmyprogramwithacircularstepandabrightsmile,followedbyabeautifulcombinationspin.Flyingcamel,sitspin,laybackspin.Perfection.Thejump!Theaxel!IcoulddoitwhenIpracticedoff-ice,butI’donlylandediton-iceapproximatelyfourteentimesinmyentirelife.SoIwasalittlenervous.I’dleaveitoutifIcould,butmyOlympicdreamsdependedonit.Mycoach,Geena,putitearlyinmyprogramsoIcoulddoitwhilemylegswerenottired.Takingadeepbreath,“Icansucceed!”Ithought.Iwasontherightbackoutsideedgeofmyskateblade(冰刀),readytoturnforwardandlaunchintotheaxel.Mynerveswereback,workingagainstme.“Icandothis!”Ithought.IsteppedintotakeoffandIdid…awaltzjump(半周跳).ItisajumpI’dbeendoingsinceIwasprettyyoung.Itisonlyone-halfarotation(旋轉(zhuǎn))insteadoftheoneandone-halfthatIneedfortheaxel.IglimpsedCoachGeena’squestioningeyebrowasIglidedpastthedoorandimaginedthedisappointedlooksonmyparents’faces.“It’snotover,”Ireasonedtomyself,glancingintothebleachers(露天座位).“I’djustreplacethenextjumpwiththeaxel.”However,itdidn’tworkoutthewayI’dhoped.Ifell,andIkeptfalling.Neveronetogiveup,Ireplacedeveryjumpinmyprogramwiththeaxel,butIdidn’tlandone.Ispentsomuchtimeontheicethatit’slikeIwasmakingsuretheicewascleanforthenextskater.Thetwominutes,fifteensecondsofmyprogramfeltlikeanage.BythetimeIwasdone,mydresswassoakedthroughandIwassevensecondsbehindmymusic,soIfinishedskatingtosilence.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。AsIskatedtowardtheexit,Ifelteveryonewaslookingatmewithpity.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Theperformancegoingon,Iroseupfromthebleachers,determinedtogohomebutmyparentsheldmeup.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意我準(zhǔn)備在比賽中完成一次干凈利落的自由滑節(jié)目，尤其是要完成對我的奧運夢想至關(guān)重要的阿克塞爾跳。盡管我在冰下練習(xí)時能完成，但在冰上只成功過14次，所以有些緊張。比賽中，我在做阿克塞爾跳時失誤成了半周跳，之后我試圖在后續(xù)動作中彌補，但一次次摔倒，最終我的節(jié)目超時且表現(xiàn)糟糕，在一片寂靜中結(jié)束了表演。五要素分析人物：“我”、教練吉娜、我的父母和觀眾。時間：比賽期間。地點：滑冰比賽場地。起因：我要在比賽中完成包含阿克塞爾跳的自由滑節(jié)目。經(jīng)過：比賽中阿克塞爾跳失誤，多次嘗試仍失敗，節(jié)目混亂。結(jié)果：節(jié)目以失敗告終。幾處伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)伏筆：我擔(dān)心父母失望和教練的反應(yīng)。回應(yīng)：第一段續(xù)寫中我感受到周圍人的憐憫目光，內(nèi)心痛苦，對應(yīng)之前的擔(dān)憂。伏筆：我對奧運夢想的執(zhí)著和不放棄的精神?；貞?yīng)：第二段續(xù)寫父母和教練的鼓勵，讓我重新振作，為繼續(xù)追求夢想鋪墊。續(xù)寫要點第一段情感線：極度的羞愧、沮喪，感覺自己成為眾人憐憫的對象，對自己的表現(xiàn)深感失望。故事線：描述我在走向出口時承受的心理壓力，周圍人的目光如何加重我的負面情緒。第二段情感線：從低落中得到些許慰藉，感受到來自家人和教練的溫暖與支持。故事線：父母和教練阻止我離開，他們的鼓勵話語和擁抱給我力量。主旨升華句Failureisnottheend,butanewbeginningofthejourneytosuccess.Inthefaceofsetbacks,thesupportoflovedonesisthelightthatguidesusthroughthedarkness.Everystumbleonthepathtoourdreamsisanopportunitytorisestronger.Truechampionsarenotthosewhoneverfall,butthosewhokeepgettingupwithcourage.Thevalueofadreamliesnotonlyinachievingit,butalsointheperseveranceweshowduringthepursuit.寫作示范第一篇AsIskatedtowardtheexit,Ifelteveryonewaslookingatmewithpity.Theirstaresburnedintome,makingmycheeksflushwithhumiliation.Iwantedtodisappear.TheicethatIusuallylovedsomuchnowseemedlikeacruelstageformyfailure.Icouldn'twaittogetawayfromthoseeyes.

Theperformancegoingon,Iroseupfromthebleachers,determinedtogohomebutmyparentsheldmeup.Theytoldmetheysawmyeffortsandthatthiswasjustasmallbump.CoachGeenanodded,sayingthatevenchampionshaveoffdays.Theirwordsstartedtoseepintomyheart,makingmefeelalittlelessaloneinmyfailure.第二篇AsIskatedtowardtheexit,Ifelteveryonewaslookingatmewithpity.Ifeltlikeafallenstar,thespotlightnowanunbearableweight.MyhandstrembledasItriedtoholdbackthetears.Eachstepwasheavy,asiftheicewastryingtoholdmebackinthismomentofshame.

Theperformancegoingon,Iroseupfromthebleachers,determinedtogohomebutmyparentsheldmeup.Theirarmswerelikeasafehaven.Theysaidtheylovedmeregardlessoftheresult.CoachGeenasaidthatfailureisthemotherofsuccess.Theircomfortgavemethestrengthtofacemyfailure.第三篇AsIskatedtowardtheexit,Ifelteveryonewaslookingatmewithpity.Thesilencearoundmewasdeafening,amplifyingmysenseoffailure.Icouldseethedisappointmentintheeyesofsome,anditcutdeeperthananyblade.IfeltlikeIhadletdownthewholeworld.

Theperformancegoingon,Iroseupfromthebleachers,determinedtogohomebutmyparentsheldmeup.Theywhisperedwordsofencouragement,remindingmeofmyjourney.CoachGeena'ssmilewasreassuring.Theymademerealizethatthissetbackwasalesson,nottheendofmydream.參考答案AsIskatedtowardtheexit,Ifelteveryonewaslookingatmewithpity.Theirgazeswerelikesharparrows,piercingthroughmyalreadyshatteredconfidence.Ifeltsosmallanddefeated.Themusicfromtheongoingperformanceseemedtomockmyfailure.Ijustwantedtoescapethisnightmareandhidefromtheworld.Theperformancegoingon,I