高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)救人篇以電梯保險(xiǎn)柜被困語(yǔ)篇為例課件

2024屆高考續(xù)寫(xiě)沖刺—救人篇情節(jié)建構(gòu)2024屆高三英語(yǔ)考前講座2024T8聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)電梯驚魂讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇演練題目回顧人與社會(huì)文本簡(jiǎn)析原文大義：1.

我放學(xué)后坐電梯回公寓，遇到鄰居Mrs.Lim也一起坐電梯；2.

本以為是平淡無(wú)事的一天，誰(shuí)知電梯壞了，飛速下降到5樓，Mrs.Lim歇斯底里，情緒失控；3.

忽然Mrs.Lim呼吸困難，我?guī)兔λ砷_(kāi)衣服領(lǐng)子，等待救援。遇困等待救援人與社會(huì)文本簡(jiǎn)析原文大義：1.

我放學(xué)后坐電梯回公寓，遇到鄰居Mrs.Lim也一起坐電梯；2.

本以為是平淡無(wú)事的一天，誰(shuí)知電梯壞了，飛速下降到5樓，Mrs.Lim歇斯底里，情緒失控；3.

忽然Mrs.Lim呼吸困難，我?guī)兔λ砷_(kāi)衣服領(lǐng)子，等待救援。遇困等待救援Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.情節(jié)構(gòu)思①【銜接1】我被困后的心情②Mrs.Lim相較之前情況好轉(zhuǎn)？更差了？③

我的應(yīng)對(duì)：盡力冷靜下來(lái)，并再次安撫Mrs.Lim。

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我的努力：敲電梯門(mén)/再次按按鈕/喊叫求助⑤【銜接2】有人回應(yīng)，并報(bào)火警；暫無(wú)回應(yīng)，心情再次跌至谷底…Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.情節(jié)構(gòu)思①【銜接3】我的反應(yīng)：激動(dòng)地大聲回應(yīng)②firefighters的回應(yīng)：讓我們保持鎮(zhèn)定+等待救援③Mrs.Lim的反應(yīng)：放松下來(lái)，打起精神，等待破門(mén)④過(guò)了一會(huì)門(mén)終于開(kāi)了，我們也獲救了；感謝救援人員⑤【結(jié)尾】呼應(yīng)原文開(kāi)頭：回想剛剛遭遇的電梯驚魂，珍惜平凡普通的一天。救人篇情節(jié)建構(gòu)語(yǔ)料庫(kù)環(huán)境烘托：Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairof....weighedheavilyonourhearts.Theairgrewstuffy(悶熱的），beadsofsweatdrippingdownourfaces.Thewholehousewasblazingandallhecouldhearwasthecracksoftheburningwood.Healmostchokedtodeathinthethickfumes(煙）.驚險(xiǎn)的心理感受：Whenherealizedtheseriousness/severityofthesituation,hisbloodrancold./hismindalmostwentblank/hisheartflewintoone’smouth/sbbescared/frightened/terrifiedoutofone’swits嚇得魂不附體救援的緊迫感：1.(time來(lái)表現(xiàn)）Wewereracingagainsttime.2.(困在困境中的人的時(shí)間感）Timeseemedtofreezeandeveryminutefeltlikecenturies.求救ringthealarmbuttonand/ofusethebuilt-intelephoneorintercomdial911drumthedoorandscreamatthetopofone’svoicetoattractattentionIpostedmylocationonlineandexplainedwhatIwasgoingthrough,wishingforanyonetocometomyrescue.救援人員到時(shí)情緒轉(zhuǎn)變：Hopeignited,myheartalmostleaptoutofmychest.Oursaviourseventuallyarrived.Thevoicesoftherescuersweresoear-pleasing/soundedlikeanear-catching(動(dòng)聽(tīng)的）note.救援展開(kāi)：1.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheyassessedthesituationandlaunchedtheirrescueworkinanorganizedway.2.NorwoodaswellasherfriendspulledSimmonsoutofthecarandlaidherinasafeplace,alittlefarfromthecar.3.Nervousandanxious,NorwoodstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSimmons.(performCPR)4.Hearingthescreams,Henryrantotheriverside,threwoffhisclothesandjumpedintothewaterwithouthesitation.5.Sbcoveredhisnoseandmouthwithadamptowel,dashedintotheburninghouse,searchedforxxandcarriedhimoutofthehouse.6.NorwoodandherfriendslaidSimmonsonherbackandopenedherairway.Afterwhatseemedtobehalfanhour,Simmonsregainedherconsciousness.(cametolife)7.Eventually,theambulancearrivedandrushedSimmonstothehospital.Whensomebodysawme,somebodyimmediatelycameoverandtookmyhand."Staycalm,"somebodysaid,his/hergentlevoicereassuredme.“Followme,andwe’llgetoutofthistogether.”救援結(jié)果：Whenwewerereleasedfrom...finally,webreathedasighofrelief/weburstintotearsofgratitude/gaveajumpintheair/aheavyloadwastakenoutofourmind/主題：“我”是被困者：感悟

珍惜生命；沉著冷靜；感恩Afterconveyingmysinceregratitudeforwhattheydidforus,Ifeltawarmcurrentrisinginmyheart,knowingtherearesuchselflessguardianangelsaroundus.Itdawnedonmethatweshouldcollectourselvesinthefaceofemergencyandoweourheartygratitudetothosewhocametoourassistance.“我”是施救者：Theboy’snarrowescapewasareminderwhyIchosetoserveinthefiredepartment-toprotectandsavelives,nomatterwhathappened.Thethrillingrescuemissionwouldbeengravedinmyheartforever,whichdisplayedthetruemeaningofbeingafirefighter.Whateverthedangeris,justgoalloutandreachyourhelpinghandreadily.IthoughthadIacceptedtheeasyposition,Iwouldhavebeennothingbutabystander.I’mhappyIdidn’ttaketheeasywayout.Aftertheincident,sbwaspraised/awardedforbraveryandquickaction.Sbwasmodestaboutheractions,butsheknewthatherfirstaidtraining/knowledgehadpreparedherforthatmoment.Itcanmeanthedifferencebetweenlifeanddeath.Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.(環(huán)境描寫(xiě)）Theair-conditioninghaddiedout,andtheliftbecamereallystuffy.Weweresweatingbuckets.IheldMrs.Lim’shandsandcomfortedherencouagingly,reassuringherthattherescuewasboundtocome.Everysecondthatpassedwaspainful.“Heeelllppp!!!”（動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)）Iscreamedatthetopofmylungs,eagertoarrestsomeone’sattention.Awaveofdespairwashedoverme.Inonelasteffort,Itriedbangingonthedoors.Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.范文欣賞Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Helpwasfinallyhere!Thebravefirefighterscrankedthedoorsopenusingtheirtools.Itfeltlikeahundredpoundweightwasliftedoffme.Iletoutasighofreliefwhenthedoorswerefinallyopenedandallthisdramawasover.ThefirefighterspraisedmeforhelpingMrsLim.Mycheekswereflushed(臉紅),andIreturnedtheirpraisewithgratitude.MrsLimthankedmeprofusely(一再感謝)andevengavemeahug.（升華）AsIrecalledtheday’sevents,IwasproudofmyselfforcomfortingMrsLimandkeepingcalmduringanemergency.Ilearntfromthisincidentthatinsteadofbeinghysterical,weshouldkeepcalmandwaitforhelptoarrive.范文欣賞遇險(xiǎn)脫困類(lèi)續(xù)寫(xiě)模版IwasshockedtofindthatIwastrappedin

someplace.(thehouse,thelift,…)Suddenly,Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairof....weighingheavilyonourhearts,Ifeltanxietyandnervousnessgrowinginsideme,butIknewIhadtostaycalmforbothofus(如果前文出現(xiàn)了次要人物).Therealizationdrovemetopluckupmycourageandtookadeepbreathtoyell/wave/crywithallmystrength.(具體的救援過(guò)程）

Thenextfewminutesfeltlikehoursaswewaitedincompletesilence.Hopeignited,myheartalmostleaptoutofmychest.Oursavorseventuallyarrived.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheyassessedthesituationandlaunchedtheirrescueworkinanorganizedway.Whenwewerereleasedfrom...finally,webreathedasighofrelief.Apartfromminoremotionalfatigue/injuries,weweresafeandsound.Afterconveyingmysinceregratitudeforwhattherescuersdidforus,Ifeltawarmcurrentrisinginmyheart,knowingtherearesuchselflessguardianangelsaroundus.2024年名校寫(xiě)作體讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)-受困保險(xiǎn)箱讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇演練語(yǔ)篇演練：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。IworkedatalocalstationoftheBerlinfiredepartment.Wegotanalert(警報(bào))around8:25pmthatFridayandrushedtothefireengine,wheretheprintoutfromthedispatcher(調(diào)度員)saidtherewasanine-year-oldboylockedinasafe.Iaskedmyself:ifitwereasafe,woulditbeairtightIwasawarethatitmightalreadybetoolatebythetimewearrived.Ihadtoplanforabadoutcome.Ontheotherhand,ifwewereintime,howlongwouldittakeustoopenthesafeIknewitwouldbeanincrediblydifficulttask.It’swhatsafesaredesignedfor—nottobeopened.Ittooklessthanfiveminutestoreachtheproperty.WhenIsawawomancryingonthestreet,Iknewthesituationwasserious.Shewastheboy’smotherandsheledusintothebasement.Shetoldustheboywasaliveandwestartedtalkingtohim;hewasverycalm.Weaskedhowithadhappened:duringagameofhideandseekwithhisfive-year-oldbrother,hehadthoughtthesafewouldbeagoodplacetohide.Theboy’sparentshadgotthehousefromhismother’sfather.Theunlockedsafehadbeentherewhentheymovedinandwasinanareatheydidn’tusemuch.Theboy’slittlebrotherhadshutthesafe,then,whenhecouldn’topenitagain.Theonlypersonwhoknewthecombinationwastheboy’slategrandfather.Fromtheoutset,thebiggestprioritywasgettingoxygentotheboy.Wegotoxygenfromthehospital.Theboysaidthathecouldfeelathinstreamofair.Iaskedhisparentsifanyonehadopenedthesafebeforeandtheysaidno.Sowehadtoguessasix-digitcode(密碼).Westartedtypingthemin—butwehadtowait10minutesbetweeneachattemptbeforewecouldtryagain.Soquicklywetriedthemall.Noluck.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1:Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.

Para2:Then,justaswestartedtomakethefirstcut,myworkmatetypedinthecorrectcode.

該文本（前文）主要內(nèi)容：我是消防員，接到了一個(gè)報(bào)警，一個(gè)九歲的男孩被困保險(xiǎn)箱，家里人沒(méi)人知道保險(xiǎn)箱密碼，保險(xiǎn)箱空氣密閉，孩子的生命危在旦夕。從一開(kāi)始，最優(yōu)先考慮的就是給男孩輸氧。我們從醫(yī)院拿了氧氣，男孩說(shuō)他能感覺(jué)到一股稀薄的氣流。我問(wèn)他父母以前有沒(méi)有人打開(kāi)過(guò)保險(xiǎn)箱，他們說(shuō)沒(méi)有。所以我們不得不猜測(cè)一個(gè)六位數(shù)的代碼(密碼)。我們開(kāi)始輸入，但每次輸入之間要等10分鐘才能再次輸入。我們很快就把它們都試了一遍。運(yùn)氣不好，沒(méi)打開(kāi)。段首句1我們完全準(zhǔn)備好了用武力打開(kāi)保險(xiǎn)箱，首先是用鉆頭。Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.段首句2然后，就在我們開(kāi)始第一次切割時(shí)，我的同事輸入了正確的密碼。Then,justaswestartedtomakethefirstcut,myworkmatetypedinthecorrectcode.Para1:Wewerefullypreparedatthispointtoopenthesafebyforce,startingwithadrill.Theoverwhelmingtensionintheairofthebasementweighedheavilyonourhearts.Additionally,theboy'sweakbreathfromthesafebroughtourheartsintoourmouths,whichurgedUStoactquickly."Staybackandyou'llbealright."Icalmedthehelplessboyinacalmingvoice.Sweatsstreamingdownmycheeks,lexaminedthesafecarefully,pointedthedrilltoitsfrontdoorandturnedonthedrill.