題型精析18.讀后續(xù)寫之故事開頭設(shè)計4法

18.讀后續(xù)寫之故事開頭設(shè)計4法【策略突破】突破策略1開頭巧用形容詞/副詞(短語)[真題示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Unexpectedly,Ibeatalotofparticipantsandwonthefirstprize.[典例剖析]根據(jù)該段首句內(nèi)容“幾個星期后,當(dāng)我?guī)缀跬洷荣惖臅r候,傳來了消息?！笨芍?開始可以寫作者得知這個消息時的感受,可以寫興奮、吃驚或意外,本句用了副詞unexpectedly描述當(dāng)時的意外的心情。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·6月卷)IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Excitedandoverjoyed,Irushedintomyroomandlayinbedthinkingabouthowtospendthemoney.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我很驚訝,我爸爸允許我按照我的意愿使用這筆錢。”可知,本段可描寫作者興奮的心情,開始用excitedandoverjoyed準(zhǔn)確地描寫了作者的這種心情。突破策略2開頭巧用非謂語動詞(短語)、with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)或獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)[真題示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Withexcitedtearsinmyeyes,Ithankedhimagain,addingthatitwashewholetmegetatasteforwriting.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“頒獎典禮結(jié)束后,我去了我老師的辦公室。”可知,該段可描寫作者到辦公室感謝老師的表現(xiàn)以及老師的鼓勵,with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和現(xiàn)在分詞短語表示伴隨,增加了文章表達(dá)的簡潔性和語言表達(dá)的豐富性。[真題示例2](2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Droppinghishead,hewasinlowspirits.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我們坐在一起,但大衛(wèi)不看我?！币约吧衔目芍?該段可描寫大衛(wèi)不愿意參加比賽,作者鼓勵大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽,大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過強(qiáng)烈的心理斗爭,最終決定參加比賽,這里開頭用了分詞充當(dāng)時間狀語,不僅使行文簡潔,而且突出動作,惟妙惟肖。突破策略3開頭巧用名詞性從句、狀語從句或定語從句等從句[真題示例1](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.HowIwishedIhadnotactedsofoolishly,makingmyselfalaughingstockofmyfamily![典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我被困了五六分鐘,但感覺要長得多?！笨芍?該段開始可描寫作者是多么后悔把頭插入南瓜中,此處用了感嘆句,且wished后加了賓語從句。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathathecouldcutthepumpkinwithaknife.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我被困了五六分鐘,但感覺要長得多了。”可知,接下來可以寫怎么營救。該句idea后面that引導(dǎo)同位語從句,對idea進(jìn)行解析,同位語使文章更加緊湊,同時增加了文章表達(dá)的高級性。突破策略4開頭巧用倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句等句型[真題示例1](2022·浙江高考·6月卷)Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.NervousasIfelt,Ididmyutmosttokeepmyselfcalmandhandoutthedelicatelywrappedmealtothoseinneed,withmyhandstrembling.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)他們朝我走來的時候,我露出了最燦爛、最幸福的笑容?！笨芍?該段可描寫作者是怎么為無家可歸的人施粥,這里“NervousasIfelt”用了倒裝句,提高了文章表達(dá)的質(zhì)量。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.Itwasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“這段視頻是在萬圣節(jié)前一天發(fā)布的。”可知,該段續(xù)寫開始部分可以補(bǔ)充說明誰發(fā)的,這里用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句,突出發(fā)視頻之人?！绢}型精練】1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。9yearoldIgorlivedinahugeforestinthenorthofRussia.Hisfatherwasawoodcutterandhismotheratailor.Theboylikedplayingwithanimalsintheforest,andknewthenamesofdifferentbirdsandtheirsongs.OnefreezingwinterIgorwasseriouslyillandthedoctorfrombigcitiestoldhisparentsthatonlysurprisecouldsavehim.Lyingalldayinbed,Igoronlywantedhisfathertocatchabirdandplayedwithit.Butinwintertherewerenobirdsintheforest.“Youcouldmakehimabirdoutofwood,”suggestedtheanxiousmother.Thefirstfinishedbirdswerefatandtooheavytofly.Hethrewthemintothefire,headinhands.Itwassnowingheavily,andhereallydidn’tknowwheretofindabird.Thenanideaoccurredtohim,“Thebirdneedstwopiecesofwood.”Eventually,hemadeitandshowedittohiswife.“Beautiful!”shesaid,takinganeedleandsomethread(細(xì)線)andsewingthetwoendstogether,likearealbird.Shetiedalongthreadtothebird’sback.AnditcouldbehungaboveIgor’sbed.Quietly,thewoodcutterhungthebirdabovetheboy’sbed.Atdaybreak,hissonwaswatchingthebirdcarefully.Therewasalightinhiseyesforthefirsttimeinmanyweeks.“Beautiful!”saidIgor.“I’veneverseenitbeforeintheforest.What’sitsname?”“That’sagoodquestion.I’llfindoutandtellyou.”Thenextmorning,whenthefatherenteredIgor’sroom,hefoundtheboysittingupinbed,tryingtotouchthebird.ThelasttimeIgorsatupinbedwasmanyweeksbefore.“What’sitcalled?”theboyasked.“Oh,dear,I’mstillnotsure.”Lateonthatnight,Igor’sfatherwentintohisson’sroomquietlyandmadethethreadalittleshorter.ThenthebirdwashangingalittlehigheraboveIgor’shead.Threedayslater,hefoundIgorkneelingonthebed,tryingtotouchthebird.Hishandwasverynearit.“Haveyoudecidedonthename?”“Notyet.Myson.”hisfatherreplied.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式作答。Paragraph1:Again,atnightthefatherwentintohisson’sroom.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Severaldayslater,Igor’sfatherwascuttingwoodwhenheheardascreamfromthehouse.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Again,atnightthefatherwentintohisson’sroom.SeeingIgorwasasleep,heputthebirdalittlehigherandleft.Tohisjoy,Igorwasabletostandonthebedandnearlytouchthebirdthesecondday.Hewantedtomakeitgoroundinperson.Thewoodcutterencouragedhissontogoontrying,tellinghimitwasnotashighashethought.However,Igorstillwantedtoknowthenameofthebird.Thefathersaidhewastryingtofigureoutthekindofthebird.Severaldayslater,Igor’sfatherwascuttingwoodwhenheheardascreamfromthehouse.Heranquicklytohisson’sbedroom.Hecouldn’tbelievewhathesaw.Igorwasjumpingupanddownexcitedlyonhisbed.Itwasabovehisheadthatthebirdwasgoingroundveryfast.Heshowedoffhisperformancetohisfather.“Pleasetellme,what’sitsname?”“It’scalledthebirdofsurprise,”hisfatherrepliedexcitedly.Andhismother,standingatthedoor,criedtearsofjoytoseeheryoungsonfulloflifeonceagain.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了住在俄羅斯北部森林的9歲男孩伊戈爾病得很重，醫(yī)生告訴他的父母，只有驚喜才能救他。伊戈爾只想讓他的父親抓一只鳥，和它一起玩耍。但是冬天的森林里沒有鳥。父親和母親只能用木頭和針線做了一只假鳥掛于伊戈爾床頭。伊戈爾眼中重燃光芒，對鳥產(chǎn)生濃厚興趣，每天都想要摸它。父親每晚縮短掛鳥的細(xì)線，讓鳥逐漸升高。三天后，伊戈爾跪在床上，手已經(jīng)離鳥很近了。伊戈爾病情已有好轉(zhuǎn)，他想知道鳥的名字。【解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“晚上，父親又一次走進(jìn)兒子的房間?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫父親再次調(diào)高鳥的位置。伊戈爾第二天站了起來，父親十分高興并鼓勵兒子繼續(xù)努力。然而，伊戈爾仍然想知道這只鳥的名字。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“幾天后，伊戈爾的父親正在砍柴，突然聽到房子里傳來一聲尖叫。”可知，第二段可描寫父親發(fā)現(xiàn)伊戈爾在床上跳上跳下，完全康復(fù)。父親激動萬分并給木鳥取名“驚喜鳥”。2.續(xù)寫線索：再次調(diào)高鳥的位置——伊戈爾第二天站了起來——鼓勵兒子繼續(xù)努力——伊戈爾完全康復(fù)——取名“驚喜鳥”——媽媽感動落淚3.詞匯激活：行為類①進(jìn)入：gointo/enter②上下跳躍：jumpupanddown/leapupanddown③回答：reply/answer情緒類①讓他高興的是：tohisjoy/tohisdelight②快樂：joy/happiness[高分句型1]SeeingIgorwasasleep,heputthebirdalittlehigherandleft.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)[高分句型2]Thefathersaidhewastryingtofigureoutthekindofthebird.(運用了省略連詞that的賓語從句)[高分句型3]Hecouldn’tbelievewhathesaw.(運用了連接代詞what引導(dǎo)賓語從句)2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AnOutdoorTripThatSpeaksLouderThanARegularClassOneday,asJack,ascienceteacher,stressedthepressingneedforprotectingTangerineDarters,akindoffish,studentsinhisclassseemeduninterestedandbored.Jackcontinued,buthisstudentsshowedlittleenthusiasm.Hepausedforamoment,allowingthesilencetosettleintheclassroom.Thenhewentoninadifferentway.“Imagine,”Jackbegan,hisvoicefilledwithpassion,“thefeelingofwading(趟水)throughtheclearshallowwatersofPigeonRiver,surroundedbythegentlesunlight.PicturethecolorsoftheTangerineDartersastheygracefullyswimthroughthecurrents,theirorangebellies(肚子)shininglikeraysofsunshine,orinthatmoment,aTangerineDarterinyourhands,itsorangebellyshininginthesunlight.”Hepaintedavividpicturewithhiswords.Curiositylitinhisstudents’eyesastheybentforward,eagertoknowmore.Jackcontinued,“Thedartersareverypickyabouttheirhabitats.Theplacewheretheyliveshouldbeveryclean,andslightpollutioncoulddrivethemawayorevenendangertheirveryexistence.”AsJackspoke,hispassionspreadquicklyamonghisstudents,whostartedtoaskquestions,wantingtoknowmoreabouttheTangerineDarters.Inspiredbytheirnewfoundinterest,Jackhadanidea.WhynottakestudentstothePigeonRiver,wheretheycanwitnessthebeautyoftheTangerineDartersfirsthand?Aweeklater,theywereonthetriptothePigeonRiverinCanton,NorthCarolina,wheretheenvironmentwaswellpreservedinparisonwithotherindustrialareas.SunshinebouncedoffthePigeonRiver,andcoolwaterflowedoverrocksandboulders(卵石)—thepreferredhabitatofTangerineDarters.WithJack,itwasthefirsttimethatthestudentshadstoodintheshallowwater,eagertoseetheirtargetofthisfishecologyclassfieldtrip.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Seeingthestudents’interestedlooks,Jackraisedaquestion.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.Curious,thestudentscrowdedhimaround,eagerforacloserlook.Inthesun,thefish’sorangebellywasshininglikeraysofsunshine.“ATangerineDarter!”studentsexclaimedcheerfully.“Beautiful,isn’tit?”Jackasked.Adirectobservationofthewonderfulcreatureinthefleshstimulatedthestudents’interest.Inthenaturalclassroom,thePigeonRiver,thestudentslistenedattentivelytoJack’sintroductionofthefish,suchaswhattheyeatandhowtheyliveandmultiply.AsJackspoke,thestudents’enthusiasmgrewstronger.Seeingthestudentsinterestedlooks,Jackbegantoraiseaquestion.“Whycan’tthisfishliveinotherrivers?”Jackasked,lookingintotheirburningeyes.Then,likeinaregularlesson,hepaused,allowinghisstudentstoreflect.Onestudentresponded,“They’repickyabouttheirhabitats.”Jacknoddedsmilingly.“So?”Jackcontinued.“Ifwepolluteriversatwill,clearwaterlikethiswilldisappear,sowillthisbeautifulfish,”anotherstudentansweredthoughtfully.Seeingstudentstrulyinvolved,Jackfeltasenseofsatisfaction.Theoutdoortripdidprovetospeaklouderthanaregularclass.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了杰克老師在課堂上強(qiáng)調(diào)迫切需要保護(hù)一種叫桔色似鱸的魚，他的熱情很快在學(xué)生中傳播開來，他們開始問問題，想要更多地了解桔色似鱸。受到他們新發(fā)現(xiàn)的興趣的啟發(fā)，杰克有了一個主意：帶學(xué)生去鴿子河實地考察，最后直接觀察這個活生生的奇妙生物激發(fā)了學(xué)生們的興趣，事實證明，戶外考察確實比普通課程更有說服力?！窘馕觥?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“突然，杰克彎下腰，迅速抓住了一條魚”可知，第一段可描寫杰克抓住魚展示給同學(xué)看，同學(xué)也被激起了興趣。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“看到學(xué)生們感興趣的表情，杰克開始提出一個問題”可知，第二段可描寫杰克老師開始講授魚的相關(guān)知識，學(xué)生們真正參與進(jìn)來。2.續(xù)寫線索：抓住魚——近距離觀察——激發(fā)興趣——專心聽講——提出問題——引起反思——考察感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①提出問題：raiseaquestion/poseaquestion②反思：reflect/rethink③消失：disappear/vanish情緒類①滿足：satisfaction/content②挑剔：picky/captious[高分句型1]Inthenaturalclassroom,thePigeonRiver,thestudentslistenedattentivelytoJack’sintroductionofthefish,suchaswhattheyeatandhowtheyliveandmultiply.(運用了what引導(dǎo)賓語從句)[高分句型2]AsJackspoke,thestudents’enthusiasmgrewstronger.(運用了as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句)3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwaseightyearsoldandwasn’tawareofallthearrangementsbeingmadeforourjourneyasafamilytoLondonin1950.MymotherwasingreatpainandwishedtovisitspecialistsinLondon.MyfatherreluctantlyhadtosellourpropertyinQueensland.Thedaybeforeweboardedtheship,Fatherunwillinglysaidgoodbyetohisfiveyearoldcattledog,Spider,whowaslovedbyusall.Father’sfriendSandywastobehisguardianwhilewewereoverseas,ashehadbeengettingtoknowSpiderformanyweeks.Sixweekslater,anairletterarrivedfromSandy,givingmyfatherthenewsthatSpiderhadrunawayjusttwoweeksafterwehadsailed.SandyhadadvertisedconstantlyonABCandotherregionalnewspapers.Despitemany“sightings”,thedogwasneverfound.ItseemsSpiderjustkeptrunningandsearchingforus.Ashewascattledog,myfatherthoughthewouldshoeordingotrapped,becauseofhisappearance.ButourfamilythoughtthatFatherheldasecretshopethatSpiderwasstillalive.WesailedbacktoAustraliatwoyearslaterandreestablishedourhome.MyfatherimmediatelybeganhisownsearchforSpider.Onecoldwinter’sSaturdaymorningeightmonthsafterourreturn,myfatherhadacallfromanelderlyladylivingonherownontheoutskirtsofthetown.Asshetoldmyfatheronthetelephone,itwas“justglimpsesofadingotypedogintheshadows”ofherdisusedtenniscourt.Thatwasenoughformyfathertointerruptmyhomework.

WesetoffinhisblueandblackJensencarwhichhehadbroughtbackfromEngland.Itwashardlytherightvehiclefortheroughroadswetravelledthatday.Fiveandahalfhourslater,wefoundtherundownoldproperty.Sadly,shetoldmyfatherthatthe“dingodog”hadn’tbeenaroundforafewdays.Myfatherhadastrangelookinhiseye.HeputtwofingerstohislipsanddidhisspecialwhistleforSpider.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenlytherewasasoundinthebush._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Oncehomewehadthetaskofgettingalltheprickles(刺)offhim._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Suddenlytherewasasoundinthebush.Outofthegrowthflewthisbatt