2024年浙江卷1月讀后續(xù)寫(路癡的自我救贖)講義-高考英語(yǔ)作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)2

2024年1月浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫Eva

spentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasa

sixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseof

direction,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewould

memorize

whereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn'texist.InherfirstPEclass,Evawasshockedwhen

coachPitt

announcedthateveryonehadtorun

onemile

aroundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'lleinlastforsure."SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusinga

mindtrick

onherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thenshe

concentrated

onjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐彎).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.Paragraph1:WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________

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文本故事梗概中學(xué)生活第一周，Eva同學(xué)正在努力適應(yīng)新環(huán)境，時(shí)常迷失在縱橫交錯(cuò)的教學(xué)樓走廊中。體育課上，Pitt教練要求學(xué)生在操場(chǎng)上跑完一英里。這項(xiàng)任務(wù)讓Eva感到驚慌，因?yàn)閷?duì)她而言，一英里是很長(zhǎng)的距離。面對(duì)困境，她用心理戰(zhàn)術(shù)（mindtrick）鼓勵(lì)自己，通過(guò)關(guān)注操場(chǎng)上一棵橡樹(shù)的樹(shù)影來(lái)轉(zhuǎn)移注意力。同時(shí)，Eva將一英里的挑戰(zhàn)細(xì)分成若干個(gè)小圈，每個(gè)小圈都是她能夠掌控的小目標(biāo)。這種方法奏效了。在她全神貫注地逐個(gè)擊破這些小目標(biāo)時(shí)，四圈早已悄然完成，終點(diǎn)就在眼前…

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續(xù)寫策略建議很容易看出，原文中的主要人物是新生Eva。體育老師Pitt則是次要人物。第一段續(xù)寫的重點(diǎn)應(yīng)該放在Eva跑完1英里之后的內(nèi)心感受描寫上。當(dāng)然，從給出的首句“Nicework!”可以看出，Pitt應(yīng)當(dāng)和Eva有一定的語(yǔ)言和動(dòng)作上的互動(dòng)。續(xù)寫的難點(diǎn)在第二段，也就是具體Eva如何把這種mindtrick運(yùn)用到識(shí)記錯(cuò)綜復(fù)雜的6層教學(xué)樓當(dāng)中。這段續(xù)寫想要做到合理，寫作必須緊密聯(lián)系Eva在跑一英里過(guò)程中所使用的mindtrick的核心:拆分任務(wù)（divideandconquer）化整為零（breakdownthewholeintoparts）.寫作示范WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,butthereshewas,receivingpraisefromthe

coach.Gaspingforair,withsweatdrippingdownherface,sherealizedshehadacplishedsomethingshethoughtwasimpossible.Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.Asshestoodthere,catchingherbreath,Evareflectedonherjourneyaroundthetrack.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting

onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.Thisexperiencewasapowerfulreminderthatshecouldachievemorethanshehadevergivenherselfcreditfor.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Justlikeshehad

concentrated

onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher

onemile

run,shebegantobreakdowntheschoolmapintosmaller,manageablesections.Insteadoftryingto

memorize

theentirelayoutatonce,shestartedbyfamiliarizingherselfwiththeareasaroundherclassrooms.Gradually,herunderstandingofthe

sixstorybuilding

grew.Daybyday,themazeofhallwaysandroomsbecamelessintimidating.Evalearnedthat,whetheronthetrackorinthecorridorsofherschool,takingthingsonestepatatimewasthekeytooveringherfearsandchallenges.默寫版：WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,_______________________但她在那里，受到了教練的贊揚(yáng)._____________________________________________________她喘著粗氣，汗水順著臉往下滴，意識(shí)到自己完成了一些她認(rèn)為不可能完成的事情.Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.Asshestoodthere,____________________________________________________________伊娃喘著粗氣，回憶起她繞跑道的旅程.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting

onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.___________________________________________________這段經(jīng)歷有力地提醒我們，她可以取得比以往任何時(shí)候都更大的成就.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Justlikeshehad

concentrated

onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher

onemile

run,______________________________________________________________她開(kāi)始把學(xué)校地圖分解成更小、易于管理的部分.Insteadoftryingto

memorize

theentirelayoutatonce,shestartedbyfamiliarizingherselfwiththeareasaroundherclassrooms.Gradually,herunderstandingofthe

sixstorybuilding

grew.___________________________________________________________________一天比一天，迷宮般的走廊和房間變得不那么嚇人了。Evalearnedthat,________________________________________________________________無(wú)論是在跑道上還是在學(xué)校的走廊里，一步一個(gè)腳印是克服恐懼和挑戰(zhàn)的關(guān)鍵.01寫作細(xì)節(jié)分析WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,butthereshewas,receivingpraisefromthe

coach.（必要的主要人物和次要人物之間的互動(dòng)）Gaspingforair,withsweatdrippingdownherface,sherealizedshehadacplishedsomethingshethoughtwasimpossible.（合理的細(xì)節(jié)描寫：Eva不擅長(zhǎng)跑步，跑完后大汗淋漓、氣喘吁吁）Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.（合理的情感描寫：獲得了成就感）Asshestoodthere,catchingherbreath,Evareflectedonherjourneyaroundthetrack.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting

onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.（反思跑步成功的原因，為下文找到記憶錯(cuò)綜復(fù)雜的教學(xué)樓做鋪墊)

Thisexperiencewasapowerfulreminderthatshecouldachievemorethanshehadevergivenherselfcreditfor.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Justlikeshehad

concentrated

onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher

onemile

run,shebegantobreakdowntheschoolmapintosmaller,manageablesections.（和原文高度互動(dòng)：跑完一英里的關(guān)鍵是Eva專注于拆分后的若干小任務(wù)）Insteadoftryi