技巧03 如何設計高潮-高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎技巧與整體演練

高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎技巧與整體演練技巧03如何設計高潮故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事達到最緊張或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有時候是劇情中的“危機”點。有時候，它只是達到了關(guān)鍵時刻或者轉(zhuǎn)折點，發(fā)生了一些事情，或者主角必須做出決定，從而導致一個結(jié)果或其他。我們在分析敘事類故事或者小說故事的時候常常用下面的圖表來表示故事情節(jié)。故事高潮設計策略1．增加外部沖突增加外部沖突是一種明顯有效的可以達到故事高潮的方式。(1)角色之間的沖突【例如】Onthefourthorfifthnight，wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime，Momsuddenlygotagreatidea：Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupatentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.【分析】開車找旅館——徒勞無功——母親建議在他人后院搭帳篷——David和“我”倍感緊張，心有不悅(母子的觀點不一)(2)角色與環(huán)境之間的沖突【例如】ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim...hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall，butawolf，quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped...hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal，andtoMac’srelief，itfellback，shakingitshead.Butaminutelater...Thenit...，tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime，andagain，itfellback...【分析】Mac騎車獨行，路遇惡狼，與之搏斗，險象環(huán)生。[人(角色)——狼(環(huán)境)大戰(zhàn)](3)角色與時間的沖突【例如】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar.”PaulshoutedatMac.MacjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithoutdelayasthewolfwasjusttwostepsawayandwasabouttotearMacintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!【分析】汽車突停面前——急喊上車——Mac上車避險——惡狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容緩)2．放大內(nèi)心沖突放大內(nèi)心沖突(文中角色的內(nèi)心斗爭)也有助于建立一個高度緊張和不確定的時刻。現(xiàn)在我們再來看高考讀后續(xù)寫中的內(nèi)心沖突是如何體現(xiàn)的?！纠纭?原文見2016·浙江10月)Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassotired，hungry，andextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself，“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow，Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream，shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly，sheheardtheshoutsoftigers，whichmadeherscaredtodeath.Aftersheheldherbreathforafewminutes，everythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness，shesleptagain.【分析】夫婦爭吵——妻子獨自行走——荒野走散，夜色漸黑——獨處森林——陰森恐怖——后悔莫及(內(nèi)心沖突的刻畫)——內(nèi)心獨白(往昔對比＋虛擬語氣的使用＋旁白描寫是常見技巧之一)1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Ijoinedasummercampjustafewweeksago.Ourfirstdaywasfullofgetting-to-know-each-othergamestohelpuslearnourwayaroundthecampground.Ourseconddaywasveryhot,soateachertookustothebestplaceforcoolingdown.“Woo-hoo!”theteachershoutedasheledthewayintotheshallowpartofthelake.Weallranafterhimlikeducklingsandhappilysplashed(拍水)around,exceptforonekidnamedMax,whosatonthedock(碼頭)lookingsad.Here’sthesurprisingthingaboutthat.Thedaybefore,whenwetookteststoseewhatlevelswimmerswewereinthepool,Maxturnedouttobethebestswimmer.Sowhywashejustsitting?Iswamoverandsaid,“Whyaren’tyouinthewater?Wefoundoutyesterdaythatyou’reabitlikeahalffish.”“OK,I’lltellyou,butit’salittleembarrassing(尷尬的),”hesaid.“EventhoughI’mkindofahalffish,I’malsoafraidofrealfish-andofanythingelsethatmightbeswimminginthedirtywater.”“Don’tbeembarrassed,”Isaid.“We’reallafraidofsomething.I’mtotallyscaredofsnakesandthedark,um,avocados(牛油果).”“Avocados?”Maxsmiled.“Iknowitsoundsstrange,”Isaid.“Butthey’rejustsoslimy(黏)!”“Lookout!”Maxjoked.“Thebigavocadomonster(怪物)iscomingtoslimeyou.”“Youlookout!”Ireplied.“Agiantfishmonsterisheadingyourway.”Soon,wewerebothlaughing.Thatbroketheiceenoughformetosay,“Youmightfeelbetterifyoutakealookatwhat’sactuallyunderthewater.”Igrabbedtwopairsofgoggles(護目鏡)fromabinandputonepairon.“I’llgofirst,”Isaid,thenwentunderforafewsecondsbeforecomingup.“Nothingscary,”Ireported.Maxhesitated,thenputontheotherpair,tookadeepbreath,andwentunderthewaterforaboutthreeseconds.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答?！癆nylakemonsters?“Iaskedwhenheappearedfromthewater._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。InthevillagewhereCharleslived,highintheFrenchAlps,Decemberusuallybroughtgarlandsscentedwithpine.EachSunday,villagerswouldwalkdowndecoratedstreetstotheoldstoneWishingHouse.There,forthefourweeksbeforeNewYear,theywouldlightcandlesinthehouseandsharetheirstoriesandprayforthenextnewyeartogether.Charleslovedtheglowofthecandles.Butthisyear,WorldWarⅡchangedeverything.Charles’sfatherandbrotherwenttodotheirmilitaryservice.Familiesneededrationcouponsforthingslikebutterandsugar.Becausecandleswerecostlyandhardtofind,thehousewouldnothaveanycandlesthisyear.Charleswasthinkingaboutallofthisashesteppedslowlyoutofbedonemorning.Heputonhiswarmestclothesandheadedouttodohischores.Heopenedthebigbarndoor,sunbeamsstreamingintothebarn.Helookeduptotheloftwherehistreasureboxhid.Theboxheldfishingline,adriedsnakeskin,awhistleandhisbirthdaycandles.Eachyearonhisbirthday,onenewcandlewouldappearonhiscake.Aftermakingawish,he’dquicklyblowoutthecandles,cleanthemoff,andcarefullyputthemintotheboxfornextyear.Whenhischoresweredone,Charlesclimbedtheladderandopenedhistreasurebox.Hecounted10candles.Thecoolwaxwithalreadymeltededgesgavehimanidea.Charleswrappedthecandlesinhishandkerchiefandputthemcarefullyintohispocket.Hehurrieddowntheladderandrantothehouse.“Mama!Grandpa!IknowhowwecanhavecandlesfortheWishingHouse!”hecriedashethrewopenthedoor.“How?”hismotherasked.“Icouldcollectpeople’susedcandlesandmakenewones.Maybewecouldmeltthemdown.”“It’sawonderfulidea,”saidgrandpa,“I’llhelpyou.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Charlesandhisgrandpavisitedeveryhouseandshopinthevillage.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IntheWishingHousewerethefourcandlesCharleshadmade.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Brutushadeverythingintheworld:goodfood,goodtoys,andgoodclothes.Buttheproblemwasthathehadtosharethemallwithhisthreeotherbrothers,Mack,JackandRobert.BrutushadtosharehisfavoritecookieboxwithMack,whoalwaysfinishedthewholeboxbeforeBrutuscouldtakeabite.HealsohadtosharehistoyswithhisyoungestbrotherJack,whoalwaysendedupbreakingthem.BrutusalsohadtheunfortunateprivilegeofbeinggivenhisolderbrotherRobert’shand-me-downsofoldclothes.Brutushatedsharingandwishedhehadnobodytosharehisbelongingswith.“Whycan’tIbetheonlychild?”Brutussighedashestaredatthestars.“IwishIhadnostupidbrothers,”Brutusdemandedatonesparklingstar.Tohissurprise,thestarsuddenlytwinkledandfelltowardshisdirection.Thestarinchedcloserandclosertohisbedroomwindow.Hescreamedandtriedtowakehisbrothersupbutitwastoolate.Thestarcrashedinsidetheirroom,followedbyanear-splittingexplosion.Thenextday,Brutuswokeupwithabadheadache.Herushedtohisbrothers’bedstoaskthemiftheywereokaybutwasquicklyshockedtoseethattheirbedshadbeenempty.Theywerenowheretobefound.Brutushadthefortuneofspendingthewholemorningplayingwithhistoys.Heputonhisbrother’sbrandnewclothesandsneakerswhichfithimperfectly.Ashewascheckinghimselfinthemirror,hesuddenlyrealizedthathiswishhadcometrue.Hisbrothersweregoneandhehadthewholeworldtohimself.“Icangetusedtothis,”hesaidtohimselfhappily注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Whenhefelthungry,hismothercamebackwithafullboxofcookies._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inthisway,hespentfivedaysasanonlychildbeforehefelttheemptyhousewastooquiet.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwasaSaturdayafternoon.IwashavinglunchwhenDadtoldmetogetready.Ibecameunhappy.Idon’tlikeSaturdays!Eventhoughit’saholidayformostchildren,itisnotformebecauseIneedtogotofootballclub.Manykidslovesports,butIamnotoneofthem.Iprefertostayathomeandread.Idon’tlikerunning.soinateamamabadplayer.ThecoachistiredofmeandmyteammatessometimesthinkI’museless.Ihavenoideahowtoplayfootball.Usually,afterpracticemyteammateswouldaskmetostayoutofthegameandIwouldjustnod.LastThursday,thecoachtoldusthatwewouldbecompetingwithsomeotherteaminamonthandmanypeoplewouldcometoseethegame.Ouropponents(對手)werethelastwinnerandIfroze(呆住)atthethoughtoftheembarrassment()Iwouldfaceiftheteamlostbecauseofme.SoIdecidedtopracticehardforthematchandIwenttopracticeeverysingleday.Afteronemonth,whenthegamedaycamemyteammateswerereluctant(不愿意的)totakemeintheteam,andIalsowishedtostayawayfromthegroundaswell.Butasluckwouldhaveittheywereshortofoneplayerandhadnochoicebuttotakemeintheteam.OurteamwasnamedtheBigBlues.Therewasagreatcheeronourarrivalinthefield.Igotverynervous.Thegamestartedandwithintwominutes,Igotabluecard.BythetimeIwasallowedbackthescorewastwogoalsforeachteamandthenextgoalwoulddecidethewinningteam.注意:1續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Whentheballcametowardsme,Ifroze.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Allmyteammatesrantowardsmetoliftmeintheair.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。“Wakeup,Mom!”Ifeltalittlehandonmyfaceandreluctantlyopenedmyeyes.Therewasmyson,readytostarttheday.Ialsoheardmybabiesawakeinthenextroom.Readyornot,thedayhadbegun!Ilovedbeinghomewithmylittleones,butIfelttheweightoftheworldonmyshoulders.MyhusbandandIhadjustboughtahouse,andsomeunexpectedexpensesmadeourbudgettighterthanithadeverbeen.Iwaswearyofspendingmorepennies.Weweren’tfoolishwithourmoney.Weworkedhard.Weweredoingalltherightthings,butwehadhadonefinancialdisappointmentafteranother.Iwasgoingtopickupmykids’photoportraitsfromthestudioatthelocalmall.Despiteoursmallbudget,itwasimportanttometohavepicturesofmychildrenastheyweregrowingup.Thepreviousweek,Ihadfoundacoupon(優(yōu)惠券)andusedsomechangefromthecartobuya$7.99portraitpackage,andtodaywasthedayIwastopickuptheportraits.Sinceweweregoingtothemall,Idecidedtomakeitanoutingandpackedsomesandwichesforustoeatatthefoodcourt.What’smore,therearemanyride-ontoycarsinthemall’sfoodcourtforfunandforfree.Afterbreakfast,wewentoff.Afterweparked,wewalkedintotheportraitstudioatthemall,andIapproachedthecounter.Theyoungwomansmiled.“MayIhelpyou?”“Yes,I’mheretopickupourphotos.”Thewomanaskedmynameandopenedherdrawer.“Ah,yes,heretheyare.Aren’ttheyjustsoadorable?”Shetookoutthephotos,andthesmilingfacesofmykidswarmedmyheart.“Yes,theyaregreat.Thankyou,”Isaid.Sheputthephotosintoanenvelope.ThenshespreadoutadditionalphotosofmykidsthatIhadn’tordered.Iknewwhatthatmeant.Theupsellpitch(推銷)wascoming.“Wouldyouliketopurchasetheseextraportraits?Theyareonlyfifteendollarsapiece!”shesmiledsweetly.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Myheartturnedcold.“Idon’thavefifteendollars.”________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aswewerehavingourlunch,theyoungwomancameupandpressedsomethingintomyhand.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1.【參考范文】

“Anylakemonsters?”Iaskedwhenheappearedfromthewater.Helaughedandpointedatsomeharmlesslittlefish.“Onlysmallfish.”Maxdecidedtowaititoutonthedockthatday,buthewasactuallyswimminginthelakebeforetheendofthecamp!Seeinghimswimminghappilyinthelake,Iwasrelievedandrelaxed.Inthemeantime,Iwaslostinmythought:NearlyeveryoneI’vemetisafraidofsomethingandhowtogetoveritmeansalot.Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.Andthentakingbabystepstolearnmoreaboutthethingforinstance,lookingintodirtywaterwithgogglesoncanactuallybeabighelpinovercomingthefear.Theproblemisthatmostpeopleholdtheirfearsclosely,becauseit’spartofwhotheyare.Ifyouaren’treadytofaceyourfear,youprobablywon’tovercomeyourfear.Ifyou’rereadytomoveforward,facingyourfearbravelyisthefirststeptotake.【寫作指導】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者幾周前參加了一個夏令營，第二天由于天氣炎熱，老師帶大家去玩水降溫，作者發(fā)現(xiàn)游泳水平最好的Max卻悲傷地坐在碼頭上，作者詢問Max才得知他害怕水里的一些魚和其他一些小生物，作者不斷鼓勵Max，并率先跳下水告訴他沒什么可怕的，Max猶豫了一下也潛入水中。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“‘湖里有怪物嗎？’他從水里出來時我問他”可知，第一段可描寫Max的回答以及作者看到Max在水里游泳的感悟。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“根據(jù)我的經(jīng)驗，對讓你害怕的事情笑一笑可以讓你更容易談論它?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者對克服恐懼的感悟，勇敢面對恐懼是第一步。2.續(xù)寫線索：Max決定坐在碼頭等——感到輕松——陷入沉思——感悟——勇敢面對是克服恐懼的第一步3.詞匯激活行為類①出現(xiàn)：appear/turnup②陷入沉思：belostinone’sthought/fallintothought③克服：overcome/getover情緒類①快樂：happily/delightedly②放松的：relieved/eased【典型句式】[高分句型1].Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.（由關(guān)系代詞that引導的定語從句）[高分句型2].Theproblemisthatmostpeopleholdtheirfearsclosely,becauseit’spartofwhotheyare.（由that引導的表語從句、because引導的原因狀語從句和who引導的賓語從句）[高分句型3].Ifyouaren’treadytofaceyourfear,youprobablywon’tovercomeyourfear.（由if引導的條件狀語從句）2.【參考范文】Charlesandhisgrandpavisitedeveryhouseandshopinthevillage.Chillywindandsnowpushedagainstthemateveryturn,butCharles’sheartwasconsumedwithhappinessandwarmth,imaginingthenewcandleshecouldmake.“Madam?Sir?CouldyouspareafewoldcandlesfortheNewYear?”saidCharles,holdingoutabasketfromdoortodoor.Whenthelastdoorhadclosed,theyheadedhomewithawidevarietyofcandlesofdifferentcoloursandsize.Lookingatthegoodharvest,Charlesbreathedasighofrelief.Withoutdelay,heandhisgrandpasettowork,droppingthevillagers’candlestogetherwithallhisowntreasuredonesintoameltingpot.IntheWishingHousewerethefourcandlesCharleshadmade.Theyweresmall,andtheywerenottheregularNewYearcandles.Eachwasablendofdifferentcolours,glowinginthehouse.Charlessmiled,knowinghisfriendswouldseeitandbelieveNewYearwascomingafterall.Asitturnedout,thevillagerswhowenttothehouseandwitnessedthecandlescheeredup,surprisedandteary-eyed.“Thecandlesarebeautiful,aren’tthey,Grandpa?”Charleswhispered.“Beautiful!”grandpanodded.Sometimes,difficultiesandadversityareunavoidable,however,wecanbringsunshineandhopewithawarmheart.Maybe,thisiswhatNewYearisallabout.【寫作指導】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了查爾斯的父親和哥哥去服兵役了。家庭需要黃油和糖等食品的定量配給券。因為蠟燭很貴，而且很難找到，所以今年家里不會有蠟燭。于是他提議收集人們用過的蠟燭，制作新的。最終在爺爺?shù)膸椭?，查爾斯制作并點亮了蠟燭。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“查爾斯和他的爺爺參觀了村里的每家每戶?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫他們收集蠟燭的經(jīng)過。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“許愿屋里放著查爾斯做的四支蠟燭。”可知，第二段可描寫村民看到點燃蠟燭之后的反應和感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：參觀——收集蠟燭——制作蠟燭——點亮蠟燭——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類開始：setto/startto制作：make/produce松了口氣：breatheasighofrelief/letouta(long)sighofrelief情緒類快樂：happiness/joy無法避免：unavoidable/inevitable【典型句式】[高分句型1]Withoutdelay,heandhisgrandpasettowork,droppingthevillagers’candlestogetherwithallhisowntreasuredonesintoameltingpot.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)[高分句型2]Asitturnedout,thevillagerswhowenttothehouseandwitnessedthecandlescheeredup,surprisedandteary-eyed.(運用了who引導定語從句)3.【參考范文】Whenhefelthungry,hismothercamebackwithafullboxofcookies.“They’reallforyou,mydearson,”saidMomwithacaringsmile.Momtoldhimthathisbrothershadgonetovisithisgrandparentswithhisdad.Thinkingthathecouldenjoyallthecookiesalone,Brutuswaswildwithjoy.Withmouthwatering,Brutuswolfeddownfourcookiesbeforehefelttoofulltohavemore.EverydayBrutusenjoyedplayingtoys,havingdeliciousfoodandwearingnewclotheswithouthisbrothersbothering.Inthisway,hespentfivedaysasanonlychildbeforehefelttheemptyhousewastooquiet.Heneededsomeonetoplaywith.Althoughhewaswelldressed,fooddidn’ttastegoodwithnobodytosharewith.Hebegantomisshisbrothers.Herealizedtheircompanywaswhatheneededmost.“IwishIwouldn’tbetheonlychildanylonger,”hethought,fallingasleep.Thenextmorning,apillowhitBrutusonthehead,wakinghimup.Tohisgreatdelight,Brutussawhisbrothersback!Hesatupimmediatelytohugthemandwouldneverwishtoseparatefromthem!【寫作指導】文章以人物為線索展開，講述Brutus有好吃的，好玩的，穿的也好，但這一切都不得和其他三個兄弟分享。他厭倦這樣的生活，一天晚上對著星星許愿，希望自己是家里唯一的孩子。第二天起床后他發(fā)現(xiàn)其他三個兄弟都不見了蹤影，感覺自己的愿望實現(xiàn)了，整個早上享受著不用和他人分享的生活。1.段落續(xù)寫①根據(jù)第一段首句“當他感到饑餓時，他的母親帶著一整盒餅干回來了”可知，下文可描寫媽媽告訴Brutus其他兄弟的去向，以及他獨自享受美食、玩具和衣物的場景。②根據(jù)第二段首句“就這樣，他作為獨生子女度過了五天，才覺得空房子太安靜了”可知，下文可描寫他開始想念兄弟們，明白了有他們的陪伴他才會快樂。2.續(xù)寫線索：媽媽回家——獨自享用一切——五天后感覺無聊——意識到兄弟的陪伴很重要——兄弟們回來3.詞匯激活行為類①拜訪：visit/payavisitto/callonsb./dropinonsb②看見：see/spot③狼吞虎咽：wolf/takebigbits情緒類①關(guān)愛的：caring/considerate②快樂：joy/merriness【典型句式】[高分句型1]Thinkingthathecouldenjoyallthecookiesalone,Brutuswaswildwithjoy.（運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語，和that引導的賓語從句）[高分句型2]Althoughhewaswelldressed,fooddidn’ttastegoodwithnobodytosharewith.（運用了although引導的讓步狀語從句）4.【參考范文】Whentheballcametowardsme,Ifroze.Myteammateswereverytiredandseemedworried.Theopponentsrushedtowardsme.Withoutthinkinganymore,Ifoundcourage,andwithallmymight,Ikickedtheball.Theopponentsdidn’tthinkhighlyofme,sotheydidn’tthinkthatIwouldbeabletokicktheballsopowerfully.AsIkicked,thegoalkeeperjumpedtowardstheball.Astheballhitthebackofthenet,Iheardabigcheer.TheBigBlueswonthematch!AllmyteammatesrantowardsmetoliftmeintheairSincethatday,IhavegainedsomeconfidenceandstartedtoplaybetterMycoachandteammatesarealsohappywithmeandtheytrytoimprovemyskillseverytimeIplay.NowIhaverealizedthatIalwayslikedthissport,butmyproblemwithithadsomethingtodowiththelackofencouragementIgot.NowIcanbuildonmyconfidenceandI’verealizedIcanalsoplaythissportverywell.【寫作指導