2022年高考全國1卷讀后續(xù)寫David'srun講義高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

（2022年新高考Ⅰ卷）讀后續(xù)寫原題目：Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplainedunfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecrosscountryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.通過細(xì)致的閱讀，我們可以梳理故事的幾個(gè)要素：梳理清楚關(guān)鍵要素既能避免續(xù)寫情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)得不合理，又能避免忽略原文重要細(xì)節(jié)，或在續(xù)寫部分造成細(xì)節(jié)與所給材料內(nèi)容沖突的情況。主題語境：本文圍繞著“人與自我”的主題，展現(xiàn)出了身殘志堅(jiān)的主人公的不屈不撓的精神。由原文和續(xù)寫段首語可知，文章描述了一個(gè)小學(xué)生David因?yàn)槟X疾無法像常人一樣跑步，在比賽面前因擔(dān)心被他人嘲笑而放棄越野跑。在特殊教育老師“我”的鼓勵下，最終成功完成比賽的故事。二、讀后續(xù)寫之“寫”1.依據(jù)續(xù)寫第一、二段首句，構(gòu)思主要情節(jié)，搭建續(xù)寫框架。在通讀所給材料，把握故事關(guān)鍵要素基礎(chǔ)上，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一、二段首句，對故事的發(fā)展作出合情合理、合乎邏輯的預(yù)測。我們可以采用的方式和方法有：（1）找到首句的關(guān)鍵信息，進(jìn)行上下文必需的鋪墊和呼應(yīng)，從結(jié)構(gòu)的連貫和融洽上完善框架。續(xù)寫第一段首句為“Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.”；續(xù)寫第二段首句為“IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.”。根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段首句中的Davidwouldn'tlookatme可知，第一段前半部分的續(xù)寫一定是：我怎樣勸說和鼓勵David，而David又經(jīng)過一番怎樣的思想斗爭最終作出了決定。根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段首句中的moveduptothestartingline可知，續(xù)寫第一段結(jié)尾處必然要寫：David作出了參加比賽的決定。根據(jù)theotherrunners可知，第二段首先要寫David與其他選手比賽的情況。第二段最后寫David在比賽結(jié)束后的感想或者是“我”作為旁觀者的感想如何，以此來升華文章主題。（2）采用設(shè)問和回答的方式，預(yù)測續(xù)寫內(nèi)容，進(jìn)行內(nèi)容的填充。例如，我們可以在構(gòu)思第一個(gè)續(xù)寫段落時(shí)提出下面的問題并自己作答：Q1:WhatdidIdecidetodo?Andhow?Q2:WhatwasDavid'sresponsetomywords?Q3:WhatwasDavid'sfinaldecision?通過以上兩種方法，我們構(gòu)思出主要情節(jié)，搭好框架。特別要注意的是，在第二段的續(xù)寫中，應(yīng)該給故事一個(gè)正能量的結(jié)局，并照應(yīng)前文。此處多為故事的升華，其內(nèi)容常為故事人物悟出的道理或者感想。升華要自然合理，切忌教條式說教或?qū)o關(guān)的模板句生硬地植入。2.依據(jù)故事情節(jié)，設(shè)定情感線索。情節(jié)線和情感線就像是一篇文章的“骨骼”和“靈魂”，共同決定整篇文章的內(nèi)容走向與主旨走向。我們可以設(shè)定David的情緒變化線索：不自信，自卑（害怕被嘲笑而放棄比賽）→重拾自信，由消極轉(zhuǎn)為積極（在“我”的鼓勵下，David決定參加比賽）→興奮、自豪（David最終完成了比賽）。3.使用連接詞，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，句子間銜接自然流暢。在寫作過程中，我們要對羅列的要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行篩選和整合，并對情節(jié)推進(jìn)的要點(diǎn)之間進(jìn)行連接，使故事緊湊連貫。我們可以使用一些連接詞，使表達(dá)邏輯清晰，銜接自然。續(xù)寫第一段：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Instead,hejustloweredhisheadwitheyesstaringathisshoes.Iaskedhimifhereallydecidednottorun.Hesitatedandconfused,henodded,bitinghislip.“Look,”Iencouragedhiminasoftvoice,“youarenotdifferentfromothers,oryouareevenbetter

because

youhavenevermissedasinglepractice.Youhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.Whynotgiveyourselfashot?”Hearingmywords,helookedupatmewithtearsinhiseyes.

Then

Igavehimadeterminedlookandsaid,“Justbeyourself.Youarenotdefinedbyanybodyelse.

And

nobodywillpreventyoudoingwhatyoureallywanttodo.”

Finally,hesaidfirmly,“Iwanttorun.”（加下畫線的部分為連接詞。）4.強(qiáng)化對細(xì)節(jié)的刻畫和表達(dá)，以使文章優(yōu)美生動。（1）圍繞主要人物，詳細(xì)刻畫人物的所作所為，所感所想，并根據(jù)語境的需要，適當(dāng)增加環(huán)境描寫，以使語言具體、生動有趣，內(nèi)容豐富多樣，畫面感強(qiáng)。（2）正確地使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)或修辭手法，使描寫生動。我們可以使用一些從句、句型結(jié)構(gòu)（如倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、省略句等）、語法結(jié)構(gòu)（如with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)、獨(dú)立主格、形容詞作狀語等）以及修辭手法（如比喻、擬人、排比、夸張等），為文章增色。續(xù)寫第二段：IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thentheracebegan.

Alltherunnersshotoutlikearrows,andDavidalsoswunghisfeetforward.

Astimeworeon,otherkidsfinishedtherunbutIcaughtnosightofDavid.

Afterwhatseemedlikecenturies,Ifinallysawhimwithhisforehead

sweatingheavily.WhenDavidfinallycrossedthefinishingline,

thunderousapplauseerupted,hailinghim.

Hisbigtoothysmile

occurredagain.Iwasimpressedthatheovercamehisfearandfulfilledhispotential,andtheunremittingeffortwasworthit.（加下畫線的部分為一些復(fù)雜的語法結(jié)構(gòu)、句式及修辭手法。）參考范文：Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Withasorrowfulexpressionhangingonhisface,Davidsataroundmotionlesslyandhelplessly,hisheaddroopingpowerlessly.Clenchingmyteeth,Itookadeepbreathandpattedhimtogethisattentioninadiscreetandscrupulousmanner.UnderhisgazeItooktheplungetopersuadehim,“Noonewilllaughatthosewhopursuedsuccesswithpainstakingeffort.Justbelieveyourself!"ItwasnotlongbeforeDavidstoodupdeterminedlyandearnestly,strodetothestartinglineandgavemeafirmlookback.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

Withinamomentortwo,thebigcrosscountryrunbegan,afterwhichIstoodstill,onlytoseeDavid'sfiguredisappearingfrommysightslowly.Immediately,IarrivedatthefinishlinebytaxitowaitforDavid'sarrival.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,Davidcrossedthefinishline,exhaustedbutthrilled.Seeingthissense,Iflipfloppedfromananxiousstatetoirreversibledelight