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2023年6月新高考全國一卷讀后續(xù)寫寫作比賽解析目錄一、原文閱讀二、情節(jié)梳理三、故事情節(jié)高潮四、人物性格分析五、根據(jù)首局推斷故事情節(jié)六、參考范文原文閱讀WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.WhoWhen/whereWhat我認(rèn)為你有很好的機(jī)會(huì)How1Why1原文閱讀IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.ThestoryIchoseHowandwhy2原文閱讀WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________情節(jié)梳理5W+1H(who,when,why,where,what,how)Mesocialstudiesteacherwho情節(jié)梳理5W+1H(who,when,why,where,what,how)WhenandwhereWhenIwasinmiddleschoolEnterawritingcontestWhat情節(jié)梳理5W+1H(who,when,why,where,what,how)HowAtfirstDoesn’tlikewritingCamefromBrazil,Englishwassecondlanguage情節(jié)梳理5W+1H(who,when,why,where,what,how)WhyTheteacherEncouragedme情節(jié)梳理5W+1H(who,when,why,where,what,how)HowandWhy2WhenwritingWanttoquitButkeepwritingCheckedoverandoveragain故事情節(jié)的高潮Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.1、突破自我局限得到成長2、沒有退縮、堅(jiān)持不懈故事情節(jié)的梳理文章主旨:我作為一個(gè)來自巴西,英語為第二語言的孩子,英語寫作特別困難,但在老師的鼓勵(lì)之下,通過自己的努力獲得了寫作的樂趣。作者情感的變化:自卑---懷疑自己---堅(jiān)持不懈---從修改文章中獲得樂趣--對贏得比賽沒有信心,但對結(jié)果并不在乎人物性格分析1.作者開始的時(shí)候因?yàn)橛⒄Z寫作不好,比較自卑。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?2.在受到老師鼓勵(lì)的時(shí)候,敢于嘗試。Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.3.善于思考。Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?人物性格分析4.意志堅(jiān)強(qiáng),勤奮努力。Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.5.苦中作樂。Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.6.
對贏得比賽沒有信心,但并不在乎。IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.人物性格分析1.欣賞學(xué)生,善于通過不同的方式讓學(xué)生展示自己的才能。WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.2.善于鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生,給學(xué)生以信心。Hisreply:
“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”3.對學(xué)生要求嚴(yán)格,一絲不茍。WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”根據(jù)段首句推斷續(xù)寫情節(jié)Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________1、Whatwasthenews?HowdidIfeel?2、DidIwinthecompetition?3、Whatwasthereactionofmyteacherandclassmates?1、WhydidIgototheteacher’soffice?2、WhatwouldIsaytomyteacher?3、Whatwouldmyteacherfeelandsay?開始著手續(xù)寫
本文使用了大量的心理描寫和動(dòng)作描寫,在寫作時(shí)語言要盡量貼近原文寫作風(fēng)格。如:asherippedthroughthenight,hiscoatsloughingsweat,hiseyeswidewithadrenaline?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?本文還使用了大量的排比句:如:Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Ienlistedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.開始著手續(xù)寫
除了使用動(dòng)詞shove,enlist,checkout等,本文還使用了大量的動(dòng)作鏈。如:myteacherreadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid.此外,文章長短句交替使用,恰到好處地推動(dòng)了情節(jié)的發(fā)展,網(wǎng)絡(luò)參考范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.
Iwonthefirstplace.Hearingthenews,Istoodthere,frozen.Icouldn'tbelievemyears.HadIheardright?Myclassmatesgavemealookofdisbeliefatfirst,andthencheeredandclappedhappily.WhenIcametomysenses,tearsofexcitementcametomyeyes.Atth
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