高考英語二輪復(fù)習 讀后續(xù)寫之提分秘籍素材

讀后續(xù)寫之提分秘籍一一細節(jié)描寫《考試說明》中評分原則部分規(guī)定，讀后續(xù)寫閱卷時按5個檔次給分。參考最高檔次第五檔（21-25分）的描述并考慮寫作部分評分的其它因素，可以認為一篇優(yōu)秀的讀后續(xù)寫具備以下特征：.內(nèi)容豐富充實，與所給短文融洽連貫；.連接成分應(yīng)用得當，行文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊一體，與所提供各段落開頭語的銜接緊密合理；,使用并用下劃線標示5個以上短文中標出的關(guān)鍵詞語；.詞匯豐富高級，語法準確多變（主被動句式、各類從句'特殊句式、非謂語動詞等的使用情況靈活恰當、不拘一格、游刃有余）；.詞數(shù)充分，150詞左右。評分細則規(guī)定少于130詞的，從總分中減去2分；.拼寫準確，英式或美式拼法皆可；.標點合理，使用得當。讀后續(xù)寫基本是以記敘文為主，而記敘文是以記人敘事為主要內(nèi)容，以敘述為主要表達方式來反映豐富多彩的現(xiàn)實生活的一種文體。一般來說，完成一篇完整的記敘文寫作，需要選取合適的角度、按照一定的順序組織素材進行敘述，其中包括六個基本要素：時間、地點、人物，事情的起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果，即我們通常所說的五個（what,who,when,where.why）和一個"H"（how）。除此之外，鮮明的主題和生動的語言，也是一篇優(yōu)秀的記敘文所不可或缺的。描寫作為記敘文的一種輔助的表達方式對加強文章的表現(xiàn)力發(fā)揮著重要的作用，它要求我們善于捕捉細節(jié)、刻畫細節(jié)，有時還可以用上比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法。一篇好的作文往往因為一兩處細節(jié)描寫而出彩。同樣地，議論、抒情的表達方式對記敘文主題的展現(xiàn)也發(fā)揮著重要的作用。一、情感心理描寫在寫作中，對人物情感的描寫常常能使人物的形象顯得生動鮮活。人的情感可以分很多種，如喜悅、滿意'失望'悲傷'憎恨'憤怒、驚訝、恐懼、贊賞等等。在英語中有很多不同的詞和句式來表達這些不同的情感。?喜悅Heisveryhappyandsweet.他又高興又甜蜜。Theydidn5tknowwhattodowiththemseIvesforjoy.他們高興得不知道怎么辦好。Hejumpedforfun.他高興得跳了起來。Herfacebrightenedup.她喜形于色。MoreexampIes:ThesmileonherfaceshoneIikeadiamond.HiseyestwinkIedwithpIeasure.IwaswiIdwithjoy.IwaspIeasedbeyonddescription.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.HersmileIitupthewhoIeroom.Sheshedtearsofjoy.Shewasoverflowingwithhappiness.HerfIushedfacewasshiningwithexcitement.Iwasfloatingonair.Theresultissatisfactory.結(jié)果令人滿意。ItisdifficulttopIeaseeverybody.眾口難調(diào)。ThereisaIwaysasmileofcontentmentonherface,她臉上總是掛著心滿意足的微笑。Shebelongstothosewhoareverydifficulttosatisfy.她屬于那種極難討好的人。Seeingtheirtaskfinishedgivesthemasenseofsatisfaction.看至lj任務(wù)完成了，他們感到很滿意。?驚訝15msurprisedtofindyouhere.在這里看到你我很奇怪。It'snothingtobesurprisedabout.這不值得大驚小怪。Tomysurprise,hedidn'tcomeyesterday.令我吃驚的是他昨天沒有來。Shelookedatmeinamazement.她驚奇的看著我。Herappearancefairlytookmybreathaway.她的美貌令我神魂顛倒。Everyonelookedatherinastonishment.大家都驚訝地看著她。?悲傷Helookssosad.他看起來很悲傷。Heisnostrangertosorrow.他生活在悲傷中。HissadstorymakesherfeeIpity.他的悲慘經(jīng)歷使她深表同情。Hiswife'sdiseasetookawayhisappetite.妻子的病令他茶飯不思。Thenewsdepressesher.這個消息讓她愁苦。MoreexampIes:HestoodsiIentIy,tearsrollingdownhischeeks.IfeeIIikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathedrownedsadnessinwine.Sheburstintotearsandranoutoftheroom.Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands.Itriedtofightbacktears.Myeyeswerefilledwithtears.Afrown（皺眉）nowstoodonhisface.ThesedayshewasinIowspirits.?憤怒Shewasburningwithanger.她怒火中燒。HeeasiIyIoseshistemper.他很容易發(fā)脾氣。Hewasinarage.他大發(fā)雷霆。Shewasredwithanger.她因為發(fā)怒臉漲得通紅。MoreexampIes:Iwasseizedbyanger.Hisangerboiledover.HecouIdhardIy/scarceIycontainhisrage.HisvoicetrembIedwithanger.HegavemeaIookofburninganger.Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.HisfacecIoudedwithanger.?感動Toucheddeeply/immensely,we---Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfe11gratitude.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she...?害怕①Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfuIIofhorror.③Shewasstruckwithhorrorwhen...④Shewaschokedbyfear.⑤HerfaceturnedpaIeandstoodtheretongue-tied.⑥FearfIoodedoverhim.⑦HerheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearIysuffocated（窒息）.⑧SheshookaIIover,feeIingIikesittingonpinsandneedIes.二、動作描寫動作描寫也是描寫人的重要一點。利用適當?shù)脑~語對表達人們的心理和性格有很大的幫助。?表達說話的動詞：speak:說，講，說話，演說。著重開口發(fā)音。say:說，說話。意義非常廣泛，是一般用語。著重內(nèi)容，指連貫的說話。talk:講，說話。著重說話的動作，而不著重所說的話。它多指兩個人或多個人在一起講話。tell:說，告訴，講。指把一件事情傳達給別人或講述一個故事等。有連續(xù)敘述的意思。chat:閑談，聊天。多指非正式的，輕松的，愉快的，沒有中心地、沒有特殊目的地談話或聊天。含有親熱的意味。gossip:只在后面說人是非，閑談他人的事情。Canyouchildspeakyet?你的孩子會說話了嗎？Hesaidhewantedtogototown.他說他想去城里。IwanttotaIktoyouaboutanurgentmatter.我想和你談一件緊急的事。TelImewhathappened.告訴我發(fā)生了什么事。TheydroppedinforachatIastnight.他們昨晚順便來閑聊了一會兒。YoushouIdn,tIistemtogossip.你不應(yīng)該聽流言蜚語。?表示笑的動詞：smile:“微笑”。通常指好意的微笑，無聲的微笑，如表示親切'愉快等。laugh:“笑”，“發(fā)笑”。指一般的笑。beam:“笑”。指面露喜色，帶有笑容的意思。Shesmiledwhenshesawme.她看見我時露出微笑。WeaIIIaughedIoudIywhenshemadeajoke.她說了個笑話,我們都大聲笑起來。Hebeamedonhisvisitors.他對著客人們微笑。?表示哭我們可以說：cry:“哭泣”、“流淚、意義及用法最廣泛。多強調(diào)聲音，指呼號和叫喊地哭，一般由于痛苦，悲哀，恐懼，也可能是歡呼引起的。weep:“哭泣，"流淚，指不出聲的哭，著重在由于悲傷而流淚。sob:“哽咽嗚咽”，“啜泣二指盡力抑制自己的感情時發(fā)出抽泣的聲音。也可以指哭訴。Shestartedtocrywhensheheardthesadnews.當她聽到這個悲痛的消息時，她開始哭了。SheweptthedeathofthechiId.她哀悼孩子的死亡。ThechildsobbedIoudIy.這個孩子大聲地哭泣。?表示走的動詞：g。：“走、意義范圍較廣，是一般用語。表示向一定的地點運動。walk:“步行”，“走表示有目的或無目的的步行'散步、游玩。pace:“走過二“踱步二尤指以普通的步子走。wander:“徘徊”，“到處走”，“漫游”。側(cè)重無確定路線。Wewentbyplane.我們是乘飛機去的。Ican5twalkaboutinthisheat.在這種大熱天我簡直無法走動。ThefenceisonIytenpacesfromthehouse.圍t嗇離屋子只有十步遠。ThechiIdrenwanderedinthewoods.孩子們在森林里漫步。動作描寫美句欣賞ThefirstactorwasdraggingthroughthesnowwhenthesecondbeganwalkingtowardshimtrembIingwithcold.第一位演員在雪地里拖著腳步艱難移動，這時候第二位演員朝他走去，身子在寒氣中不僅顫抖。IstillremembertheshockthatrootedmefIatagainstthewall.我仍然記得當時驚呆了，靠在墻上，一動不動。Thepoundinginmyearsdrownedouttherestofthewords,onIyawordhereandtherefiIteredthrough.我的耳朵里嗡嗡作響，聽不見他們后來講的話，只是東一點西一點滲入的只言片語。IstaredathiminshockandasmaIIsoundofdismayescapedmythroat.我驚愕地盯著他，不禁發(fā)出輕輕的沮喪聲。StandingwithaIIthedignityIcouIdmuster,Isaidnothing.帶著所有的尊嚴，我站在那里一句話都沒說。IcIaspedmyhandsbehindmybacksohewouIdn5tseethemshaking.我緊握著雙手藏在背后，這樣他就看不見我的手在發(fā)抖。TheIastwordscameoutinaneagerrush.最后幾個字是急切地蹦出來的。HewentbacktohoeingtheweedsthatsprangupbetweenthedeIicateIittIebeanpIants.他又去鋤生在在青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askedher whyshepracticed somuch. SheIookeddirectIyinmyeyesandwithouta momentof hesitation.Shesaid,“I wanttogotocoIIege.TheonIywayIcangoi sifIgetaschoIarship.II ikebasketbaII.IdecidedthatifIweregoodenough,I wouIdget aschoIarship.I amgoing topIaycollegebasketbaII.Iwanttobethebest.MyDaddytoldmeifthedreamisbigenough,thefactsdon5tcount.5,Ihadseenoverandoveragain.Well,Ihadtogiveittoher一shewasdetermined.IwatchedherthroughthosejuniorhighyearsandintohighschooI.Everyweek,sheIedhervarsityteamtovictory.Onedayinhersenioryear,Isawhersittinginthegrass,headcradIedinherarms.IwaIkedacrossthestreetandsatdowninthecooIgrassbesideher.QuietlyIaskedwhatwaswrong."Oh,nothing,“cameasoftrepIy."Iamjusttooshort.ThecoachtoIdherthatat5J5"shewouIdprobabIynevergettopIayforatoprankedteam-muchIessofferedascholarship—sosheshouIdstopdreamingaboutcollege.ShewasheartbrokenandIfeltmyownthroattightenasIsensedherdisappointment.IaskedherifshehadtaIkedtoherdadaboutityet.SheIiftedherheadfromherhandsandtoIdmethatherfathersaidthosecoacheswerewrong.Theyjustdidnotunderstandthepowerofadream.HetoIdherthatifshereaIIywantedtopIayforagoodcoIIege,ifshetruIywantedaschoIarship,thatnothingcouIdstopherexceptonething—herownattitude.HetoIdheragain,“Ifthedreamisbigenough,thefactsdon5tcount.55Thenextyear,assheandherteamwenttotheNorthernCaIiforniaChampionshipgame,shewasseenbyacollegerecruiter.Shewasindeedofferedascholarship,afuIIride,toaDivisionI,NCAAwomen5sbasketbaIIteam.Shewasgoingtogettheco