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iBT（201501無老師優(yōu)秀范例：Anotherreasonwhythestatementisfalseisthatitneglectsthegrowingpowerofmoderntechnology,whichreleasespeoplefromtheirlaborandputmachinesandcomputersinceswhichemployeesoriginallyoccupy.Itisacommonphenomenonnowthattremendousfarmlandarebeingwellorganizedunderthecontrolofmerelyitsownertakingadvantageofthemostadvancedmachines.Also,factoriesthat“hires”computerstomanagethemassproductionisnolongernews.Neitheroftheseseemedevenpossibleonlydecadesago,buttheynowobviousexamplesofhowabussinesscouldberunwithoutemployees.10年前都是不可能的，但是在今天，他們都成了，公司如何我的翻譯：Anotherreasonwhythestatementisfalseisthatitneglectthedevelomoderntechnology,whichusfromthelabor.Themachinesandcomputerstaketheceofhumanmuscle.Now,manytremendousfarmlandsarewellorganizedunderthecontroloftheholdersusingthemostadvancedmachine.Neitherofthefactoryhirecomputerstomanagetheproductionisnew.Itisimpossibleadecadeago,however,itisthemostobviousexampleofmanagementwithoutmanyemployees.無老師平庸范例：Thisstatementiswrong,andtheanotherreasonforthisisthatitcannotseethetechnologyisdevelo,anditliberatesourhumanfromhardworkanditmakesmachinesandcomputersdothejobsthatpeopledo.Weallknowthatmanyfarmownersaremanagingtheirfarmsbythemostadvancemachines.Atthesametime,itisnotnewthatmanypeopleareusingcomputerstomanagethefactories.Buttheyareimposibbleinmanyyearsago,buttoday,theyarethemostobviousexamplesofhowarunwithoutmanypeople.statementisfalseisthatitneglectsthegrowingpowerofmoderntechnology,whichreleasespeoplefromtheirlaborandputmachinesandcomputersinmachinesandcomputersin ceswhichemployeesoccupy.Thisstatementiswrong,andtheanotherreasonforthisisthatitcannotseethetechnologyisdevelo,anditliberatesourhumanfromhardwork,anditmakesmachinesandcomputersdothejobsthatpeopledo.從開頭我們就一下能辨別Thisstatementiswrong，幾乎就是字對字的把單詞堆砌起來的，但是優(yōu)秀范例首先一個anotherfalsewrong。接下來，優(yōu)growingpower寫的也是很貼切，而不是像平庸范例寫的technologyisdevelo句型寫的這么簡單Anotherreasonwhythestatementisfalseisthatit是releases…..from…..用的很好，第二個是put…….inces,兩makesmachinesandcomputersdothejobs，拿過來的時候，我們就會發(fā)employeesoriginallyoccupy，這里originallyoccupyoriginally，那就說明，now，do來，do去的，過于口語化。Itisacommonphenomenonnowtremendousfarmlandarebeingwellorganizedunderthecontrolofmerelyitsownertakingadvantageofthemostadvancedmachines.Weallknowthatmanyfarmownersaremanagingtheirfarmsbythemostadvancemachines.Itiscommonphenomenonnowthat顯得非常的，頗有一種“縱觀古~\(≧▽≦)/~Weallknowthat，就好像是“大伙想想，是不是這個理”tremendousfarmlandarebeingwellorganized強調(diào)現(xiàn)在已經(jīng)是正在實行的情況，其二，underthe很的byng。而且優(yōu)秀范例最后還用了伴隨狀語takingadvantageof，使得句式很多樣化，而且其本身還是一個固定搭配takeadvantageof，更是給自己加分！Also,factoriesthat“hires”computerstomanagethemassproductionisnolongernews.Atthesametimeitisnotnewthatmanypeopleareusingcomputerstomanagethefactories.hires，而不是buyhirecomputerscomputers取代了人的位置。其次，massproductionfactoryproductionassemblyline，不見得有多好，但是代表自己掌nolongernews也得很漂亮，用否定的方式，來表達肯定的意思，這個東西已decadesago,buttheynowobviousexamplesofhowacouldberunwithoutemployees.Buttheyareimposibbleinmanyyearsagobuttodaytheyarethemostobviou