高考概要寫作公開課

高考概要寫作公開課第1頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Whatisagoodsummary?概要寫作評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第五檔（21–25points）：1.理解準(zhǔn)確，涵蓋所有要點2.準(zhǔn)確使用相應(yīng)的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯3.完全使用自己的語言。(60-80W)4.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊contents(內(nèi)容)languageskills(語言)structure(結(jié)構(gòu))第2頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Onceuponatime,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforever.Ifyouboughtacarorastove,itwasaonce-in-a-lifetimeinvestment.Youpaidgoodmoneyforit,andyoutookcareofit.Nowadaysindustryhaspersuadedusthatproductscouldn’tlastalongtime.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Justthinkofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyle.Thinkoftheexpensivepackagingmaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisbought.Andweshoppershavetopayforthatmaterial!Ourindustrialsocietyhasturnedusintospoiledchildren.Thiswastefulnesshasgotusintothegreattroubleweareinnow.Whenwehavenoresourcesleft,thenwewillstarttotakecareofwhatwehave.Butwhycan’tweactbeforethishappens?Whycan’twetrytobuildasocietyinwhichthepreventionofwasteisavirtue?（182W）第3頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Step1.Understandthewholepassageandgraspthekeypoints.第4頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Onceuponatime,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforever.Ifyouboughtacarorastove,itwasaonce-in-a-lifetimeinvestment.Youpaidgoodmoneyforit,andyoutookcareofit.Nowadaysindustryhaspersuadedusthatproductscouldn’tlastalongtime.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Justthinkofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyle.Thinkoftheexpensivepackagingmaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisbought.Andweshoppershavetopayforthatmaterial!Ourindustrialsocietyhasturnedusintospoiledchildren.Thiswastefulnesshasgotusintothegreattroubleweareinnow.Whenwehavenoresourcesleft,thenwewillstarttotakecareofwhatwehave.Butwhycan’tweactbeforethishappens?Whycan’twetrytobuildasocietyinwhichthepreventionofwasteisavirtue?第5頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四概要寫作難點1Howtogetthekeypointsquicklyandcorrectly?(如何快速、準(zhǔn)確地捕捉要點)抓住主題句或關(guān)鍵信息，忽略次要信息第6頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Para1：Onceuponatime,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforever.Ifyouboughtacarorastove,itwasaonce-in-a-lifetimeinvestment.Youpaidgoodmoneyforit,andyoutookcareofit.detailedexample忽略具體事例topicsentence概要寫作難點2Howtoexpressthekeypointsbyusingyourownwordsproperly?

(如何靈活詮釋，規(guī)避抄襲的嫌疑)characteristics第7頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Onceuponatime,industrialgoodsweremadetolastforever.___________________,industrialgoodsweremade_____________________.Sometimeago;Inthepast;Decadesagotobeusedforalongtimetofunctionwellforalongtime;durable近義詞替換第8頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Youpaidgoodmoneyforit,

andyoutookcareofit.Decadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurable.spentmuchmoneyontreasuretreatitkindlyYouspentmuchmoneyonitandtreasureit.Decadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurableYouspentmuchmoneyonitandtreasureit.Para1.useitcarefully第9頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Nowadaysindustryhaspersuadedusthatproductscouldn’tlastalongtime.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Justthinkofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyle.Thinkoftheexpensivepackagingmaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisbought.Andweshoppershavetopayforthatmaterial!topicsentencedetailedexamplescharacteristicsresult忽略具體事例第10頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Nowadaysindustryhaspersuadedusthatproductscouldn’tlastalongtime.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Justthinkofthecarsthataretradeddaily,justbecausetheyareoutofstyle.Thinkoftheexpensivepackagingmaterialthatisthrownawayeverytimeanewobjectisbought.Andweshoppershavetopayforthatmaterial!第11頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四1.Nowadaysindustryhaspersuadedusthatproductscouldn’tlastalongtime.2.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.3.Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.ModernIndustrymadeusbelieveconvincednotpermanentModernindustryhasconvinced

usthatproducts

arenotpermanent.short-lived近義詞替換第12頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四2.Itischeapertothrowthemawaythantorepairthem.Tothrowthemawayischeaperthantorepairthem.Itismoreexpensivetorepairthemthantothrowthemaway.改變主語（形式主語）正話反說、反話正說第13頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Thishasleddirectlytothe“throw-awaysociety”whichisagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.whichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.改變句式resultin第14頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Modernindustryhasconvinced

usthatproducts

arenotpermanent.Tothrowthemawayischeaperthantorepairthem,

whichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Para2.第15頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Para3：提煉相關(guān)信息Ourindustrialsocietyhasturnedusintospoiledchildren.Thiswastefulnesshasgotusintothegreattroubleweareinnow.Whenwehavenoresourcesleft,thenwewillstarttotakecareofwhatwehave.Butwhycan’tweactbeforethishappens?Whycan’twetrytobuildasocietyinwhichthepreventionofwasteisavirtue?過渡句Weneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolateThiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftrouble.Wearerunningoutofresourcesandweneedtotakeaction.第16頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Thiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftrouble.Wearerunningoutofresourcesandweneedtotakeaction.Weneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolate.Para3.Thiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftrouble.Wearerunningoutofresources.Weneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolate.第17頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Decadesago,industrialgoodsweremadedurable.Wespentmuchmoneyonitandtreasureit.Modernindustryhasconvinced

usthatproducts

arenotpermanent.Tothrowthemawayischeaperthantorepairthem,whichhasresultedinagreatwasteoftheearth’sresources.Thiswastefulnesshascausedusalotoftrouble.Wearerunningoutofresources.Weneedtosaveresourcesbeforeit’stoolate.(71W)Polishyourwriting有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊19~21分However,Therefore,第18頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Step1：Step2:Step3:Step4:讀懂文章大意抓住主題句或關(guān)鍵信息，忽略次要信息Howtowriteagoodsummary?Conclusion靈活運用語言，對關(guān)鍵信息進行改編添加有效連接成分，使概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊第19頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Thefoodweeatseemstohaveagreateffectonourhealth.Althoughsciencehasmadebigstepsinmakingfoodmorefittoeat,ithas,atthesametime,mademanyfoodsunfittoeat.Someresearchhasshownthatperhapseightypercentofhumanillnessisrelatedtofoodandfortypercentofcancerisrelatedtofoodaswell.Thatfoodisrelatedtoillnessisnotanewdiscovery.In1945,someresearchersrealizedthatthingscommonlyusedtokeepcolourinmeatsandotherfoodadditives（添加劑）causedcancer.

Yet,theseadditivesremaininourfood,anditisdifficulttoknowwhichthingsonthewrappings（包裝）offoodsarehelpfulorharmful.Theadditiveswhichweeatarenotallsodirect.Farmersoftengivepenicillintotheiranimals,andbecauseofthis,penicillinhasbeenfoundinthemilkofcows.Sometimessimilartingsaresuppliedtoanimalsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomakeaprofit.

Thefarmersaresimplytryingtofattentheanimalsinordertogetahigherpriceonthemarket.Althoughsomecountrieshavetriedtocontrolsuchthings,thepracticecontinues.（201W）第20頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Thefoodweeatseemstohaveagreateffectonourhealth.Althoughsciencehasmadebigstepsinmakingfoodmorefittoeat,ithas,atthesametime,mademanyfoodsunfittoeat.Someresearchhasshownthatperhapseightypercentofhumanillnessisrelatedtofoodandfortypercentofcancerisrelatedtofoodaswell.Thatfoodisrelatedtoillnessisnotanewdiscovery.In1945,someresearchersrealizedthatthingscommonlyusedtokeepcolourinmeatsandotherfoodadditives（添加劑）causedcancer.

Para1：第21頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

(1.)Thefoodweeatseemstohaveagreateffectonourhealth.(2.)Althoughsciencehasmadebigstepsinmakingfoodmorefittoeat,ithas,atthesametime,mademanyfoodsunfittoeat.(3.)Someresearchhasshownthatperhapseightypercentofhumanillnessisrelatedtofoodandfortypercentofcancerisrelatedtofoodaswell.1.Ourfoodaffectsourhealth.

2.Although

sciencehasgreatlyimproved

thequalityofourfoods,

someare

stillunsafe

toeat.第22頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四(3.)Someresearchhasshownthatperhapseightypercentofhumanillnessisrelatedtofoodandfortypercentofcancerisrelatedtofoodaswell.3.Researchhasprovedthatmostofourdiseasesarecausedbyfood,includingcancer.

第23頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Ourfoodaffectsourhealth.

Although

sciencehasgreatlyimprovethequalityofourfoods,

someare

stillunsafe

toeat.Researchhasprovedthatmostofourdiseasesarecausedbyfood,includingcancer.

Para1：第24頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Para2：Yet,theseadditivesremaininourfood,anditisdifficulttoknowwhichthingsonthewrappings(包裝)offoodsarehelpfulorharmful.Theadditiveswhichweeatarenotallsodirect.Farmersoftengivepenicillintotheiranimals,andbecauseofthis,penicillinhasbeenfoundinthemilkofcows.Sometimessimilartingsaresuppliedtoanimalsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomakeaprofit.

第25頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

(1.)Yet,theseadditivesremaininourfood,anditisdifficulttoknowwhichthingsonthewrappingsoffoodsarehelpfulorharmful.(2.)Theadditiveswhichweeatarenotallsodirect.(3.)Sometimessimilartingsaresuppliedtoanimalsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomakeaprofit.

1.Wecanhardlytell

whether

theadditivesinourfood

areharmfulornot.2.

Theyaffectourbodyindirectly.

第26頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四(3.)Sometimessimilartingsaresuppliedtoanimalsnotfortheirhealth,butjusttomakeaprofit.

3.

Somefarmersraisetheiranimalswithadditivestoearnmoremoney.第27頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Wecanhardlytell

whether

theadditivesinourfood

areharmfulornot.Theyaffectourbodyindirectly.Somefarmersraisetheiranimalswithadditivestoearnmoremoney.Para2：第28頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Para3：Thefarmersaresimplytryingtofattentheanimalsinordertogetahigherpriceonthemarket.Althoughsomecountrieshavetriedtocontrolsuchthings,thepracticecontinues.Somecountrieshavetakenmeasurestostopsuchthings,butinvain.第29頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Ourfoodaffectsourhealth.

Although

sciencehasgreatlyimprovedthequalityofourfoods,

someare

stillunsafe

toeat.Researchhasprovedthatmostofourdiseasesarecausedbyfood,includingcancer.

Wecanhardlytell

whether

theadditivesinourfood

areharmfulornot.Theyaffectourbodyindirectly.Somefarmersraisetheiranimalswithadditivestoearnmoremoney.Somecountrieshavetakenmeasurestostopsuchthings,butinvain.(77W)it有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使概要結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊because∧第30頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

Weightlossismostlikelytobesuccessfulwhenpeoplechangetheirhabits.Hereareseveralwaystomakethathappen.Regularphysicalactivityburnscaloriesandbuildsmuscles---bothofwhichhelpyoulookandfeelgoodandkeepweightoff.Walkingthefamilydog,cyclingtoschool,anddoingotherthingsthatincreaseyourdailylevelofactivitycanallmakeadifference.Onereasonpeoplegetlessexercisethesedaysisbecauseofanincreasein“screentime”---theamountoftimespentwatchingTV,lookingatthecomputer,orplayingvideogames.Limitrecreationalscreentimetolessthan2hoursperday.Whenyoureallygetawayfrom“screens”,suchasTV,computers,IPadormobilephones,youwillreallybenefitalot.Portionsizesarebiggerthantheyusedtobe,andtheseextracaloriescontributetoobesity.Anotherkeyfactorinweightgainisthatmorepeopledrinksugarydrinks,suchassodas,juicedrinks,andsportsdrinks.Sochoosesmallerportions(orsharerestaurantportions)andgoforwaterorlow-fatmildinsteadofsoda.Peoplewhoskipbreakfastoftenfeelsohungrythattheyeatmorelateron.Sotheygetmorecaloriesthantheywouldhaveiftheyatebreakfast.Infact,peoplewhoskipbreakfasttendtohavehigherBIMsthanpeoplewhoeatbreakfast.Ifyoureallyputtheaboveintopracticeatonce,youwilldefinitelyreduceyourweightgradually.Andwishyouhaveagoodfigure.第31頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

Weightlossismostlikelytobesuccessfulwhenpeoplechangetheirhabits.Hereareseveralwaystomakethathappen.Regularphysicalactivityburnscaloriesandbuildsmuscles---bothofwhichhelpyoulookandfeelgoodandkeepweightoff.Walkingthefamilydog,cyclingtoschool,anddoingotherthingsthatincreaseyourdailylevelofactivitycanallmakeadifference.

Changingsomehabitsmaybeagoodwaytoloseweight.Ifpeoplechangetheirhabits,theywillsurelysucceedinlosingweight.Whetherpeoplecanloseweightornotdependsontheirlivinghabits.Takingmorephysicalexercisewillmakemuchdifferencetopeople’shealth.Increasingtheamountofregularexercisewillbenefitpeoplealot.第32頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

Onereasonpeoplegetlessexercisethesedaysisbecauseofanincreasein“screentime”---theamountoftimespentwatchingTV,lookingatthecomputer,orplayingvideogames.Limitrecreationalscreentimetolessthan2hoursperday.Whenyoureallygetawayfrom“screens”,suchasTV,computers,IPadormobilephones,youwillreallybenefitalot.Portionsizesarebiggerthantheyusedtobe,andtheseextracaloriescontributetoobesity.Anotherkeyfactorinweightgainisthatmorepeopledrinksugarybeverages,suchassodas,juicedrinks,andsportsdrinks.Sochoosesmallerportions(orsharerestaurantportions)andgoforwaterorlow-fatmilkinsteadofsoda.Itisnecessarytolimit“screentime”ifpeoplewanttoloseweight.Wearesupposedtoreduce“screentime”.Stickingtosmallerportionsandavoidingsugarydrinkscontributetoweightloss.Watchingoutforportionsizesanddrinkingwaterinsteadofsugarydrinksarealsoakeytoweightloss.第33頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

Peoplewhoskipbreakfastoftenfeelsohungrythattheyeatmorelateron.Sotheygetmorecaloriesthantheywouldhaveiftheyatebreakfast.Infact,peoplewhoskipbreakfasttendtohavehigherBIMsthanpeoplewhoeatbreakfast.Ifyoureallyputtheaboveintopracticeatonce,youwilldefinitelyreduceyourweightgradually.Andwishyouhaveagoodfigure.Peopleshouldavoidskippingbreakfast.Skippingbreakfastisactuallynotawisewaytoloseweight.Peoplewillhaveagoodfigureiftheytaketheabovesuggestions.第34頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四

Changingsomehabitsmaybeagoodwaytoloseweight.Takingmorephysicalexercisewillmakemuchdifferencetopeople’shealth.Wearesupposedtoreduce“screentime”.Stickingtosmallerportionsandavoidingsugarydrinkscontributetoweightloss.Peopleshouldavoidskippingbreakfast.Peoplewillhaveagoodfigureiftheytaketheabovesuggestions.(58W)

First,

Meanwhile,

Besides

Finally第35頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四Ratseatourfoodormakeitsodirtythatitisn'tfitforpeopleatall.That'swhypeopleoftenkillthembylayingdownpoison.Afteradayortwo,theyfindthepoisonstillthere.Theratshaven'ttouchedit,eventhoughitisnearthefoodwhichtheyeat.Peoplethinktheymustbecleverandcunning.Somescientistshavebeentryingtofindthebestwaytopoisonrats.Theyhavewatchedtoseejustwhataratdoesdayandnight.Theyhavefoundoutthatratsaren'tsoclever.Theyarejustveryshy.

Ratsusuallyliveinholes.Theyrunfromtheseholestotheplaceswheretheyeatanddrink.Theyhavespecialpathsonwhichtheytraveleachtime.Sotheyknowtheirpathsquitewell.

Ifanythingnew,suchasstoneorwood,isputinthepath,theratswon'tgonearitatfirstastheyaretoofrightened.Itwilltakethemmanydaystogetoverthefear.Theyarealsofrightenedtogonearaplacethattheyknow,wheresomethinghasbeentakenaway.Ifapathgoesaroundarock,theratsfollowthesamepatharoundtherockeachtime.Iftherockistakenaway,theywillstillrunroundtheplacewheretherockwas!Theywon'tcrosstheemptyplace,whichisnowopentothem,eventhoughitwouldbequicker.

Ratswillalwayskeepawayfromanythingunusualtothem.That'swhytheywon'teatpoisononthefirstorsecondnight.Theyusuallywon'tgoanywherenearitforaboutfourdaysuntiltheygetusedtobeingthere.Eventhentheyonlyeatalittleatatime.Ifpeoplewanttokillratswithpoison,alltheyhavetodoistoleaveitoutforafewdays.Oncetheratshavegotusedtoit,theywilleatitanddie.（331W）第36頁，共41頁，2023年，2月20日，星期四(1).Ratseatourfoodormakeitsodirtythatitisn'tfitforpeopleatall.(2).That'swhypeopleoftenkillthembylayingdownpoison.(3).Afteradayortwo,theyfindthepoisonstillthere.(4).Theratshaven'ttouchedit,eventhoughitisnearthefoodwhichtheyeat.(5).Peoplethinktheymustbecleverandcunning.(6).Somescientistshavebeentryingto