人教版高中英語讀后續(xù)寫之故事的邏輯性課件

1、Continuation Writing- How to write a reasonable story 1Continuation Writing11. Acknowledge basic rules of continuation writing 2. Learn to explore useful information in reading3. Learn to develop coherent emotion and logical plot line 4. Learn to polish and upgrade sentencesLearning Objectives21. Ac

2、knowledge basic rules of 什么是讀后續(xù)寫？提供一篇350詞左右的閱讀材料（一般是記敘文，且以事件發(fā)生的時(shí)間為序）。根據(jù)該材料的內(nèi)容情節(jié)等，續(xù)寫兩段，150詞左右（每個(gè)段落都給出了第一句），將其發(fā)展為一篇邏輯合理情節(jié)完整的短文。3什么是讀后續(xù)寫？提供一篇350詞左右的閱讀材料（一般是記敘文讀后續(xù)寫考查什么？核心素養(yǎng)：思維品質(zhì)：想象能力和創(chuàng)新精神語言能力：閱讀和寫作具體說來，四個(gè)方面：把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語言特點(diǎn)的能力創(chuàng)造性思維能力對語篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力語言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性4讀后續(xù)寫考查什么？核心素養(yǎng)：具體說來，四個(gè)方面：4評分細(xì)則評分檔次第一條第二條第三條第四條第五檔（2

3、1-25分）與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接合理。內(nèi)容豐富。所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第四檔（16-20分）與所給短文融合度較高，與所提供的 各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。內(nèi)容比較豐富。所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第三檔（11-15分）與所給短文關(guān)系較為密切，與所提供的 各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。寫出了若干有關(guān)內(nèi)容。應(yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求，雖有一些錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。

4、應(yīng)用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。第二檔（6-10分）與所給短文有一定的關(guān)系，與所提供的各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接寫出了一些有關(guān)內(nèi)容。語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有些語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響了意義的表達(dá)。較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。第一檔（1-5分）與所提供的短文和開頭語的銜接較差。產(chǎn)出內(nèi)容較少。語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，嚴(yán)重影響了意義的表達(dá)。缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容連貫。與原文劇情融洽，邏輯且合理續(xù)寫內(nèi)容豐富有看點(diǎn)語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯多樣準(zhǔn)確語句間銜接自然，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊5評分細(xì)則評分檔次第一條第二條第三條第四條第五檔與所給短文融

5、合解題思路讀懂原文情節(jié)回扣原文，結(jié)合段首句確定情節(jié)走向組織細(xì)節(jié)擬寫草稿豐富潤色細(xì)節(jié)6解題思路讀懂原文情節(jié)回扣原文，結(jié)合段首句確定情節(jié)走向組織細(xì)節(jié)77Challenge yourself1. Do bears attack people?2. Where did the event happen?3. How many people were mentioned in the event? Who were they?6. Would the two boys in danger?4. How did Sam and David feel when they talked about the b

6、ear?5. What would the bear do when it sensed the presence of two boys?8Challenge yourself1. Do bears Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was

7、 reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a

8、 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious

9、about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,

10、” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam. “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”9Do bears attack people? The an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bea

11、r may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the win

12、dow of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 10 “We can put some food in t續(xù)寫的兩個(gè)段落的段首句（已給出）Paragraph 1:Just the

13、n, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 11續(xù)寫的兩個(gè)段落的段首句（已給出）Paragraph 1:111212Challenge yourself1. Do bears attack people?2. Where did the event happen?3. How many people were mentioned in the event? Who were they?6. Would the two boys in

14、 danger?4. How did Sam and David feel when they talked about the bear?5. What would the bear do when it sensed the presence of two boys?13Challenge yourself1. Do bears Who attack?feel ?WhereWhat did the bear do?danger?certainly positive (yes !)David, Sam, parents, Mrs Brown, policeman the bear would

15、 attack them. backyard of Davids familyexcited and eager to see the bearwould be in danger if nescesary help was absent Background InformationBackground Information 14 Who attack?feel ?WhStep 1 精讀文章Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were c

16、oncerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was f

17、ound. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backy

18、ard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it

19、,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?” “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees

20、 it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some lef

21、tovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.出現(xiàn)熊襲擊事件，警察警告Sam和David渴望親眼見到熊熊非常貪吃商量以食物為誘餌吸引熊待大人出門時(shí)開始行動等待熊的出現(xiàn)時(shí)有點(diǎn)不耐煩了15Step 1 精讀文章Do bears attack peoStep 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coher

22、ent in emotion logical in plot 情感連貫 情節(jié)合理 符合邏輯 符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合16Step 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coherent iStep 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感連貫 情節(jié)合理 符合邏輯 符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合17Step 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coherent iDo bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a s

23、mall city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sigh

24、tings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had app

25、eared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run

26、away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”18Do bears attack people? The

27、an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone

28、at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of th

29、e backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 19 “We can put some food in t “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, s

30、till in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear.

31、 Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 20 “We can put some food in tdevelopment of emotion line 情感線Sam and David felt _ to see the bear, and got _ when they cant so when they finally saw the

32、 bear, they ought to feel _so when the bear noticed them they ought to feel_but the bear would _ thembecause it was fierceexcited and eagerexcitedso frightened / scaredattack Para 1Para 2bored21development of emotion line 情感excited and eagerboredexcited / Para 1scared / Para 222excited and eagerbore

33、dexcited Sam感到害怕了？說好的興奮呢？23tip: coherent in emotion !Sam感到害怕了？說好的興奮呢？23tip: coherendevelopment of plot line 情節(jié)線Sam and David felt _ to see the bearWhat would the boys and the bear do when the bear came in?why would the bear looked up?what would happen between bear and two boys?will the boys die?but

34、the bear would _ themonce they saw Sam and Davidexcited and eagerattack Para 1Para 224development of plot line 情節(jié)線Sa “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any n

35、oise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed

36、and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 25 “We can put some food in t如果沒發(fā)現(xiàn)，如何和第二段開頭看見銜接？26tip: logical between Para1 and Para2 !如果沒發(fā)現(xiàn)，如何和第二段開頭看見銜接？26tip: logi第一段就已經(jīng)深

37、情對視了？27tip: logical in plot !第一段就已經(jīng)深情對視了？27tip: logical in 劇情神反轉(zhuǎn) 28劇情神反轉(zhuǎn) 28Do bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So people in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV st

38、ation. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report any bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier

39、this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had alw

40、ays dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would re

41、turn for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”29Do bears attack people? The an熊壯慫人膽？熊被人喊跑了？30tip: common sense熊壯慫人膽？熊被人喊跑了？30tip: common se史上最佛系的熊 31史上最佛系的熊 31在熊的注視下表演裝死？32在熊的注視下表演裝死？32熊和孩子們分享食物？畫面美好得不忍直視。33熊和孩子們分享食物？畫面美好得不忍直視。

42、33腦洞開得有點(diǎn)大！34tip: logical ending is appreciated ! 腦洞開得有點(diǎn)大！34tip: logical ending 人與動物和諧相處？大圓滿結(jié)局?35人與動物和諧相處？大圓滿結(jié)局?35Step 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coherent in emotion logical in plot 情感連貫 情節(jié)合理 符合邏輯 符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合36Step 2 理清思路兩“情”相悅： coherent iDo bears attack people? The answer is certainly positive. So p

43、eople in a small city in Colorado were concerned. Why? Last week, a large black bear attacked a familys coop and ate the chickens. It was reported by a local TV station. At the end of the news report, a policeman asked local residents to keep waste, pet food and even birdseed inside, and to report a

44、ny bear sightings until the animal was found. The policeman also told people to always stay away from the bear when they saw it. Sam is a 12-year-old boy. Earlier this week, he came to that small city to visit his uncles family with his mother. His uncles son, David, was very excited about the bear

45、that had appeared in his neighbors backyard. “Sam, there is a bear in our city,” soon after Sam arrived, David told him. Sam was curious about bears and he had always dreamed of watching one. “Really?” he asked excitedly. “Yes. It went into Mrs Browns backyard last week. It ate all her chickens. But

46、 it had run away and I didnt even see it,” said David. Sam listened with his eyes wide open. “Would it return?” he asked. “Very probably,” said David, “it would return for food.” At last, he asked Sam, “Do you want to see the bear?” Sam immediately nodded. Then he asked, “But how?”37Do bears attack

47、people? The an “We can put some food in the backyard. When the bear sees it, he will come in and eat it. But we should be careful. The bear may attack us if he sees us. So we should never make any noise.” Sam nodded again, still in excitement. Later that day, the adults all went out, leaving the two

48、 boys alone at home. Soon they started to take action. They put some leftovers from lunch in the backyard. Then they waited behind the window of the kitchen and waited curiously. But an hour passed and they didnt see a bear. Finally, they got bored.Paragraph 1:Just then, they saw something big at th

49、e gate of the backyard. Paragraph 2:When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. 38 “We can put some food in tbefore the bear came(Reading part)after the bear came(Para 1)after the bear saw the boys(Para 2)bearate all of her chicken David and Samexcited and eager to see the bear their parentswent out Mrs Br

50、ownate all of her chicken policeasked and warned might notice the bear finally saw itso excited might be attackedso frightened could ask the policecould come to their rescuecould come to their rescue39tip: add up some logical plots if necessary ! ate the leafoverattack? caught?run away? before the b

51、ear cameafter the Step 3 擬寫草稿怎樣讓記敘文生動起來？動作描寫3-5個(gè)表情或心理3-5個(gè)對話1-2個(gè)環(huán)境描寫1-2個(gè)話題激活詞匯：動作：step out, tighten, lose balance, shoot, apologize, forgive 情感：excitement, curious, frightened, scared, fierce, ashamed 環(huán)境：scenery40Step 3 擬寫草稿怎樣讓記敘文生動起來？40對話太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41對話太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step 4 潤色成篇潤色包括動作情感環(huán)境類的生動描寫，

52、豐富詞匯和語法句型的打磨升級等Tips:1. 動作，情感，環(huán)境類描寫日常積累。2. 豐富詞匯和語法句型日常積累。（時(shí)態(tài)語態(tài)，定語從句，名詞性從句，狀語從句，非謂語動詞，倒裝句式，強(qiáng)調(diào)句式，It形式主語句，虛擬語氣.）3. 對話酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42Step 4 潤色成篇潤色包括動作情感環(huán)境類的生動描寫，豐富 Just then, they saw something big at the gate of the backyard. Upon seeing the bear coming in, the two boys eyes twinkled with excitement. He

53、looked into the backyard. Obviously, he saw the leftover. He pushed open the door and came in. He looked around, and seeing no one in the backyard, he then started enjoying the food. So curious was Sam that he unconsciously stepped out of the house in order to watch the bear closely. It seemed as if

54、 the bear were safe enough to be closed to. 連貫動作二 / 非謂語做原因狀語情感一動作一43動作三 / 倒裝情感二 / 虛擬語氣 Just then, they saw somet When the bear looked up, he saw Sam. At the sight of the fierce bear, Sam felt so scared thathis throat tightened and his knees feltweak. So was David, who froze with terror, too scared t

55、o move an inch. Sam lost his balance,staggered backandtoppled over. Just at the moment, their parents, together with the police, rushed in, shooting the bear. So ashamed were they that they couldfeelthe blood rush totheirface. They apologized to their parents, who forgave them finally, reminding them to be always aware of such dangerous animals as the bear.情感三 / 結(jié)果狀從情感四動作四 / 連續(xù)動作同做謂語動作五，轉(zhuǎn)折（高潮）/ 非謂語做伴隨狀語44情感五 / 倒裝動作（結(jié)