高考英語滿分作文賞析

1、一.用詞準確;表達地道【北京卷】【試題回放】第一節(jié)情景作文（20 分 ）美國中學生jeff 將要來你所在的紅星中學學習中文，經(jīng)協(xié)商安排住在你家。假設你是李華，請給 Jeff寫一封信，按照下圖順序介紹他來中國后的生活安排。注意： 1. 信的開頭已為你寫好。2.詞數(shù)不少于60。Dear Jeff,I m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I m very happy to learn that you reaygowinitgh tmoyst family while you re in Beijing.While you are here, we

2、ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. You ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon we ll eat at the school dining hall. I m sure you ll like the delicious Chinesthere, a

3、nd enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. It ll be a lot of fun.If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We ll try our best to make your stay here inBeiji

4、ng a pleasant experience.Best wishes,Li Hua名師點評這篇文章的特點還是比較清晰的，第一，作者根據(jù)圖畫將文章的要點概括完整，內(nèi)容充實而豐富，結(jié)構緊湊，有層次感;第二，本文沒有采用華麗的辭藻，但用詞十分恰當，段落過渡自然，令人耳目一新?！景不站怼俊驹囶}回放】假如你是李華，美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信，假如你是李華，美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信，主要內(nèi)容如下：l 表示贊成。l 提出你喜歡的欄目。l 簡要說明理

5、由。注意：1. 詞數(shù) 100 左右。2. 新的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好。3. 適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。4. 參考欄目：欄目 columnDear Mr. Green,I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say

6、,“ culture express ”gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improv

7、e oral English. Last but not least, “ entertainment ” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are stcohcyaand attractive that you absolutely can t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.Well, I can t list more. I really can t wait to read that magazine!Yours faithfully

8、,Li Hua【名師點評】這是一篇滿分作文。由于這篇作文的出現(xiàn)，導致了安徽省該年的英語作文分數(shù)普遍偏低。仔細分析了這篇文章，寫的的確是好，很地道的美式英語，一些詞語的大膽使用，讓人不得不猜測此人或者是家人可能有過國外生活的經(jīng)歷，否則這么地道標準的英語，可不是一朝一夕所能寫出來的。比如說： my cupof tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy 和 trendy 的大膽運用，list, cant waitto 簡直是 perfect! 況且文章中沒有一個錯誤，不管是書寫還是語法。英語

9、能夠?qū)W到這種程度，不可謂不讓人佩服。二 . 非謂語動詞為作文添彩【北京卷】【試題回放】情景作文假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，為響應綠化祖國的號召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動”專欄寫一篇以“ GreenAction in Our Class 為題的英文稿件。 ”注意：詞數(shù)不少于60提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbsApril 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycle

10、d to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before lea

11、ving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it s our duty to protect and beautify oruenvironment.【名師點評】本文是設計巧妙的提綱要點式作文，與環(huán)保結(jié)合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點連貫，在語言的表達上選詞新穎，同時運用了分詞短語作狀語等較好的句式表達?！颈本┚怼俊驹囶}回放】開放作文請根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文，詞數(shù)不少于50In your sp

12、oken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. Heis holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold ch

13、opsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodlesthat he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticare the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hardway. Maybe using one

14、 fo rk will do a better job, In my opinion, we don t need to copy othersways ofthSometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.【名師點評】本文是開放性作文，要求考生把握好圖畫內(nèi)容，發(fā)散表達?？忌攸c要看出這個人是卷發(fā)高鼻的外國人，要體會到西式刀叉對中式食物的矛盾性。行文結(jié)構十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準確。三 . 復合句為寫作增色【全國卷】【試題回放】假定你是李華，從小喜愛大熊貓(panda),一直通過有關網(wǎng)站(website)關注三年前

15、在美國圣迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳 ”和她的母親“白云 ”?，F(xiàn)在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據(jù)以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信：自我介紹;2 、 祝賀蘇琳生日;3 、 感謝工作人員;4、索取蘇琳三歲生日照。注意：1、詞數(shù)100 左右;2、可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。例文：Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!I m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to

16、 learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I ve been watching her grow on yourwebsite,. Now she s going to be three. I d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you foryour hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the

17、 US.By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.Yours truly,Li Hua【名師點評】本文寫作的內(nèi)容要點如下：.自我介紹；2.信息來源；3.祝賀生日；4.感謝口顧索取照片；6.合適的結(jié)尾。這封信格式正確，行文規(guī)范，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開頭及結(jié)尾、結(jié)束語均表達到位。文 章行文活潑，感情真摯，語言表述準確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情， 以及希望自己愿望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理，

18、結(jié)合了簡單句和復合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。積累卡片英漢互譯好tffj adj.欣喜的，快樂的v.表達 birth to v.產(chǎn)生，生育好句 I d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.我祝福它生日快樂并且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國

19、過著幸福和健康的生活?！救珖鞩I】【試題回放】一家賓館新開業(yè)，為吸引外國賓客，希望在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上進行宣傳。請你用英語為其寫一篇文字介紹。主要內(nèi)容包括：1地點：距白山入口處 500米；.房間及價格：單人間（共20間），100元/天;雙人間（共15間），150元/天;熱水淋??；3.餐飲：餐廳（中、 西餐），咖啡廳（茶、咖啡）;4.游泳池：全天免費開放；5.歡迎預定。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右，開頭語已為你寫好；2.可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for busines

20、s.500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double 小.person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western

21、food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.【名師點評】本文開門見山，首先點明了主旨。本文最大的特點是應用了很多比較復雜的句式，使

22、文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結(jié)構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語從句的使用也很正確?？偟貋碚f，文章句式精煉，是篇不錯的滿分作文。積累卡片英漢互譯好詞 1. provide v.提供 2. convenience n.便利好句 All these services can bring great convenience to you and arevery enjoyable.所有這些服務都會給你帶來便利，并且非常的愉快。評析： bring great convenience , 帶來便利?！局貞c卷】 【試題回放】據(jù)報道，7歲的美國女孩 Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌（lung c

23、ancer）后處于極度的痛苦之中，美國抗癌協(xié)、會（ACS）決定，每當Amy收到一封慰問信，就給她增加3美分的治療款。假如你是新華中學的學生李華，請你用英文給 Amy寫一封慰問信，主要內(nèi)容包括：自我介紹得知的情況表示鼓勵打算為她做什么祝她早日康復注意：.信的格式已為你寫好.信中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實情況。.詞數(shù)100左右。.請在答題卡上作答。Dear Amy,I m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain.

24、 But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I m sure you will win. IthiatrehsoAedetica anti-cancer associationwill donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends a

25、nd ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.Yours,Li Hua名師點評本文依照要求，涵蓋了所有要點。 文章使用了高中常見的句式，如Im sorry to hear that., It is reportedthat.等，都比較好。作者對定語從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章，行文自然而通順，值得學習。積累卡片好tffJ v.意識到v.允諾v.捐贈好句 1. I 可 m sorry to hear that y

26、ou got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌，給你帶來了巨大的痛苦。好處：which引導限制性定語從句。. So, stand up and fight against the disease!因此，堅強地與疾病做斗爭吧！好處：擲地有聲，語言準確。四.結(jié)構清晰，句式準確【江蘇卷】【試題回放】2007年4月29日上午10點到11點，全國億萬學生陽光體育活動在各地大中小學校同時進行，江蘇省1, 100萬學生積極參與了這項活動。教育部倡導學生：u每天鍛煉一小時u健康工作五十年u幸福生活一輩子請你根據(jù)以上提示，用英語準備

27、一份發(fā)言稿，向同學們講述一下陽光體育活動的有關情況，并就高 三學生是否需要每天花一小時鍛煉，談談你的看法及理由。注意：1、發(fā)言稿應包括以上所有信息，要有適當發(fā)揮。詞數(shù)：120左右。發(fā)言稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。參考詞7匚：陽光體育活動a national student sports program;教育部the Ministry of EducationGood afternoon, everyone,The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10 : 00a.m.11:00a. April 29 , 2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million stud