23和24班2015學(xué)年高二上段考一作文評(píng)講how to receive news at school

1、段考1作文Tom 有意向到你校來(lái)當(dāng)交流生，但是擔(dān)心在學(xué)校里難以獲取新聞資訊，于是向校方詢問(wèn)。假設(shè)你是交流生項(xiàng)目的負(fù)責(zé)人李華，請(qǐng)你用英文向Tom致信說(shuō)明在校獲取新聞資訊的方式。要點(diǎn)如下：1. 通過(guò)手機(jī)接收;2. 每周觀看電視新聞;3. 其他方式。注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右（信件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；2. 短文需包括所給要點(diǎn)，但不必逐句翻譯；3. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使表意清晰、行文連貫；4. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名與學(xué)校名稱。 In regard to your question about how to receive news at school, there are seve

2、ral ways to do that. To start with, news can be delivered to your smart phone and you can read it at your convenience, but please note that phones are not allowed inside the teaching building. In addition, news is shown in each classroom on Monday evenings for students to watch. There is news at hom

3、e and abroad plus school news. I hope you will enjoy the standard Chinese read in the news. For those who prefer reading newspapers, the news corner at the library is the best place, where students have access to China Daily, China Morning Post as well as some papers in the Chinese language.A possib

4、le version In regard to your question about how to receive news at school, there are several ways to do that. To start with, news can be delivered to your smart phone and you can read it at your convenience, but please note that phones are not allowed inside the teaching building. In addition, news

5、is shown in each classroom on Monday evenings for students to watch. There is news at home and abroad plus school news. I hope you will enjoy the standard Chinese read in the news. For those who prefer reading newspapers, the news corner at the library is the best place, where students have access t

6、o China Daily, China Morning Post as well as some papers in the Chinese language.A possible version1. 審題與布局行文須切中“獲取新聞資訊的方式”這個(gè)主題，但不一定要寫佛山一中的情況，可以合理想象。2. 總共只有三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，因此各要點(diǎn)要稍稍展開(kāi)，讓讀者不臨其境都可以想象, 而不能用10個(gè)8個(gè)單詞打發(fā)一個(gè)要點(diǎn)了事。3. 要點(diǎn)三，如果只給出主題句 There are still other ways to receive news at school.或者類似的帶過(guò)去，沒(méi)有點(diǎn)到具體的方式(例如pick

7、 up BBC news)，則酌情扣分。2. 連貫與首句接上：how to/ how you can receive news at school, + 領(lǐng)起句 news information要點(diǎn)之間的連貫：To start with, In addition, Besides, Last but not leastFor those who love reading newspapers,If you love reading newspapers,3. 基本表述常見(jiàn)名詞結(jié)構(gòu)：news at home and abroad, school newsdomestic news, intern

8、ational newsnews in brief （簡(jiǎn)訊） world news in brief (世界要聞)current affairsnews broadcastnewspaper stand （書報(bào)亭）3. 基本表述常見(jiàn)動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu)：receive news, read news on your phone, deliver news/ newspapers, pick up BBC/VOA programs, listen to BBC programswatch newshave access to news3. 基本表述常見(jiàn)介詞短語(yǔ)On Monday evenings,Every

9、 Monday evening,in a flash/ in an instantat your conveniencereceive news in many waysreceive news with your phone類似： hit the ball with a racket不能用 by 表示方式用 by doing sth.3. 基本表述常見(jiàn)句型：本文的焦點(diǎn)是“新聞”，可使用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，以突出主題。本文是書信， 也可以使用書信的人稱，以突出互動(dòng)。News is delivered to your phone, the moment anything important happens

10、 around the world.CCTV News is broadcast at the canteen during breakfast, lunch and supper, making it very convenient for us to know what is happening in the world.Students are allowed to bring .Mobile phones are allowed at our school.4. 改錯(cuò)1. We have a big library with plenty of newspapers, it is co

11、nvenient for you to get information.2. There is still many other ways to get information. Such as reading newspapers.4. 改錯(cuò)1. We have a big library with plenty of newspapers. It is convenient for you to get information.2. There are still many other ways to get information, such as reading newspapers.

12、首先要學(xué)會(huì)什么是一個(gè)句子4. 改錯(cuò)You can receive the news from the Internet.Students are allowed to bring mobile phone to school.There are newspapers and magazines at school library.4. 改錯(cuò)You can receive the news from the Internet.Students are allowed to bring mobile phones to school.There are newspapers and magazin

13、es at the /our school library.名詞集中在單復(fù)數(shù)、冠詞問(wèn)題 類似錯(cuò)誤多見(jiàn) read newspaper, use mobile phone4. 改錯(cuò)You can watch news on TV to know what happen in the world.2. I suggest you to read magazines from our school library.3. The news on TV are very funny.4. Dont worried.4. 改錯(cuò)You can watch news on TV to know what is

14、happening in the world.2. I suggest reading magazines from our school library.3. The news on TV is very interesting.4. Dont worry/ be worried.動(dòng)詞主要有時(shí)態(tài)和搭配問(wèn)題。In regard to your questions about the ways to get news at school, Im delighted to tell you that you dont have to worry about this. Students here

15、are allowed to take their mobile phones to school, so you can check the news easily using your own mobile phone. Besides, students can enjoy watching TV news every week, so its also a simple way for you to get to know the latest events. Furthermore, the big library in our school can provide as rich

16、information as you want, with the latest newspapers arriving every morning. In conclusion it is not hard at all to get any news you want to know at school. 5. 優(yōu)秀作文In regard to your questions about the ways to get news at school, Im delighted to tell you that you dont have to worry about this. Studen

17、ts here are allowed to take their mobile phones to school, so you can check the news easily using your own mobile phone. Besides, students can enjoy watching TV news every week, so its also a simple way for you to get to know the latest events. Furthermore, the big library in our school can provide

18、as rich information as you want, with the latest newspapers arriving every morning. In conclusion it is not hard at all to get any news you want to know at school. 5. 優(yōu)秀作文5. 優(yōu)秀作文本文特點(diǎn)： 表達(dá)地道，流暢。 語(yǔ)氣得體。 全文層次清晰連貫。 恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和句型 同時(shí)，只用了107個(gè)單詞！ In regard to your questions about the approaches of receiving the

19、 latest news, I appreciate your great concern about what is happening around us but theres no need to worry about whether it is realistic to keep in the front line of recent affairs in our school. First and foremost, you can use your mobile phone to get the latest information. With the development o

20、f network techniques, its one of the fastest ways to learn about the world. Besides, theres a period of time every week set particularly for us to watch TV news. Whats more, daily newspapers and weekly magazines are provided in our school library including English versions. So its guaranteed that various methods are available here to receive the latest news. 5. 優(yōu)秀作文5. 優(yōu)秀作文本文突出特點(diǎn)： 開(kāi)篇很有氣場(chǎng)感，并且體現(xiàn)出有很