11.5顧家北寫作集訓(xùn)營完畢范文作業(yè)小作文

1、99:動態(tài)圖 59，分子分母法，雇主雇傭人 ，兩個對比組The table gives information about the percentages of employers who could not hire workersin 2003 and 2004.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makecomparisons where relevant.A 時態(tài)：過去時對象寫兩句話就夠了。C 對象詞：the proportion of employers who had

2、difficulty in recruiting skilled workers ()， the proportion of recruiting skilledworkers (X), the proportion of employers (X), the proportion of skilled workers (X)D 分段：按照描述對象分段，每個寫一段E 總結(jié)：描述對象的高低：在所有行業(yè)，skilled workers 都比較難找。對比對象的高低：（很難對比，不要寫）趨勢：Manufacturing 和BUILDING 更加容易找到各種workers, Commerce 和serv

3、i 都越來越難找 skilled workers 還有unskilled workers。B 描述對象和對比對象：描述對象三個，分別是 skilled workers, unskilled workers, technil and managerial workers, 每個圖表的分析The percentages of employers who had difficultyin recruitingSkilled workersUnskilled workersTechnical andmanagerial workers200320042003200420032004Manufactur

4、ing4540201986Building544527241410Commerce4251232520Servi4145202952學(xué)生的句子：The percentage of employers who found it difficult to recruit skilled workers reached respectively to 45% and 54%anufacturing and building sectors, but these figures decreased to 40% and 45% in 2004.錯誤的原因：Reach 這個詞不用加to，而且一般不區(qū)間的

5、第一個數(shù)據(jù)的句子：45% and 54% of employershe manufacturing and building sector found it difficult to recruit skilled workers,but these figures decreased to 40% and 45% in 2004.學(xué)生的句子：Unskilled workers can be find easiern skilled workers.錯誤的原因：時態(tài)錯誤， easier 是個形容詞，不能修飾動詞的句子：It would be easy to find unskilled wor

6、kers, compared with skilled labour.學(xué)生的句子：The percentages of companies which could find unskilled workers declined to 19%he manufacturing sectorand 24%he building sector, in contrast ,the figure for other two industries rose slightly to 25% and 29%錯誤的原因：In contrast 不是連詞；figure 應(yīng)該用復(fù)數(shù)的句子：The percentage

7、s of companies which could find unskilled workers declined to 19%he manufacturing sectorand 24%he building sector, while the figures for other two industries rose slightly to 25% and 29%申請批改（你可申請批改次數(shù)為 0，點擊）思路提示要點句型開頭段改寫題目Word count:0學(xué)生錯句要點句型改寫題目The chart shows the proportions of employers who wereno

8、t able to find three kinds of workerswo separate years.主體部分第一段第一要點：CommerceThe proportion of employers who founditdifficult to hire skilled workers in commerce翻譯范例主體部分第一段第一要點：Commerce 和servi都越來越難找skilled workers, CommercE 最高第二要點：Manufacturing 和BUILDING 趨勢相反，。There be主體部分第二段第三要點：Commerce 和servi都越來越難找

9、unskilled workers,Saw第四要點：Manufacturing 和 BUILDING 趨勢相反，大家數(shù)據(jù)差不多。分詞主體部分第三段第五要點：四個行業(yè)在 technical an d managerial workers 上的數(shù)據(jù)都下降，普通動詞, although結(jié)尾：描述對象的高低：在所有行業(yè)，skilled workers 都比較難找。對比對象的高低：（很難對比，不要寫）趨勢：Manufacturing和 BUILDING更加容易找到各種workers, Commerce和servi都越來越難找skilledworkers 還有unskilled workers。While

10、 The chart compares four industrieserms of the difficulty in recruiting different categories of workerswo different years.7+范例和servi 都越來越難找skilled workers, CommercE 最高and serviincreasesed to 51%and 45% in 2004, and the figure for commerce was the highest.第二要點： Manufacturing 和 BUILDING 趨勢相反，。There wa

11、s a different trendhe figuresformanufacturing and building, dropto 40% and 45% respectively in 2004.主體部分第二段第三要點：Commerce和servi都越來越難找unskilled workers,Commece and the serviector also saw a modestincreasehe percentage of employers having difficulty in findingunskilled workers, reaching 25% and 29% in

12、2004.第四要點： Manufacturing 和 BUILDING 趨勢相反，大家數(shù)據(jù)差不多。It waseasier for employershe manufacturing and building industries to recruit unskilled workers (19% and 24%).主體部分第三段第五要點：四個行業(yè)在technical and managerialworkers上的數(shù)據(jù)都下降，The figures for technical and managerialworkersdeclined in all industries, although 6

13、% and 10% of employersanufacturingand building companies failed to recruit these workers.結(jié)尾：Commerce 和 servi都越來越難找skilled workers 還有unskilled workers,而technical and managerial workers一直都問題不大Manufacturing 和BUILDING 趨勢相反Overall, in all industries, skilled workers weremore difficult to be foundn other

14、kinds of employees. In 2004, employersinmanufacturing and building companies found it easier to hire all thesethree types of workers compared with 2003, but it was not the case forcommerce and service firms.It was more difficicult to find skilled workersn other types of labour.The proportions of emp

15、loyers who found irdto recruit skilled workers increased respectively to 51% and 45%he commerector and the serviector, whilethe figures for manufacturing and building fell to 40% and 45% in 2004.Similar trends were seenhe recruitment of unskilled workers. The percentages of companies which were not

16、able torecruit the right unskilled workers dropped slightly to 19%he manufacturing sector and24%he constructionindustry, in contrast to the increaseshe figures for the other two industries, reaching 25% and 29%.The search for managerial and technical workers was the least challenging, with figureshese four industries allfalling during this period. The construction industry had the highest proportion of employers who could not recruit