高一英語-：讀后續(xù)寫實踐指南課件

1、高一年級英語學科課題：讀后續(xù)寫實踐指南Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(頑童頑童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this your car, sir? he asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The

2、boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “I wish,” the boy went on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in s

3、urprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driving in front of my house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He w

4、anted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. Writing style: narration Tense: past tenseJack, the urchinChristmas EveIn the streetJacks brother gave Jack a car.The urchin wished to be such a broth

5、erThe urchin wished to be a great brother.THE FIVE WsWhoWhereWhyWhenWhatJack invited the urchin to take a ride.Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(頑童頑童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this

6、 your car, sir? he asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “

7、I wish,” the boy went on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in surprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driv

8、ing in front of my house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He wanted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. JackThe urchinJack thought the urchin admired him very muc

9、h and wanted to get a big gift like him.“I wish I could be the brother like that.”Jack thought the urchin wanted to show off to his neighbors.But Jack was wrong againThe urchinBrainstormkind, considerate, unselfish, responsibleJacks reaction/feelingmoved, surprised, misunderstand,impressive,The sett

10、ing or placejoyous, simple,ordinary,The storyrelationship, gift, unexpected, heartfelt, sincere,Jack received a car as the Christmas gift from his brother. He came across a little boy when he was off work.From the conversation between them, Jack thought the boy must have admired him very much.The bo

11、y wished that he could be the brother like that.What the boy said surprised Jack.The boy asked Jack to drive in front of his house. Jack thought that the boy wanted to show off to his neighbors.But he was wrong again. 原文 續(xù)寫He got out and ran up to the steps.Jack got out and lifted the boy to the fro

12、nt seat of his car.He went back home hurriedly and what would he do?Whos the boy?Why should Jack lift the boy to the from seat of his car?But Jack was wrong.What can we conclude from the sentence?續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計既要考慮與上文的融洽銜接，同時也要考慮本段和最后一段開頭語的呼應(yīng)和銜接，而后者是容易忽視的部分。簡言之，第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計要成功搭建本段與前文、后文的橋梁。續(xù)寫第二段是文章的結(jié)尾，要關(guān)注與文

13、章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)，根據(jù)具體語境弘揚感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美，從而凸顯主題，升華精神?？紤]利用抒情和議論等表達方式使得畫龍點睛之處能夠表露文章深處蘊涵的主題意蘊、思想感情或人生哲理。Jack received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(頑童頑童) was walking around the shining car. “Is this your car, sir? he

14、asked. Jack answered, “Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.” The boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it cost you nothing? Sir, I wish.” He hesitated. Jack thought of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly. “I wish,” the boy we

15、nt on, “that I could be a brother like that.” Jack looked at the boy in surprise, and then he said again, “would you like to take a ride in my car?” “Oh yes, Id love to,” the boy answered.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driving in front of my

16、house?”Jack smiled a little. He thought he knew what the boy wanted. He wanted to show his neighbors that he could ride home in a big car. But Jack was wrong again. “will you stop where those two steps are?” the boy asked. 分析原文語言表達方面的顯著特征，觀察有無直接引語、各類從句、特殊句型、非謂語動詞等。通過模仿和創(chuàng)造，盡量提高與原文的協(xié)同，力求在各個語言層次（關(guān)鍵詞、短語

17、和句型等）的表達風格上和原文保持一致。Paragraph 1:He got out and ran up to the steps. After a while, the boy pushed a wheelchair with a younger boy sitting in it. Its clear that the younger boy was his brother, who was unable to walk. As his brother saw the car, his eyes were shining.“The car belongs to this gentleman

18、. One day, I will give you a car too.” The boy said to his brother. Jack sat in his car, stunned. It dawned on him that he was totally wrong. “Could you please take us for a drive together? My younger brother loves cars very much.” The boy said. Without any hesitation, Jack agreed.“I wish I could be

19、 a brother like that.” Jack got out and lifted the boy to the front seat of his car.coherentreasonablelogicalcorrectadd some detailsuse different structuresParagraph 2: Jack got out and lifted the boy to the front seat of his car. Although they followed a normal route, the little boy was in high spi

20、rits as if he found himself in heaven. But to his surprise, the boy didnt enjoy the view. He only focused his attention on his brother. Moved deeply, Jack realized the best Christmas present was the concern from the bottom of the brothers heart rather than a car. Jack told them it was Christmas Eve,

21、 so the joyride was a gift for them. WRITING STEPS定位（定位（Determine）設(shè)計設(shè)計(Design)初稿初稿(Draft)核查核查(Check)Step1. Determine通過閱讀定位所提供語言材料的核心信息，包括核心單詞、短語和句子等，目的是梳理內(nèi)容的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)和推進方向。本步驟的關(guān)鍵在于高效的閱讀，要求學生在盡可能短的時間內(nèi)，基于對某種語言的掌握，利用分析綜合、分類比較、歸納演繹、抽象概括等邏輯思維技能，調(diào)動知識體中的有關(guān)部分，去洞穿語篇的文脈肌理，積極尋找信息。Step2. Design設(shè)計出與上下文內(nèi)容連貫、豐富充實、自然流暢、

22、引人入勝的情節(jié)走勢。頭腦風暴出核心詞（以名詞、動詞、形容詞、副詞等內(nèi)容詞為主）即可，無需完整句子。在設(shè)計過程中，應(yīng)充分考慮以下幾點。 1. 續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計既要考慮與上文的融洽銜接，同時也要考慮本段和最后一段開頭語的呼應(yīng)和銜接，而后者是容易忽視的部分。簡言之，第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計要成功搭建本段與前文、后文的橋梁。 2. 續(xù)寫第二段是文章的結(jié)尾，要關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)，根據(jù)具體語境弘揚感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美，從而凸顯主題，升華精神?？紤]利用抒情和議論等表達方式使得畫龍點睛之處能夠表露文章深處蘊涵的主題意蘊、思想感情或人生哲理。3. 靈活運用各種描寫手法，以幫助打造鮮活靈動的人物形象和豐富充實的