高三讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)課課件-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

ContinuationWritingLanguage:ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shomeastheywereanxioustoknowwhatBernardwouldthinkofthisidea.PolishyoursentenceTip1Add“why”---多問幾個(gè)為什么Language:Tip2Addadj./adv./phrases(形容詞、副詞、短語)

對(duì)名詞搞事，對(duì)動(dòng)詞修飾Atlast,Bernardputthepopcornintopaperbagsandtookitout.PolishyoursentenceEventually,Bernardputthecrispy(脆的)andyummypopcornintothelovelypaperbagsandtookitoutwithdelightandexcitement.Language:Tip3Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2.Hearingthegreatidea,asuddenwaveofjoysweptoverhim.PolishyoursentencesHearingthegreatidea,hefeltoverjoyedanddeeplytouched.1.Thepopcornwasyummy.Theyputitintopaperbags.Enjoyingthesweetsmellofthepopcorn,theyputitintopaperbags.

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shenoddedwithasmile

andencouragedthechildren,"Let'sget

started!"Immediately,Claravolunteeredtogetthebigboxofcornand

preparedthemicrowaveoventomakepopcorn.Atthesametime,John

wenttopurchasesomepaperbagsandarrangedallthestuffinplace.

HarryrantoBernard'sanddraggedhimtothescene.Afterhearingthe

explanation,Bernardwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementandgratitude.

Theycouldhardlywait.Timewentbyswiftly,andthechildrenlaughed,

carryingouttheirgreat“project".Joyfilledtheyardandeveryone's

heart.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Carryingallthepaperbags,hecalledout,“Popcorn!50centsforoneextra-large

pack!"Peoplestartedtogatheraroundhim,whichdrewevenmore

people.Everyoneisreadytobuyonepacktosupporthim.Theairwas

richwithhappinessandkindness.Withinnotime,Bernardsoldoutofallpopcornandearnedquitesomemoney.Onreturning,hethankedthe

Meredithfamilywithwateryeyes.ForClara,HarryandJohn,itwasan

unforgettable

experienceaswell.Itturnedoutthattheireffortsnotonly

helpedabrotherinneed,butalsogavethemselvesthesweettasteof

helpingothers.

SummaryPlotLanguage1)Add“why”---多問幾個(gè)為什么2)Addadj./adv./phrases對(duì)名詞搞事，對(duì)動(dòng)詞修飾3)Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句Bytheendoftheclass,wewillbeableto…developareasonableandwell-organizedplot;.practisewhatwehavelearnedinthisclass.learnthetipsonhowtobeautifyourwriting;LearningObjectives◆評(píng)分參考閱卷時(shí)主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；（2）內(nèi)容的豐富性（3）應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；（4）上下文的連貫性。Plot&Language李籽言18分

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優(yōu)秀：李籽言朱杰峰陸丁瑞欣帥言紀(jì)禮峰張冬鳴李艾佳郁彤龔博文進(jìn)步較大：江朵兒管月唐柏悅沈昊傅程昊董慶薇吳愛榮李大鵬Problems：Plot:irrational情節(jié)不合理

Language:notvivid句子表達(dá)“骨感”……Para2:

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Webeganit.Firstly,Meredithmakeafireontheground.Then,sheputmanypopcornintothatbigbox,hangingonthefire.Waitingfor20minutes,awonderfulflavour

flowout.Finally,Meredithputouttheboxwithstrongstrength.Dozensofyellowanddeliciouspopcornspringtooureyes.WeputmostofthemintothepaperbagsandsenttoBernard.?/10分Plot:1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句

Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Theysucceeded

inmakingpopcornTheyputtheirgoodideaintopracticeBernardsoldpopcornearnmoneytosolvetheproblemPara1:

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Becauseitwasnotonlysuitableforlittleboys,butalsogoodtomakesomemoney.So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettobuysomecornandpaperbags.Whentheygothome,theybegantomakepopcorn.Afterputtingitallintopaperbags,theywenttoBernard’shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.?/10分Plot:2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章(theme&details)“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,and

Bernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.Para1:

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasaagoodone,too.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.HardlyhadtheyenteredthehousewhentheysawBernarddoingsomething.Then,Johntoldhisideatohim.Bernardwasverythrilledandthankful.TheymadepopcornbesideBernard’shome.Next,theyputitintopaperbags.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.?/10分Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.SomedetailedinformationofMrs.Meredith

Plot:3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.SomedetailedinformationofBernardLanguage:1.Shewasdelightedthatherchildrencouldsolvetheproblemontheirown.(陸丁瑞)ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shomeastheywereanxioustoknowwhatBernardwouldthinkofthisidea.Polishyoursentence2.TheysoldthepopcornwithalltheireffortsothatBernardcouldearnenoughmoneytohelphimfamily.(欣帥言)3.Everyonewasinlowspiritswhenfacingthedifficulty.(倪啟航)Tip1Add“why”---多問幾個(gè)為什么Language:Tip2Addadj./adv./phrases(形容詞、副詞、短語)

對(duì)名詞搞事，對(duì)動(dòng)詞修飾1.Johngraspedthisworkcheerfully.(傅程昊)2.Theysoldoutallthetastypopcorn,exhaustedbutthrilled.(賈林林)3.Whenhewenthome,heshoutedinhighspirits.(虞道佳)Atlast,Bernardputthepopcornintopaperbagsandtookitout.PolishyoursentenceEventually,Bernardputthecrispy(脆的)andyummypopcornintothelovelypaperbagsandtookitoutwithdelightandexcitement.Language:Tip3Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語1.Supportedbythem,Bernardwasconfidentagaintosellthepopcorn.(張冬鳴)2.Theyencouragedhim,makinghimpluckupthecouragetosellpopcorn.(龔博文)3.Lookingatthemoneyinhishands,tearswellingupinhiseyes,hefeltgratefultoMeredithinhisheart.(管月)2.Hearingthegreatidea,asuddenwaveofjoysweptoverhim.PolishyoursentencesHearingthegreatidea,hefeltoverjoyedanddeeplytouched.1.Thepopcornwasyummy.Theyputitintopaperbags.Enjoyingthesweetsmellofthepopcorn,theyputitintopaperbags.whichmade…？Groupwork

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shenoddedwithasmile

andencouragedthechildren,"Let'sget

started!"Immediately,Claravolunteeredtogetthebigboxofcornand

preparedthemicrowaveoventomakepopcorn.Atthesametime,John

wenttopurchasesomepaperbagsandarrangedallthestuffinplace.

HarryrantoBernard'sanddraggedhimtothescene.Afterhearingthe

explanation,Bernardwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementandgratitude.

Theycouldhardlywait.Timewentbyswiftly,andthechildrenlaughed,

carryingouttheirgreat“project".Joyfilledtheyardandeveryone's

heart.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Carryingallthepaperbags,hecalledout,“Popcorn!50centsforoneextra-large

pack!"Peoplestartedtogatheraroundhim,whichdrewevenmore

people.Everyoneisreadytobuyonepacktosupporthim.Theairwas

richwithhappinessandkindness.Withinnotime,Bernardsoldoutofallpopcornandearnedquitesomemoney.Onreturning,hethankedthe

Meredithfamilywithwateryeyes.ForClara,HarryandJohn,itwasan

unforgettable

experienceaswell.Itturnedoutthattheireffortsnotonly

helpedabrotherinneed,butalsogavethemselvesthesweettasteof

helpingothers.

SummaryPlotLanguage1)Add“why”---多問幾個(gè)為什么2)Addadj./adv./phrases對(duì)名詞搞事，對(duì)動(dòng)詞修飾3)Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句SupposeyouwereMengWanzhou,theCFO(ChiefFinancialOfficer)ofHuawei,completethestorybasedonwhatyouhavelearned!(about50words)Plot+Language

IwasarrestedgroundlesslybyCanadianauthoritiesattherequestoftheUSonDec.1,2018.DuringthethreeyearsunderhousearrestinVancouver,mylifewasturnedupsidedown.However,IalwayshadfaithinmyreleasebecauseIfirmlybelievedinmyPartyandmygovernment.Eventually,thedaycame.IntheeveningofSeptember25,2021.Ifinallyreturnedtomyhomeland,markingtheendofmyover1000daysindetention(扣押).

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