作文 03 甘肅卷 - 三年(2019-2021)中考英語滿分作文解析

作文03甘肅卷2021年真題在線學(xué)習(xí)一門新的語言不是一件容易的事情，不過萬事都有規(guī)律可循。請根據(jù)思維導(dǎo)圖提示的語言學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷和經(jīng)驗(yàn)，以“Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?”為題，寫一篇英語短文。要求：1.應(yīng)包含思維導(dǎo)圖提示中所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)進(jìn)行拓展；2.詞數(shù)：80詞左右；3.書寫工整規(guī)范；4.標(biāo)題、首末段已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)，無需抄寫在答題卡書面表達(dá)作答區(qū)域；5.文中不得提及真實(shí)的人名、校名等相關(guān)信息。Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?Whatmakesagoodlanguagelearner?Therearesomethingsthatgoodlanguagelearnersdoandsomethingstheydon’tdo.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Don’tforgetthatit’snevertoolatetobecomeagoodlanguagelearner.考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：題目要求根據(jù)思維導(dǎo)圖的提示，寫一篇題目為“Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?”的短文。2.寫作指導(dǎo)：本文時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，人稱主要為第三人稱。根據(jù)思維導(dǎo)圖所給的要點(diǎn)提示進(jìn)行寫作，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意表達(dá)清楚自己的觀點(diǎn)，并給出合理的理由和建議來支撐觀點(diǎn)，寫作時(shí)注意語句通順、語法正確、條理清晰。滿分范文Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?Whatmakesagoodlanguagelearner?Therearesomethingsthatgoodlanguagelearnersdoandsomethingstheydon’tdo.First,don’tbeafraidofmakingmistakes.Peopleoftengetthingswrong.Goodlanguagelearnersnoticetheirmistakesandlearnfromthem.Then,dogroupactivities.Peopleuselanguagetocommunicatewithotherpeople.Also,besuretouseadictionary.Goodlanguagelearnersoftenusedictionariestocheckthemeaningofwordstheydon’tknow.What’smore,goodlanguagelearnershavefunwiththelanguage.Watchafilm,listentosongs,playvideogamesorreadabook.Atlast,thinkinthelanguageyou’relearningoutsidetheclassroom.Don’tforgetthatit’snevertoolatetobecomeagoodlanguagelearner.2020年（甘肅蘭州市）真題在線假如你是李明，你的英國朋友Peter得知你即將初中畢業(yè)，來信詢問你的一些情況，請你給他寫一封回信，要點(diǎn)包括：1.感謝關(guān)心；2.收獲與感受；3.期待共同努力，實(shí)現(xiàn)夢想。要求：1.80詞左右；2.條理清晰，行文連貫，書寫規(guī)范，內(nèi)容上可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)；3.信中不得出現(xiàn)具體的校名、人名等信息；4.開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。提示詞語：usedto；makeprogress；develop-habit；growup；makeeffort；beproudofDearPeter,I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiMing考題解析【詳解】1.

題干解讀：題目要求根據(jù)提示詞語和問題，寫出自己初中三年的收獲以及感受，以及自己對未來的期待，可以適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，寫作時(shí)要運(yùn)用正確的英語表達(dá)，要選用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語。

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寫作指導(dǎo)：寫作時(shí)要與已給出的開頭融合起來，用第一人稱和其他人稱相結(jié)合來寫作，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，要做到要點(diǎn)齊全，無單詞拼寫和語法錯(cuò)誤。滿分范文DearPeter,I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.Thankyouforyourconcern.Iwillsoongraduatefromthejuniorhighschool.Inthesethreeyears,Ihavelearnedalot.Iusedtogetpoorgrades.Butwiththehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,Ihavemadegreatprogress.Myparentsareproudofme.Now,Ihavemanygoodlivinghabits.Myparents,teachersandclassmatesallhelpmealot.WhenIgrowup,Iwanttobeateacher.BecauseIhopeIcanhelpthosechildrenwhoneedhelp.Iwillmakeeffortstorealizemydream.Wehopewecanworktogetherinthefuture.Yours,LiMing2020年（甘肅金昌、武威市）真題在線父母是我們最親的人，但我們有時(shí)會在與父母溝通時(shí)遇到困難。請根據(jù)所給思維導(dǎo)圖的提示，以"HowtoCommunicatewithOurParents"為題用英語寫一篇短文，談?wù)勁c父母溝通的技巧和做法。要求：1.文中需包含思維導(dǎo)圖中的主要內(nèi)容；2.句子及篇章結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確、連貫、書寫規(guī)范；3.需做適量拓展；4.詞數(shù)：80詞左右。(標(biāo)題和第一段已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；無需抄寫在答題卡對應(yīng)作答區(qū)域)HowtoCommunicatewithOurParentsCommunicationwithparentsisoneofthefirstthingswehavedonesincewewereborn.Aswegrowolder,we'llfindit'snoteasytocommunicatewithourparentsopenlyandeffectively.Sowhatshouldwedowhencommunicatingwiththem?Herearesomeofmyideas.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考題解析【詳解】題干解讀：這篇作文要求以HowtoCommunicatewithOurParents“怎樣和我們的父母交流”為題，用英語寫一篇短文，談?wù)勁c父母溝通的技巧和做法。題目中給出了一個(gè)思維導(dǎo)圖，學(xué)生們寫作前，應(yīng)先仔細(xì)觀察思維導(dǎo)圖，明確圖中展示的內(nèi)容以及文章的結(jié)構(gòu)，然后組織語言，并對細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行適當(dāng)拓展，用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。審題可知，這篇短文應(yīng)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)、第一人稱敘述。例文點(diǎn)評：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包括了題目中要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點(diǎn)。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，短文第一段是題目中給出的，然后作者寫了一段，這一段中用了比較好的詞體現(xiàn)文章的層次，如Firstly,Secondly,Besides和Finally，條理清晰，而且上下文銜接比較緊密。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確。句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣。除簡單句外，短文中還使用了狀語從句、定語從句等復(fù)合句以及非謂語動詞、祈使句等結(jié)構(gòu)。整篇文章表達(dá)流暢，意思連貫。高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：makealistof；findout；disagreewith；littlebylittle；besure；carefor。句型：why引導(dǎo)的定語從句；If引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句；動名詞作主語；that引導(dǎo)定語從句；inwhich引導(dǎo)定語從句；祈使句；一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)的被動語態(tài)。滿分范文HowtoCommunicatewithOurParentsCommunicationwithparentsisoneofthefirstthingswehavedonesincewewereborm.Aswegrowolder,we'llfindit'snoteasytocommunicatewithourparentsopenlyandeffectively.Sowhatshouldwedowhencommunicatingwiththem?Herearesomeofmyideas.Firstly,wecanmakealistofthingsourparentsandwedisagreeaboutmost.Trytofindoutthereasonwhywedisagreewitheachother.Accepteachother'sideaslittlebylittle.Ifwestillhavedisagreements,we'dbetternotgettooangry.Secondly,weshouldtalkwiththemmore!Sharingideascanmakeuscloser.Besides,weshouldalsolearnhowtoreallylisten.Listeningisaskillthatmustbelearnedandpracticed.Finally,besuretobepolite.Weareafamilyinwhicheveryoneislovedandcaredfor.2020（甘肅天水市）真題在線“綠水青山就是金山銀山?！闭埬憬Y(jié)合自己平時(shí)保護(hù)環(huán)境的一些做法,以“HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautiful"為題,寫一篇英語短文。寫作要求:1.表達(dá)清楚,語法正確,上下文連貫;2.80詞左右(開頭已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù));3.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的地名、校名、人名等信息。參考詞匯:environment;pollution;reduce;sorttherubbish(垃圾分類)Thecleanwaterandgreenmountainsareourtreasures.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考題解析【詳解】1.題干解讀：文章是一篇話題作文。主要以“HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautiful”為主題展開描寫，主要從保護(hù)環(huán)境，節(jié)約資源，垃圾分類等方面做詳細(xì)的描述，寫作時(shí)要注意文章的層次感和語言的邏輯性要合理。2.例文點(diǎn)評：文章分三段描寫。第一段引出綠水青山很重要，我們應(yīng)該如何做；第二段給出一些具體的做法，第三段給出自己的一些觀點(diǎn)，從生活出發(fā)要怎么做。整個(gè)文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整思路清晰，語言表達(dá)流暢，意思明確，通俗易懂。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：dealwith；takeactions；avoiddoing；forexample；inmyopinion；pickup。句型：because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句；when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句；if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句。滿分范文HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautifulThecleanwaterandgreenmountainsareourtreasures.It’sourdr