讀后續(xù)寫樂高拼裝假肢幫助殘疾男孩課件高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

WriteNancy讀后續(xù)寫：樂高拼裝假肢幫助殘疾男孩ContinuationWriting123用思維導(dǎo)圖理清故事情節(jié)分析寫作思路。學(xué)習(xí)主人公的個(gè)人愛心:雖自我殘疾，但也能幫助別人。利用主謂推進(jìn)式閱讀，畫出句子主謂的方式來尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點(diǎn)。objectives：LeadinTask1：自主學(xué)習(xí)檢測(cè)翻譯下列句子Beforeconstructingit,Ihadalreadydecidedagainsttraditionalprosthetics._______________________________________________________________2.Notbecausetheywereineffective,butbecauseplayingwithLegodidsignificantlyimprovemydexterity,helpingmeadapttomycondition.__________________________________________________________________________非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞3.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1,whichhadfingers…..________________________________________________________________4.Oneday,acouplewiththeireight-year-oldson,wholostbotharmsinanaccident.________________________________________________________________定語(yǔ)從句在建造它之前，我已經(jīng)決定不使用傳統(tǒng)的假肢不是因?yàn)樗鼈儫o效，而是因?yàn)橥鏄犯叽_實(shí)顯著提高了我的靈活性，幫助我適應(yīng)我的狀態(tài)。幾年后，我開發(fā)了另一種名為Mk-I的假肢。。。。有一天，一對(duì)夫婦帶著他的八歲兒子，他在一次事故中失去了雙臂，在了解到我的作品后，他們來到我的身邊自主學(xué)習(xí)檢測(cè)翻譯下列句子并背誦5.MyparentsandIhadlookedintogettingoneafewyearsearlier,onlytobediscouragedbythecostlyprice_______________________________________________________________結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)6.IconcludedthatImightnotneedtobuyone.________________________________________________________________7.wewerewonderingifyoucouldpossiblyhelpbuildasetofprostheticsforourson.________________________________________________________________名詞性從句我和我的父母幾年前發(fā)現(xiàn)了一個(gè)，但是卻因?yàn)榘嘿F的價(jià)格而感到氣餒。我總結(jié)出我可能不需要買一個(gè)。我們想知道你是否可能幫我們兒子做一套假肢。ABCDEFEBFDAC?Task2Pleaseputthosepicturesinorder.Task2Ifyouareaskedtodividethesepicturesinto2parts,whatwillyoudowiththem?Notethatonepartisforreadingandtheotherpartisforwritinginthecontinuationwriting?123456Howtodividethesepicturesinto2parts??Howtodrink?Turningpoint轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)Reading(part1from___to___)aimstofindtheproblemWriting(part2from___to___)aimstosolvetheproblem1346123456ReadingandThinking深度解讀語(yǔ)篇——抓故事線/情感線深度解讀語(yǔ)篇Read淺層信息獲取:5W1H深層文本解讀理清情節(jié)和情感分析人物性格特點(diǎn)明確故事主題品味寫作風(fēng)格和語(yǔ)言Think結(jié)合所給兩段首句原文呼應(yīng)+正能量結(jié)局生動(dòng)編寫故事動(dòng)作描寫情感描寫環(huán)境描寫語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用推測(cè)情節(jié)發(fā)展構(gòu)思寫作框架WriteSteps動(dòng)作描寫

情感描寫淺層信息獲取:5W1H“I，myparents,acouple,boy”Theboy’shome”NotspecifictimebuttimelineHowdidIimprovetheprostheticWhydidIgottheLego?IcreatedprostheticthoughpalyingwithLegoTask3Howtoread

用思維導(dǎo)圖理清故事時(shí)空線、情節(jié)線——情節(jié)定為四部分，分別是主要情節(jié)的開頭(beginning)、主要情節(jié)的發(fā)展階段（development），主要情節(jié)的高潮（climax）和結(jié)局（ending），結(jié)局也就是我們的續(xù)寫部分，情感線及主題。利用主謂推進(jìn)式閱讀，畫出句子主謂的方式來理清開頭、發(fā)展和高潮各故事情節(jié)大意。深層文本解讀Task4Howtoread?時(shí)空線情節(jié)線情感線主

題語(yǔ)

言1.時(shí)間線

：__________________________2.空間線：__________________________Storymountain：BeginningDevelopmentClimaxSolutionEding“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文心理描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫心理描寫：__________________________________________whatisthetheme:_____________________1.原文語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)：心理活動(dòng)描寫、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、定語(yǔ)從句、名詞性從句等2.續(xù)寫語(yǔ)言模仿深層文本解讀時(shí)空線1.時(shí)間線:

atfiveyearsold→1.空間線:時(shí)空線1.時(shí)間線:

atfiveyearsold→bytheageofnine→yearslater-Oneday1.空間線:

myhome→theboy’shome1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)

StoryMountainPlot情節(jié)線4.Resolution5.Ending1.Beginning2.Development3.Climax(themainproblemorconflict)Ending(atimetosolvetheproblem/howthingsendup/whatisthetheme？)

StoryMountainPlot情節(jié)線找到問題或情節(jié)發(fā)展高潮：答應(yīng)幫忙，遇到什么挑戰(zhàn)？是否成功？我從小患有罕見疾病，缺少右臂我玩樂高加強(qiáng)我的靈巧，同時(shí)制作義肢我制作的義肢功能越來越完善一對(duì)夫妻請(qǐng)求我為他們失去雙臂的兒子制作義肢。4.Resolution5.Ending情感線“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文情感描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫情感描寫：__________________________________________技巧：通過動(dòng)作、語(yǔ)言、情景描寫可以推理出心理活動(dòng)“我”期初拼樂高的情況：“我”設(shè)計(jì)的第一個(gè)義肢功能:“我”設(shè)計(jì)的第二個(gè)義肢功能:“我”設(shè)計(jì)的最新的義肢功能:Althoughitwasdifficulttoputallthepiecestoghther…Igrew

interestedinLegoTechnic,whichallowedmetocreatemorecomplicatingthings...Ihadmademyfirstprostheticarm(義肢)….asimpleboxthatperfectlysuitedmyrightarm.Yearslater,IdevelopedanotherprostheticarmthatIcalledtheMK-1……thepurejoyofcreatingprostheticswithLegoTechnickeptmegoingon.Itfeaturedacontrolunitthatcouldsendandreceiveordersfromsensorsonthearmtothemotors,withcablesthatcontractlikemuscles.Optimistic樂觀的joyful高興的Fulfilled有成就感的續(xù)寫段心理變化？原文心理描寫續(xù)寫段心理變化？情感線“我”玩樂高心路歷程1.原文情感描寫：__________________________________________2.續(xù)寫情感描寫：__________________________________________Paragraph1:Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha“yes”.Paragraph2:Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsontohim!uncertainpersistentexcitedproud主題時(shí)空線情節(jié)線情感線綜合以上信息可概括文章大意:我從小患有波倫綜合征，缺少右臂。我玩樂高加強(qiáng)我的靈巧，同時(shí)制作義肢。我制作的義肢功能越來越完善。一對(duì)夫妻請(qǐng)求我為他們失去雙臂的兒子制作義肢。IsufferedfromPolandsyndromesincechildhood,lackingtherightarm.IplayedwithLEGOtoimprovemyflexibiltyandmadeprostheticsatthesametime.TheprostheticsImadeweremoreandmoreperfect.Acoupleaskedmetomakeprostheticsfortheirsonwholosthiswholearm!主題（Theme）：_________________________________________________________

身殘志不殘One’sbodyisdisabled,butnotmind個(gè)人愛心:雖自我殘疾，但也能幫助別人WriteTask5推測(cè)情節(jié)發(fā)展——構(gòu)思寫作框架語(yǔ)言、動(dòng)作、心理：

【五官、肢體】對(duì)續(xù)寫開頭語(yǔ)利用主謂推進(jìn)式進(jìn)行研讀，以開頭句主謂內(nèi)容為基礎(chǔ)以問問題（問問題從語(yǔ)言、動(dòng)作【五官，肢體等】、心理或周圍環(huán)境角度出發(fā)）的形式尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點(diǎn)。Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”語(yǔ)言、動(dòng)作、心理：

【五官、肢體】聽到“yes”那個(gè)男孩的反應(yīng)式什么？我如何做出承諾？我的困難是什么？我如何成功做出假肢？語(yǔ)言、動(dòng)作、心理：

【五官、肢體】Irushedtotheboy’shomeandsecuredtheprostheticsonhim.假肢是否合適？男孩和他父母如何感謝我？主題：我的感受是什么？1.heboyraisedhishead，eyesshiningwithasparkofhope.2.“Trustme,

I

will

make

it.”3.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy'shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind1.Holdingbreathandheartsbeatingwildly,weanxiouslyawaitedtheresult-theyworked2.“Thankyouverymuch”,theboyandHisparentsquicklyapproachedmetoexpresstheirimmensethanks.3.Feelasenseofaccomplishment;madeupmymindtodevotemyselftomakingalifelongimpactonthefieldofprostheticinnovation.（語(yǔ)言）（動(dòng)作）（心理）（動(dòng)作、心理）（語(yǔ)言）（心理）Writing：生動(dòng)編寫故事注意：三銜接、二過渡、一靚尾動(dòng)作、心理、語(yǔ)言等細(xì)節(jié)描寫模仿原文語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)Task6：Writethefirstparagraphin6mins本段注意：兩個(gè)銜接句、一過渡動(dòng)作、心理、語(yǔ)言等細(xì)節(jié)描寫模仿原文語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)

Iknewitwouldbeachallenginganddemandingtask,butIrespondedwitha

“yes”.Theboyliftedhisheadwithhisoncelifelesseyesnowshiningwithasparkofhope.(銜接句1)“Trustme.Iwillmakeit.”,Ipromisehimwitharadiantsmile.NosoonerhadIsaidgoodbyetotheirfamilythanIsetouttodothetaskwithoutanydelay.(過渡句1)ThesubsequentdayswitnessedhowIwascommittedtodesigningdrawings,selectingtheLegopiecesandintegratingpracticalcomponentstocreateprosthetics.EverytimeIwasstuckinadifficultstep,theboy‘shopefuleyesflashedacrossmymind.Itseemedlikeacenturylaterwhentheboy-customizedprostheticstookshape.Thencamethebigday.（銜接句2）Paragraph1:Assighment：Polishyourwriting讀后續(xù)寫具體評(píng)分點(diǎn)（共25分；踩點(diǎn)得分）（一）內(nèi)容第一段：要點(diǎn)1：失去雙臂的男孩的反應(yīng)。3分要點(diǎn)2：主人公為男孩量身定做義肢的過程。4分要點(diǎn)3：主人公完成義肢制作的表述。2分第二段：要點(diǎn)1：戴上義肢。3分要點(diǎn)2