云南省昆明市師大附中高三上學(xué)期統(tǒng)測(cè)英語(yǔ)試題讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)-希望的傳遞Grace的康復(fù)與回饋講義

24年10月11日云南師大附中高三統(tǒng)測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Emma,adedicatednurse,alwaysfeelsadeepsenseofpassionforherpatients.Shebelievesthatherroleextendsbeyondmerelytreatingtheirphysicaldiseases;shewantstobringfortandhopetothosewhoneeditmost.Oneday,EmmametGrace,apatientwhohadrecentlybeenadmittedtothehospitalwithadeadlyillness.Gracewasawomaninhersixties,withkindeyesandagentlesmile,butbeneaththesurface,Emmacouldsenseaprofoundsadnessanddespair.AsEmmaspenttimewithGrace,shelearnedthattheolderwomanhadlostherhusbandyearsagoandhadnochildrenorclosefamilytosupporther.Facedwiththeprospectofhermortality(死亡率),Gracehadbeguntolosehopeandquestionedthemeaningofherlife.Determinedtohelp,EmmamadeithermissiontobringlightintoGrace'sdarkestdays.ShestartedbylisteningtoGrace'sstoriesandofferingfort.Whenevershewasfree,EmmawouldsitbyGrace'sbedside,holdingherhandandreassuringherthatshewasnotalone.EmmabegantoshareherlifeexperienceswithGraceastheirbondgrew,offeringencouragementandinspiration.ShereadGrace'sfavoritebookstoher,broughthersmallgiftslikelovedanimals.EmmanotonlyprovidedGracewithmedicalcarebutalsotheemotionalsupport.Slowlybutsurely,Gracebegantofindrenewedstrengthandpurpose.Emma'sunwaveringsupportandpassionreignitedasparkwithinher,remindingherthatlifewasstillworthliving,eveninthefaceofadversity(逆境).Daybyday,Gracebecamemorepositivetowardslife,and,magically,shewasrecoveringgradually.Accordingtothedoctors,withinonemonth,Gracecouldgetoutofhospitalandgobackhome.

注意:(1)續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右：(2)請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:

Beforeleavinghospital,Gracedecidedtohelpotherpatientsinneed,justlikewhatEmmahaddonetoher._______________________________________________________________________________

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ThedaywhenGracecheckedoutcame._______________________________________________________________________________故事中文梗概護(hù)士Emma對(duì)病人充滿(mǎn)了深切的同情，她相信自己的職責(zé)不僅僅是治療疾病，還要為病人們帶來(lái)安慰和希望。有一天，她遇到了Grace，一位患有重病的六十多歲老人，雖然外表溫和，但內(nèi)心充滿(mǎn)悲傷和絕望。Emma得知Grace失去了丈夫，沒(méi)有子女，也沒(méi)有親人陪伴，生活變得毫無(wú)希望。Emma開(kāi)始傾聽(tīng)她的故事，陪伴她，鼓勵(lì)她，并通過(guò)自己的關(guān)懷重新點(diǎn)燃了Grace對(duì)生活的信心。最終，Grace不僅精神恢復(fù)了，而且身體也逐漸康復(fù)。

主要人物：Emma

Grace次要人物：otherpatients敘事視角：第三人稱(chēng)主題分類(lèi):

醫(yī)患關(guān)系（DoctorPatientRelationship）生命意義（MeaningofLife）關(guān)懷與希望（CareandHope）續(xù)寫(xiě)思路建議從第一段的開(kāi)頭句可以看出，Grace在出院前決定像Emma幫助她那樣去幫助醫(yī)院里的其他病人。因此，第一段續(xù)寫(xiě)的主要內(nèi)容應(yīng)圍繞Grace如何為其他病人提供幫助展開(kāi)。為了使續(xù)寫(xiě)與原文更加契合，Grace的具體幫助應(yīng)盡量與Emma曾經(jīng)給予她的幫助相呼應(yīng)，比如原文中提到的listeningtoGrace'sstories,offeringfort,pany,encouragement,inspiration,smallgifts…。第二段的重點(diǎn)應(yīng)放在Grace和護(hù)士Emma之間的互動(dòng)上。這些互動(dòng)可以通過(guò)語(yǔ)言、動(dòng)作和情感來(lái)展現(xiàn)，比如她們之間的交談、感激的擁抱或是Grace對(duì)Emma的深情告別。最后，故事可通過(guò)升華主題來(lái)結(jié)束，例如可以強(qiáng)調(diào)關(guān)懷與希望（CareandHope）或生命意義（MeaningofLife），這些主題都能為續(xù)寫(xiě)故事注入更深層次的情感和哲理。寫(xiě)作示范Paragraph1:

Beforeleavingthehospital,Gracedecidedtohelpotherpatientsinneed,justlikewhatEmmahaddoneforher.SherealizedhowmuchEmma'skindnessandpassionhadtransformedherlifeandwantedtopassiton.Gracebeganvisitingotherpatientsinthehospital,offeringthemwordsofencouragementandsmallgesturesoffort.Shesharedherownexperienceofoveringdespair,reassuringthemthatnomatterhowdifficultthingsseemed,therewasalwayshope.SeeingthepositiveimpactshehadonothersgaveGracearenewedsenseofpurpose.Shenolongersawherselfasavictimofcircumstancebutassomeonecapableofmakingadifferenceinthelivesofothers.（95words）

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ThedaywhenGracecheckedoutcame.Emmawasthere,smilingproudlyasshewatchedGracewalkoutofthehospital,herstepsfullofstrengthandconfidence.Theysharedalonghug,bothknowingthatthiswasnotagoodbyebutthebeginningofsomethingnew.Assheleftthehospital,GracefeltadeepsenseofgratitudeforEmmaandthesecondchanceatlifeshehadbeengiven.Graceknewthatherjourneyofhealingwasnotonlyphysicalbutalsoemotional,andthatshenowhadthepowertoinspireothers,justasEmmahadinspiredher.（94words）寫(xiě)作細(xì)節(jié)分析Paragraph1:

Beforeleavingthehospital,Gracedecidedtohelpotherpatientsinneed,justlikewhatEmmahaddoneforher.SherealizedhowmuchEmma'skindnessandpassionhadtransformedherlifeandwantedtopassiton.Gracebeganvisitingotherpatientsinthehospital,offeringthemwordsofencouragementandsmallgesturesoffort.（和原文的重要概念有明顯的互動(dòng)。非必要不增加新人物，把他們稱(chēng)為：otherpatients）Shesharedherownexperienceofoveringdespair,reassuringthemthatnomatterhowdifficultthingsseemed,therewasalwayshope.(抓住原文核心概念：給到病人的主要是hope)SeeingthepositiveimpactshehadonothersgaveGracearenewedsenseofpurpose.Shenolongersawherselfasavictimofcircumstancebutassomeonecapableofmakingadifferenceinthelivesofothers.

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ThedaywhenGracecheckedoutcame.Emmawasthere,smilingproudlyasshewatchedGracewalkoutofthehospital,herstepsfullofstrengthandconfidence.Theysharedalonghug,bothknowingthatthiswasnotagoodbyebutthebeginningofsomethingnew.（恰到好處的動(dòng)作互動(dòng)描寫(xiě)，不一定要展開(kāi)語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)）Assheleftthehospital,GracefeltadeepsenseofgratitudeforEmmaandthesecondchanceatlifeshehadbeengiven.（合理的情緒描寫(xiě)：Grace感激Emma）Graceknewthatherjourneyofhealingwasnotonlyphysicalbutalsoemotional,andthatshenowhadthepowertoinspireothers,justasEmmahadinspiredher.（適度的主題升華：給處于逆境中的人鼓勵(lì)和希望）

詞匯和表達(dá)積累gesturesoffort安慰的舉動(dòng)overedespair戰(zhàn)勝絕望reassurev.給予安慰arenewedsenseof...

重新獲得的……感victimofcircumstance

環(huán)境的犧牲品journeyofhealing

康復(fù)之旅下水文1Paragraph1:Beforeleavinghospital,Gracedecidedtohelpotherpatientsinneed,justlikewhatEmmahaddonetoher.Sheknewthatherjourneyhadnotbeeneasy,butshealsorecognizedthepowerofkindnessandempathyinhealing.Gracestartedbyvolunteeringatthehospital,offeringalisteningearandafortingpresencetothosewho,likeher,werestrugglingwiththeemotionalweightoftheirillnesses.Shesharedherownstory,showingothersthatitwaspossibletofindhopeeveninthedarkestoftimes.Heractionsnotonlybroughtsolacetoothersbutalsogaveherasenseofpurposeandfulfillmentthatshehadnotfeltinyears.Paragraph2:ThedaywhenGracecheckedoutcame,andthehospitalstaffgatheredtocelebrateherrecovery.Emmawasthere,beamingwithprideatthetransformationshehadwitnessedinGrace.Astheyhugged,Emmawhisperedwordsofencouragement,remindingGraceofthestrengthshehadfoundwithinherself.Grace,withtearsinhereyes,thankedEmmafornotonlysavingherlifebutalsoforteachingherhowtoliveittothefullest.Assheleftthehospital,Gracefeltanewfounddeterminationtocontinuehermissionofspreadinghopeandforttoothers.Herexperiencehadshownherthateveninthefaceofgreatchallenges,thehumanspiritcouldprevail,andshewaseagertosharethatmessagewiththeworld.下水文2Paragraph1:Beforeleavinghospital,Gracedecidedtohelpotherpatientsinneed,justlikewhatEmmahaddonetoher.Shefeltadeepsenseofgratitudeforthecareandpanionshipshehadreceived,andshewantedtopayitforward.Gracebeganbyorganizingsmallgroupsessionswherepatientscouldsharetheirfearsandhopes,creatingasafespaceforemotionalexpression.Shealsoinitiatedacraftclub,encouragingpatientstoengageincreativeactivitiesthatcouldprovideatherapeuticescapefromtheirworries.Hereffortsnotonlyliftedthespiritsofthosearoundherbutalsoenrichedthehospi