Period Ⅴ　Writing-寫一個故事的結(jié)尾 教案 高中英語 外研社必修第一冊

Unit4PeriodⅤWriting——寫一個故事的結(jié)尾一、技法指導讀后續(xù)寫試題提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語進行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫除了要求考生掌握豐富的詞匯和句式外，還注重學生的內(nèi)容構思和情節(jié)銜接的能力。主要聚焦在以下四個方面：1.把握短文關鍵信息和語言特點的能力?？忌枰私饨o定短文的主要內(nèi)容，清楚其語言結(jié)構的使用情況，并通過續(xù)寫短文表現(xiàn)出來。2.語言運用的準確性和豐富性。在詞匯和語言結(jié)構的使用方面準確、恰當，能夠根據(jù)內(nèi)容需要使用較為高級的詞匯和語言結(jié)構。3.對語篇結(jié)構的把控能力?？疾榭忌鷮ι舷挛倪壿嬯P系的掌握情況，續(xù)寫的短文應語句連貫、有序。4.創(chuàng)造性思維能力。續(xù)寫的短文要具有較豐富的內(nèi)容。二、篇章結(jié)構1.故事山(StoryMountain)模式：介紹→發(fā)展→沖突→解決→結(jié)尾。2.敘述圖式(NarrationSchema)模式：引子→情節(jié)→高潮→尾聲。一、亮點詞匯1.動作描寫①climbv.攀登；爬上去②screamv.尖叫③movev.走，移動④sighv.嘆息⑤smellv.聞⑥lookaround環(huán)視⑦turnaround轉(zhuǎn)身⑧takeaboatride坐船2.心理描寫①nervousadj.緊張的②happyadj.高興的③relievedadj.放心的；感到寬慰的④befullofjoy充滿歡樂⑤fallintodespair陷入絕望二、高級句式1.動作描寫①Hedropped/loweredhisheadinshame.他羞愧地低下了頭。②Hiseyeswerewidewithhorror.他驚恐地瞪大了眼睛。③Sheopenedhermouthtosaysomething.她張開嘴要說什么。④Hereachedforherhandandheldittightly.他伸手抓住她的手并緊緊握住。2.心理描寫①Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.她臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。②Hegavemealookofburninganger.他憤怒地看了我一眼。③Hestoodsilently，tearsrollingdownhischeeks.他靜靜地站著，眼淚順著面頰流了下來。④Heturnedtome，withhiseyesfullofhorror.他轉(zhuǎn)向我，眼里充滿了恐懼。⑤Tearsfillinghereyes，sheexpressedherheartfeltgratitude.她熱淚盈眶，表達了衷心的感激之情。⑥Onlearningthetruth，Iwastotallyshocked.一得知真相，我完全震驚了。⑦Countlessthingsflashedthroughmymind.無數(shù)事情在我腦中閃過。閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Mowaswaitinginthecorridoroutsideherclass.Shewasfeelingsick.Shehadtwoexamsthatdayandphysicswasthefirst.Shereallyhatedphysics.Itwasherworstsubject.Terrylookedbackatherfromthefrontoftheline，andthenlookedawayquickly.Mothoughtshelookedguilty.Shedidn’thaveaproblemwithphysics.Shedidn’thaveaproblemwithanything...MissPerfect!“Hi，Mo，it’syourfavouriteexamtoday，”saidNima，laughingasshejoinedtheline.TerrywaslookingatMoagain.“Sowhat’swrongwithher？”askedNima.“Ithoughtyouwerefriends.”“Yes，sodidI，”saidMo.“Butshehasn’tspokentomefortwoweeksnow.Shepromisedtohelpmereviewforthephysicsexamtoo，butthensheignoredallmycallsandtexts.AndwhenIrangherhouse，hermumjusttoldmeshewasbusy.She’sforgottenwhoherfriendsare！”saidMoangrily.“Areyoulisteningtome？”Mr.Reedwastalkingtotheclassandtheotherstudentsweregoingintotheexamroom.MogaveNimaaworriedlookandfollowedthem.Mocouldn’tanswerquestionnumberfive.ShelookedupandsawTerrysittingtworowsinfrontofher.Mocouldn’tbelieveit!Terrywasholdingherphoneonherkneeunderthetableandreadingfromit.IsthathowTerryalwaysgotsuchgoodgrades?ShefeltreallyangrywithTerry，butshedidn’tknowwhattodo.Shethoughtabouttellingtheteacher，butwhatwouldeveryoneelsethinkofher?“Stopwritingandputyourpensdown，”saidMr.Reedashestartedtocollecttheexampapers.Ohno，Mohadn’tansweredtwoofthequestions.Shewasgoingtofailagain!MowantedtotalktoTerryatlunchtime，butshecouldn’tfindheranywhere.Thenextexamwashistory.ThatwasMo’sfavoritesubjectbutshewasn’tfeelinggood.Mowenttothelibrarytostudy，butshecouldn’tconcentrate.Shedidn’tknowwhattodoaboutTerry.Shethoughtabouttellingtheteacher，buteveryonewouldhateherifshedidthat.“Itisn’tfair！”shethought.“Terrywasgettinggoodgradesbycheatingallthattime，”thoughtMo.Justthen，Mr.Reedwalkedpasthertable.“Mr.Reed...”MowassittingbehindTerryagaininthehistoryexamthatafternoon.Mowasfeelingterrible.WhyhadshetoldMr.Reed?Butitwastoolatenow.Andanyway，Terrydidn’twanttobeherfriend!Mr.ReedwantedhertolookathimandnodifshesawthatTerrywascheatingintheexam.注意：續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatTerryhadherphoneunderthetable.Mowaswalkingtowardstheschoolgatewhensheheardfootstepsbehindher.第一步初讀獲取基本信息1.基本結(jié)構2.故事情節(jié)Mo和Terry是好朋友——Mo不擅長物理，Terry原本答應幫Mo輔導，但卻未做到——考試時Mo發(fā)現(xiàn)Terry看手機作弊，內(nèi)心糾結(jié)，最終還是把情況告訴了老師Mr.Reed。下午進行了歷史考試……Beginning：Mowaswaitinginthecorridoroutsideherclass.→TerrylookedbackatMofromthefrontoftheline.→Terryhadn’tspokentoMofortwoweeks.→TerrypromisedtohelpMoreviewforthephysicsexam.→TerryignoredallMo’scallsandtexts.→Mr.Reedwastalkingtotheclass.→MolookedupandsawTerryholdingherphoneonherkneeunderthetableandreadingfromit.→MothoughtTerrycheatedandreportedtoMr.Reed.→Mr.ReedwantedMotolookathimandnodifshesawthatTerrywascheatinginthenextexam.→ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatTerryhadherphoneunderthetable.→Climax：？→Mowaswalkingtowardstheschoolgatewhensheheardfootstepsbehindher.→Ending：？第二步再讀獲取情節(jié)發(fā)展線索續(xù)寫邏輯梳理：細讀兩段續(xù)寫的開頭語，理順續(xù)寫段落間的邏輯關系第一段：ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatTerryhadherphoneunderthetable.·HowdidMofeel?·WhatdidMr.Reeddothen?·HowdidMofeelatthetime?第二段：Mowaswalkingtowardstheschoolgatewhensheheardfootstepsbehindher.·Whowasbehindher?·Whydidn’tTerryhelpMoreview?·Didtheymakeup?第三步預測情節(jié)發(fā)展第一段：根據(jù)原文和首句信息：盡管Mo感到不安，她還是看著Mr.Reed點了點頭。直到老師拍了拍Terry的背部她才注意到Mr.Reed。Terry立刻被要求離開。Terry跑出教室，一路哭著。Mo非但沒有感到放松，而是焦慮不安。她把這事告訴了Mr.Reed后感到很內(nèi)疚，因為這導致Terry沒有完成考試。第二段：根據(jù)上文和首句信息：Terry攔住了Mo，向她解釋沒有幫她復習的原因。Terry的爸爸這兩周病得很重，今天做手術。Terry很擔心他，所以才看手機的短信。Terry請求Mo原諒。第四步列要點提綱，優(yōu)化提升，銜接成文第一段：feeluneasyandrestless，lookatMr.Reedandnod，patonherback，beaskedtoleave，rushoutoftheclass，feelguilty第二段：feelembarrassed，runaway，stopherandsay，havebeenbadlyill，haveasignificantoperation，keeponreadingthetexts，forgiveme，seeyourfather第五步檢查謄寫ShewasworkingonthelastquestionwhenshesawthatTerryhadherphoneunderthetable.Thoughfeelinguneasyandrestless，shelookedatMr.Reedandnodded.Withhereyesgluedtothephone,itwasn’tuntiltheteacherpattedonherbackthatTerrynoticedMr.Reed.Immediately，Terrywasaskedtoleave.Terryrushedoutoftheclass,cryingalltheway.Insteadoffeelingrelaxed，Mohadantsinherpants.ShefeltguiltyfortellingMr.Reedaboutit,whichhadresultedinTerry’snotfinishingherexam.Mowaswalkingtowardstheschoolgatewhensheheardfootstepsbehindher.SheturnedtofinditwasTerrywhohadjustcomeoutoftheteacher’soffice.Feelingembarrassed，Mowantedtorunaway.Nevertheless，Terrystoppedherandsaid，“Mo，I’msorryIhaven’tkeptmypromisetohelpyoureview，butmyfatherhasbeenbadlyillfortwoweeks.Todayhehadasignificantoperation.IwassoworriedabouthimthatIkeptonreadingthetextsonthephonesentbymymothertogetthelatestnewsabouthim，soMr.Reedforgaveme.Canyouforgiveme？”“Ofcourse!Let’sgotothehospitaltoseeyourfather，”Mocouldn’twaittoreply.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AboynamedAlihadalargeandharmoniousfamily，happilylivingwithhissisters，parentsandgrandmother.Hisgrandmotherlovedeveryonealotandwasrespectedbyallfamilymembers.Shewasveryold，butsometimesshewouldrecallthingsfromherpastandsharewiththem.SometimestheywouldbelieveherbutatothertimestheywouldthinkthatGrannymightbemixingupthefactsduetoheroldage.Oneday，whenAliwasinschool，suddenlywhileknitting(編織)，Grannyrememberedsomethingandshecouldn’tcontainheremotionssoshegotuptotellherson—Ali’sfather.Shewalkedasfastasshecouldtohisroomandsaid，“Youalwaysaskedaboutmybirthdate，butdoyouknowtodayisthedaywhenIwasborn？”Shelookedathersonwithanexcitedexpression，expectinganimmediateresponse.However，hersonwonderedhowshecouldrememberherdateofbirthinthisoldagewhensheforgotsomanyotherthings，sohedidn’tpaymuchattentiontothis.Disappointedatherson’sreaction，GrannythenwenttoAli’smotherandAli’ssisters，butlikeAli’sfather，nobodybelievedher.Sadly，shewentandsatintheterrace(露臺).WhenAlireturnedfromhisschool，hefoundhisgrandmothersittingalonewithasadexpression.Aliaskedhisgrannyaboutthematter，butshesaidtherewasnothingtoworryabout.Afteralotofpersuasionshefinallytoldhimwhatwastroublingher—nobodyseemedtocarethatitwasherbirthdaytoday!AfterhearingwhatGrannysaid，Alithoughtofaplan.Purelybychance，someofAli’sfriendswereplayingnearbysohesharedhisplanwiththem.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右。HisfriendswereallwillingtohelpAliachievewhatheplanned.Aliwassohappytoseehisgrannywithtearsofjoyshininginhereyes.【參考范文】HisfriendswereallwillingtohelpAliachievewhatheplanned.WithAliactingasthedirecto