2017中考一模（議論文）【教師版】

第頁2019靜安一模Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Tobearesponsiblestudent!”（請以“做一個有擔(dān)當(dāng)?shù)膶W(xué)生!”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。）

（注意：中文不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）Situation：新時代的學(xué)生都需要有責(zé)任意識，無論是在自己家中、在學(xué)?；蛘呤窃谏鐣隙夹枰袚?dān)當(dāng)。請你談?wù)勀愕恼J(rèn)識，并舉例說明你的理解。審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇命題記敘文作文，要求講述如何成為一名有責(zé)任的學(xué)生本文開頭應(yīng)先引入有責(zé)任的人應(yīng)該是什么樣這一話題，然后過渡到個人應(yīng)當(dāng)如何去做。在內(nèi)容較多的部分要注意層次和連詞。案例分析：TobearesponsiblestudentInthemodernage,everyonehasasenseofresponsibility.AlthoughIamastudent,Istillshouldberesponsibleforalotofthings.Ithinkthemostmajorthingisourfamilies.MyparentsarethepeoplewhichIcareandlove.Theygivemeawarmhomeandmanyotherconditions.It’snodoubtthatIshouldresponsibleforthem.Forexample,Icanhelpmymomwithhousework,Istudyharderatschool.WhenIgetagoodmark,theywillproudofmeandhaveabigsmileontheirface.Ifnot,theywillbeverydisappointed.Tobearesponsiblestudent,Ishouldnotonlymakemyselfsuccessfulbutalsomakethefamilymoreunitedandmorepeaceful.范文點評：TobearesponsiblestudentCanyouberesponsibleforyourself?Asenseofresponsibilityisvaluable

foragoodstudent.Inmyopinion,first,beingaresponsiblestudentshouldberesponsibleforourselves.Inlaterlife,nomatterwhatdifficultiesweface,weshouldnevergiveup.Then,weshouldberesponsibleforourfamilyandfriends.Itisourdutytoloveourfamilyandfriends.Weshouldkeepourloyaltyandcommitmentinmind,Atlast,weshouldberesponsibleforthesocial.Toberesponsibleforoursocialismeaningtomakecontributionstoit.Showourunselfishdevotiontothecommunity,smileandhelpothers.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①Canyouberesponsibleforyourself主題引入②inmyopinion分論點引入③responsibleforourselves論點1④responsibleforourfamilyandfriends.論點2⑤responsibleforoursocial語言進(jìn)階：非謂語做主語beingaresponsiblestudentshouldberesponsibleforourselves動名詞做主語，可以表示經(jīng)常性，習(xí)慣性的動作,也可以表示具體的動作比如：paintingishishobby.動名詞做主語還可以指經(jīng)驗比如：Drivingintherushhouristiring.It可以在句首做形式主語，動名詞短語在后面做真正的主語在下面的句型中，it是形式主語，v-ing形式作真正的主語。

Itisnouse/good/point+doing例如：It’snousearguingwithhim.動名詞做主語，謂語動詞用單數(shù)詞典例句：Being

deaf

and

dumb

makes

communication

very

difficult.

裝聾作啞使談話變得非常困難Talking

mends

no

holes．空談無濟(jì)于事。練習(xí)：-What

do

you

think

made

Lisaangry？-___

herkey.A.As

she

lost B.Lost C.Losing D.Belost

解析：答案CLosing在此為動名詞，與her

key構(gòu)成動名詞短語在句中作主語。該題可以理解為：Losing

her

key

made

Lisa

so

upset翻譯鞏固：翻譯鞏固：丟了新的自行車使瑪麗覺得非常沮喪_______________________________________________________________________________在這里空等是浪費時間，不如早點回家吧。_______________________________________________________________________________抽煙對身體有害，你最好相信醫(yī)生的話早點戒掉。_______________________________________________________________________________1.LosinghernewbicyclemadeMaryveryupset.2.It’swasteoftimewaitinghere，youcangohomeearlier.3.It’snogoodsmoking,you’dbetterobeythedoctor’swordandgiveitupearly.nomatter+疑問詞的讓步壯語從句nomatter+what等引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句。Nomatter后面接關(guān)系代詞或關(guān)系副詞引導(dǎo)狀語從句在句中作讓步狀語。Nomatterwhat(who/whenetc.)...分別表示“無論何事”、“無論何人”、“無論何時”等，這個從句可以置主句之前，也可以置主句之后。

詞典例句：Nomatterwhatyoudo,youmustbeverycareful.不管做什么事，你都必須非常細(xì)心。Nomatterwhichyouchoose,youwillbesatisfied.不論你選擇哪一個，你都會滿意的。翻譯鞏固：不管你如何努力，你都不會成功的。_______________________________________________________________________________無論發(fā)生什么，我會一直在你身邊_______________________________________________________________________________無論如何，我都不會和他們那種人成為一丘之貉_______________________________________________________________________________1.Nomatterhowhardyoutry(=Howeverhardyoutry),youwillneverbesuccessful.2.Nomatterwhathappens.I'llalwaysbethereforyou.3.Nomatterwhat,Iwouldn’tbelikethosepeople.keepsb/sthinmind.Keep(sb/sth)inmind記住，銘記用來替換remember例句：When

you

keep

this

in

mind

you

realize

thatall

you

can

control

in

a

dangeroussituation

isyourself.

記住這一點你就能意識到，在危險的情況下你能控制的是你自己Keepinmind

thatyouhavetobehomeby11o'clock.記住，你必須在11點前回家翻譯鞏固：記住你告訴我的話并不容易。______________________________________________________________________________假如時間能在此刻停留，我會把你放在我心中。______________________________________________________________________________只要你時刻注意方法，每種方案都能成功實現(xiàn)網(wǎng)站布局。______________________________________________________________________________1.It’snoteasytokeepinmindwhatyouhavetoldme.2.Ifthetimewouldstop,Iwouldkeepyouinmymind.3.Everycase

can

beusedto

make

a

successful

website

layout,

aslongas

you

keepmethods

in

mind.二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019長寧一模Writeatleast60wordswiththetitle“Myopiniononhomework”.（以“我對作業(yè)的看法”為題寫一篇不少于60字的短文。標(biāo)點符號不占格。）你每天都要完成學(xué)科作業(yè)，請你談?wù)勀銓ψ鳂I(yè)的看法及建議。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。）審題分析：此題考察的是學(xué)生議論文寫作能力，屬于主觀理由型，即對某一問題或者社會現(xiàn)象表達(dá)自己的觀點。對于homework的看法，首先要有一個總體的觀點，然后再舉例形成分論點，可以從homework的作用和對學(xué)生的建議這些方面來擴(kuò)充。值得注意的是，分論點之間要有意識地增加連詞，論點內(nèi)容之間也要保持合理的邏輯，避免東一句西一句不知所云的情況。案例分析：此處添加學(xué)生案例范文范文點評：MyopiniononhomeworkDifferentpeopleholddifferentopinionsonhomework.Frommypointofview,homeworkistohelpstudentsreviewwhattheyhavelearnedinclassesaswellasdevelopthehabitofworkingouttheproblemsindependently.Doinghomeworkindifferentwaysmayhavedifferentresults.Somestudentsdotheirhomeworkactivelybyusingeffectivelearningtoolswhileothersmaychoosetodoitwiththehelpoftutorsorevenjustcopyothers.However,thegoalofhomeworkistoteachstudentshowtoplanassignments,organizematerialsandmanagetimeeffectively.Therefore,theimportanceofhomeworkcanneverbetoomuchstressedduringourstudylife.作文提綱：句子關(guān)鍵詞/句題干引入①不同的人對作業(yè)有不同的觀點。(holddifferentopinionson...)個人觀點②我認(rèn)為，作業(yè)是幫助學(xué)生復(fù)習(xí)他們在課堂中學(xué)習(xí)的內(nèi)容(reviewwhattheyhavelearnedinclasses)并且培養(yǎng)獨立解決問題的習(xí)慣(developthehabitofworkingouttheproblemsontheirown)。分論點引入句③用不同的方式(indifferentways)做作業(yè)可能會有不同的效果。(differentresults.)現(xiàn)象描寫④一些學(xué)生用有效的學(xué)習(xí)工具(useeffectivelearningtools)積極地做作業(yè)而另一些學(xué)生選擇在他們家教的幫助下(withthehelpoftutors)完成或者甚至抄襲別人的作業(yè)(copyothers’homework)。對觀點進(jìn)一步解釋并前后呼應(yīng)⑤然而做作業(yè)的目標(biāo)是幫助學(xué)生學(xué)會計劃任務(wù)，整理材料和有效管理時間(planassignments,organizematerials,managetimeeffectively)。結(jié)尾⑥突出總結(jié)homework的重要性（theimportanceofhomeworkcanneverbetoomuchstressed）其他觀點詞組：1)helpusgetreadyfortheexams2)improveourvariousabilitiessuchastheabilityofidentityingpiorities,calculation,3)problem-solvingandsoon.4)ensureenoughstudytime5)worksasatoolofselftestingtoknowhowmuchyouhaveunderstoodatclasses語言進(jìn)階1.aswellas aswellas是英語中常用的連接詞，使用時常常會出現(xiàn)錯誤，將其用法作以下簡要歸納和說明。練習(xí)：Thetournamentisopentoamateursprofessionals. A.that B.aswellas C.which D.this答案B。Shetakesprivatepupilsteachinginschool. A.aswellas B.what C.which D.this答案A。翻譯鞏固：護(hù)理工作既是職業(yè)又是救死扶傷的責(zé)任._______________________________________________________________________________這會對于你,接下來要學(xué)到的,和明天要做的東西起一個引導(dǎo)作用。_______________________________________________________________________________聽聽這些描述：,針對那些已經(jīng)沉浸于《尤利西斯》的人,和那些還在猶豫不決的人。_______________________________________________________________________________Nursingisavocationaswellasaprofession.Andthis'llleadintowhatyou'regoingtoseenexttime

as

well

as

whatyou'regoingtodotomorrow.

Listentothatlanguage:"ForthosewhoarealreadyengrossedinthereadingofUlysses,

as

well

as

forthosewhohesitatetobeginit."

2.holddifferentopinionson各抒己見，表達(dá)不同意某個觀點或者持有不同觀點的時候可以使用的固定搭配Differentpeoplehasdifferentopinions.這個句子是不合時宜的，不要使用。詞典例句：Differentscholarsholddifferentopinionstowardstherighttoknowthetruth. 學(xué)者們對知情權(quán)的認(rèn)知不盡一致。Therearesomepeoplewhoholddifferentopinionsontheenvironmentprotection. 人們對于環(huán)境保護(hù)的看法不太一樣翻譯練習(xí)：我在這件事上持有不同的觀點_______________________________________________________________________________家長對孩子的教育有不同看法_______________________________________________________________________________對是否取消學(xué)生回家作業(yè)老師們意見分歧_______________________________________________________________________________答案：1.Iholddifferentopinionsonthisissue.2.Parentsholddifferentopinionsontheirchildren’seducation.3.Theteachersholddifferentopinionsonwhethertocancelthestudents’homework.3.canneverbetoomuchstressed再強(qiáng)調(diào)也不為過cannever/nottoo再……也不為過，通常用于強(qiáng)調(diào)某一內(nèi)容，加強(qiáng)語氣。從語法上來說，不很難理。實際上，這是一個雙重否定句。毫無疑問，never是一個否定用詞，從語法和意義上都是如此。too從意義上來說是一個否定用詞。所以,實際上這是一個雙重否定句。

詞典例句Youcanneverbetoocarefulwhiledriving. 你開車時越小心越好.Indeed,youcanneverbetooconcentratedwhenyouareworkingonaminiature. 事實上，當(dāng)你工作的時候，你在怎么集中精神也不為過。翻譯鞏固我怎么感謝你也不過分。______________________________________________________________________________我們做實驗時越仔細(xì)越好。______________________________________________________________________________人民在歷史上所起的作用,無論怎樣評價都不會過高.______________________________________________________________________________1.Icannotthankyoutoomuch.2.Wecannotbetoocarefulindoingexperiments.3.Theimportantrolepeopleplayedinhistorycanneverbehighlightedtoomuch.

二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019黃浦一模In60to120words,writeaboutthetopic“Itisimportantto…”(以“…很重要”為題，寫一篇60到120個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格)作為一名中學(xué)生，你的生活一定很忙碌。目前你覺得什么對你來說很重要？請你結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷談?wù)勀愕南敕?，并說明理由。審題分析此次黃浦區(qū)的作文以一個半命題的形式考察大家，做什么事情很重要？這類半命題作文自由度非常大，屬于夾敘夾議類文章。命題要求要聯(lián)系自己的實際生活，這也是考點之一，在行文過程中稍微附加自己的真實經(jīng)歷即可。拿到題目后思考：做什么事情很重要呢？話題和素材可以從我們平時常接觸的話題中選，比如學(xué)英語、努力學(xué)習(xí)、凡事要制定計劃、關(guān)愛老人、保護(hù)環(huán)境等……選擇非常多，因此在擬題的過程中一定要找到自己最擅長的話題。案例分析：It’simportanttosavetrees. Treesareourbestfriends.Wecan’tlivewithoutthem.Theyprovidefoodandsheltersforhumanandanimals.Theyproduceoxygenforusandmakeourcitymorebeautifulandlessnoisy.Treesaresoimportantforus,butwedon’ttakecareofthem.Peoplecutdownsomanytreeseveryyearthattreesbecomefewerandfewer.So,wemustsavethem.Weshouldplantmoretreesandtakecareofthem.Weshouldcutfewertreesandwastelesswood.Inaword,treesareourbestfriendsandveryimportantforus.Ifwedon’tsavethem,wewilldieafterallthetreescutdown.范文點評：Itisimportanttokeepabalancebetweenstudyandplay.Frommypointofview,keepingabalancebetweenstudyandplaydoesmakeadifferencetous.Itisknowntoallthatstudyisimportant,butnowandthen,Ifindithardtosparesomefreetimetorelaxmyself.What’smore,continuousexaminationsstressmealot,whichputsgreatpressureonmymind.Lastbutnotleast,thereisasayinggoesthat‘AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy’.Onlybykeepingabalancebetweenstudyandplaycanwehaveanoveralldevelopment.寫作素材論點一ItisimportanttostudyEnglish.論據(jù)素材①Withtheglobalizationofthewholeworld,Englishplaysamoreandmoreimportantroleasaninternationallanguageinourdailylife.論據(jù)素材②EnglishisaveryusefultooltohelpusgetaccesstothelatestnewsandresearchpapersbecausemostofthemarewritteninEnglish.論點二Itisimportanttoprotectourenvironment.論據(jù)素材①Studentscan’tenjoytheirschoollifeunlesstheskyisblueandthewaterisclean.論據(jù)素材②Ifwedon’tstarttoprotecttheenvironmentnow,itwillbecomeworseandworse.Weneedtocreateabetterenvironmentforthenextgeneration.作文提綱：句子關(guān)鍵詞/句個人觀點（開門見山）①就我而言（mypointofview）,保持學(xué)習(xí)和玩樂之間的平衡很重要（doesmakeadifferenceto…）分論點一②大家都知道（Itisknowntoallthat…）學(xué)習(xí)的重要性，但我有時（nowandthen）會覺得找時間放松自己變得越來越難了（findithard）分論點二③其次（What’smore），連續(xù)不斷的考試對我施壓（stress），讓我心頭感到壓力山大（putgreatpressureonmymind）分論點三④最后（Lastbutnotleast），正如俚語（saying）所說，‘AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy’.總結(jié)(首位呼應(yīng))⑤由Only引導(dǎo)倒裝句：只有通過平衡學(xué)習(xí)和玩樂，我們才能達(dá)到全面發(fā)展（haveanoveralldevelopment）語言進(jìn)階形式賓語itIfindit+adj.+tofind

it+adj.這里的adj作為賓語it的賓語補(bǔ)足語，補(bǔ)充修飾賓語。詞典例句：Ifindithardtoblow-drymyhair

我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的頭發(fā)很難吹干。Willyouchangeplaceswithme?Ifindittoohotinthesun.

你能不能和我調(diào)換一下位置？我覺得呆在太陽下面太熱。 答案D.這里it做形式賓語。翻譯鞏固：1、我覺得很難判斷自己的工作如何。______________________________________________________________________________2、他不是個能與他人溝通的人，所以我感覺和他交流起來很困難。______________________________________________________________________________3、我發(fā)現(xiàn)，手邊有幾本詞典大有好處，這樣可以比較它們的選詞用字。______________________________________________________________________________1、Ifindithardtojudgeofmyownwork.2、Heisunabletorelatetootherpeople,soIfinditquitedifficulttocommunicatewithhim.3、Ifindithelpfultokeepseveraldictionariesbymesoastocomparetheirwording.形式主語itItisknowntoallthat…眾所周知……It+be+

分詞（known）+從句，該句型表示“眾所周知”，或“大家都知道”。這樣的分詞還有有said（據(jù)說），reported（據(jù)報道），believed（人們相信），known（眾所周知），decided（已決定），proved（已證實），thought（認(rèn)為）,expected（期待）,annouced（宣布）等。詞典例句：It

is

known

to

all

that

Shanghai

has

a

modern

and

fashionable

atmosphere.眾所周知，上海擁有時尚和現(xiàn)代化的氛圍。It

is

known

to

all

that

man

can't

live

without

air

or

water.眾所周知，人離開空氣或水就不能生存。寫作建議：常用于議論文中描述某個觀點或客觀事實。翻譯鞏固：1.大家都知道鍛煉有益于身體健康。____________________________________________________2.手機(jī)在我們?nèi)粘Ｉ钪凶兊迷絹碓奖匾?，這已經(jīng)是一個共識。____________________________________________________3.眾所周知，對生態(tài)環(huán)境和生物多樣性的保護(hù)是環(huán)保工作的重點。____________________________________________________1.It

is

known

to

all

that

exercises

are

good

for

healt