短文+教育、親子互動類讀后續(xù)寫 講義-2024屆高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

題型3：短文&教育/親子互動類讀后續(xù)寫

一、短文

短文可以是敘述某個活動、自己的經(jīng)歷或說明某事物，介紹活動或事物時應(yīng)條理清楚。時

態(tài)常用一般現(xiàn)在時或一般過去時。

短文的寫作步驟：

1）簡要概括事物/活動；

2）簡要介紹活動/事物；

3）簡要評價/感想。

【案例分析】

（2023?全國乙卷改編）學(xué)校英文報組織同學(xué)們分享自己在假期中學(xué)到的新技能，請你以此為

主題寫一篇短文投稿內(nèi)容包括：

1.簡要描述；2.體驗和感受。

注意:寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右

LearningaNewSkill

Lastsummer,Ilearnedhowtomakesomehome-cookeddisheslikeFriedEggwithTomato,

whichturnedouttobearewardingandfulfillingexperience.

Previously,IconsideredcookinghardsoIneverthoughtoflearningit.However,underthe

patientguidanceofmymother,IlearntFriedEggwithTomatobytrialanderror.ThemomentIserved

thedishmade,myparentscouldn'twaittotakeabiteofitandgavemeathumbs-up.

Overall,notonlydidacquiringtheskillgivemethejoyofsuccessbutalsoencouragedme

toembracenewchallenges.

你校正在組織英語作文比賽請你以“對我影響最大的一本書”為題，寫一篇短文參賽,內(nèi)

容包括:1.書籍簡介2對你的影響。注意:寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右。

TheMostInfluentialBooktoMe

AmongthebooksI'veread,theLittlePrinceinfluencesmemost.

It'saboutapilotwhocrasheshisplaneandisstuckinthedesertuntilhemeetsthelittleprince

fromanotherplanet.Thelittleprincetellsthepilotstoriesofhismagicaljourneyfromhislittleplanet

andofhisencounterswithdifferentgrown-ups.

,simpleasthestoryis,itinspiresmeinmanyways.I'venotonlyrealized

theimportanceofcompanybutalsolearnedtoopenmyheartandlovethepeoplearoundme.

②（改寫加粗黑體部分的句子）_____________________________________________________

二、生活與學(xué)習(xí)類素材積累

奪人眼球開頭句（開篇點題）

1.Therearemanyvaluableexperiencesinourlife.Asforme,cookingformymotheronherbirthday

isanunforgettableone.

2.Weparticipatedinaone-daytriptotheForestParklastSunday,theaimofwhichwastogetusclose

tonatureandlovenature.

3.Withgraduationapproaching,Ican'thelpconsideringmycollegemajor.

亮點出彩篇中句（說明學(xué)習(xí)內(nèi)容）

4.Whatimpressesmemostisthefriendshipformedintheperiod.

5.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadcookedandsomehowtheeggsendedupburnt.

6.At7am,westartedonfootandittookaboutoneandahalfhoursbeforewereachedourdestination.

7.Duringthewalk,notonlydidwebreathethefreshairbutwealsoappreciatedthefantastic

surroundingviews.

韻味無窮結(jié)尾句（評價）

8.Notonlydoestheactivityallowusstudentstorelaxinastressfulschoollife,butitalsoprepares

usforthefuturebothphysicallyandmentally.

9.Thankstothisopportunitytoexperiencenature,thisactivityrewardeduswithanunforgettable

memory.

10.Autumnprovidesuswithachancetofeelthesweetnessoflaboringtogetherwithfarmers.

三、教育/親子互動類讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasangrywithmyfatherinthefirstyearofcollege,becausehedidn'tcareaboutmyfeelings

atall.

OnedayIhadaseriousquarrelwithhim.Iwasfedupwithhisdirectionandcorrection.How

couldheinterferewithmylifeandmystudyplans?"Howcouldheunderstandtheimportanceofmy

universityactivities?Theonlythingthathecaredaboutwasmyacademicperformance!"Hedidn't

understandmyworldand|didn'tunderstandhis,either.

Istormedoutandsighedallthewaytoschool.SuddenlyIrealizedthatldidn'thavetheassignment

thatwasdue:athoughtcard.ThisclasswastaughtbyDr.SidneyB.Simon.Thethoughtcardwasthe

admissiontickettohisclass,Hewouldreturnthemtouswithhiscomment.

Myfirstthoughtcardread,"Allthatglittersisnotgold."Hecommented,uWhatdoesthisquote

meantoyou?Isitsignificant?"Obviously,hewastakingitseriously.Isurelydidn'twanttoreveal

myselftohim.

Theweekprogressed.Dr,Simon'sclasswasquitebrilliant.Hechallengedustothinkandcome

upwithourownresponses,ButIhadnohandlingstrategiestodealwithit.

ThesecondTuesdaycame.Iwroteonmycard,nThemostimportantthingincommunicationistohear

whatisn'tbeingsaid,"Thenextdaythecardcameback;"Youseemtoneedalistener.Isthisimportant

toyourlife?"Icouldn'trememberateachercaringpersonallyaboutmesinceprimaryschool.

Withallthesememoriesfillingmymind,1racedtoclass.0Justoutsidethedoor,1tookacardand

wrote,UIhavethemostterribleDadoftheworld!"Then1dashedin.Lookingupatme,hereached

outforthecard,and1tookmyseat,"ThemomentIsatdown,1feltterrible,Ididn*tmeantOetthatout.

ThatnightIhaddifficultysleeping.Whatifhecontactedmydad??

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

Pl:OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswithmixedfeelings.

P2:1heldthecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.

主題特點：在這個話題中會涉及:①親子之間緊張關(guān)系的處理、矛盾的化解、相互包容和幫助、

家長或孩子個人的成長、家長或孩子對自我的反思。②親子之間缺乏溝通、交流或陪伴,原因可

以是完全被電子產(chǎn)品吸引或者忙于工作等;③家長和孩子因為共同做出的一些改變，有了各自不

同程度的成長。

三步法：第一步:家庭環(huán)境或氛圍描寫十不滿、憂或排斥等情緒;第二步:沖突過程+動作和情感:

第三步:沖突化解、親子交流+高興/如釋重負(fù)+關(guān)系融洽（+升華）。

續(xù)寫步驟：

步驟1：讀原文理基本要素和2線

Character：____________________________________

When：____________________________________

Where：____________________________________

What:“我”與父親之間發(fā)生矛盾:在課堂上寫的卡片中,老師了解到了“我”當(dāng)下所遇到的問題,

充當(dāng)學(xué)生的傾聽者

2情線：

1）情節(jié)線:和父親有矛盾-生氣回校-老師的任務(wù)-和老師之間的卡片交流-“我”的卡片吐露

心聲_（續(xù)寫）：____________________________________

2）情感線:生氣-糾結(jié)-擔(dān)心、害怕

步驟2思續(xù)寫情節(jié)“以舊帶新”2原則（421原則-4街接、2情線、1主題;ARE原則-action、

response、emotion）

兩段首句定一框銜接：①:開頭句銜接首句“星期三早上，我懷著復(fù)雜的心情來上課?！笨蓪憽拔摇?/p>

在課堂上的心理活動過渡句:課下Simon老師叫住“我”-老師和“我”說了什么?銜接

②:尾句銜接第二段首句中的“thecard”可寫老師給了“我”卡片，卡片上寫了什么

二框二首1主題：銜接③:開頭句銜接首句“我緊緊握著卡片，想著他的話。”可寫“我”受到老師

的啟發(fā)后，揣摩是否與父親交流。

過渡句:見到父親-與父親的交流、和解-父親的回應(yīng)。

銜接④:尾句銜接原文，融景于情,從側(cè)面

描寫表現(xiàn)父子關(guān)系的拉近。1主題:溝通拉近父子關(guān)系

情感線：worried-frightened-confused-surprised-delighted—relieved

步驟3思伏筆添細(xì)節(jié)原續(xù)更融洽

捕捉原文所設(shè)伏筆，充盈過渡句細(xì)節(jié)并合理銜接,以使續(xù)寫段落在邏輯和內(nèi)容上更符合原文

基調(diào)。

原文伏筆點

Para6：Youseemtoneedalistener...

續(xù)寫第一段添加細(xì)節(jié)可寫Simon老師說愿意做“我”的傾聽者。

Para.2Howcouldheinterferewithmylifeandmystudyplans?Howcouldheunderstandthe

importanceofmyuniversityactivities?Hedidn'tunderstandmyworldandIdidn'tunderstandhis.......

續(xù)寫第二段描寫“我”思考是否告訴父親自己的學(xué)習(xí)計劃大學(xué)活動等;思考是否嘗試去了解父

殺O

必備物品:thoughtcard

thoughtcard穿續(xù)寫部分,推動故事情節(jié)發(fā)展。

步驟4沿原文特點寫了好表達(dá)（準(zhǔn)確、豐富、地道）

原文語言豐富、地道,如利用構(gòu)建動作鏈和with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)描寫人物動作;利用疑問和感嘆句描

寫人物內(nèi)心活動等。續(xù)寫時應(yīng)借鑒和仿效，如在第一段可描寫作者沒收到老的卡片的擔(dān)憂、害

怕的心理活動;第二段可描寫作者內(nèi)心活動，糾結(jié)是否與父親交流。這樣才能與原文語高風(fēng)格保

持一致

OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswithmixedfeelings.Asmythirdcarddidn'tcomeback

tome,Itookmyusualseat.feelinganxiousandfrightened.WhatifDr.Simontoldmyfatherabout

mycard?Whatwaswaitingformewouldbeanothermoreseriousquarrel!Afterclass,asIwas

approachingthedooroftheclassroom,Dr.Simonstoppedme,andtoldmethathewouldbemylistener.

Hereturnedmycardwithhiscomment"Goodmedicinetastesbitter,andgoodadviceisharshtothe

ear”

Iheldthecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.ShouldIsharewithmyfathermystudyplansand

universityactivities?ShouldItrytoknowabouthisworld?Withthesethoughtsfillingmymind,I

spottedmyfatherwaitingattheschoolgate.Thatday,Iwanderedhomewithmyfather.Thesetting

sunshoneonus,castingourshadowsontheroad,Carsofvariouscolorspassedbyus,buttheydidnot

affectourconversation.Wetalkedalotthatdayanditseemedthatthejourneyfromschooltohome

hadalsobeenshortened.

【練習(xí)】

翻譯下列詞塊

1.與某人大吵一架

2厭倦

3.氣沖沖地走出

4認(rèn)真對待

5處理策略

6伸手夠

7猛沖進(jìn)

8干擾；妨礙

9.百感交集

n.翻譯原句并仿效寫句

1.我氣沖沖地離開，一路嘆息著回校。

［仿寫］她揮舞著一封信怒氣沖沖地闖進(jìn)我的房間。

2.帶著滿腦的回憶，我疾步奔向教室。

［仿寫］童年的往事涌上心頭，她飛奔回故鄉(xiāng)。(flood)

3.那晚我輾轉(zhuǎn)難眠。要是他聯(lián)系了我爸怎么辦呢?

［仿寫］那周我寢食難安。要是他泄漏了我的秘密怎么辦呢?

in.閱讀原文故事梗概，在空白處填入一個適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或所給單詞的正確形式

Iwasangry①myfatherinthefirstyearashedidn'tcare②my

feelings.Onedaywehad(3)seriousquarrel.?(feed)upwithhis

interference,Istormedout.Filledwithmemories,Iracedtoclass.⑤(realize)Ihad

forgottheassignment,athoughtcardforDr.SidneyB.Simon'sclass,Iwrote,UA11thatglittersisnot

gold.Myfirstthoughtcardwasreturnedwithhiscomment.I⑥(sure)didn,twantto

give⑦(I)away.Theweek(8)(progress)withDr.Simon's

challengingclass.OnthesecondTuesday,mycardread,"Themostimportantthingincommunication

is⑨(hear)whatisn'tbeingsaid."Dr.Simoncared⑩(personal).

Withmemoriesflooding,I(11)(write)JIhavethemostterribleDadoftheworld!Dr.

Simontookthecard,and(12)(feel)terrible,Sleepwasdifficultthatnight.Whatif

hecontactedmydad?

閱讀下面的范文，在空白處填入一個適當(dāng)?shù)膯卧~或所給單詞的正確形式

OnWednesdaymorningIcametoclasswith?(mix)feelings.Asmy②

(three)carddidn'tcomebacktome,Itookmyusualseat,feeling(3)(anxiety)and

frightened.WhatifDr.Simontoldmyfatheraboutmycard?(4)waswaitingforme

wouldbeanothermoreseriousquarrel!Afterclass,asIwasapproachingthedooroftheclassroom,

Dr.Simonstoppedme,and⑤(tell)methathewouldbemy⑥

(listen).Hereturnedmycardwithhiscomment“Goodmedicine?(taste)bitter,and

goodadviceisharshtotheear.”

I(hold)thecardtightly,thinkingabouthiswords.ShouldIsharewithmyfathermy

studyplansanduniversity?(activity)?ShouldItrytoknowabouthisworld?⑩

thesethoughtsfillingmymind,Ispottedmyfather(11)(wait)atthe

schoolgate.Thatday,Iwanderedhomewithmyfather.Thesettingsun(12)

(shine)onus,castingourshadowsontheroad.Carsofvariouscolors(13)(pass)byus,

buttheydidnotaffectourconversation.Wetalkedalotthatday,and(14)seemedthat

thejourneyfromschooltohomehadalsobeen(short).

【拓展