技巧12 如何設(shè)計(jì)動(dòng)作-高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練技巧12如何設(shè)計(jì)動(dòng)作動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)技巧略談讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)試題都是要求我們續(xù)寫(xiě)人物經(jīng)歷，補(bǔ)充故事情節(jié)。在答題中存在的典型問(wèn)題為情節(jié)構(gòu)思與前文不連接、續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容欠豐滿、語(yǔ)言表達(dá)欠生動(dòng)等。其重要原因就是不會(huì)根據(jù)文章主題和故事發(fā)展的需要生動(dòng)、細(xì)致地描寫(xiě)主要人物的動(dòng)作，導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫(xiě)文章情節(jié)失真、內(nèi)容平淡、人物蒼白、語(yǔ)言空洞。以下就是動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)的三個(gè)技巧：一、描寫(xiě)精準(zhǔn)化怎樣使用精準(zhǔn)化動(dòng)作類(lèi)詞匯對(duì)動(dòng)作進(jìn)行細(xì)致描寫(xiě)呢？其實(shí)很簡(jiǎn)單，用一系列小動(dòng)作而不用大動(dòng)作，或者用含義比較明確的動(dòng)詞，而不用抽象或虛化的動(dòng)詞來(lái)描述，可以使描寫(xiě)更加具體生動(dòng)。試比較下面兩句:①Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.小男孩對(duì)他媽媽說(shuō)對(duì)不起。②Thelittleboyhunghisheadandmumbledanapologytohismother.小男孩垂著頭，咕噥著向他母親道歉。分析：第一句中“saidsorryto”不帶任何感情色彩,而第二句中使用了具體化的表示“說(shuō)”的動(dòng)詞mumbled（咕噥），從而使一個(gè)不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地復(fù)現(xiàn)在讀者腦海中。除了精準(zhǔn)選用表示動(dòng)作的詞語(yǔ)，而且要給動(dòng)詞加上適當(dāng)?shù)男揎棾煞?。適當(dāng)?shù)男揎椪Z(yǔ)能細(xì)致地表達(dá)出動(dòng)作的時(shí)間、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表現(xiàn)人物的鮮明個(gè)性與思想境界。動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)中最常見(jiàn)的修飾成分就是狀語(yǔ)，如副詞、介詞短語(yǔ)等。例如，在體現(xiàn)動(dòng)作的迅速和短暫時(shí)，我們可以添加以下修飾語(yǔ)：suddenly、immediately、withoutpausing、withoutdelay等。比如下面兩句：①Thewolfalsonoticedthemand

turneditsheadback,shouting

atPaulandBecky.狼也注意到他們，回頭朝保羅和貝基大喊大叫。②Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemand

fiercely

turneditsheadback,shouting

loudly

atPaulandBecky.與此同時(shí)，狼也注意到了他們，惡狠狠地轉(zhuǎn)過(guò)頭，對(duì)保羅和貝基大聲大叫。分析：第二句中加上了atthesametime與此同時(shí)/fiercely激烈地/loudly大聲地這三個(gè)副詞，把這兩個(gè)人遇到狼這個(gè)危險(xiǎn)情況生動(dòng)表達(dá)了出來(lái)。至于有哪些重要的副詞，可以豐富我們的句子表達(dá)呢？在后面的課程中，我們會(huì)有專(zhuān)題講解，請(qǐng)大家耐心等哦。二、動(dòng)作過(guò)程化記敘文中有不少動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)是一連串動(dòng)作過(guò)程的展示。尤其在展示人物個(gè)性的動(dòng)作時(shí),如果我們蜻蜓點(diǎn)水、一筆帶過(guò),就很難突出人物形象,也很難給人以深刻的印象,而通過(guò)細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)展現(xiàn)出動(dòng)作的過(guò)程,表現(xiàn)力便會(huì)大增。我們來(lái)看下面兩句:①Shewenttocatchthebutterfly.她去捉蝴蝶。②Shecreptalongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcuppedherhandsaroundthebutterflygently.她躡手躡腳地走著小路，迅速?gòu)澫卵?，輕輕地繞著蝴蝶。分析：第①句在描寫(xiě)主人公捕捉蝴蝶的動(dòng)作時(shí),沒(méi)有細(xì)節(jié)的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě),因此顯得很平淡。而②句運(yùn)用了creep爬,bend彎腰,cup（使成杯型）三個(gè)連貫的動(dòng)詞生動(dòng)具體地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙過(guò)程,具有極強(qiáng)的畫(huà)面感。因此,在續(xù)寫(xiě)過(guò)程中,在必要的地方恰當(dāng)使用一連串的動(dòng)詞來(lái)表示過(guò)程,能為文章增添不少色彩。三、語(yǔ)言修辭化除了在動(dòng)詞上做調(diào)整,還可以利用恰當(dāng)?shù)男揶o手法來(lái)幫助描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作。比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法都能讓動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)變得更有表現(xiàn)力。(1）第一組①Theoldman’sfacewrinkled.老人的臉皺了起來(lái)。②Theoldman’sfacewaslikeawitheredapple.老人的臉像一個(gè)枯萎的蘋(píng)果。分析：第②句使用了比喻，不說(shuō)“皺起來(lái)”，而說(shuō)“像一個(gè)枯萎的蘋(píng)果”，使得臉上動(dòng)作描述，更加生動(dòng)形象，更加吸引眼球。(2)第二組：①M(fèi)ystomachwasachingfornoteatingontime.我的胃因不按時(shí)吃飯而疼痛。②Mystomachwaspunishingmefornoteatingontime.我的胃在懲罰我沒(méi)有按時(shí)吃東西。分析：第②句使用了擬人，不說(shuō)“疼痛”，而說(shuō)“懲罰了我”，更加生動(dòng)有趣。(3)第三組①Whensheheardthebadnews,shecried.當(dāng)她聽(tīng)到這個(gè)壞消息時(shí)，她哭了。②Whensheheardthebadnews,ariveroftearspouredout.當(dāng)她聽(tīng)到這個(gè)壞消息時(shí)，我淚流如何。分析：第②句使用了夸張，不說(shuō)“哭”，而說(shuō)“淚流如河”，讓我們的腦海中，悲傷之情油然而生。動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)素材積累與肢體語(yǔ)言相關(guān)的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)素材(1)head①Sheturnedandheadedforthedoor.她轉(zhuǎn)身朝門(mén)走去。②Heburied/put/heldhisheadinhands,greatlyannoyed.他雙手抱頭，非常生氣。③Manypeopleintheaudiencenoddedinagreement.許多觀眾點(diǎn)頭表示贊同。④Ifellasleepassoonasmyheadhitthepillow.頭一碰枕頭我就睡著了。⑤Hehung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowedhisheadinshame.他羞愧地低下了頭。(2)face①Herfacepaledwithfright.她嚇得臉都白了。②Abrightsmileappearedon/spreadacross/crossedhisface.他的臉上露出了燦爛的笑容。③Herfacelitup/brightened/glowedwhenIgaveherthepresent.我給她禮物時(shí)，她的臉上煥發(fā)出了光彩。(3)cheek①Colorrushed/flooded/rosetohercheekswhensherealizedshewasbeingwatched.意識(shí)到有人在看她，她頓時(shí)漲紅了臉。②Hefelthischeeksburningwithshame.他因?yàn)樾呃⒍械侥橆a發(fā)燒。③Hercheekswerewetwithtears.她淚流滿面。(4)eye①Heturnedhiseyestothedoorwhenheheardthehandleturning.聽(tīng)到門(mén)把轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)的聲音，他向門(mén)那邊看去。②Tinasqueezedhereyesshutandbitherlip.蒂娜閉上雙眼，咬了咬嘴唇。③Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.她直視父親的眼睛，誠(chéng)實(shí)地回答了他的問(wèn)題。④Shetriedtositup,hereyesfixedonJoan'sface.她試圖坐起來(lái)，雙眼緊盯著瓊的臉。⑤Ifelttearswellupinmyeyes.我感到淚水在眼里涌出來(lái)。(5)mouth①Ourmouthsdroppedopeninsurprise.我們驚奇地張大了嘴。②MymouthstartedwateringwhenIsmelledthefood.聞到食物的香味，我開(kāi)始流口水了。③MyheartwasinmymouthwhenIwalkedintoheroffice.我走進(jìn)她的辦公室時(shí)，緊張得心都提到嗓子眼了。(6)hand①Shetookthechild'shandandhelpedhimclimbthesteps.她拉住孩子的手牽著他爬上臺(tái)階。②Hereachedforherhandandheldittightly.他伸手抓住她的手并緊緊握住。③Sheshruggedandspreadherhands.“That'sallIcantellyou.”她聳聳肩，攤開(kāi)雙手說(shuō)：“我只能告訴你這么多了。”④Sheshivered,rubbingherhandstogetherfiercely.她一邊顫抖，一邊使勁搓著雙手。⑤Herhandsshook/trembledassheliftedtheglasstoherlips.她的手顫抖著把杯子送到唇邊。(7)arm①Hewasrunningforward,wavinghisarms.他揮舞著胳膊向前跑著。②Hestoodtherewithcrossedarms,lookingangry.他交叉著雙臂站在那里，看上去怒氣沖沖。③Shefoldedherarmsandstaredathim.她交叉著雙臂注視著他。1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwaspouringheavily.Mabelwasallwetbythetimeshearrivedatthesheltered(遮蔽)walkway.Fromfarawayshewatchedthepublicbusleavethebusstopwithouther.Sheshookherheadandsaidtoherself,“Ishouldhavebroughtmyumbrella.”Mabelstoodattheshelterandwatchedpeoplegetonthebuses.Theonlywayshecouldreachschoolwouldbetohavesomeoneshelterhertothebusstopandwaitforthenextbus.Theschoolwasjustonebusstopaway.However,shewasnotconfidentofanyonehelpingheratall.Everyonelookedtoobusytonoticeher.Mabelaskedafewpeopleforhelp.Butnobodystoppedtolendorshareanumbrella.Mabelbegantofeeldisappointed.Shewasshockedthatnoonehadagreedtohelpher.Shehadnochoicebuttostaywhereshewas.Shedecidedtowaitfortheraintostop.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,someonetouchedMabelonhershoulder.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Mabelfinallyarrivedatherschool.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)段續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文，續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右。Jackson’sfamilyhiredadriver.Thedriver’sfamilycametostaywiththeminasmallhouseintheirbackyard.That’showJacksonmetthedriver’seight-year-oldsonTom.FromthedayhemetJackson,Tombecamehisfan.ForTom,11-year-oldJacksonseemedtobeabigboy.HewouldalwaysfollowJacksonaround.Tomdidn’tgotoschool.Hewasadmittedtoalocalgovernmentschool,butherefusedtogo.HetoldJacksonshylythattheteachersonlymadethemcopywordsfromtheblackboard.Sincehehadn’tlearnedhowtoread,hecouldnotunderstandanythingthatwaswrittenontheblackboard.

Jacksonfeltsorryforhim.OnSunday,JacksonsawTomsittingunderatreeholdinganalphabet(字母表)bookinhishands.JacksonwalkedquietlytowardshimanddiscoveredthatTomwasholdingthebookupsidedown.JacksontookthebookoutofTom’shandsandturnedtherightsideup.“Thisishowyoushouldread,”hetoldTom.TwobigtearsrolleddownTom’scheeks.TomtoldJackson,“Iwanttobelikeyou,butIcan’tdoanything.”Thatevening,JacksontoldhisparentstheyhadtohelpTomgetintoabetterschool.ItwasnoteasytomakeTomadmittedtoanewschool,becausethetimeforadmissionwasover.Luckily,oneprincipal(校長(zhǎng))lookedatTomkindlyandadmittedhimtoherschool.ThenextdayTomwenttohisnewschoolwearinganewshirt.ButwhenTomreturnedfromschool,hewasabitsad.Theotherchildreninhisclasshadlaughedathim.HetoldJackson,“TheyallsaidIammucholderthanthembutinasmallerclass.Idon’twanttogotoschool.”注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Paragraphl:Jacksonsaid,“Don’tworry,Tom,Iwillteachyoutoread."________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Twomonthslater,Tomreturnedfromschoolwithabrightsmile.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Moneyweretight,soIwasexcitedwhenafriendmentionedanonlinecompanythatwastryingtohirewriters.Oncheckingtherequirementsforthepost,Iknewthiswasthejobforme.Partoftheapplicationprocessinvolvedwritingatestarticle.Ithoughtoverthetopic,spentseveralhoursdoingresearch,andproducedmybestpossibleeffort.Oneoftherequirementsinvolvedtheuseofsoftwarethatwasnewtome.ThenewsoftwaresavedautomaticallyasIworked,sothatseemedperfect.Thatsavedmefromneedingtohit“save”evennowandthen.Aftercompletingthearticle,Icheckeditseveraldozentimes.Ithadtobeasnearperfectionaspossible.WhenIcouldnolongerimproveitanymore,Itoldthecompanythatthepostwasreadyforthemtoreadandsentthemalink.Afewdayspassedbeforethecompanycontactedme.Theyhadrefusedme.Icouldn’tunderstandwhy.Itmusthavebeenmyarticleas,untilthatpoint,theyseemedhappywitheverythingelse.Theyinvitedmetotryagaininninetydays,butthereseemedlittlepointindoingthat.Ihadnoideawhattheydidn’tlikeaboutmyarticle.Disappointed,IthankedthempolitelyandwonderedwhatelseIcoulddotoimprovemyincome.Nextday,Ireceivedanothere-mailfromthecompany.Theywantedmetopostmyarticleagain.Thatseemedstrange.Whatwasthepointofpostinganarticlethey’dalreadyrefused?Followingtheadviceofmyfriend,Iopenedmypostoncemoretoseeiftherewereanyoverlookedproblems.Iimmediatelynoticedthataneditorforthecompanyhadeditedthearticle.Sheseemedtolovethepieceuntilshecametothelastparagraph.Ithadtoomanytypingerrors.Neartheend,thetextturnedintothreelinesof“n”.Hereandthere,anotherletterappeared,andthenthe“n”continued.Overthreelines.Thewordwashiddenamongdozensof“n”.Iwasshocked.Howcouldthathavehappened?Somethingmusthavelandedonthekeyboard.ButhowhadInotnoticedit?注意：1．續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Atthatpoint,ourverycute,extremelycuriousparrot,flewintotheroomandlandedonmyshoulder.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ieditedmypiececarefullyagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Alittlekindnessgoesalongway.Itisincrediblehowonesimpleactcancompletelyturnaperson’sdayaround.Thesesimple,preciousmomentsarewhatmakeslifesospecial.JulieBickisasinglemotheroftwolovelychildren,aged8and10,andshethinksherfamilyisherworld.Sheabsolutelyadoredhermomanddadgrowingup,andshekeptagoodrelationshipwiththemasanadult—althoughthestressesoflifesometimesgotinthewayofthemspendingtimetogether.Unfortunately,Julie’smompassedawayunexpectedly.Shewasn’tabletomakethememoriesshewouldhavehopedto,anditbotheredherdeeply.Shewasdeterminednottomakethesamemistaketwice.Thenin2017,justoneyearafterhermomdied,Julie’sdadwasdiagnosedwithAlzheimer’sdisease(老年癡呆).Theworrieddaughterwastotallyoverwhelmed(不堪重負(fù)的),butsherememberedthepromiseshehadmadetoherselfafterlosinghermother.Thisnewsservedasareasonforspendingmorequalitytimewithherdad.Juliedecidedthatthebestthingtodowassticktogether.Sheandherchildren,CarleeandBrantlee,movedinwithherdad.Theywantedtogivehimthebestlife,sotheybecamehiscaretakers.Thisseemedtocheerherdadup,whichwasalltooessentialatsuchacriticalpointinhislife.Thisnewlivingsituationwasnotwithoutdifficulties,butitwasworthittoJulietobethereforherfather.Still,thewomanwasstrugglingalot:Shewasamother,acaretaker,abreadwinner,andanindividual.Itcouldbehardtobalanceitall.SometimesJuliefeltoverwhelmedbythesituationlifehadthrownather,butshealwaystriedtomanageit.Sheneverwantedtoshowherworriestoherdad,becauseshedidn’twanttocausehimstress.Whenshecried,shewouldwipeawayhertearsbeforehecouldseethem.ButJulieandherdadwereclose,andheknewthatsomethingwastroublingher.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Fortunately,Harold,agarbageman,comfortedthedadanddaughterwithhiskindness.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItmeantsomuchtoJuliethatthismanwouldtaketimeoutofhisdaytohelpher.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Oneday,DadtookTimandLilytothesupermarket.“NowwherehasTimgone?”askedDad.Lilyshrugged.KeepingtrackofTimwasnotonheragendatoday.She’dbeentryingtodecideontheperfectgiftforDad’supcomingbirthday.Thisyear,shewasdeterminedtoprepareapresentthatcouldn’tbeboughtatastoreororderedonline.“Daddy!”Timappearedoutofnowhere,disturbingLily’sthoughts.Heyelled,holdingacereal(麥片)boxintheair,“Let’sgetit!It’snutritiousanddelicious!Andithasadragoninside!”TimrememberedDadsayingthatwhenhewasakid,almosteveryboxofcerealcamewithatoy.Eversince,Timwascertainthathe,too,wouldfindatoyinthenextbox.Whentheygothome,DadandLilybeganputtingawaythegroceries.Timcouldn’twaittotaketheboxofcerealupstairstohisroom.Bythetimetheyfinished,LilycouldhearTimshouting.“No!No!”Tim’svoicekeptgettinglouderandlouder.Lilyimaginedeachwordasthesoundofahammerstrikingmetal.Thensheracedtowardsherbrother’sroom.Themomentshesteppedinside,shefeltacrunch(嘎吱聲)beneathherfeet.ItwasobviousthatTimdumpedallthatcereallookingforatoydragon.“Theylied!Nodragon.Justapictureonthebox.”Timsoundedclosetotears.AnnoyedasLilywas,shesaidquietly,“Let’sseewhattheboxsays.”“Idon’tknowhowtoread.”herbrothersaidinalowvoice.ItremindedLilythatlastschoolyear,Tim’steacherwhosenthomeeasy-to-readbooksandworksheetsinsistedthathewasreadytolearntoreadandjustneededsomeextrahelp,butTimcomplainedaboutbooks“forbabies”and“boring”homeworkassignments.ItwasreallyaheadacheforDadtoteachTimtoread!Atthethoughtofthese,itseemedthatTim’sdragonissuehadsweptawayherconcernforapresentforDad.注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1：LilydecidedtocooperatewithTim,makingupadragonstoryandhavingTimreadforDad.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,Dad’sbirthdayfinallycame.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Suddenly,someonetouchedMabelonhershoulder,Mabelturnedbackandsurprisinglyspottedatallandbeautifulladywearingashiningsmileonherface,withacolorfulumbrellainherhand.Agentlevoicecame,“Doyouwanttogowithme?”SheexplainedthatshehadrecognizedMabel’sschooluniformanddecidedtoshelterhertotheschool.Mabelwaspleasedbeyonddescription,smiledandagreedimmediately.Mabelfinallyarrivedatherschool.Whenshesatdowninclass,shetookoffherwetcoatandsocksandfeltoverwhelminglymoved.Therewasnodoubtthatitwasherdaybecausetheteacherpraisedherinclassandshefeltgratefulthatshewasnotlateforclass.Althoughdrenchedcompletely,Mabelwasstillhappythattheladyhadhelpedheronthewaytoschool.Shecouldn’thelpthinkingofthatbeautifulwoman.Whilethelady’sphysicalbeautywasastounding,itwasherinvisiblebeautythatsheshallalwaysremember.【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了Mabel在上學(xué)的路上遇到傾盆大雨，她找到一個(gè)庇護(hù)所避雨，但這庇護(hù)所離車(chē)站有一段距離，她希望有人能分享傘讓她去車(chē)站，但幾次求助無(wú)果后，她別無(wú)選擇只能站在那里等待雨停。1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由首句內(nèi)容“突然，有人碰了碰Mabel的肩膀?！笨芍?，這段可重點(diǎn)寫(xiě)Mabel遇到一位好人愿意送她去學(xué)校。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Mabel終于到了她的學(xué)校?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)Mabel準(zhǔn)時(shí)到達(dá)學(xué)校，心中對(duì)幫助她的人充滿感激。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：女士提供幫助——Mabel接受幫助——Mabel準(zhǔn)時(shí)到達(dá)學(xué)?！狹abel充滿感激之情3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①.看見(jiàn)：notice/spot/see②.解釋?zhuān)篹xplain/interpret/spot③.記?。簉emember/keepinmind情緒類(lèi)①.驚訝地：surprisingly/astonishingly/astoundingly②.滿意的：pleased/satisfied/content③.感激的：grateful/thankful/appreciative【典型句式】[高分句型1].SheexplainedthatshehadrecognizedMabel’sschooluniformanddecidedtoshelterhertotheschool.（運(yùn)用了由that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2].Whilethelady’sphysicalbeautywasastounding,itwasherinvisiblebeautythatsheshallalwaysremember.（運(yùn)用了由itwas...that引導(dǎo)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句）2．Jacksonsaid,“Don’tworry,Tom,Iwillteachyoutoread.”“CanIbethesameasyou?”Tomaskedwithhope.“Sure,ifyouwantto.”answeredJackson.Thenthetwomadeareadingplantogether.Onthedaybothofthemwenttoschool,whileonthenighttheyspentatleasttwohoursreadingthealphabetbook.WithJackson’shelp,Tombegantounderstandthethingthatwaswrottenontheblackboardslowly.Twomonthslater,Tomreturnedfromschoolwithabrightsmile.Herushedintothehouseandcan’twaittotellJacksonagoodnewsthathewaspraisedbytheteacher,whosaidhemadesuchagreatprogressinashorttime.Andalltheclasswereastonishedathisimprovements.“Thankyou,youdomakeadifferencetome.”saidtoJackson.“No,itisyouwhoyoushouldsaythanks.Alwaysremember,anyonecanmakeadifference,justdon’tgiveup!”【寫(xiě)作分析】本文以第三人稱(chēng)視角講述湯姆在進(jìn)入一個(gè)更好學(xué)校之后因?yàn)椴蛔R(shí)字而被同學(xué)嘲笑，從而產(chǎn)生了厭學(xué)的想法，在好朋友杰克遜的幫助下，他學(xué)習(xí)取得了進(jìn)步，并且贏得了同學(xué)們的尊重，對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)和校園生活重拾了信心的故事。1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“杰克遜對(duì)湯姆說(shuō)：‘別擔(dān)心，我會(huì)教你讀書(shū)的?！笨芍?，第一段可寫(xiě)杰克遜是如何幫助湯姆進(jìn)行閱讀識(shí)字的。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“兩個(gè)月之后，湯姆帶著燦爛的笑容從學(xué)校回來(lái)了”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)湯姆在學(xué)校所發(fā)生的事情，以及閱讀取得的成效和對(duì)杰克遜的感謝。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：幫助閱讀識(shí)字——被表?yè)P(yáng)——感謝——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①回復(fù)：answer/reply②回家：rushintohouse/gobackhome③放棄：giveup/backdown情緒類(lèi)①開(kāi)心：withahappysmile/verydelighted②驚訝：feelastonished/surprised【典型句式】【高分句型1】Herushedintothehouseandcan’twaittotellJacksonagoodnewsthathewaspraisedbytheteacher,whosaidhemadesuchagreatprogressinashorttime.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句和who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）【高分句型2】No,itisyouwhoyoushouldsaythanks.（運(yùn)用了itis...who引導(dǎo)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句型）3．Onepossibleversion:Atthatpoint,ourverycute,extremelycuriousparrot,flewintotheroomandlandedonmyshoulder.HeusuallyflewintomyroomandstoodbymewhileIwasworkingonmycomputer.Sometimeshewouldlandonthekeyboard.Hesoonlearnedthatifheranonthekeys,littlefiguresappearedonthescreen.Atsomepointwhilemyimportantarticlewasstillopenonmyscreen,Imusthavelefttheroom.WhileIwasaway,hecameouttoplay!Hemusthavedoneahappytapdanceontheletter“n”andthenflownawaybeforeIreturned.Ieditedmypiececarefullyagain.ThistimeImadesureitwasperfectbeforeclosingthewindow.Iwroteacovere-mailcontainingaheartfeltapologyandexplainedwhatIthoughthadhappened.AfterIsenttheletter,Iwonderedaboutmywisdom.Itreallydidsoundliketheage—oldexcuseteachershear:“Thedogatemyhomework!”However,itseemedtodothetrick.Afewdayslater,Isignedmyletterofacceptancetoworkwiththecompany.【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述作者非常想要尋找一份工作解決經(jīng)濟(jì)緊張問(wèn)題，朋友提到一份網(wǎng)上公司的工作時(shí)，作者核查了要求感覺(jué)特別適合自己，于是精心編輯了一篇文章應(yīng)聘，自我感覺(jué)文章近乎完美，但是結(jié)果公司卻拒絕了作者，作者很困惑，后來(lái)公司請(qǐng)作者再次上傳一次他的文章，作者打開(kāi)同一篇文章準(zhǔn)備再仔細(xì)檢查一下，結(jié)果發(fā)現(xiàn)文章中有許多無(wú)效的字母，作者很震驚，最終弄清楚是自己的鸚鵡落在鍵盤(pán)上弄出了這些無(wú)效字母的故事。1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時(shí)，我們那只非?？蓯?ài)、非常好奇的鸚鵡飛進(jìn)了房間，落在了我的肩上?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼?xiě)作者想到很可能是鸚鵡落在鍵盤(pán)上弄出了這些無(wú)效字母n。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我又一次仔細(xì)地編輯了我的文章?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?xiě)作者再次精心編輯了文章，發(fā)給了公司，雖然感覺(jué)理由有點(diǎn)令人不能相信，作者還是解釋了原因，最終被公司錄取的經(jīng)過(guò)。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：想到鸚鵡平時(shí)的動(dòng)作——懷疑鸚鵡——再次編輯文章——解釋原因——被錄取3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①.落在鍵盤(pán)上：landonthekeyboard/fallonthekeyboard②.返回：return/goback③.解釋?zhuān)篹xplain/interpret情緒類(lèi)①.困惑：wonder/fellconfused/feelpuzzled【典型句式】[高分句型1].HeusuallyflewintomyroomandstoodbymewhileIwasworkingonmycomputer.（運(yùn)用了while引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）[高分句型2].Iwroteacovere-mailcontainingaheartfeltapologyandexplainedwhatIthoughthadhappened.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作定語(yǔ)，what引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句）4．Fortunately,Harold,agarbageman,comfortedthedadanddaughterwithhiskindness.Haroldwasanextremelynicemanwhohadgoodrelationshipswitheveryoneintheneighborhood.Hewasknownallaroundtheblockforhisfriendliness.EveryMondayhewouldvisitwiththegarbagetruck.OneMonday,whenJuliejustspentaroughnightandswepthertears,herfatherapproachedherandsaid,“Don’tworry,Julie.Haroldismyfriend.Hewouldlikeadaywithmetomorrowsothatyoucanfreeyourselfforamoment.”ItmeantsomuchtoJuliethatthismanwouldtaketimeoutofhisdaytohelpher.Hiskindheartleftherwitharestoredfaithinhumanity.Sheknewnomatterwhatdiseaseherfatherhad,itwouldnevertakeawayhisloveforher.AlthoughHaroldhadpickeduptheirgarbageformanyyears,hetrulydidn’tknowwellabouther.ButwhenheknewthatthefatherhadAlzheimer’sdisease,hewouldtaketimetolookafterthem.Therewassomuchgoodinthisworld,anditstartedwithsimpleactsofkindness.【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)。Julie是位有兩個(gè)孩子的單親媽媽?zhuān)M管生活壓力很大，她還是與父母經(jīng)常保持聯(lián)系。然而不幸的是，母親意外過(guò)世，父親也在一年后患了老年癡呆。Juli