技巧01 如何分析人物-高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

高一英語讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練技巧01如何分析人物故事類語篇人物形象的分析方法1.在情節(jié)發(fā)展中分析人物形象情節(jié)是小說中用以表現(xiàn)主題或人物性格的一系列有組織的生活事件。我們需要從情節(jié)的發(fā)展中把握人物形象，因為情節(jié)是人物性格形成和發(fā)展的歷史，在事件發(fā)展的過程中，才能顯現(xiàn)出人物靈魂深處的東西來，離開了情節(jié)，就不知道人物怎樣做事，也就無法分析人物性格特征。要了解人物性格，必須透過情節(jié)中發(fā)生的事情這種外在現(xiàn)象去剖析現(xiàn)象背后的本質(zhì)。故事情節(jié)或是發(fā)展了人物性格，或是表現(xiàn)了人物性格。所以，分析小說的情節(jié)也是我們分析人物的一把鑰匙。2.從塑造人物的方法中分析小說的核心任務(wù)就是通過刻畫人物、塑造典型人物形象來揭示社會生活的某些本質(zhì)方面，從而表現(xiàn)作品的主題的。所以，要評價小說中的人物形象，就要認(rèn)真分析作者對人物的描寫——肖像描寫、語言描寫、行動描寫、心理描寫、細(xì)節(jié)描寫等等，從而評價人物的性格特征，進(jìn)而發(fā)掘出各色人物善惡美丑的精神世界。辨析人物描寫的方法，除了肖像（外貌、神態(tài)、服飾）描寫，動作細(xì)節(jié)描寫、語言描寫、心理描寫等直接描寫外，還要注意其它人或景的烘托。3.借助環(huán)境描寫分析人物形象環(huán)境是為人物而設(shè)置的，小說中的人物是生活在特定的歷史背景和特定的生活環(huán)境之中的，人物的思想感情總要打上時代的烙印，留下環(huán)境的痕跡。環(huán)境對人物性格的體現(xiàn)起著強(qiáng)化作用。作者為了表現(xiàn)人物豐富復(fù)雜的性格，往往為人物設(shè)置各種不同的環(huán)境，用以“刺激”人物，以記錄其種種行為，從而顯露出性格。4.借助作者傾向分析人物形象主題是小說作家在描寫、敘述人物性格、人物命運時顯示出的對生活的理解和認(rèn)識。我們要在閱讀中認(rèn)識和評價人物的性格、品質(zhì)、典型性和社會意義，體會作者的感情傾向。英語讀后續(xù)寫中刻畫人物形象的方法1.利用情緒描寫，凸顯人物性格情緒描寫是指對于人物在特定場景中的主觀心理狀態(tài)和變化的描寫，而由于某種特定事件而引發(fā)的情緒一定會伴隨外部特征的表現(xiàn)，例如面部表情、眼神、肢體動作等，因此高中英語教師在訓(xùn)練學(xué)生進(jìn)行情緒描寫時可以先激發(fā)學(xué)生的想象力，想象不同的情緒特征會有怎樣的外部表現(xiàn)。例如人在內(nèi)心不安和焦急的時候可能會來回踱步、眉頭緊皺；人在憤怒的時候可能會滿臉通紅、拳頭緊握；人在悲痛的時候可能會兩手抱頭、沉默不語……例如，2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫題目的寫作為例，試卷給出的短文描寫了一對雙胞胎決定在母親節(jié)這一天為母親悄悄做一頓早飯，給母親一個驚喜，然而在做飯的過程中遇到了種種困難的小故事。我們在仔細(xì)閱讀原文以后，發(fā)現(xiàn)了一些關(guān)鍵信息：驚喜；做飯；困難。閱讀題目給出的兩個自然段的段首句后，我們基本可以確定故事情節(jié)的大致走向：父親出現(xiàn)幫助雙胞胎完成了這頓早飯，母親收到了這份生日驚喜非常感動。通過思考和分析，大部分學(xué)生都認(rèn)為這個故事的情節(jié)比較簡單，故事線也比較明顯，人物也是日常生活中常見的人物。為了將普通的父親和母親的人物形象刻畫得更加入木三分，我們可以進(jìn)行換位思考：Ifyouwereafatherwhowerewokenupbyanoisewhenhewassleepinginthemorning,andcametothekitchen,youfoundthattwochildrenhadmadeamessofthekitchen,whatwouldyoufeel?我們馬上想到這位父親這時候應(yīng)該是非常生氣的，臉上會帶著憤怒的表情氣沖沖地來到廚房。因此我們可以說：Judgingfromhisexpression,hewasveryangrywhenhesawthemessinthekitchen.我們在用英語進(jìn)行人物的情緒描寫時，常出現(xiàn)用詞和表達(dá)生硬，缺乏感受力和生命力等問題，無法將人物性格表現(xiàn)得豐滿形象，因此我們可以通過身體各個部位的表現(xiàn)來側(cè)面襯托人物情緒，運用比喻、夸張等修辭手段提升語言的感染力和表現(xiàn)力，使人物形象躍然紙上，給人以難以磨滅的印象。2.細(xì)化動作描寫，刻畫思想品質(zhì)人的動作受其思想和性格的影響。在記敘文中作者通過對人物的動作進(jìn)行具體而細(xì)致的描寫，能從側(cè)面襯托人物的思想品質(zhì)和性格特征，表現(xiàn)人物的心理活動，推動故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展。成功的動作描寫能夠使讀者感受到人物的栩栩如生，充分展示人物的內(nèi)心世界，將人物形象樹立得更加鮮明、完整和立體。例如，2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫的第一自然段父親出場以后，為了推動故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，這里要對父親的一系列動作進(jìn)行描寫，比如父親拍了拍雙胞胎的肩膀鼓勵他們，父親決定要幫他們做飯等。我們可以這樣描述父親的動作：Thefatherlearnedaboutthetwins’plan.Hepattedthemontheshoulderandsaidthathewouldhelpthemfinishthesurprisebreakfast.我們還可以用非謂語動詞將兩句話合并，并在動詞前添加副詞使表述更加生動：Afterlearningaboutthetwins’plan,thefatherhappilypattedthemontheshouldersandpromisedthat…與靜態(tài)的肖像描寫相比，動作描寫貴在能夠?qū)⑷宋锏膭討B(tài)特征確切生動地表現(xiàn)出來。在進(jìn)行動作描寫時，學(xué)生通常出現(xiàn)動詞和句式重復(fù)使用的現(xiàn)象，在表述上也經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)句式雜糅和表述不清的錯誤。教師在訓(xùn)練學(xué)生進(jìn)行讀后續(xù)寫活動時，應(yīng)引導(dǎo)學(xué)生學(xué)會將人物的一系列動作進(jìn)行分解，然后通過謂語動詞和非謂語動詞將幾個動作串聯(lián)在句子中，使表述重點突出，語法正確，句意明確。除此之外，為了使表述更加簡單明了，學(xué)生在寫作時應(yīng)盡量使用一些語義明確的特殊動詞避免使用語義不明確的普通動詞，例如盡量選用whisper/state/shout/promise等有具體含義的“說”來代替無具體含義的“say”。3.強(qiáng)化心理描寫，展現(xiàn)內(nèi)心獨白心理描寫是對人物內(nèi)心心理活動的描寫，能夠?qū)崟r展現(xiàn)文章中人物對于特殊事物的內(nèi)心感受和真實想法，有直接描寫和間接描寫之分。直接描寫主要是通過內(nèi)心獨白的方式來直接展現(xiàn)人物的想法，而間接描寫是結(jié)合環(huán)境描寫、動作描寫等方式側(cè)面表現(xiàn)人物的內(nèi)心活動。在用英語進(jìn)行人物活動刻畫時，應(yīng)該注重表現(xiàn)方式的多樣化，避免重復(fù)使用“feel/think/sense”等詞匯，以免給人以語言刻板、僵硬的印象。以2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫題目為例，試卷提供的原文中有一個細(xì)節(jié)可以利用到我們的續(xù)寫中，那就是Jeff的手在做飯的時候受傷了。母親在看到Jeff的手以后，一定會明白自己兒子手受傷的原因，內(nèi)心一定是萬分感動和心疼的。這時候可以運用一些細(xì)致的心理描寫來展現(xiàn)母親的內(nèi)心世界。例如Awarmcurrentsurgedinherheart,andhereyesweremoistenedbythepainasifbeingprickedbyaneedle.除此之外還可以運用環(huán)境描寫來側(cè)面烘托人物的內(nèi)心感受，將人的五官感受與周圍的環(huán)境相關(guān)聯(lián)，通過聯(lián)想使人物與環(huán)境融合為一體。例如，在母親的臥室中充滿著食物的香氣，這仿佛使臥室中也變得更加充滿魅力，更加可愛動人了……與動作描寫、語言描寫、肖像描寫這種看得見聽得著的表現(xiàn)方式不同，心理描寫能夠展現(xiàn)人物內(nèi)心復(fù)雜的心理活動，揭示人物靈魂深處的世界，使人物形象更加立體、直觀。4.升華語言描寫，抒發(fā)情感態(tài)度在讀后續(xù)寫中，對人物語言的描寫是抒發(fā)人物情感態(tài)度，反映人物內(nèi)心世界的重要手段。在記敘文中缺乏了語言描寫就缺少了身臨其境的參與感，缺少了說服力和表現(xiàn)力。對人物的語言描寫要做到生動簡潔，符合人物身份特征，體現(xiàn)人物性格特點，避免出現(xiàn)學(xué)生腔。在用英語進(jìn)行語言描寫時首先要注意標(biāo)點符號和字母大小寫的規(guī)范性，其次要簡短有力，不要長篇大論地引用，一般來說一篇文章中語言的描寫控制在三句話以內(nèi)。為了使語言描寫給文章增光添彩，我們要學(xué)會將語言描寫運用到文章的關(guān)鍵位置，使語言描寫對于推動劇情發(fā)展和展現(xiàn)人物性格發(fā)揮最大作用。以2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫題目為例，在第二段續(xù)寫中為了推動劇情發(fā)展，可以使用簡潔的語言描寫來完成從廚房到母親臥室的場景切換，使劇情發(fā)展和故事講述更加自然，段與段之間銜接得更加緊密。例如“HappyMother’sDay!”Theycouldn’thidetheirexcitementandshoutedinunison.為了進(jìn)一步展現(xiàn)母子之間的溫情脈脈，在文章收尾的部分我們也可以用語言描寫的形式展現(xiàn)母親收到這份驚喜以后的感動和欣慰。總之，讀后續(xù)寫對學(xué)生的思維能力和創(chuàng)造能力要求較高。培養(yǎng)學(xué)生在讀后續(xù)寫中寫出個性化的故事情節(jié)和立體化的人物形象不是一蹴而就的，需要教師在平時的閱讀課中不斷分析和滲透寫作技巧，在寫作課中開展精細(xì)化的引導(dǎo)和個性化的評價反饋，鼓勵學(xué)生熱愛寫作、勤于寫作，不斷創(chuàng)作出具有獨特鮮活個性的人物形象。1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Theschooldayrolledslowlyaway.Themomentthebellindicatingtheendingoftheclassrang,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassroom,amongwhomwasAndy.Afewmomentslater,Andywasonhisbike,ridingonhiswayhomeandday-dreamingaboutthefishingtripthathisfatherhadpromisedhim.Hewassogluedtodreamingaboutallthefishhewouldcatchthathewasunawareofeverythingelsearoundhim.Herodealonguntilastrangesounddrewhimtothepresent.Hecametoastopandlookedcuriouslyuptotheheavens.Whathesawshockedandterrifiedhim.Ahugefloodofbeesfilledtheskylikeablackcloudandthebuzzingmassseemedtobeheadingangrilytowardshim.Withnotimetowaste,Andyspedoffintheoppositedirection,ridingasfastashecould-butwithoutknowinghowtoescapetheswarm.Witharapidlybeatingheartandhislegsshaking,hespeddowntheroughroad.Asthebeescamecloser,hispanicincreased.Andyknewthathewassensitivetobeestings(蟄).Thelaststinghadlandedhiminhospital-andthatwasonlyonebeesting!Hehadbeenforcedtostayinbedfortwowholedays.Suddenly,hisfather’swordscametohim.“Whenyouareinatightsituation,keepyourheadandthinkyourwayoutofit.”O(jiān)nanearbyhill,hecouldseesmokewavingslowlyskywardsfromthechimneyoftheNelsonfamilyhome.“Beesdon’tlikesmoke,”hethought.“Theycouldn’tgetintothehouse.”AndyracedtowardstheNelson’shouse,butthebeeswereapproaching.Andyknewhecouldnotreachthehouseintime.Heestimatedthatthebeeswouldcatchupwithhimsoon.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,outofthecornerofhiseyes,AndysawasmallpoolusedbyMr.Nelsontowaterhisvegetablegarden._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inashortwhile,Andy’smothershowedup.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。IftherewasonethingthatEllenRaffertyhatedmorethandriving,itwasdrivingintherain.Thisevening,onherwaybackfromwork,Ellensawalittlechildstandingbythesideoftheroadinthepouringrain.Soshehitthebrakessharply,andpulledoverbythesideoftheroadnexttothechild.Itwasalittleboy,maybefourorfive,andhewasshakingandhugginghimself.AssoonashesawEllen,hisface.brightened.“Hello!”hesaid,“Areyoumymommy?”“No,”Ellensaidintheicyrain.“I’mnot!Whatareyoudoinghere?Whereareyourparents?”“Oh,”theboysaiddisappointingly.“Idon’tknowwheremymomis.Sheleftmeontheroadwhenitwasraining,andIthinkshemustbelookingforme.”“What’syourname?Wheredoyoulive?”“I’mDavid.IliveattheDorisFarmerInstituteforChildren.”“Theorphanage(孤兒院)?”askedEllen.“Butthatisfar!”Justthen,therewasaterribleflashoflightningandevenmorerainpoureddownasthunderrolledacrossthesky.“Comeon,”Ellensaid.“I’mtakingyouhome.I’llcalltheorphanagetocomeandfetchyou.”Ellentooktheboyhome.Shedidn’tquiteknowwhattodowithhim,sosheturnedonaheaterandwrappedhimwithablanket.Thenshecalledtheorphanageandtoldthemthatshefoundoneoftheirchildren,whonamedDavid,ontheroad.Butthewomanonthephonesaiditwastoolateandtheycouldn’tcometofetchhim.Sighing,Ellenhungupthephoneandlookedattheboy.Atthesametime,hercatGandalfwalkedinandrubbedhimselfagainstEllen’slegs.Ellenpickedthecatupandkissedhishead.“Comeon,mybaby,”shesaidsoftly,“Mommy’sgonnafeedyou...”Whenshelookedup,shewasshockedbythelonginginDavid’seyes,注意1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。“IwishIwasyourcat,”hesaidsadly.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextday,EllengotintohercaragainanddrovetotheorphanagetoaskaboutDavid.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AlthoughIamagirl,IcansayIamatruefanofsoccergames,foritisdefinitelyoneofthebestwaystogetawayfrommytiringworktemporarilyandhavefun.Therefore,themomentIgotthenewsthattherewouldbeagamebetweenourhometeamagainsttheTeamfromLondonCity,immediatelyIbookedaseatatthefrontrow,wishingtohaveafantasticweekend.IhadagreatmoodwhenIgotseatedinthestadium.However,asthegamebegan,Ispottedthatinfrontofmesataguy,wholookedquitenice.Butmaybehisideaofhavingfunwasnothinglikemine,ormostnormalwell-behavedfans,suchasstandingandyelling,non-stop,asloudashecould.Heyelledatthecoaches,attheplayers,attheLondonCity’sfans,andevenattheofficialspresent,alwaysatthetopofhislungs.Hekepthisactionfortheentire45minutesandnevershowedanysignoftiredness.Obviouslyhewassoabsorbedinthegamethathefailedtonoticehewasruiningtheexperienceofhundredsofothers.Withhimyellingbyme,myeardrumsalmostgotbroken,forhismouthwassoclosetomyears.Forawhile,Ieventhoughtofshoutingbackathimandstoppinghisyelling.Peoplearoundwereturningtolookathim,andIcouldreadtheirthoughts,“Ishenevergoingtostop?”ButHeseemedblindtothoselooks.Athalf-time,Iescapedbywalkingforafewminutesoutsidethestadium.Iwasthinkingofseekinganemptyseatinthestudentsectionacrossthestadium,buttomydisappointment,theseatswerealltaken.Ihadnochoicebuttogobacktotheguy.Tomakemattersworse,whenreturningtomyseat,Imissedmystepsandfellheavilyonthestairs.AsIwasstrugglingtostandup,apairofhugehandshelpedmefrombehind.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ilookedbackandsawtheguy’ssmilingfaceandconcernedeyes._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Theguykepthisshoutingforanother45minutes._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Walterhasleftoffice.Hiswifeisdead,andhehasnochildren.Helivesaquietlife.ButhehasajobforafewdaysduringChristmaseveryyear.HeisaSantainabigdepartmentstore.WaltergoestothetoydepartmentandchangesintohisredSantaclothes,aredhatandbigblackboots(靴子).Alldayhesitsinthetoydepartment.Childrencomewiththeirparents.TheytellSantawhattheywantforChristmas.Mostchildrenwanttoyslikevideogames,bikes,robotsandfairydolls.WalterremembersoneChristmas.Itwas9:00p.m.andthestorewasclosingwhentherecameasmallboyandhismother.Theywerewalkingquicklytowardshim.“Iknowitislate,butpleaseletmysontalktoyou,”saidthewoman.Thewomanandtheboylookedtired.Theirclotheswereoldandcheap.Walterwastiredtoo,butheisakindman.“Ofcourse,”hesaidinhisSantavoice.“ComehereandtellmewhatyouwantforChristmas.”Thelittleboyspokeveryquietly.Waltercouldn’thearhim.“Santaisgettingold.Hedoesn’thearsowell.Comecloserandtellmeagain,”hesaidhappily.Thelittleboycameverycloseandsaid,“Santa,pleasebringmeagrandfatherforChristmas.”Walterwassurprised.Helookedatthelittleboy’smother.“Yes,”shesaid.“TimmywantsagrandfatherforChristmas.”“WhydoyouwantagrandfatherforChristmas,Timmy?”askedWalter.“MyDadisdead.Idon’twantanewdad.Butit’sonlyMomandme.It’squiet.SoIwouldlikeagrandfather.”Walterwasworried.Ofcoursechildrendon’tgeteverythingtheyaskfor.Butthislittleboywassoserious,andhismotherlookedsosad.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.開頭已給出。ThenWalterhadanidea._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThenextmorningTimmyandhismotherwereeatingbreakfastwhenthedoorbellrang._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Theprizemaygotothefastest,butsometimes,thefirstonetocrossthefinishlineisn’ttheonlywinner.Nowherewasthatmoretruethanatarecent5Kinvitational(邀請賽)inShelbyville,Indiana.Thereweretwoplayersinthematch:LeviLaGrangeandAxelAleman,whohadn’tknowneachotherbefore.LeviLaGrange,an18-year-oldstudentfromWesternBooneHighSchool,hasbeenexpectingtobeaprofessionalsportsmanformanyyears.AxelAleman,whoisfromSheridanHighSchool,isafriendlyandgenerouspersonandheisalwaysmoreconcernedaboutothersthanhimself.Axeloncesaidtohisclassmates,“Whenyouarestandingatacrossroad,youcanchoosethepathofself-interest,oryoucangotheextramileforsomeoneinneed.Asateenathlete,thechoiceisextremelyclear.”Thegamewentverywellatfirst.However,withlessthanhalfamiletogo,LeviLaGrangeslipped,twistinghisankle.Hesaid,“IwasrunningupthelittlerollinghillandIhurtmyankle.Ifeltsomethingwaswrongwithmyankle.”LevistoppedandsignedtoAxeltopasshim.Generally,winningamatchshouldbethemissionforasportsman,Butatthatmoment,theracebecameasecondaryconcernforAxel.“Iwasabletoseehewasinalotofpain,”Axelrecalled.“AsIgotclosertohim,henarrowlyfelldown.Iaskedifhewasallright.Hesaidhefeltlikesomethingbrokeninhisleg.”Ratherthanrunningahead,inanextraordinaryactoftruesportsmen,AxelrefusedtoleaveLevibehind.“AssoonasIsawhim,IknewIhadtodosomething,”Axelsaid.“Itjustseemedliketherightthingtodo.Thatmatteredmorethantherace.ItoldhimIwasn’tgoingtoleave.Iwantedtohelphimfinishthematch.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Minuteslater,AxelwalkedclosertoLevi._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Axelgainedalotfromtheincident._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1.【參考范文】

Suddenly,outofthecornerofhiseyes,AndysawasmallpoolusedbyMr.Nelsontowaterhisvegetablegarden.Anideasprangtomind.Offhisbikeandintothecoolwaterhedived,disappearingbelowthesurfaceandawayfromtheinsects.Afterholdinghisbreathforaslongashecould,Andycameupforairandnoticedthebeeshadgone.Dragginghimselfoutofthepool,hestruggledupthehillyslopeandrangthedoorbell.Mrs.Nelsontookhiminside,askedhimtotakeoffhiswetclothesandwrappedhiminablanket.WhenAndycamebacktohissense,Mrs.Nelsonranghismother.

Inashortwhile,Andy’smothershowedup.Atthesightofhismother,Andywaspossessedwithcomfort,andtearsstreameddownhischeeks.“You’llreallyneedthatfishingbreaktohelpyourecover,”comfortedhismotherwithrelief,adding“thankgoodnessyoudidn’tpanic!”HavingthankedMrs.Nelson,theywenthome.Ontheway,hismotherpraisedhimagain,butAndydidnothearher.Hewasdreamingonceagainofthefishhewouldcatchtomorrow.【寫作指導(dǎo)】這是一篇記敘文。文章講述了Andy放學(xué)途中遇到了一群追著他跑的蜜蜂，因為蜜蜂的速度很快，他很難擺脫掉，所以他屏住呼吸鉆進(jìn)菜地的小水池里面，最終他成功逃離了蜂群。1.段落續(xù)寫：①.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“突然，Andy用眼角的余光看到了Nelson先生用來澆灌菜園的一個小水池?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Andy鉆進(jìn)小水池擺脫了蜂群的整個過程。②.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“不一會兒，Andy的媽媽出現(xiàn)了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懰赣H到來時的場景和對他的安慰。2.續(xù)寫線索：鉆進(jìn)小水池——上來換氣發(fā)現(xiàn)蜂群不見了——從水池爬上來——來到Nelson先生的家——母親來了——安慰3.詞匯激活行為類①.脫掉：takeoff/slipoff②.出現(xiàn)：showup/appear③.安慰：comfort/console情緒類①.慌張：panic/getflustered②.流下眼淚：tearsstreamdown/tearsflowdown【典型句式】[高分句型1].WhenAndycamebacktohissense,Mrs.Nelsonranghismother.(運用了時間狀語從句)[高分句型2].HavingthankedMrs.Nelson,theywenthome.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)2.【參考范文】Paragraph1:“IwishIwasyourcat,”hesaidsadly.Ellenwasconfusedbyhiswords.“Ijustwanttheloveyougivehim..”Davidsaidsoftly.Ellenthenputherarmsaroundtheboy.“Oh,sweetie!”EllenwhisperedandtearsrandownherfaceassherockedDavidinherarms.Forthefirsttime,therearemotherhoodfeelingsinherheart.WhenthewomanfromtheorphanagearrivedatEllen’shousethatevening,shefoundDavidandEllenplayingcardsandeatingcheeseonthekitchentable.EllenhadthoughtDavid’sleavingwouldbeareliefbutoncehewasgone,thehousefeltstrangeandempty.Paragraph2:Thenextday,EllengotintohercaragainanddrovetotheorphanagetoaskaboutDavid.Shewasworriedhemightcatchacoldandwonderedifhe’salright.Whenshegotthere,thestaffassuredherthatDavidwasinperfecthealth.Sincethen,EllenstartedvisitingDavidnearlyeveryday.ThreemonthslatershespoketothedirectorandaskedaboutthepossibilityofadoptingDavid.“It’snotaneasyprocess,”thedirectorwarned.“Butifyoulovethischild,itisworthit!”Thedirectorwasright.Itwasn’teasyatall,butayearlater,EllentookDavidhome.Theybecamerealmommyandsonatlast.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了在一個暴雨傾盆的夜晚，作者在開車回家的路上，見到一個在雨中的小男孩，經(jīng)詢問得知男孩來自孤兒院；因天色已晚，作者把男孩帶回家。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我希望我是你的貓，他悲傷地說?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Ellen聽到這些話對自己內(nèi)心的觸動，以及Ellen對男孩的關(guān)懷。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，Ellen又上了車，開車去孤兒院詢問大衛(wèi)的情況?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Ellen一直關(guān)心男孩，最終決定領(lǐng)養(yǎng)男孩。2.續(xù)寫線索：關(guān)心男孩——送回孤兒院——擔(dān)心——領(lǐng)養(yǎng)男孩3.詞匯激活行為類1.到達(dá)：arriveat/getto/reach2..詢問：askabout/inquire3.值得：beworth/deserve情緒類①.擔(dān)憂：beworried/beanxious②.感到空虛：feelempty/vacuous【典型句式】[高分句型1]Shewasworriedhemightcatchacoldandwonderedifhe’salright.（省略引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句）[高分句型2]WhenthewomanfromtheorphanagearrivedatEllen’shousethatevening,shefoundDavidandEllenplayingcardsandeatingcheeseonthekitchentable.（when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句）3.【參考范文】Ilookedbackandsawtheguy’ssmilingfaceandconcernedeyes.Iexpressedmythankstohimgenuinelyforhiskindandtimelyhelp,afterwhichwestartedourchatting.Weintroducedeachotherandtalkedofourhobbies,includingourgreatinterestinsoccer.Hetoldmehisworkwasalsoquitetiringandthatheneededtoreleasethestressbyyellingitout,addingthathewishedwewouldn’tcareabouthisrudenessindoingso.FeelingquiteuneasyforwhatIhaddone,Irealizedthateverybodyhashisownwayoflivingandthatweshouldbemoreconsiderateandunderstanding.Therefore,Igavehimacertainanswer,“No,Ishouldlearnfromyou.”Theguykepthisshoutingforanother45minutes,completelyinvolvedinthegameagain.Seeinghisgreatpassion,Icouldn’thelpyellingalongwithhim,enjoyingthegameandreleasingmypressureaswell.Whatwedidinspiredthefansaroundus,causingtheirshoutingtoo,atthetopoftheirvoice.Itseemedthatalltheplayershadheardourshoutingtooandtheyplayedevenharderthanbefore.Whatacloseandexcitinggame!Allthepeoplecheeredupandbehavedsoperfectly.ItwasanunforgettableexperienceandImadeupmindtowatchanewgamethenextweekend.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本篇書面表達(dá)為讀后續(xù)寫，文章講述了作者一次難忘的看球賽經(jīng)歷。作者是個球迷，因為足球可以讓她暫時擺脫疲憊的工作并享受樂趣。在一次看足球賽時遇到了一個全場都在大聲喊叫的人，作者感到非常厭煩。中場時作者躲出去了，但在回座位時摔倒了，得到了這位球迷的幫助。通過聊天得知這也是他減壓的方式。受他的熱情感染，作者也沉浸在比賽中并喊叫起來，這感染了所有的球迷，似乎隊員表現(xiàn)的也非常好。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我回頭一看，看到了那家伙的笑臉和關(guān)切的眼神?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡弑硎靖兄x，了解到他一直大聲喊叫的原因后感到很尷尬。根據(jù)第二段首句“那家伙又喊了45分鐘，再次完全投入到比賽中?！笨芍谝欢味文┛梢悦鑼懽髡卟辉俳橐馑暮敖?。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“那家伙又喊了45分鐘，再次完全投入到比賽中?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者受他影響完全沉浸在球賽中，和他一起喊叫，也感染了其他觀眾和球員。2.續(xù)寫線索：表示感謝——了解原委，感到尷尬——不再介意——那家伙繼續(xù)喊叫——我深受感染，開始喊叫——感染更多的球迷和球員3.詞匯激活行為類①聊天：startedourchatting/getintoaconversation②釋放壓力：releasethestress/relievethepressure③繼續(xù)喊叫：keephisshouting/continueshouting情緒類①感謝：expressmythankstohim/showmyappreciation/showmygratitude②尷尬，不安：feeluneasy/feelembarrassed【典型句式】【高分句型1】Iexpressedmythankstohimgenuinelyforhiskindandtimelyhelp,afterwhichwestartedourchatting.（運用了which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句）【高分句型2】Hetoldmehisworkwasalsoquitetiringandthatheneededtoreleasethestressbyyellingitout,addingthathewishedwewouldn’tcareabouthisrudenessindoingso.（運用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和非謂語動詞作狀語）【高分句型3】Itseemedthatalltheplayershadheardourshoutingtooandtheyplayedevenharderthanbefore.（運用了that引導(dǎo)的主語從句以及it作形式主語）4.【參考范文】

ThenWalterhadanidea.Hethoughtthathecouldactasagrandfatherandvisittheboy’shomethenextmorningwithpresents.Hecouldtelltheboythathewashisgrandfather,heworkedfarawayandcouldnotvisithimconstantly.ThenWalteraskedtheiraddresssothathecouldgavehispresentstohimthenextmorning.

ThenextmorningTimmyandhismotherwereeatingbreakfastwhenthedoorbellrang.Thelittleboyrantoopenthedoor.Suddenlyanoldmanwhodressedasasailorappearedinfrontofhim.ThenWaltertoldtheboythathewashisgrandfatherandwascomingtocelebrateChristmaswiththem.Waltertoldtheboythathewasasailorwhoworkedfarawayandcouldnotvisitthemconstantly.ThenWaltergavehisgiftstotheboy.Theboyfeltexcitedandpl