2024年高考英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)第四部分寫(xiě)作技能升華篇專(zhuān)題二讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)第2講微觀(guān)把握、突破讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)技法一精準(zhǔn)解讀文本

第四部分寫(xiě)作技能升華篇專(zhuān)題二讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)第2講微觀(guān)把握突破讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)技法一精準(zhǔn)解讀文本模擬精練·提考能技法點(diǎn)撥1.抓住記敘文的6要素即人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、事件的起因、經(jīng)過(guò)和結(jié)果，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)所提供的文本除了結(jié)果這一要素之外，把其余五個(gè)要素?cái)⑹龅们迩宄?。因此閱讀文本時(shí)要緊扣這五個(gè)要素。2.掌握記敘文的3大線(xiàn)索即時(shí)間線(xiàn)、情節(jié)線(xiàn)和感情線(xiàn)。閱讀文本時(shí)要抓住這三條主線(xiàn)。必要時(shí)可以列出這些線(xiàn)索，以更好地理解文章，為續(xù)寫(xiě)做好準(zhǔn)備。只有對(duì)原文的脈絡(luò)線(xiàn)索和段落結(jié)構(gòu)有正確和深刻的理解，續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容才能和原文骨肉相連，契合緊密。3.把握文章主旨和故事的發(fā)展方向這點(diǎn)至關(guān)重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意圖，才能很好地完成續(xù)寫(xiě)。確保續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容和原文要有邏輯上的一致性，并能回應(yīng)原文的信息。4.分析文章的用詞特點(diǎn)和行文風(fēng)格考生要仔細(xì)閱讀給定的前文，在充分理解文章內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ)上，認(rèn)真體會(huì)前文的用詞特點(diǎn)和行文風(fēng)格，只有這樣才能使續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容在語(yǔ)言色彩上和行文風(fēng)格上與所給文章保持高度一致。真題體驗(yàn)(2021·全國(guó)新高考Ⅰ卷)AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m..Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1．續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1：As

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1.抓住文本五要素人物：Thetwins：JeffandJenna時(shí)間：inthemorningofMother'sDay地點(diǎn)：inthekitchen起因：toplantocookbreakfastfortheirmotherasapresentonMother'sDay經(jīng)過(guò)：Thetwinscookedbreakfastinthekitchenfortheirmother.2．理清文章三大線(xiàn)索時(shí)間線(xiàn)：beforeMother'sDay→at6a．m.onMother'sDay→first→next→then→thenextminute情節(jié)線(xiàn)：母親節(jié)前雙胞胎姐弟計(jì)劃給媽媽做頓早飯當(dāng)做母親節(jié)的禮物→母親節(jié)這天一大早姐弟倆就開(kāi)始行動(dòng)起來(lái)了→一開(kāi)始做湯的時(shí)候還很順利→弟弟把面包炸糊了，姐姐扔掉，重新再炸→這時(shí)湯溢出來(lái)了，把爐火澆滅了→姐姐讓弟弟把火重新打開(kāi)，繼續(xù)做湯→弟弟不小心手碰到了鍋，燙著了→姐姐讓他在涼水下沖洗感情線(xiàn)：excited→smooth→busy→panicked→calm3．把握文章主旨，推測(cè)故事發(fā)展方向本文的主題語(yǔ)境屬于人與自我。文章講述了一對(duì)雙胞胎兄妹計(jì)劃給媽媽做頓早飯當(dāng)做母親節(jié)的禮物，一開(kāi)始很順利，但是中間出現(xiàn)了一些意外，湯溢出來(lái)了，把鍋灶弄的一團(tuán)糟，后來(lái)弟弟又燙了手，好在姐姐還冷靜，讓弟弟在涼水下沖洗。4．分析用詞特點(diǎn)和行文風(fēng)格文章側(cè)重動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，運(yùn)用大量的動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))，如boil,put，left，broke，turnedon等，句式長(zhǎng)短結(jié)合，生動(dòng)形象地描述了兩人做飯的過(guò)程，畫(huà)面感強(qiáng)。并有一些情感類(lèi)心理描寫(xiě)與情節(jié)敘述，渲染了既快樂(lè)又緊張的氣氛。續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)要側(cè)重動(dòng)作與心理描寫(xiě)?！痉段摹縋aragraph1：As

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appeared.Seeingthemessinthekitchen,heimmediatelyunderstoodwhathadhappened,buthewasn'tupset.Instead,heappliedsomemedicinetoJeff'shand,andthensetouttohelpthemcleanupthemess,throwingawaytheburnttoast.Next,theybegantomakebreakfast,andbynowthetwinslookedcheerful.Beforelong,theporridgewasready.Theirfatherinstructedthemtofrytherestofthebread.Soon,thebreakfastwasready,too.Paragraph2：The

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up.Openinghereyes,shecouldn'tbelievewhatshehadseen.Beforeshecouldaskanyquestion,theirfatherturnedupandtoldhiswifeabouthowthetwinshadmadepreparationstogiveherthesurprisebreakfast,andwhattroubletheyhadgonethroughwhenmakingtheporridgeandtoast.Disbeliefgavewaytoexcitementandpride.Huggingtheminherarms,shesaid,“Thankyou,children.It'ssuchanunforgettableMother'sDayforme.”【解析】

①語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格與原文一致，側(cè)重動(dòng)作和心理描寫(xiě)；②豐富的動(dòng)作類(lèi)動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))：looked,appeared,seeing,applied,setout,cleanup,throwing