2024屆高三英語作文復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項：讀后續(xù)寫高考評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)（2023全國1卷）課件

書面表達(dá)：續(xù)寫2023年全國I卷讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,asspedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likerevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheekedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonpaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin.Iwouldn’tcare.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’officeaftertheawardpresentation.讀后續(xù)寫高考評分原則1.本題總分為25分，按五個檔次進(jìn)行評分。2.評分時，應(yīng)主要從內(nèi)容、詞匯語法和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個方面考慮，具體為：

(1)創(chuàng)造內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量，續(xù)寫的完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。

(2)使用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。

(3)上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。3.評分時，先根據(jù)作答的整體情況初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來綜合衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。4.評分時還應(yīng)注意：

(1)詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分。

(2)單詞拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是寫作規(guī)范的重要方面，評分時應(yīng)視其對交際的影

響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。

(3)書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分。續(xù)寫評分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第五檔：（20—25分）1)創(chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高。2)使用了恰當(dāng)且多樣的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個別小錯，但完全不影響理解。3)有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，意義連貫。第四檔：（16—20分）1)創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融合度較高。2)使用了比較恰當(dāng)、多樣的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響理解。3)比較有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Completelyoutofmyexpectation,Iwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.Mysisterpattedonmyshouldergently,smiledandsaid,"Youdeserveit.Nowlet'sgoandgettheaward."Duringtheawardpresentation,theschoolhallwasfilledwiththecrowds.Themomentthehostcalledoutmyname,Isteppedontothestage,withmylegstrembling.MemoriesaboutRevere'shorsefloodedovermymind,Iwasoverwhelmedbycuriosityandconfusion."Howcouldsuchafunnystorywinthefirstprize?"Iaskedmyselfsoftly.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Iexpressedmygratitudeandmyconfusiontohim.Hearingmywords,hegavemeatoothysmilewhichmademerelaxed.Thenheexplainedinagentlevoice,"Throughyouressay,alljudgesfoundthehorsehard-working,patient,andnevergiveup,whichisjustlikeyou.What'smore,anessaydoesn'tneedtobeserious,itneedstobecreative,andyouressayreachedthestandard."Hiswordsdeeplytouchedme.ItistruethatIcankeeppassionateaboutwritingwithmyimagination第五檔作文

20-25分檔（23分）第四檔作文

16-20分檔（18分）Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Mystorywontheaward.Thatincrediblyamazedme.Idneverthoughtmywritingswouldgetawards.Didnttheyfeelthestorystrange?Istillsearchedforthereasons.ButIfailed.Suddenly,someoneannouncedmetoparticipateintheawardpresentation.Alongtheway,Iwasoverwhalmedbyafloodofjoy.Hearingtheapplause,Irealizedthatitwasn't

adream.ItwasrealWriting,whichmademefeeldifficultandhardpast,promotedmetowintheawardnow.Iwassoproudofmyself.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Atthefirstsightofme,myteachercouldn'tcontrolhissmile.Awildjoyspreadacrosshisface.Hehuggedmetightly,saying"Iknowyoucoulddoit.Everyonewassurprisedwhentheysawyourstory,whichcamestraightfromthehorse'smouth."Iwassoglad.Throughthisexperience,I'dknownthat

writingnotonlyboradenedmyhonzens,butalsolitupmythoughts.Iwouldbeappreciatedthatwritingtaughtmealotofthings,notthroughtheresults,butthroughtheprocess.What'smore,Imustexpressmygratitudetomyteacher.Itwasmyteacherwhoencouragedmetowriteandgavemeconfidence.Ireallythankedhim.【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第三檔：（11—15分）1)創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)。2)使用了簡單的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有一些錯誤或不恰當(dāng)之處，但基本不影響理解3)基本有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。第二檔：（6—10分）1)內(nèi)容或邏輯上有一些重大問題，續(xù)寫不夠完整，與原文情境有一定程度脫節(jié)。2)所使用的詞匯有限，語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯誤較多，影響理解。3)未能有效地使用語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義不夠連貫。Afewweekslater,whenIaimostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Isurprislywonthefirstprize,whichIneverdreamedbefore!ItalmostlikedreamingwhenIwasattendtheawardpresentation.Myworkbecameaboominthecontestandalargenumberofpeopleconsidermyselfasawriterwhohasthegifttoachievemoreinfuture.IwassohappythatmyvoicebecamesheakingwhenIsharedmywork,ifIhavechoices,IthinkIwoulddecidedtostayatthatsecondforever.Ijustcan'thelptosharemywildhappnesswithmyteacher.Afterall,hehelpedmetofindmycourageback.Iwenttomytencher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Tomysurprise,helookedclam,"whatmakesyousuccessinyouropenion?"Heaskedme.“TheideaofchosePeaul‘sharseasthesubject,ofcourse.”Iansweredquickly.Buthejustshookhisheadslowlyandsaid."No."BeforeIspokesomethingmove,headded:"Thetrulysecretthatbringyouthegoaliskeptworkinghard,justthinkinghowmanytimeyouhavespendinthecontest.Thepriceisn’teverything,butthehardworkingissomething."Ifinallyunderstoodwhyheaskedmetoattendthecontest.Iwillkeptthislessonforalifelongtime.第三檔作文

11-15分檔（13分）第二檔作文

6-10分檔（8分）Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Igetfirst?”IwassohappyandunbelievablethatIaskother.HearingtheiranswerwasYes.Ijumpedupanddown.andshoutedtoshowmyexcitement.Aswinner,Iwasledtoschooltoadoptmyawardpresentationnextday.Attheschoolhall,allstudentsandteacherssatunderthetabletohearthewinner'sstory.Andthen,Icamethehalltogetmyprize.Meanwhile,thehosterhadsaid,"Wechoosehimaswinnernotonlyhisstoryisfond,butalsohiswritingisbestinthealljoiner."Listentotheword,IwasmoreconfidentwhichIhaven'tbefore.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Lookingatmycoming,helaughedandsaid."Ididn'tmiss,Youarethebesthard-workeradmostfunnypersonIhavesaw."Listentohisword,myearsbecamehotandrad."ItisyourhelpthatIcangetthisachievement!"Isaidbyheart."No!Isyourhardandgiftachievedyou.I'mjustgiveyouaplattoshowyourself"Theteachersaidwithsmile.NowIwasafamousnovelistintheworld.

Myfunnynovelspreadatallcountries.AlthoughIwaswritingbetterthanbefore.IstillleavethePaulRevere,Becauseitgavemyconfidencetowalkmyfirststep.【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第一檔：（1—5分）1)內(nèi)容或邏輯上有較多重大問題，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，續(xù)寫不完整，與原文情境基本脫節(jié)。所使用的詞匯有限，語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯誤很多，嚴(yán)重影響理解。3)幾乎沒有使用語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰，意義不連貫。不得分：（0分）未作答：所寫內(nèi)容太少或無法看清以致無法評判；所寫內(nèi)容全部抄自原文或與題目要求完全不相關(guān)。第一檔作文

1-5分檔（3分）Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecame