讀后續(xù)寫人與自我類+雀斑女孩-2025屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

TheGirlwithFrecklesonHerFace原文：WhenIwasakidabouttwelveyearsold,Ihadalotoffreckles.IhadreachedtheagewhenIhadbeguntoreallylookatmyselfinthemirror,andIwasunderwhelmed.Apparentlymymotherwastoo,becausesometimesshe'dlookatmeandshakeherhead.IhadacousinwhosenamewasJanetteElizabeth.Shelookedexactlylikehernamesounds.Shehadaflawless

peaches-and-cream

complexion.Icouldn'thelpcomparingmyselfwithherandthinkingthatmylifewouldbealotdifferentifIhadbeautifulskintoo.Andthen,inthebackpagesofJanetteElizabeth'smagazine,Ifoundtheanswer:anadvertisementforfreckle-removercream.IknewthatIcouldafforditifIsavedmymoney,andIdid.Theadassuredmethattheproductwouldworkwell.ForthreeweeksIwenttothemailboxeverydayprecisely

atthetimethemailwasdelivered.Iknewthatifsomeoneelseinmyfamilygotthemail,Iwouldneverheartheendofit.Therewasnowaythattheywouldletmeopentheboxinprivate.Threeweekslater,mypackagefinallycame.Iwenttomyroomwithit,satontheedgeofmybed,andopenedit.IwassurethatIwaslookingatamiracle.WhenIgotupthenextmorning,Iappliedthecreamallovermybody.ThenItookmyhoeandwentwithmybrotherandcousinstohoethefield,whereIgotridofsometigerlilies,seeminglyuglywithblackandsmallspots.Thesunwassostrongthatevenmyfacesstartedtoburn.Bytheendoftheday,whenIcamebacktothehouse,myfamily,knowingnothingaboutthefreckle-removercream,begantosaythingslike,“I'veneverseenyouwiththatmanyfrecklesbefore."WhenIsawmyselfinthemirror,Idissolvedintotearsandhidinthebathroom.一、讀Youcan'thavepoetryanddistanceatthesametime,justgodowntoearthandlive.

____具體時(shí)間或when人物或動物地點(diǎn)物品角色：時(shí)間線事件線地點(diǎn)線物品I，mom,mycousin--Elisabeth我有雀斑感覺失落發(fā)現(xiàn)祛斑霜廣告去等快遞包裹到了涂祛斑霜去鋤地家人發(fā)現(xiàn)我很多斑哭了，躲起來快遞箱房間地里家里浴室虎尾百合12歲照鏡子的時(shí)候Then三周三周后第二天早上Then結(jié)束回家照鏡子的時(shí)候二、思我對外貌不自信，除了雀斑，還有其他原因么？思路提示01思路提示03思路提示02續(xù)寫的地點(diǎn)為什么會從浴室轉(zhuǎn)到房間？媽媽的安慰起作用了么？思路提示04第二段續(xù)寫敲門的人是誰？Elisabeth有什么作用？思路提示05思路提示06為什么提及虎尾百合？所屬類別識別問題解決途徑問題解決人與自我（成長篇）我因臉上有雀斑而沮喪，買祛斑霜，斑更多了發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的閃光點(diǎn)，不再因外貌沮喪所屬類別識別問題問題解決解決途徑Elisabeth的安慰確定主題para.1Mymothercalledmetothedinnertable,butIignoredher.階段結(jié)果媽媽的安慰失敗，我從浴室跑回房間para.2Afterwhatseemedacentury,Iheardagentleknockonmybedroom.確定故事大致走向階段結(jié)果我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的閃光點(diǎn)，不再為外貌沮喪確定每段具體情節(jié)Para.1發(fā)出者與上情節(jié)銜接動作情緒微情節(jié)1mom微情節(jié)2mom微情節(jié)3I微情節(jié)4mom微情節(jié)5I沒有聽到我的回應(yīng)notreceivinganyresponsefromme來浴室查看我的情況checkingonme焦急（加快腳步）quickenherpaceanxiously看到我安然無恙inawholeskin詢問發(fā)生的事情askmewhatwasgoingon松了口氣breathedinrelief聽到詢問流淚streamingdown，告知uttered，涂applied,出現(xiàn)appeared更難過likeahammerblow,tossingmeintodeepersorrow安慰我

comfortedme說話聽不進(jìn)turnadeafto沖dashingtoward倒在床上throwingmyselfinthebed情緒低落downinspirit確定每段具體情節(jié)Para.2發(fā)出者與上情節(jié)銜接動作情緒微情節(jié)1I微情節(jié)2Elisabeth微情節(jié)3I微情節(jié)4I猶豫了一會兒hesitatingforamoment拖著步子去開shuffledacrosstheroom難過withtearfuleyesandstillwetcheeks在門后atthedoor拿著花，給我花，道歉withabunchoftigerliliesinherhand,handedtheflowerstome,apologized沉浸在悲傷中immersedmyselfinmydepressedemotions聽安慰mydevotedeffortswhileshepayattentiontoherskin驚訝

surprisedme發(fā)現(xiàn)自己閃光點(diǎn)shiningpointsinme有斑點(diǎn)卻芬芳dottedwithugly“freckles”,smellfragrant0102根據(jù)所給范文的中文進(jìn)行翻譯三、寫沒有得到我的回答，她焦急地加快腳步走向浴室，查看我的情況。看到我安然無恙，她松了一口氣，問我發(fā)生了什么事。她的話就像一記重錘，把我扔進(jìn)更深的悲傷中。我淚流滿面，用受傷的語氣說:我在臉上涂了去斑霜，臉上的雀斑越來越多了。了解我的情況后，她安慰我說:“十幾歲的女孩臉上的雀斑比平時(shí)多，這很正常，親愛的，我在你這個(gè)年紀(jì)的時(shí)候也是如此!”情緒低落的我對媽媽的話充耳不聞，沖進(jìn)臥室，一頭倒在床上。Notreceivinganyresponsefromme,shequickenedherpaceanxiouslytothebathroom,checkingonme.Seeingmeinawholeskin,shebreathedinreliefandaskedmewhatwasgoingon.Herwordsseemedlikeahammerblow,tossingmeintodeepersorrow.Tearsstreamingdown,IutteredininjuredtonesthatIappliedthefreckle-removercreamonmyfaceandfrecklesappearedonmyfacemoreandmore.Knowingmysituation,shecomfortedme,“Itisnormalthatteengirlshavemorefrecklesontheirfacesthanusual,SodoIatyourtime,honey!”

Downinspirit,Iturnedadeafeartowhatmymomsaid,dashingtowardsmybedroomandthrowingmyself

intothebed.我猶豫了一會兒，淚眼婆娑，兩頰濕漉漉地拖著步子去打開房門。美麗的伊麗莎白站在門口，手里拿著一束虎百合花。她發(fā)現(xiàn)我對她的到來漠不關(guān)心，就把百合花遞給我，并為我的“意外”道歉。正當(dāng)我還沉浸在壓抑的情緒中時(shí)，伊麗莎白接下來說的話使我大吃一驚。從她的話語中，我第一次知道她欣賞我在鋤地上的努力，然而她竟然一直只注意自己的皮膚。這時(shí)，我終于發(fā)現(xiàn)自己身上也存在著一些閃光點(diǎn)，就像那些虎百合一樣，那些點(diǎn)綴著丑陋“雀斑”的花，依然會散發(fā)出芬芳。Hesitatingforamoment,withtearfuleyesandstillwetcheeks,Ishuffledacross

theroomtoopenthedoor.AtthedoorstoodbeautifulElisabethwithabunchoftigerliliesinherhand.Findingmeindifferenttohercoming,shehandedtheliliestomeandapologizedformy“accident”.JustIstillimmersedmyselfinallmydepressedemotions,whatElisabethsaidnextsurprisedme.Inherwords,Ifirstknewthatsheadmiredme